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Posts by Arlen
Name: Arlenliu
Joined: Nov 8, 2016
Last Post: Nov 20, 2017
Threads: 20
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From: Taiwan

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Arlen   
Dec 6, 2016
Writing Feedback / IELTS writing task 2: too much exercises is bad for one's health, do u agree or disagree? [3]

Hello, here are my suggestions,

1. You have to state your view- agree or disagree in the first paragraph, it is clear for the reader to understand your following article.
2. Using the punctuation properly, you should use conjunction to connect several sentences.
3. The require of word count is over 250 words in IELTS writing 2, you can try to expand your sentences by giving an example or explaining more detail toward your view.

hope it helps!
Arlen   
Dec 6, 2016
Writing Feedback / Reduced number of people who keep in touch with others and disrupted personal relationship [6]

hello, here are my suggestions,

For the introduction, you should describe your state clearly and confidently. Instead of using word like "that idea", you should explain what the idea is. Or reader might misunderstand what is the topic you want to discuss.

Secondly, there is no VERB in many sentences, you should be careful of this error.

hope it helps!
Arlen   
Dec 4, 2016
Writing Feedback / In my country-Taiwan, many high schools encourage students to be a volunteer. [2]

Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmers (for example working for a charity, improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports to younger children).

To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.


In my country-Taiwan, many high schools encourage students to be a volunteer. But being a volunteer is not a mandatory requirement. Some people state that this kind of unpaid community service should be included in high school curriculum. In my point of view, I am on the support side of this statement.

The against people argue that the reason of these high school students willing to do such extra work is doubtable. The real reason is that they think of the certification of volunteer as an extra bonus to applying the university. It proofs that you don't only concentrate on studying but pay extra attention on social issue. Therefore, it is too controversial to set this kind of programmes in school.

On the other hand, I believe the high school students are mature enough to participate in social activities. They can learn lots from these experiences, such as being thoughtful to the handicapped and understanding their parents' efforts on themselves. You can observe that in modern society, many students take everything for granted, and they lack sympathy. By setting these programmes in school, it seems a good way to lead them toward the right path.

To sum up, there are pros and cons toward the unpaid community service being compulsory progammes. But isn't it a good chance to these students to gain something different from formal education.
Arlen   
Nov 30, 2016
Writing Feedback / In this modern society, the more languages you can speak, the more competitive you are [3]

Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school.
Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?


In modern society, the more languages you can speak, the more competitions you have. Since this phenomenon, it becomes popularly for parents to raise their children' interest toward a foreign language. Even more, some researchers state that it is better to start leaning a new language in the early age. In my opinion, I support this illustration under some conditions, and my statements are following.

Firstly, the biggest concerned about learning another language in early age is the children may not focus on their mother language properly. The primary school seems to be the first place for them to access their own language officially. They are going to learn the grammar, the punctuation and the correct usage of a language. It might be a struggle for them to learn two languages in meanwhile. Secondly, learning a new language may cause extra pressure to the children. In some countries, especially in Asia, parents expect them to be successful in the future. Even the students of primary school have a lot of homework and extra activities. It is cruel to put further burden on them.

However, in my view, I think this is a good chance for young children to access a foreign language. In the first place, because a language is a first step to experience a different culture, in term of thinking, concept and attitude, children can border their horizon by studying a new language. Especially in the early progress, exploring a new culture can accumulate great resources before they grow up. Next, people often regret starting too late to learn a brand new language because of the poor memory. It is obvious that the youth have better memory than the elderly so as to proof that the earlier children leaning a language, the better outcome they could have.

To sum up, learning a foreign language is definite a good thing, but for the very young kids, there are lots pros and cons need to be considered. Under no circumstance should children sacrifice their precious childhood only for meeting the expectation of being a competitive person in the future.
Arlen   
Nov 30, 2016
Writing Feedback / Working hard and strong determination are a way to get our dreams. [2]

hello, here are my suggestions,

1. ... determination are a waythe ways to get our dreams..
2. ... main keys to catch success in life --> "reach " might be better
3. however big motivation from families be ablemakes people goals happencome true ....

hope it helps!
Arlen   
Nov 30, 2016
Writing Feedback / A number of aspects are able to contribute in people's success. [4]

hello, here are my suggestions,

1. After that, with strong determination every obstacle (...), and determine what our target ...
--> you use "determination" or different parts of speech of "determination" several times. It can switch to another word to express the same meaning and show your ability of vocabulary.

2. ... that they are the nearest members and know .....
--> closest might be better.

hope it helps!
Arlen   
Nov 27, 2016
Writing Feedback / To be an athlete is the dream for many - the famous sporty stars usually have an impressive income [3]

Write about the following topic:

Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think is fully justified while others think it is unfair.

Discus both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.


To be an athlete is the dream of lots children, and one of reasons is that the famous sporty stars usually have fertile income. However, it is very controversial that these successful sports players earn such great amount of money. In my opinion, I think it is fair enough.

Firstly, some people think this phenomenon leads to bad influence on teenagers. The great gap between the income of sports professionals and the other professionals seems to courage the youth to incline being the former one. What's more, the benefits of successful sports players are not only the money but also the reputation. Being sports professionals seems a shortcut toward an enviable life. These factors make an imbalance between the athlete and other occupations.

On the other side, I suppose people should realize that it is not easy to become successful sports players. It needs numerous practices and gifted talent. Before being famous sports players, they have to tolerate strict training and low income. For instance, in my country-Taiwan, an ordinary athlete earns lower than the average income, and most of them need the sponsors from the public and the companies so as to compete the games aboard. Next, compare to the other career, the athlete has short career life. Because most of the sports need physical power, it is hard to maintain the energy when you are aging. In order that, they have short period can earn the money.

To sum up, in the short term, people may think the successful sports players earn more than they should. Nevertheless, we should consider it, in the long term, seems reasonable for them to have a great number of money.
Arlen   
Nov 18, 2016
Student Talk / Need help with writing IELTS Essays [10]

Hi,
I am also a new here and I delivered three threads already.
I think the best way is to post your essay with whatever topic, and others will try to help by correcting your grammar, spelling or giving some advises. It's quite useful and the responses are usually fast!

Hope it helps.
Arlen   
Nov 17, 2016
Writing Feedback / Writing Task 2: Visa regulation should be relaxed for overseas students [2]

Visa regulation should be relaxed for overseas students.
Do you agree or disagree?


Due to the growth of international communication, there are more and more exchanged students now. However, the first barrier these overseas students encounter is the visa applying. Some people believe that the government should loose the restriction of applying visa for these students yet I state the opposite view that the government should not treat these students different than the others, and my statement are following.

First of all, the main reason people support to relax the visa limitation is their identities-students. Compare to other applicants such as immigrants and businessmen, students seem much simpler. They visit for studying or researching and most of them will not stay for a long time. Secondly, it can encourage the exchanges between different countries in terms of academic, sporty and art. In order to improve the diversity, it is a good way to attract different aspects students from worldwide.

On the other hand, I believe the biggest concerned about visa restriction is safety. Although the purpose of these overseas students visiting is studying, it is hard to supervise all the students' life. For instance, there are several cases that some girls from poor countries will pretend as students to those developed countries to do the sexual business which can earn the money in very short period. I suppose the government should treat all the applicants the same so as to prevent such situations.

To sum up, it is good to have many overseas students to visit. However, under no circumstance should we scarify our safety only for welcoming these students.
Arlen   
Nov 16, 2016
Undergraduate / Boston University is the Perfect Utopia [6]

Hi,
I can't really catch the point you mentioned how your sister impacted you on pursuing the campus.I think it will be better if there are others persuasive reasons for joining BU.

hope it can help.
Arlen   
Nov 10, 2016
Writing Feedback / It can't be denied that internet has currently become the main method for obtaining information [3]

It is generally believed that the Internet is an excellent means of communication but some people suggest that it may not be the best place to find information.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.


It cannot be denied that internet has become the main method for people obtaining information currently. In some countries, the usage of internet even exceeded the usage of other media, such as television, newspaper. Despite the abundant resources people gained online, I take the suspicious attitude toward the accuracy of these resources.

In the first place, one of the advantages of internet is its efficiency. People don't need to look through all articles on newspaper or wait for specific television show. The only thing they have to do is clicking the mouse (or slipping the phones), information they need is shown immediately. Secondly, in the past, the major information comes from the main stream media. Now, by contrast, there are blogs, Facebook, Twitter, even Wikileaks that are quite different from the traditional media. People can get the information from multiple ways.

On the other hand, I think the most important thing people should concern is the accuracy of internet information. Nowadays, everyone can create and edit the news, then post online without any serious censorship. Moreover, some of this online information is manipulated which may lead to redundant panic if spreading. People should have their own judgement to distinguish the real or fake data. Furthermore, to believe it or not.

To sum up, although internet brings us the convenient life, we should considerate the information we learned from it as an unconfirmed message that needs our wisdom to determine whether it is worth to trust or not.
Arlen   
Nov 8, 2016
Writing Feedback / Writing Task 2: young people have no leisure time and are under a lot of pressure to study hard [2]

In some countries young people have little leisure time and are under a lot of pressure to work hard in their studies.
What do you think are the causes of this?
What solutions can you suggest?


Nowadays, the youth spend most of time on studying without doing the things they like. Honestly, this phenomenon may led to lots of problems since they burden too much pressure.

To begin with, I convinced that the most of pressure comes from their parents. Parents always expect their children being outstanding. In order to achieve the goal, parents will supervise their children whether they study hard. Secondly, it has become more and more competitive in modern society. People who are more extraordinary than the peer can be chosen to those top companies. Beside earning a living, people are seeking to be successful. These factors cause a lot of negative effects, such as disease, tension of society, moreover, the growth of suicide. People should considerate these problems seriously.

I suppose the direct solution is to change people's concept that studying is not the only method to success. Therefore, we should start change it from the individual to the organization. People should advocate the parity of each occupation and realize that each occupation is respectable, the white-collar is not better than the blue-collar. Moreover, the government should fund a scholarship to encourage those have talent in sport, music and painting children.

It cannot deny that studying is important to the young people since knowledge is the foundation of developing. But we have to agree with that under no circumstance should they scarify their leisure time for studying only, they deserve to explore the world without bearing any burden.

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