Writing Feedback / The prison and education are the best way to reduce the level of criminal offense. [2]

In many countries prisons is considered the best way to decrease crime. However, education is often argued to be more effective way. Which opinion do you most agree with?

Over time, the crime topic always has become the pivotal topic to be overcome as soon as possible. Prison is one of the best ways considered to be reducing the crime rate. Personally, I agree that the prison is effective to decrease the crime; however the convict should be educated in the prison to be a better person.

The main purpose of the prison is to make the convict feeling guilty. They must stay in the prison for some months or years depending on the level of their crime. However, according to the data from one of research published in Humanities Journal of Seoul University in 2013 showed that the prison is not the best way to decrease crime due to the reason that some convicts do the same criminal offense when they released from prison. It proves that the prison does not make the convict stopping to do the criminal offense. Based on the data, I still agree that prison is one of the best solutions to reduce the crime rate; however it cannot be denied that the system of the prison must be repaired.

The effective prison is the prison which is able to change the character of the convict, due to the reason that the convicts not only stay in the prison, but also they must be guided in the prison to be a better person. They must be educated to have expertise so when they are released from the prison, the can be the independent person. According to the data from Australia Survey Institute in 2014 showed that the majority of the convicts there have a decent job after they are released from the prison as actually they got the education in the prison before.

All in all, there is no doubt that the role of education to make the prison be more effective has proved. Therefore, I agree that prison and education are the best way to reduce the level of criminal offense.

Writing Feedback / To get work is the main reason why people prefer to continue their study in the university [2]

People attend college or university for many different reasons (for example, new experiences, career preparation, and increased knowledge). Why do you think people attend college or university?

The awareness of the people to continue their study to college or university has increased in recent year, due to the reason that the level of competition to get work in the current era prosecutes them to have the high level of education.

In cannot be denied that some people attend university to improve their knowledge as they believe that learning in the university which uses some adequate facilities and getting the guidance from their lecture will increase their knowledge significantly. In addition, some people consider that studying in the university can increase their social status. Not only them, but also their families will feel proud and satisfied when they can study in the university, on the contrary they will feel ashamed when they cannot continue their study in the university. However, among some reasons, I believe that to get work is the predominant factor which influences the people to continue their study in the university.

The high level of competition to get work in the current era prosecutes the people to have the high level of education. It is indisputable fact that the majority of companies obligate their employees to have bachelor's degree. According to the survey result from Indonesia Survey Institute in 2015 showed that 87% of the totals of the respondent who have continued their study in the university consider getting work as the predominant reason why they continue their study in the university.

All in all, in spite of the fact that there are some reasons for the people why they continue their study at the university, however based on the data explained above, we can conclude that to get work is the main reason why the people prefer to continue their study in the university

Writing Feedback / The young leaders have a great deal of excellence than the old leaders [NEW]

Most leaders or directors generally belong to an older age group, but some people believe that young leaders are better. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give your own opinion

There is no doubt that the age is one of the factors which influence the performance of the leaders. I really agree that the young leaders have a great deal of excellence than old leaders such as physical strength, more visionary and having plenty of fascinating ideas.

The old leaders have a great deal of experience than the young leaders. It cannot be denied that the experience of the leader is pivotal to support them overcoming every problem. Therefore most leaders or directors generally belong to an older age group. In addition, the majority of people or employees tend to appreciate the people who have an older age than them. In consequence, the leaders should belong to an older age group. However, it is important to note that on the other side, the young leaders have more advantages than the old leaders.

The visionary is one of the essential characters which must be owned by the leaders. This character can help to come up with their fascinating idea. According to the data from one of research published in Psychology Journal of Hamburg University in 2015 showed that the young leaders tend to have the visionary character to evolve their societies or employees than old leaders. Moreover, it cannot be denied that the physical strength also is pivotal to the leaders and there is no doubt that the young leaders have stronger physical strength than the old leaders.

All in all, in spite of the fact that the old leaders have more experience than young leaders, however according to the previous explaining, we can conclude that the young leaders are better than the old leaders based on some considerations.

Writing Feedback / The children must grasp their mother tongue before learning a foreign language [2]

The majority of people have realized the importance to learn a foreign language. However, I really disagree when the children begin to learn a foreign language at primary school, due to the reason that they should grasp they mother tongue previously before learning the foreign language.

The children aged 3-12 year will be easier to learn a foreign language than the children aged over 13 years. At this age, their memory works well so as it will help them to learn the foreign language. In addition, the schoolchildren who start to learn a foreign language in secondary school will get plenty of difficulties as they are not accustomed to with this language, therefore they should know the foreign language in primary school. Moreover, the children will learn a wide range of lessons in secondary school than in primary school, so they can not focus to learn the foreign language in secondary school. However, I believe that the age is not the predominant factor which influences the student to learn a foreign language, interest to learn or learning motivation is the predominant factor which gives a pivotal influence to learn the foreign language.

Understanding the mother language is pivotal to be known by children. Therefore, in primary school, the children should focus to grasp their mother language. They cannot appreciate their mother language when they do not grasp this tongue. In addition according to the data from one of research published in Journal of Education in 2014 showed that the children who are overdue to learn the foreign language can grasp this language well, due to the reason that the pivotal factor which influences the children to learn a foreign language is the Interest to learn this language.

All in all, there is no doubt that the drawback of learning a foreign language in primary school outweighs the benefit which will be got by the children. Giving the understanding of the children regarding their mother language in early age is the best way to make them can appreciate their mother language.

Writing Feedback / The international food such as fast food is more enjoyed by majority of people than local culinary [NEW]

In many countries, traditional foods are being replaced by international fast foods. This is having a negative effect on both families and societies. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

In spite of the fact that the fast food is enjoyed by the majority of people, however, I can prove clearly that it can lead plenty of problems to families and societies. I strongly believe that there are several solutions which can overcome this problem.

Some parents spend less time together their children or otherwise. Family meal time is considered as an opportunity for all members to get together and share their experiences. However, based on the latest data from National Survey Institute in the UK shows that 89 % of the total of teenagers in this country prefer to eat in the restaurant which provides a lot of fast foods with their friends. It has led the teenagers spending more time with their friend than their family.

The public health rate is decreasing slowly every year. The consumption rate of society on fast food is one of the factors predominant led this problem. Based on the data from Community Healthy Institute (CHI) in the Philippines proves 38 % of all diseases suffered by society in this country are caused by fast food. It is indisputable fact that the majority of fast food much more unhealthy than home-cooked meals, due to the reason that it consists of some materials which are not needed by the body.

To sum up, undoubtedly the fast food has proved to harm the people. However, there are several measures which can be done to overcome this problem. The government should restrict the number of fast food produced by several companies. The parents also should educate their children from an early age to consume home-cooked meals than fast food.