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Without capital punishment our lives are less secure and crimes or violence increase.

3 - In fact, many -> Many part in -> part of police stations of Viet Nam -> police...

Writing Feedbackannguyenhoang - Jul 15, 2024 / taurus - Jul 17, 2024
Modern medical science has made it possible to combat many diseases.

3 - health care -> the health care known fatal in past time -> known as fatal in past time...

Writing FeedbackPooneh1994 - Jul 14, 2024 / taurus - Jul 17, 2024
Some countries achieve international success by building specialized facilities to train top athlete

2 - You are altering the original statement. There is no controversy. There is only a statement of fact. This...

Writing Feedbacktaurus - Jul 16, 2024 / Holt - Jul 17, 2024
Advertisements are becoming more and more common in everyday life. Is it a positive or negative

3 - Your essay contains several grammatical mistakes, you also relies too much on providing example instead of explain your points...

Writing Feedbacksundiee ne - Jul 13, 2024 / lanadelrey - Jul 16, 2024
How an island has change before and after the construction of tourist amenities

2 - The problem with this analysis is that you are not completely analyzing the before aspect of the map illustration....

Writing Feedbacklanadelrey - Jul 15, 2024 / Holt - Jul 15, 2024
[ WRITING TASK 1] The charts below show annual average spending on clothes per person in the US in

2 - Your summary overview should be at least 2 sentences long. You should add an enumeration of the sources of...

Writing Feedbackhana115 - Jul 14, 2024 / Holt - Jul 15, 2024
The diagram below shows how recycled paper is made. Summarise the information.

2 - Yes, an image was provided. It may be considered a picture. However, since it explains a 4 step...

Writing FeedbackHoangPhuong2010 - Jul 13, 2024 / Holt - Jul 15, 2024
Some people think that physical strength is important for success in sport, while other people think

2 - This type of discussion requires you to use a comparison point of view for each reasoning paragraph. You must...

Writing Feedbacktheanh1204 - Jul 12, 2024 / Holt - Jul 15, 2024
It is a natural process for animal species to become extinct (e.g. dinosaur, dodo...)

2 - You have actually spent too much time justifying the causes of extinction as caused by man when you should...

Writing Feedbackevelynsayhii - Jul 12, 2024 / Holt - Jul 15, 2024
The chart below shows the amount of energy generated from wind in four countries from 1985 to 2000.

2 - Avoid writing in run-on mode for your summary overview. You are given a sentence allowance of 3-5 sentence per...

Writing Feedbackdaohientrang - Jul 10, 2024 / Holt - Jul 14, 2024
It is predicted that with the development of technology, people in the 21st century free time

2 - You did not respond to the given writing prompt. There is a question and request for reasons that...

Writing Feedbackpnhphuong - Jul 10, 2024 / Holt - Jul 14, 2024
Subjects such as Art, Sport and Music must being rejected from the school.Do you agree or disagree?

2 - The severe shortness of this discussion will ensure that it gets a failing score. Aside from the word count,...

Writing FeedbackLucasvn - Jul 10, 2024 / Holt - Jul 13, 2024
the advantages and disadvantages of shopping online.

2 - Well, your essay would get an automatic failing score because you wrote less than 250 words, did not follow...

Writing FeedbackDaz Nguyen - Jul 9, 2024 / Holt - Jul 13, 2024
Reasons and effects of income disparity between celebrities and politicians nowadays (IELTS task 2)

2 - Do not make boastful claims like these. There are some who would oppose this statement and say that...

Writing Feedbackhann130002 - Jul 7, 2024 / Holt - Jul 9, 2024
Discuss pros and cons of working or studying at home

2 - This is a misleading statement. There is no information nor reference in the original prompt that would indicate...

Writing FeedbackPerthy - Jul 7, 2024 / Holt - Jul 9, 2024
Many people believe that the increased interaction between nations through globalization

2 - What? You did not offer a writer's opinion with a thesis statement in the first paragraph. You did...

Writing FeedbackHarryNguyen041 - Jul 6, 2024 / Holt - Jul 6, 2024
IELTS WRITING TASK 2 : Many young people today change their jobs or careers every few years.

2 - Your English competency level is that of a beginner and yet, you are trying to use an advanced sentence...

Writing Feedbacklucyle0802 - Jul 6, 2024 / Holt - Jul 6, 2024
people should be able to keep all the money they earn and not pay tax to the state. agree or not

3 - While the idea of keeping all earned income sounds appealing in principle, it's important to consider the broader implications....

Writing Feedbacknorah14 - Jun 13, 2024 / markzily - Jul 6, 2024
The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income

3 - The chart highlights changes in how families allocated their weekly income in a specific country between 1968 and 2018....

Writing FeedbackAngrycat - Jul 3, 2024 / markzily - Jul 5, 2024
IELTS WRITING TASK 2- Some people think young people should be required to have full time education

2 - The term younger generations is too vague. Be more specific and limit the description to one closer to the...

Writing Feedbackdinhhieu2910 - Jul 4, 2024 / Holt - Jul 4, 2024
IELTS WRITING TASK 1 - MAP OF CENTRAL LIBRARY 20 YEARS AGO AND TODAY

2 - The summary overview should have at least 2 sentences in it. The image identification is lacking. You are indicating...

Writing Feedbackngocquyen - Jul 3, 2024 / Holt - Jul 3, 2024
write paragraph about avantages of playing sports

2 - There is no need to write a conclusion statement when you are being asked to develop a paragraph based...

Writing Feedbacklinda2 - Jul 2, 2024 / Holt - Jul 3, 2024
IELTS Task 2 - Essay on computers being the most important invention of the last century or not

2 - Kindly refrain from writing more than 300 words for the task 2 essay. This essay is composed of 440...

Writing Feedbackminhduc0806 - Jul 2, 2024 / Holt - Jul 3, 2024
IELTS WRITING TASK 1 - UNEMPLOYMENT

2 - Your report is difficult to read due to the lack of punctuation usage. The GRA score for this essay...

Writing Feedbackclaserpy - Jul 1, 2024 / Holt - Jul 3, 2024
Ielts writing task 1: average CO2 emissions per person in the UK, Sweden, Italy, Portugal

4 - The overall essay is good, but I recommend you compare the data of the countries rather than just stating...

Writing Feedbackkvpa915gstn - Jun 26, 2024 / ngocquyen - Jul 3, 2024
IELTS WRITING TASK 1 (PIE CHART) - TRANSPORTATION

3 - The lengths of your 2 paragraphs are not balanced, probably because of your approach to divide the information. I...

Writing Feedbacklinh_030671 - Jun 28, 2024 / ngocquyen - Jul 3, 2024
IELTS WRITING TASK 1 - GLOBAL MOBILE PHONE SALES BY BRAND

3 - Fascinating breakdown of global mobile phone sales trends from 2009 to 2013! Samsung and Apple saw substantial growth, while...

Writing Feedbackngocquyen - Jun 30, 2024 / markzily - Jul 2, 2024
IELTS Academic-Essay about whether group activities teach more important skills than individual ones

3 - Your essay makes a strong case for the valuable skills gained through group activities like communication and leadership. I...

Writing Feedbackbyn - Jun 30, 2024 / markzily - Jul 1, 2024
IELTS Academic Writing "Persuasive Power vs. Waning Influence: Debating the Impact of Advertising"

2 - You are writing a debate paper based on the given topic. Therefore, you should have a clear thesis statement...

Writing Feedbackjckian - Jun 27, 2024 / Holt - Jun 27, 2024
Friendships that take place online are not as meaningful as those where people meet each other face

3 - It's an interesting perspective on the value of friendships in today's digital age. While online friendships offer convenience and...

Writing Feedbackhoainhu - Jun 25, 2024 / markzily - Jun 27, 2024
task 2 social skills should be emphasized?

2 - You chose to use your first reasoning paragraph to introduce an explanation the topic, rather than a supporting statement...

Writing Feedbackngoc khue - Jun 24, 2024 / Holt - Jun 25, 2024
Pharmacy chose me - Graduate Statement of Purpose

3 - Thank you for the feedback. Very much appreciated....

Writing Feedbackshegzdr - Jun 23, 2024 / shegzdr - Jun 25, 2024
Smoking - Writing task 2: Topic- Social issues

2 - Use the first person pronoun "I" in this case. The essay will not write itself. The essay does...

Writing FeedbackThang2910 - Jun 23, 2024 / Holt - Jun 24, 2024
Writing task 2 The media should limit how much bad news they report

3 - In addition to what the consultant has said, you may want to carefully proofread essays. You have written 'awaring'...

Writing Feedbackmelee - Jun 21, 2024 / mvo_rey - Jun 23, 2024
In this complex and fast-paced world, it is essential for young people to equip basic pecuniary skil

2 - I believe that you wrote this as a part of your IELTS task 2 essay preparation. Unfortunately, you overwrote...

Writing FeedbackIamSallyNguyen - Jun 22, 2024 / Holt - Jun 23, 2024
Essay about ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework

2 - There are 262 words in this essay. I assume that you used more than 40 minutes to write this...

Writing Feedbackdung_284 - Jun 21, 2024 / Holt - Jun 22, 2024
Writing task 1 - the chart shows the number of enquiries received by the tourist information office

2 - Always divide your summary overview into 2 sentences. There is a 2 sentence and 40 word requirement for that...

Writing Feedbacktakaleon - Jun 21, 2024 / Holt - Jun 22, 2024
Essay about the money spent by British parents (Ielts writing Task 1 )

2 - Keep the task 1 essay to only 200 words. By writing 243 words, you will more than likely cut...

Writing Feedbackpthanh_0419 - Jun 20, 2024 / Holt - Jun 22, 2024
computers are becoming a part lessons at school Discuss the advantages and disadvantages

2 - I don't know where to begin in terms of correcting your essay. You have 14 misspelled words, that affect...

Writing Feedbackhoangn109 - Jun 20, 2024 / Holt - Jun 22, 2024
Prolonging lifespan - life expectancy is increasing.

3 - "Some people would argue that longer lives could bring more positive aspects. From my perspective, in contrast, I do...

Writing Feedbackhnaht - Jun 18, 2024 / mvo_rey - Jun 22, 2024
The maps below show Colwick Arts Centre in 2005 and today.

2 - Your descriptive report is only 149 words. Though minimal, you will still receive a small deduction for not meeting...

Writing FeedbackLemonChi - Jun 20, 2024 / Holt - Jun 22, 2024
The table shows forested land in millions of hectares in different parts of the world.

2 - The first thing you have to learn about the task 1 essay is that you have to properly identify...

Writing Feedbackkhoivuive - Jun 19, 2024 / Holt - Jun 21, 2024
ielts writing task foreign cultures introduced

2 - You focused so much on vocabulary usage in the first paragraph that you lost sight of the original topic...

Writing Feedbackduan2207 - Jun 18, 2024 / Holt - Jun 21, 2024
IELTS Task 1 demand for electricity and how electricity is used.

2 - The summary overview must be composed of at least 2 separate sentences. You have written a run on sentence....

Writing Feedbackrubie - Jun 17, 2024 / Holt - Jun 21, 2024
Writing task 2 - Topic Education Study Subjects

2 - You don't have to say this anymore. The examiner will understand the writing instructions based upon how you...

Writing Feedbacktrangmon - Jun 17, 2024 / Holt - Jun 21, 2024
Is it better to read books on paper or digital?

2 - You have missed the point of the prompt. This is a single opinion essay. Your answer should be based...

Writing FeedbackbonnieBux - Jun 16, 2024 / Holt - Jun 21, 2024
All children should be made to wear school uniforms. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

2 - The word force is too strong for this discussion. You should be using positive words instead of negative...

Writing FeedbackHan Yujin - Jun 14, 2024 / Holt - Jun 21, 2024
The charts show the sources of electricity produced in 4 countries between 2003 and 2008.

2 - The summary overview is not very effective seeing as it is a run-on sentence. This should be divided into...

Writing Feedbackhynnie - Jun 13, 2024 / Holt - Jun 20, 2024
IELTS TASK 2 about focusing on endangered animal or human problems

3 - So I should give my opinion in the introduction and summarize my points in the conclusion right. And the...

Writing Feedbacknatalia3k - Jun 8, 2024 / natalia3k - Jun 17, 2024
unpaid work - compulsory or not

3 - @Holt so could you examine this essay in all 4 criteria of the ielts writing test? thank you so...

Writing Feedbackdohkyungsoofc - Jun 8, 2024 / dohkyungsoofc - Jun 13, 2024
youngsters should be required to have full-time education until they are 18. Agree or disagree

2 - I know this is a task 2 writing essay. Why are you shouting about it? You should temper...

Writing FeedbackKimkimsuzi111 - Jun 12, 2024 / Holt - Jun 12, 2024
some people prefer to live in a house, while others feel that there are more advantages to living in

2 - The essay is short of the minimum requirement by 2 words. That is too bad. You will still receive...

Writing FeedbackNglinh177 - Jun 12, 2024 / Holt - Jun 12, 2024
towns constructed in previous centuries that were more suitable for residents.problem and solution

2 - Decades does not properly reflect a synonym for centuries. Centuries equivalent words that you could have used are...

Writing Feedbackslowenie - Jun 11, 2024 / Holt - Jun 12, 2024
IELTS QUESTION: Are GMOs as a viable solution to feed the increasing population?

2 - Complete the statement. What are the 2 downsides you are most concerned about? Create an accurate thesis statement...

Writing FeedbackSakuradesu - Jun 11, 2024 / Holt - Jun 12, 2024
in many cities, people these days know little about their neighbors and lack a sense of community.

2 - The essay is simply too long for a 40 minute writing task. You need to learn to write in...

Writing Feedbackjenny_0507 - Jun 11, 2024 / Holt - Jun 12, 2024
Living in big cities is bad for people's health

2 - The main problem that this essay will encounter in the preliminary scoring consideration is the lack of clarity in...

Writing Feedbackhabitien0108 - Jun 10, 2024 / Holt - Jun 12, 2024
Online shopping is replacing shopping in stores. Do u think it's a positive or negative development?

2 - I am not sure if you can actually write this essay using the same number of words during the...

Writing FeedbackMinhAnkFam - Jun 10, 2024 / Holt - Jun 12, 2024
BODY TASK 1 the salary of Anthropology

2 - With only 136 words written, this task 1 essay will automatically get a failing score. You have to write...

Writing Feedbackthanh2509 - Jun 10, 2024 / Holt - Jun 12, 2024
Children by age group as a percentage of the young population in the UK between 1990 and 2001.

2 - There is a minimum 2 sentence requirement for the summary overview. You wrote a run-on sentence instead. Unfortunately, the...

Writing FeedbackThomasDickson - Jun 9, 2024 / Holt - Jun 12, 2024
Many city dwellers these days don't get enough physical exercise. Write causes and solutions

2 - This does not have the same meaning as physical activities or physical exercise. You must improve your English...

Writing FeedbackLuktcong - Jun 9, 2024 / Holt - Jun 12, 2024

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