vaishali1980
Aug 6, 2010
vaishali1980
Aug 6, 2010
Writing Feedback / 'Digital life' -The 21st century has begun. What changes this new century will bring? [3]
During every era human being have discovered and invented new things. Human being have curiosity about world and human origination, as well as invented new things for humans comfort. In the 19th century humanity discovered the many things like car, airplane and so many faster way of transportation. In 20th century, innovation in technology like the computer, digital boosted as well as development in various field like medicine and science took place. As I believe that 21st century will be ahead among those development and give beneficial changes in our life.
The first change will bring in Robot mechanism. Nowadays, people are educated and want a carrier in mentally work rather than physical work and want to earn more money. Day by days it is very difficult to get people for regular work like cooking, cleaning and other physical hard work. So scientists have the challenge to find an artificial machine which is helpful to all kinds of work. Robot concept was introduced in 20th century but it will be carry out spectacularly in 21st century. Robot will help people in house, office and field. It will not only work physically but also it will use memory and take proper decision in difficult situation. Some time robot will help us in our mental work like calculation and solving difficult mathematical problem.
The second change, I am expecting is a adventure trip on another planet. Scientists are working very hard to find faster and cheaper way to another planet. Now only astronauts can possible to go to another planet but soon people will open their resorts and motels there. Now we like to visit Australia or Us or other places in the world but soon we should be expecting to go to another planet.
The third change, I am considering is the environment. The 20th century was faced a critical problem to the environment. All countries tried to control on various pollution and introduced people about global warming. The 21st century will find the solution on it. As technology is developed in all areas, it will be developed for improvement on environment.
In conclusion, the 21st century will bring many changes. It will be a beautiful world which will find not only comfort for human being, but also consider development of other creature on the earth. This century will bring adventure, peace and comfort for all.
During every era human being have discovered and invented new things. Human being have curiosity about world and human origination, as well as invented new things for humans comfort. In the 19th century humanity discovered the many things like car, airplane and so many faster way of transportation. In 20th century, innovation in technology like the computer, digital boosted as well as development in various field like medicine and science took place. As I believe that 21st century will be ahead among those development and give beneficial changes in our life.
The first change will bring in Robot mechanism. Nowadays, people are educated and want a carrier in mentally work rather than physical work and want to earn more money. Day by days it is very difficult to get people for regular work like cooking, cleaning and other physical hard work. So scientists have the challenge to find an artificial machine which is helpful to all kinds of work. Robot concept was introduced in 20th century but it will be carry out spectacularly in 21st century. Robot will help people in house, office and field. It will not only work physically but also it will use memory and take proper decision in difficult situation. Some time robot will help us in our mental work like calculation and solving difficult mathematical problem.
The second change, I am expecting is a adventure trip on another planet. Scientists are working very hard to find faster and cheaper way to another planet. Now only astronauts can possible to go to another planet but soon people will open their resorts and motels there. Now we like to visit Australia or Us or other places in the world but soon we should be expecting to go to another planet.
The third change, I am considering is the environment. The 20th century was faced a critical problem to the environment. All countries tried to control on various pollution and introduced people about global warming. The 21st century will find the solution on it. As technology is developed in all areas, it will be developed for improvement on environment.
In conclusion, the 21st century will bring many changes. It will be a beautiful world which will find not only comfort for human being, but also consider development of other creature on the earth. This century will bring adventure, peace and comfort for all.
vaishali1980
Aug 5, 2010
Writing Feedback / IELTS essay: High sales reflect Power of Advertising and not the Real Need [4]
To boost their sales and win over customers, companies pour a great amount of money into advertising their products .
Last two paragraph is confusing about your choice.
To boost their sales and win over customers, companies pour a great amount of money into advertising their products .
Last two paragraph is confusing about your choice.
vaishali1980
Aug 5, 2010
Writing Feedback / leader you think is important [9]
Thanks EF_Kevin
In above statement why should I use "her" ?
Thanks EF_Kevin
India has a great history of leadership, and her leaders played crucial roles in the Indian revolution
In above statement why should I use "her" ?
vaishali1980
Aug 4, 2010
Writing Feedback / leader you think is important [9]
India has a great history of leader who played crucial role in Indian revolution. Many leaders like Mahatma Gandhi, Jawallal Nehru, Shivaji Mahraj helped country to be protect from outside invasion. In all those leaders, an important leader for me is Savitribai Poole. She is not much famous in the world but she is definitely famous in India mostly in the Maharashtra State. She contributed in women education, widow remarriage and social reform. There are many reasons that I do believe that she is an important leader for me.
The main reason is she graduated in a difficult situation. When she was born, British was ruling in India and people were backward. People believed on religion and many superstition. In that time, women couldn't take any decision herself; man used to beat and gave trouble to women. In difficult social situation she had completed her education. She got married and after marriage continued her education. Though she had opposition of family and society, her husband Mr. Joytiba Poole who encouraged her to complete her further education.
The second reason, she was first female teacher in first female school. She not only educated herself, she also took part in teaching other women and gave direction to their life. In her time women were not allowed to go out and do any outside activities. Women treated as maid and dependent on family. Savitribai lead to liberate women, gave education and encourage them. Backward thinking people gave her trouble in many ways. They thrown egg, tomato, cow dung to her face but also she didn't stop her work.
The third reason is she took effort on removal of untouchability. She helped her husband in revolution for untouchable people. In her school she taught all cast student together and treated to lower cast student same as upper cast.
She had struggled for women for equal rights in male dominant society. Now people are changed and encouraging their daughter or sister for education. Nowadays we, women are free and going outside without a fear for education, shopping and all other reason because of her strive.
India has a great history of leader who played crucial role in Indian revolution. Many leaders like Mahatma Gandhi, Jawallal Nehru, Shivaji Mahraj helped country to be protect from outside invasion. In all those leaders, an important leader for me is Savitribai Poole. She is not much famous in the world but she is definitely famous in India mostly in the Maharashtra State. She contributed in women education, widow remarriage and social reform. There are many reasons that I do believe that she is an important leader for me.
The main reason is she graduated in a difficult situation. When she was born, British was ruling in India and people were backward. People believed on religion and many superstition. In that time, women couldn't take any decision herself; man used to beat and gave trouble to women. In difficult social situation she had completed her education. She got married and after marriage continued her education. Though she had opposition of family and society, her husband Mr. Joytiba Poole who encouraged her to complete her further education.
The second reason, she was first female teacher in first female school. She not only educated herself, she also took part in teaching other women and gave direction to their life. In her time women were not allowed to go out and do any outside activities. Women treated as maid and dependent on family. Savitribai lead to liberate women, gave education and encourage them. Backward thinking people gave her trouble in many ways. They thrown egg, tomato, cow dung to her face but also she didn't stop her work.
The third reason is she took effort on removal of untouchability. She helped her husband in revolution for untouchable people. In her school she taught all cast student together and treated to lower cast student same as upper cast.
She had struggled for women for equal rights in male dominant society. Now people are changed and encouraging their daughter or sister for education. Nowadays we, women are free and going outside without a fear for education, shopping and all other reason because of her strive.
vaishali1980
Aug 4, 2010
Writing Feedback / wealthy nations best help: food, money, education, technologies, health care [4]
You should support only one opinion unless creating ambiguity.
You should support only one opinion unless creating ambiguity.
vaishali1980
Aug 2, 2010
Writing Feedback / Most beneficail discovery in the last 100 yrs; Transportation, Communication [20]
Thanks EF_Kevin and linmark
Thanks EF_Kevin and linmark
vaishali1980
Jul 29, 2010
Writing Feedback / when and where would you like to go back in the past and why? [4]
Thanks Kelvin and Yayz
I have post essay here again after correction
This is really an interesting memory from my past. I know that my past does not compare to the good quality of my present. I suffered a very hard time because mistake made by me and my family. If I get chance I would like to go back to my higher secondary school. That period was full of dreaming and dealing with goals of own life as well as most important educational year.
My further study depends on my grade in higher secondary school. Thus this period played an important part in determining my future. There are many reasons going back to higher secondary school .
The main reason for going back would be to correct my mistake. During my time in school, I had a dream that I would be an independent person. I wanted to complete my parents' dream which they have seen for me.
My family was very rich and engaged in many legal battle against the relatives, friends and the government. Though we had land for agriculture and sufficient income from that, that money went to pay lawyer fee and other expenditure.
I wanted to become a lawyer , police inspector or engineer which I can help to resolve our problem. Instead of doing hard work, I was always dreaming and sleeping too much. I never realize `that I was wasting my time in sleeping and doing other unnecessary things.
As a result, I didn't get good grade and didn't get admission in engineering college. Now I have everything: money, peace and loving husband but still something is missing. I tried to find that reason which pointing towards the I am helpless to help my parents and couldn't complete their dreams. If I get chance to go back to school, I will study hard and try to fulfill their dream.
The second reason is to enjoy college life. When I look back, I feel that I have never enjoyed it. I always in stressful situations. All of my friends liked to go to on trips to visit historical places, movies and drama but I preferred to go home and rest. I was feeling uncomfortable with them. It caused everyone to ignore me and had never consider my opinion. Now I want to go to back to school and take a part in each and every event of my school and college days.
I got prizes in chess and some sports but I didn't concentrate on those. If I get a chance I will show my skill in those areas.
In conclusion, If I could go back in the past, I would choose to go back to my school use my knowledge, which I have learned from my mistake. Also I want to accomplish my parents goals for me and fulfill my dreams.
Thanks Kelvin and Yayz
I have post essay here again after correction
This is really an interesting memory from my past. I know that my past does not compare to the good quality of my present. I suffered a very hard time because mistake made by me and my family. If I get chance I would like to go back to my higher secondary school. That period was full of dreaming and dealing with goals of own life as well as most important educational year.
My further study depends on my grade in higher secondary school. Thus this period played an important part in determining my future. There are many reasons going back to higher secondary school .
The main reason for going back would be to correct my mistake. During my time in school, I had a dream that I would be an independent person. I wanted to complete my parents' dream which they have seen for me.
My family was very rich and engaged in many legal battle against the relatives, friends and the government. Though we had land for agriculture and sufficient income from that, that money went to pay lawyer fee and other expenditure.
I wanted to become a lawyer , police inspector or engineer which I can help to resolve our problem. Instead of doing hard work, I was always dreaming and sleeping too much. I never realize `that I was wasting my time in sleeping and doing other unnecessary things.
As a result, I didn't get good grade and didn't get admission in engineering college. Now I have everything: money, peace and loving husband but still something is missing. I tried to find that reason which pointing towards the I am helpless to help my parents and couldn't complete their dreams. If I get chance to go back to school, I will study hard and try to fulfill their dream.
The second reason is to enjoy college life. When I look back, I feel that I have never enjoyed it. I always in stressful situations. All of my friends liked to go to on trips to visit historical places, movies and drama but I preferred to go home and rest. I was feeling uncomfortable with them. It caused everyone to ignore me and had never consider my opinion. Now I want to go to back to school and take a part in each and every event of my school and college days.
I got prizes in chess and some sports but I didn't concentrate on those. If I get a chance I will show my skill in those areas.
In conclusion, If I could go back in the past, I would choose to go back to my school use my knowledge, which I have learned from my mistake. Also I want to accomplish my parents goals for me and fulfill my dreams.
vaishali1980
Jul 28, 2010
Writing Feedback / Most beneficail discovery in the last 100 yrs; Transportation, Communication [20]
Thanks Kelvin
'Discovery in gender transform' this is really difficult topic to write.
I will try to write in this subject which is challenging for me.
Thanks Kelvin
'Discovery in gender transform' this is really difficult topic to write.
I will try to write in this subject which is challenging for me.
vaishali1980
Jul 25, 2010
Writing Feedback / Most beneficail discovery in the last 100 yrs; Transportation, Communication [20]
I thought discovery means something related to find physical things means discovered some land or planet.
I thought discovery means something related to find physical things means discovered some land or planet.
vaishali1980
Jul 23, 2010
Writing Feedback / when and where would you like to go back in the past and why? [4]
If you could go back to some time and place in the past, when and where would you go? Why? Use specific reasons and details to support your choice.
This is really interesting and turning on my past memory. I know that my past time is not good as present. I suffered a very hard time because of mistake made by me and my family.
If I get chance I would like to go back to my higher secondary school. That period was dreaming and dealing with goal of own life as well as most important educational year.
My further study depends on I achived mark or grade in higher secondary school. This period plays important role to give direction of future. There are many reasons to go to back to higher secondary school .
The main reason is to correct my mistake. In my school life I had a dream that I will be independent person. I wanted to complete my parents dream which they have seen for me.
My family was very rich and engaged in many legal battle against the relatives, friends and government. Though we had sufficient agriculture land and income from those, that money goes to lawyer and other expenditure. I wanted to become a lawyer or police inspector or engineer which I can help to resolve our problem. Instead of doing handwork, I was always in dreaming and like to sleep too much. I never thought that I wasted my time in sleep and other unnecessary things. As a result I didn't get good marks and didn't get admission in engineering college. Now I have everything. I have money, peace and loving husband but still something is missing. I tryed to find that reason which indicate me that I am not able to help my parents and I didn't complete their dreams. If I get chance to go back to school, I will study hard and try to fulfill their dream.
If you could go back to some time and place in the past, when and where would you go? Why? Use specific reasons and details to support your choice.
This is really interesting and turning on my past memory. I know that my past time is not good as present. I suffered a very hard time because of mistake made by me and my family.
If I get chance I would like to go back to my higher secondary school. That period was dreaming and dealing with goal of own life as well as most important educational year.
My further study depends on I achived mark or grade in higher secondary school. This period plays important role to give direction of future. There are many reasons to go to back to higher secondary school .
The main reason is to correct my mistake. In my school life I had a dream that I will be independent person. I wanted to complete my parents dream which they have seen for me.
My family was very rich and engaged in many legal battle against the relatives, friends and government. Though we had sufficient agriculture land and income from those, that money goes to lawyer and other expenditure. I wanted to become a lawyer or police inspector or engineer which I can help to resolve our problem. Instead of doing handwork, I was always in dreaming and like to sleep too much. I never thought that I wasted my time in sleep and other unnecessary things. As a result I didn't get good marks and didn't get admission in engineering college. Now I have everything. I have money, peace and loving husband but still something is missing. I tryed to find that reason which indicate me that I am not able to help my parents and I didn't complete their dreams. If I get chance to go back to school, I will study hard and try to fulfill their dream.
vaishali1980
Jul 23, 2010
Faq, Help / Thanking moderators and everyone who gave me helpful suggestion [28]
Hi Kelvin
I got my Toefl score . In writing section I got 17 which is more than I expected but I got very low score in reading 12. In writing they gave me following opinion
You attempted to express your opinion, but your response indicates notable deficiencies such as
* your response contains insufficient detail;
* your ideas and your connections of ideas are difficult to understand because of many grammatical errors and/or very unclear expressions and sentence structure; and/or
* your response is only marginally related to the question that was asked.
Thanks to all for help me
Now want to study more hard to get score more than 71. Now I got score 64.
Please give me suggestion to improve my writing.
Hi Kelvin
I got my Toefl score . In writing section I got 17 which is more than I expected but I got very low score in reading 12. In writing they gave me following opinion
You attempted to express your opinion, but your response indicates notable deficiencies such as
* your response contains insufficient detail;
* your ideas and your connections of ideas are difficult to understand because of many grammatical errors and/or very unclear expressions and sentence structure; and/or
* your response is only marginally related to the question that was asked.
Thanks to all for help me
Now want to study more hard to get score more than 71. Now I got score 64.
Please give me suggestion to improve my writing.
vaishali1980
Jul 22, 2010
Writing Feedback / Most beneficail discovery in the last 100 yrs; Transportation, Communication [20]
Kevin can you give me idea for what to write in this essay?
do you think that invention in computer or entertainment is related to this topic?
Kevin can you give me idea for what to write in this essay?
do you think that invention in computer or entertainment is related to this topic?
vaishali1980
Jul 21, 2010
Writing Feedback / Most beneficail discovery in the last 100 yrs; Transportation, Communication [20]
Anyone tell me that, is discovery and invention has same meaning?
Anyone tell me that, is discovery and invention has same meaning?
vaishali1980
Jul 19, 2010
Writing Feedback / Most beneficail discovery in the last 100 yrs; Transportation, Communication [20]
Thanks Kelvin for correction.
I get know that what I wrote is wrong. Discovery and invention is different. I have to write about discovery. I don't know what to write. Anyone suggest me something that can help me to write.
Thanks Kelvin for correction.
I get know that what I wrote is wrong. Discovery and invention is different. I have to write about discovery. I don't know what to write. Anyone suggest me something that can help me to write.
vaishali1980
Jul 16, 2010
Writing Feedback / As the light begins to dim, Faith. [9]
It is very difficult to understand this essay and your view. It look like deep deep thought.
It is very difficult to understand this essay and your view. It look like deep deep thought.
vaishali1980
Jul 16, 2010
Writing Feedback / Most beneficail discovery in the last 100 yrs; Transportation, Communication [20]
What discovery in the last 100 years has been most beneficial for people in your country? Use specific reasons and examples to support your choice.
Please suggest me correction and last paragraph
Nowadays, technology has developed vast in all area like soil, water and air. If I try to see behind 100 years what was in my country? British emperor was ruling there. Most of family was poor, dependent and helpless. People were depending on agriculture and earning inadequate money. In these 100 year lots of changes occurred in my country. My country, India has got freedom as well as developed in many technologies in last 100 year. Discovery and development in transportation, communication, entertainment, education has been most beneficial for people in my country.
The first discovery in transportation made easier for people to travel fast and many places as well as transfer material for trade. In the last century, people were using bullet cart or bicycle for traveling; it takes too long time to reach destination. But now days people are using buses, cars, trains and some times airplanes for traveling purpose. This discovery made huge beneficiary on peoples life. It became easier to travel thousands of kilometer in short period. People started often met with each other.
The second discovery is in a telephone and an internet which beneficial to communicate for people in my country. In the 100 year back there were no or very less communication among people. People were depended on postal services or a person to convey message.
Invention of telephone and internet made peoples life comfortable and personal attachment. It provides fast and reliable service.
The third discovery in an entertainment. Discovery in radio, television and movies has great influence on people life. It is very useful for entertainment, news and advertisement.
This media effected on peoples living standard. As example as watching movies people started constructing beautiful houses and younger generation learning fashion and style.
Boundaries in society reduced and people doing inter cast marriage. This media used for spread news quickly and effectively.
All discovery helped to human for their easier life.
What discovery in the last 100 years has been most beneficial for people in your country? Use specific reasons and examples to support your choice.
Please suggest me correction and last paragraph
Nowadays, technology has developed vast in all area like soil, water and air. If I try to see behind 100 years what was in my country? British emperor was ruling there. Most of family was poor, dependent and helpless. People were depending on agriculture and earning inadequate money. In these 100 year lots of changes occurred in my country. My country, India has got freedom as well as developed in many technologies in last 100 year. Discovery and development in transportation, communication, entertainment, education has been most beneficial for people in my country.
The first discovery in transportation made easier for people to travel fast and many places as well as transfer material for trade. In the last century, people were using bullet cart or bicycle for traveling; it takes too long time to reach destination. But now days people are using buses, cars, trains and some times airplanes for traveling purpose. This discovery made huge beneficiary on peoples life. It became easier to travel thousands of kilometer in short period. People started often met with each other.
The second discovery is in a telephone and an internet which beneficial to communicate for people in my country. In the 100 year back there were no or very less communication among people. People were depended on postal services or a person to convey message.
Invention of telephone and internet made peoples life comfortable and personal attachment. It provides fast and reliable service.
The third discovery in an entertainment. Discovery in radio, television and movies has great influence on people life. It is very useful for entertainment, news and advertisement.
This media effected on peoples living standard. As example as watching movies people started constructing beautiful houses and younger generation learning fashion and style.
Boundaries in society reduced and people doing inter cast marriage. This media used for spread news quickly and effectively.
All discovery helped to human for their easier life.
vaishali1980
Jul 15, 2010
Writing Feedback / Child Labor in the World - children are not anyone's property. [8]
In India everywhere has same situation. Population cause to this situation. I agree that many countries collect money for child labor but I have doubt that how much money actually spend for them.
As you have seen in movie 'Slum dog milliner' , some people taking disadvantage of child as cutting their body part and use them for beggary.
In India everywhere has same situation. Population cause to this situation. I agree that many countries collect money for child labor but I have doubt that how much money actually spend for them.
As you have seen in movie 'Slum dog milliner' , some people taking disadvantage of child as cutting their body part and use them for beggary.
vaishali1980
Jul 15, 2010
Faq, Help / Thanking moderators and everyone who gave me helpful suggestion [28]
EF_Kevin
I learned Hindi. Hindi is our national language. Every state has different language but peoples from most of state know Hindi. My mother tongue alphabets and Hindi language alphabets are same, only difference in meaning.
EF_Kevin
I learned Hindi. Hindi is our national language. Every state has different language but peoples from most of state know Hindi. My mother tongue alphabets and Hindi language alphabets are same, only difference in meaning.
vaishali1980
Jul 13, 2010
Writing Feedback / Education comes not from books but from practical experience. (MCAT) [4]
First paragraph is totally confused. Your start should be interesting and effective.
First paragraph is totally confused. Your start should be interesting and effective.
vaishali1980
Jul 13, 2010
Faq, Help / Thanking moderators and everyone who gave me helpful suggestion [28]
EF_Kevin
Do you know Sanskrit? When was 7th standard, that subject was optional. I wanted to take Sanskrit but suddenly my school canceled Sanskrit from syllabus due to lack of student.
EF_Kevin
Do you know Sanskrit? When was 7th standard, that subject was optional. I wanted to take Sanskrit but suddenly my school canceled Sanskrit from syllabus due to lack of student.
vaishali1980
Jul 9, 2010
Faq, Help / Thanking moderators and everyone who gave me helpful suggestion [28]
Day after tomorrow is my TOEFL-iBT. So want to say everyone thanks for helping me.
I know still I have to improve a lots. You all encouraged me so much to improve and understand the English. After exam, I will try to continue to write and give feed back here.
Specially thanks to Kevin who helped me a lots.
Thanks
Vaishali
Day after tomorrow is my TOEFL-iBT. So want to say everyone thanks for helping me.
I know still I have to improve a lots. You all encouraged me so much to improve and understand the English. After exam, I will try to continue to write and give feed back here.
Specially thanks to Kevin who helped me a lots.
Thanks
Vaishali
vaishali1980
Jul 8, 2010
Essays / Money should be spent on ways to save the Earth above all else - argumentative [3]
Check following point if it will help you
to save environment to dramatic change.
eg. global warming
eg oil spill
secure to our next generation.
development of other creature
natural disaster like earth quake, flood
Check following point if it will help you
to save environment to dramatic change.
eg. global warming
eg oil spill
secure to our next generation.
development of other creature
natural disaster like earth quake, flood
vaishali1980
Jul 7, 2010
Writing Feedback / Do you think we should pay attention to the famous people opinions? [4]
Thanks vrajeev89
You always give good suggestion.
Thanks vrajeev89
You always give good suggestion.
vaishali1980
Jul 7, 2010
Writing Feedback / Where do you like to learn foreign language, in your country or where it is spoken? [NEW]
Many people have learned a foreign language in their own country; other have learned a foreign language in the country in which it is spoken.
Please give me suggestion
My essay
Nowadays world is forming a global village by development of new technologies. On the earth, millions of languages are spoken by people. Every country and their sub-parts have different languages. It is very important to learn a foreign language to communicate with other people.
Present necessity is people should learn other language to trade, educate, travel and knowledge transfer. Everyone has different approaches toward learning foreign language. I will prefer to learn foreign language in that country in which it is spoken. There are many reasons to learn language in spoken country.
The main reason is lacking of self-confidence in our own country. In our own country, we might feel coward to talk foreign language. It is very difficult to use language which we have less knowledge. People feel shy and they have very low confidence to read, write and speak.
Teasing also cause to decrease self-confidence. As a example, if foreigners try to speak with us, we always try to respond them in their language ; in contrast with our friends, if he talks with a foreign language we answer in our mother tongue because of low self-confidence and fear.
The second reason is accuracy in speech. In our own country, we might learn language improper and less effective. In foreign country, we can capture, listen and use their language so fast. At start, it is challenging to deal with foreigner in their language, but no other choice.
It will build confidence and reduce fear. In additional, in the spoken country, we learn new words that we never heard in own country as well as correct use of grammar.
On other hand, though, we can learn fast foreign language where it is spoken but we have to get a chance to go there.
In conclusion, there are many benefits to learn language in the country in which it is spoken as get confidence, proper pronounce, correct use of grammar . Also we will not bother other people teasing or hesitation and get knowledge in every activity in the day.
Many people have learned a foreign language in their own country; other have learned a foreign language in the country in which it is spoken.
Please give me suggestion
My essay
Nowadays world is forming a global village by development of new technologies. On the earth, millions of languages are spoken by people. Every country and their sub-parts have different languages. It is very important to learn a foreign language to communicate with other people.
Present necessity is people should learn other language to trade, educate, travel and knowledge transfer. Everyone has different approaches toward learning foreign language. I will prefer to learn foreign language in that country in which it is spoken. There are many reasons to learn language in spoken country.
The main reason is lacking of self-confidence in our own country. In our own country, we might feel coward to talk foreign language. It is very difficult to use language which we have less knowledge. People feel shy and they have very low confidence to read, write and speak.
Teasing also cause to decrease self-confidence. As a example, if foreigners try to speak with us, we always try to respond them in their language ; in contrast with our friends, if he talks with a foreign language we answer in our mother tongue because of low self-confidence and fear.
The second reason is accuracy in speech. In our own country, we might learn language improper and less effective. In foreign country, we can capture, listen and use their language so fast. At start, it is challenging to deal with foreigner in their language, but no other choice.
It will build confidence and reduce fear. In additional, in the spoken country, we learn new words that we never heard in own country as well as correct use of grammar.
On other hand, though, we can learn fast foreign language where it is spoken but we have to get a chance to go there.
In conclusion, there are many benefits to learn language in the country in which it is spoken as get confidence, proper pronounce, correct use of grammar . Also we will not bother other people teasing or hesitation and get knowledge in every activity in the day.
vaishali1980
Jul 7, 2010
Writing Feedback / Topic: Events bring people together. [8]
You can use dictionary to find out smiler word and try to develop your essay.
You can use dictionary to find out smiler word and try to develop your essay.
vaishali1980
Jul 7, 2010
Book Reports / meaning of blindness - Oedipus the King play by Sophocles [3]
There are many threads in this forum which gives you lots of details.
First read some threads and make some rough idea and start to write essay.
Once you starts, you will get more and more ideas.
Hope this idea will help you.
There are many threads in this forum which gives you lots of details.
First read some threads and make some rough idea and start to write essay.
Once you starts, you will get more and more ideas.
Hope this idea will help you.
vaishali1980
Jul 7, 2010
Writing Feedback / Violence is never a real solution to a political crisis. (MCAT written topic) [6]
In a political crisis, an unwarranted display of force is often the first reaction in trying to reach a solution, much as a tantrum is the first reaction when a child fails to get his way
Break this statement in small sentences and make it simple.
In a political crisis, an unwarranted display of force is often the first reaction in trying to reach a solution, much as a tantrum is the first reaction when a child fails to get his way
Break this statement in small sentences and make it simple.
vaishali1980
Jul 7, 2010
Writing Feedback / An essay about having a mobile phone. [4]
"In addition, entertainment is another benefits. For example, nowadays, cell phones are not just phone calls; they're about messaging, video, songs, games, alarm clock, notes, calendar, reminder, etc. So one equipment, lots' of uses."
This you should make another paragraph and elaborate more.
Most significantly is that using incorrectly
Try to change this sentence.
"In addition, entertainment is another benefits. For example, nowadays, cell phones are not just phone calls; they're about messaging, video, songs, games, alarm clock, notes, calendar, reminder, etc. So one equipment, lots' of uses."
This you should make another paragraph and elaborate more.
Most significantly is that using incorrectly
Try to change this sentence.
vaishali1980
Jul 6, 2010
Writing Feedback / Do you think we should pay attention to the famous people opinions? [4]
Nowadays, everybody wants to show their intelligence in their master area. People become famous in their dominant area by outstanding performance. Consequently, other people wanted to listen their opinion or follow them. I agree with the statement, 'when famous people such as actors, athletes and rock stars give their opinions, we should pay attention to those opinions'. There are many reasons I believe that the people should pay attention to famous people's opinion.
The first reason is famous people's intellectuality. Celebrity are definitely different from ordinary people. They have talent and they are ingenious and wise. Most of the them give their opinion in their expert area. If they don't have sufficient knowledge about a problem, they like to keep quite. I believe that when famous people give some opinions about problem, its a reality, instead of fake. There are also some exceptions like politicians. Political leaders are always famous and most of time they lie. We can't believe them because they reveal truth for their personal benefits. Other than politician, famous people like Sachin Tendulker, Amitabh Batchen, Amir Khan, we can trust them blindly and consider their opinion in major aspects.
The second reason is the importance these people give for their honor. They get respects a lot and they wouldn't want to loose their honor. Let us consider the example of Kapil Dev - a famous cricketer. Some players tried to involve him in charges of corruption. As he had said earlier, his innocence was proves after investigation and his name was cleared of all corruption charges Famous people do not want to be associated with dishonest. They try to cooperate in giving out correct information. Some times politician takes disadvantage of their honor. Political leader brings famous people as a face of the party to interact with the voters in an election.
Additionally, famous people give more trps for success to newcomers, as they learn from their experience, hard work and mistake. We should take their advice in the area of their expertise.
In conclusion, famous people are intelligence and having master in their field, we should listen to their opinion in their skill. As well as we should considered their opinion depends on person, ability and ideas how they are elaborate.
Nowadays, everybody wants to show their intelligence in their master area. People become famous in their dominant area by outstanding performance. Consequently, other people wanted to listen their opinion or follow them. I agree with the statement, 'when famous people such as actors, athletes and rock stars give their opinions, we should pay attention to those opinions'. There are many reasons I believe that the people should pay attention to famous people's opinion.
The first reason is famous people's intellectuality. Celebrity are definitely different from ordinary people. They have talent and they are ingenious and wise. Most of the them give their opinion in their expert area. If they don't have sufficient knowledge about a problem, they like to keep quite. I believe that when famous people give some opinions about problem, its a reality, instead of fake. There are also some exceptions like politicians. Political leaders are always famous and most of time they lie. We can't believe them because they reveal truth for their personal benefits. Other than politician, famous people like Sachin Tendulker, Amitabh Batchen, Amir Khan, we can trust them blindly and consider their opinion in major aspects.
The second reason is the importance these people give for their honor. They get respects a lot and they wouldn't want to loose their honor. Let us consider the example of Kapil Dev - a famous cricketer. Some players tried to involve him in charges of corruption. As he had said earlier, his innocence was proves after investigation and his name was cleared of all corruption charges Famous people do not want to be associated with dishonest. They try to cooperate in giving out correct information. Some times politician takes disadvantage of their honor. Political leader brings famous people as a face of the party to interact with the voters in an election.
Additionally, famous people give more trps for success to newcomers, as they learn from their experience, hard work and mistake. We should take their advice in the area of their expertise.
In conclusion, famous people are intelligence and having master in their field, we should listen to their opinion in their skill. As well as we should considered their opinion depends on person, ability and ideas how they are elaborate.
vaishali1980
Jul 5, 2010
Undergraduate / Hhigh paying job with the risk of losing it is better - 'risk can change' [6]
I tried to correct your sentences as my little bit English knowledge.
You made less grammatically and used good tense but you are not able to write clear idea.
I am also learning English like you. Read your essay after 2-3 hours again and check you can understand it. The second things is learn more synonymous and use different word. Check your sentences arrangement and make simple sentences.
If you want you can download english dictionary. It is free and easy to find meaning, anonymous and synonymous.
Rewrite essay and post it again.
I tried to correct your sentences as my little bit English knowledge.
You made less grammatically and used good tense but you are not able to write clear idea.
I am also learning English like you. Read your essay after 2-3 hours again and check you can understand it. The second things is learn more synonymous and use different word. Check your sentences arrangement and make simple sentences.
If you want you can download english dictionary. It is free and easy to find meaning, anonymous and synonymous.
Rewrite essay and post it again.
vaishali1980
Jul 4, 2010
Writing Feedback / How media affects the lives of famous people? [4]
thanks Kelvin for helpful suggestion.
thanks Kelvin for helpful suggestion.
vaishali1980
Jul 4, 2010
Writing Feedback / Telephones and email have made communication between people less personal [NEW]
Nowadays technology has developed enormously that people can communicate easily. Last century, we were dependent on post services; at that time, people communicate with each other by letter's.
We get information inadequate and infrequently in the letter . Now, people have started communicating with each other by telephone or email; which transfer message instantly.
I don't agree with the statement telephone and email have made communication between people less personal. There are many reason for that.
The main reason is using telephone and email we can stay in touch with each other daily. Though physically we are far from each other, with technology we share personals thought and exchange messages. Its create bonding among each other.
Second reason is assurance . If we send letter or person to convey message, there is no assurance that message will get him correctly. There is no guarantee that whom we have sent letter that letter has delivered correct place or person.
Now we are guarantee that we are talking with correct person and sending an email in correct address. As example, if we want to give some message to our wife or husband, there are more chances it goes in other family member's hand.
The third most important reason is time. It is very important that we should communicate or give information in a time.
If we want to invite for wedding or naming ceremony, message should get before time. Telephones and emails are doing this great job without a failure.
In additionally, telephones and email has made interact with each other very cheap and easier.
In conclusion, telephones and email have made communication between people personal contact, convenient life and give message in time and accurate.
Nowadays technology has developed enormously that people can communicate easily. Last century, we were dependent on post services; at that time, people communicate with each other by letter's.
We get information inadequate and infrequently in the letter . Now, people have started communicating with each other by telephone or email; which transfer message instantly.
I don't agree with the statement telephone and email have made communication between people less personal. There are many reason for that.
The main reason is using telephone and email we can stay in touch with each other daily. Though physically we are far from each other, with technology we share personals thought and exchange messages. Its create bonding among each other.
Second reason is assurance . If we send letter or person to convey message, there is no assurance that message will get him correctly. There is no guarantee that whom we have sent letter that letter has delivered correct place or person.
Now we are guarantee that we are talking with correct person and sending an email in correct address. As example, if we want to give some message to our wife or husband, there are more chances it goes in other family member's hand.
The third most important reason is time. It is very important that we should communicate or give information in a time.
If we want to invite for wedding or naming ceremony, message should get before time. Telephones and emails are doing this great job without a failure.
In additionally, telephones and email has made interact with each other very cheap and easier.
In conclusion, telephones and email have made communication between people personal contact, convenient life and give message in time and accurate.
vaishali1980
Jul 4, 2010
Essays / Should women stay at home or go to work? - research topic [5]
maithilypr
Do you want topics related women or women work?
maithilypr
Do you want topics related women or women work?
vaishali1980
Jul 4, 2010
Writing Feedback / Descriptive Essay on making an important decision - test prep, CBEST. [5]
We are all making choices and taking decisions in everyday our life;
Throughout myentire life
our educational system is a bit different fromthat of the United States
we have two means to be admitted toa the college.
We'll take the first test in May First exam conducts in May and second is in July.
First attempt, we can apply to schools in which we want to get, it's similar to the SAT. If we failed to get into any colleges in first exam , we could still take the second round in July, which we will be allocated based on the test results
might be more correction ahead ...
We are all making choices and taking decisions in everyday our life;
Throughout my
our educational system is a bit different from
we have two means to be admitted to
First attempt, we can apply to schools in which we want to get, it's similar to the SAT. If we failed to get into any colleges in first exam , we could still take the second round in July, which we will be allocated based on the test results
might be more correction ahead ...
vaishali1980
Jul 3, 2010
Writing Feedback / Earth is a beautiful planet which will soon be demolished by human activities [2]
Earth is a beautiful planet which will soon be demolished by human activities.
Human live on the planet with other animals. Human brain is much developed to other animals. They are emprers of the Earth and rule all over.
There are many reasons that I believes the Earth is being harmed by human activity.
The main reason is killing of animals. People like to hunt animals to show their braveness, as well as people hunt animals for food, pelts and entertainment.
Animal killing causes to vanish some species in the nature which will imbalance nature.
The second reason is construction. People construct houses, roads and bridges, which cause to increase non agriculture area. Materials used in constructions also affect atmosphere.
It lead to imbalance rain fall and increases heat which we call global warming. Global warming affects the Earth, like melting of ice on Antartica, skin diseases and so on.
The third reason is industrialization. People make many artificial things for their comfortness. Industrialization destroys and pollutes environment. Industrialization pollutes water, air and soil which affect all creature on earth. It will one day demolish the world
Furthermore, human activities like oil spill in gulf of Mexico caused to die many marine plants and animals.Global warming ,burning of forest kills forest animals and trees.
In conclusion, though human like to build beautiful houses for them to live in, but nature is definitely being harmed. To save earth human should think about their activities.
Earth is a beautiful planet which will soon be demolished by human activities.
Human live on the planet with other animals. Human brain is much developed to other animals. They are emprers of the Earth and rule all over.
There are many reasons that I believes the Earth is being harmed by human activity.
The main reason is killing of animals. People like to hunt animals to show their braveness, as well as people hunt animals for food, pelts and entertainment.
Animal killing causes to vanish some species in the nature which will imbalance nature.
The second reason is construction. People construct houses, roads and bridges, which cause to increase non agriculture area. Materials used in constructions also affect atmosphere.
It lead to imbalance rain fall and increases heat which we call global warming. Global warming affects the Earth, like melting of ice on Antartica, skin diseases and so on.
The third reason is industrialization. People make many artificial things for their comfortness. Industrialization destroys and pollutes environment. Industrialization pollutes water, air and soil which affect all creature on earth. It will one day demolish the world
Furthermore, human activities like oil spill in gulf of Mexico caused to die many marine plants and animals.Global warming ,burning of forest kills forest animals and trees.
In conclusion, though human like to build beautiful houses for them to live in, but nature is definitely being harmed. To save earth human should think about their activities.
vaishali1980
Jul 3, 2010
Undergraduate / "All I can do is be me- significant experiences that helped to define you as a person [4]
You can also write about your ability, interest and achievement.
You can also write about your ability, interest and achievement.
vaishali1980
Jul 3, 2010
Writing Feedback / How media affects the lives of famous people? [4]
Susan
I have one question
can I write this ?
"In conclusion, media pay too much attention to the personal lives of famous people. Government has responsibility to make some rule to control on them"
should I have drop this sentences? If yes then why?
Susan
I have one question
can I write this ?
"In conclusion, media pay too much attention to the personal lives of famous people. Government has responsibility to make some rule to control on them"
should I have drop this sentences? If yes then why?
vaishali1980
Jul 3, 2010
Writing Feedback / If Exceed's walls could talk, what would they tell? [3]
After reading your essay, I think you are unhappy with your teacher.
There are plenty of things you can mention in your essay as wall will tell history of institute, bright future, students enjoyment and hard work and so many things. Please rewrite about those things instead of writing about teacher.
After reading your essay, I think you are unhappy with your teacher.
There are plenty of things you can mention in your essay as wall will tell history of institute, bright future, students enjoyment and hard work and so many things. Please rewrite about those things instead of writing about teacher.
vaishali1980
Jul 2, 2010
Writing Feedback / How media affects the lives of famous people? [4]
I agree with given statement that television, newspaper, magazines and other media pay too much attention to the personal lives of famous people such as public figure and celebrities.
Nowadays people like to read and watch news for knowledge and entertainment. There are many reason that I believes media pay too much attention to the personal lives of famous people.
The main reason, whenever I switch on...
I agree with given statement that television, newspaper, magazines and other media pay too much attention to the personal lives of famous people such as public figure and celebrities.
Nowadays people like to read and watch news for knowledge and entertainment. There are many reason that I believes media pay too much attention to the personal lives of famous people.
The main reason, whenever I switch on...