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'born into a low-income family' - UC first promt your world [15]
My father came to this country to see me being born, he told me his world changed when he first laid his eyes upon me, and he told me that he was given a second chance to take on this world that we live in because he had me, his "special" son. "Special" the word I was given by my father to describe me, it's the same word I use to describe my world. One day my father came home from work, tired like usual, and told me "son enjoy life now, and study hard so you don't end up like me". His words stayed with me forever, later I understood what he meant because I had found out from my mother that he had the chance to get an education but refused and he regrets it every day. Watching my father live in misery every day had a huge impact to my world, and it is the sole reason for my burning passion for the only aspiration I have in life, to get the highest education I can acquire, all to make my father happy when he sees his son become successful.
This is my suggestion for this para;My father stepped into this unknown land looking for opportunities for his children. He told me that it was my birth that lit up his life and gave him courage and hope. I was his "Special" son, as he described me often. His words still echo in my ears; '' Son, enjoy life now but do not neglect studies because I don't want you to end up like me''. I could learn from his eyes how he regretted for wasting the opportunities he had for educating himself. His words and his eyes together passed a powerful message to my young mind and I determined that I should take studies very seriously because it is the only opening for us to hope for a better future.However being born into a low-income family is not the best when you want to become a top student. Through 12 years of my life my family was considered low-class until becoming middle-class. All of my teachers told my parents that I had the potential to be brilliant, but I didn't have the materials I needed to tap into that potential and when I finally did, I deemed it too late because I was in high school. I lost all motivation until I met my friends today who sparked my passion to work hard once more.
Throughout my years in this world, I've had many difficulties that blocked my path to achieve my goal, like my parents almost separating, I had to overcome all these struggles and still work my hardest to achieve my goal whom my father strongly believes I can. The problems may have affected me and had an effect on my grades but they have made me a stronger person, I am now determined more than I ever was before, I personally believe nothing will stop me. The world I come from is beautiful, it has made me, it's done everything to me, it's been in my past, and it is in my future. My world, I want it to be the best I can possibly make it.
This is my suggestion for your next para;It was not just the financial difficulties of a low income family that I had to manage as a young kid. Together with I faced other challenges too; the marriage of my parents was falling apart creating a major psychological trauma for me. These issues at family front affected my grades time to time. But I always made a come back because I never forgot my father's words and his hopes in me. When I look back I see that these challenges had made me a stronger person; they nurtured my determination, perseverance and courage. Most importantly, they helped me light my fathers eyes with hope. Yes, I am determined to pursue my goals no matter what obstacle stands in my way.