Writing Feedback / TED summary: How does my brain work? [2]

When we park a car in the parking area then we walk into the mall and back, we have to remember where is the car. The hippocampus has memorizing responsibility. Brain made by a hundred billion neurons. Neurons communicate with each other by sending a signal. There is a brain research with rat, that shows the way brain remembers. Brain cells illustrated in the picture with colors. When a rat was put into the box and let move around to looking for food, cells show something like a fire sort but when the box expands the fire location are expanded. In a border puts into the box, fire sort will emerge at the location where the border. There are few cells consist boundary cells, place cells, grid cells, head-direction cells, visual imagery. All the cells are connected to make a pattern like a map. The brain will make a map of a place by exploring around. The brain will record every boundary, the more spacious a location the more fire sort are made. We could people to remember a way or place by walking around.

Writing Feedback / Summary- China wants its nuclear industry to grow dauntingly fast [2]

Nowadays, China's utility is quite high. Due to the fact that energy consumption will increase dramatically in 2030 as a prediction. The government planned to expand nuclear power massively. China started their first nuclear plant in 1994. China has 36 reactors in operation and 20 else under construction. Four have been approved and the others still in the planning stages. By 2030, China targeted to increase their nuclear power up to 9%. Nuclear generation capacity will have increased eightfold over the same period.

After Fukushima disaster in 2011, the Chinese authorities halted the nuclear project. They asked the government to check safety system of a nuclear plant. This year, Government had resolved to take care of its nuclear-energy programme. Government ambitious to reduce pollution in china by reducing greenhouse-gas emissions and ambition to expertise in nuclear, so they need to emerge their nuclear.

Chinese are happy that they will have friendly environment power, but they demand safety system. Early this year, the government acknowledge that its safety system still inadequate. In April, a national nuclear safety system was revealed. Debora Selingohn of the University of California said that she believes that government can keep and handle safety standard tightly.

Writing Feedback / Task 1- Energy Generation by Fuel Type [3]

The pie charts illustrate about energy generation by fuel type in Florida in two separated years. Overall, the charts show the trend fuel in 2007 and trend prediction in 2017. It is clear that Natural gas is the most popular fuel in 2007 and is predicted will ascend in 2017, whereas renewables at the lowermost.

In 2007, Florida Natural gas consumption is less than two-fifths, and the amount of Natural gas by average Florida predicted will rise to just over a half in 2017. During the same period, Nuclear utilizing is predicted will climb from 11,9 percent to 15,9 percent.

By 2017, several consumption of energy is predicted will be plummeting. Coral consumption is depicted to descend to approximately 23,7 percent. On the other hand, renewable has a very small number and will plunge to 1,5 percent in 2017. Other energy estimated to sharp drop from just over one in ten to less than one in twenty, while oil plunge to a small number.

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Writing Feedback / Summary-Immortalising Human Brains at The World's Largest Brain Bank [2]

Nowadays, In the medical field, they used to using brains for medical research. They need a fresh brain that has to arrive in 24 hours after died at least. Jorge Tejada and his team had found effectively frozen brain. The process takes about 17 hours since the moment of death until arriving at McLean Hospital and have to be removed intact and transported rapidly.

First, a brain is weighed, after that then sliced in half rinsed in sterile saline. There are two different way treatments. A half brain sliced from front to back and the cerebellum (key structure) removed. The slices placed into two plates and directly frozen using a cocktail of dry ice and liquid nitrogen. This way aims to minimize tissue damage. The frozen slices are then saved into deep freeze until needed. The other hemisphere is treated for examining and dissect needs. The hemisphere is soaked in formalin for few weeks.

Writing Feedback / How to speak powerfully to make changes in the world. [2]

TED Summary- How to speak so that people want to listen

The human voice is the most powerful sounds in the world. How to speak powerfully to make changes in the world. There are number of habits that we can avoid. First gossiping, speaking about the others flaw. Second, judging, people who judge the others is hard to be heard. Third, negativity, someone who had negative thinking will be hard to be listened. Forth, Complaining, people who always complaining cannot look for good reasons in their life. Fifth, Excusing, they are blaming on everything, put the responsibility to another people and then take the rest. Sixth, lying, people do not want to hear to something untruth. Seventh, dogmatism, it is difficult to be heard. The thing we could do to be more powerful to speak is to greet or acclaim enthusiastically. First, Honesty, being true and clear. Authenticity, just be yourself and standing in your own way. Integrity, being what you said. Love, wish them well, you will be hard to judge other people.

Lower your voices which mean you can associate powerful. Timbre, The way your voice feels like smooth and warm, you can practice making your voice comfortable to be heard. Prosody, root one for a conversation, makes a conversation more colorful and sometimes makes some divergent meaning. Pace, affect the speed of understanding. Pitch, attract people concern to you. Volume, some people ascend or descend their voices to pay attention. Be a powerful speaker and get convince listener, means creating and receiving.

Writing Feedback / THE NUMBER OF FOREIGN STUDENTS HAD INCREASED SIGNIFICANTLY AND IT HAD BEEN DOMINATED BY MALE. [4]

The bar chart below gives information about the number of students studying computer science at a UK university between 2010 and 2011

The bar chart presents the number of students studying computer science at the university in Britain from 2010 to 2012. Overall, it can be seen that there are two kinds of students: British home students and International students. British home students dominated quantity of computer science students in the UK for three years in both of females and males.

Between 2010 and 2012, British's home female students had the highest number in 2012 at 45 percent while the lowest number in 2010 around 30 percent. In the opposite, International students had dramatically lower than native students. Females who were studying abroad increased steadily from less than 15 percent (2010) to 20 percent (2012).

In 2011, British male home students had the lowest proportion. By 2012, the number of male students came from British country had increased from less than 25 percent in 2011 to the highest proportion at approximately 43 percent. On the other hand, International male students climbed from 20 percent in 2010 to nearly 40 percent in 2012.

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Writing Feedback / In 1981 butter was the most popular spread among others [2]

The graph below show the consumption of 3 spreads from 1981 to 2007 Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows the information about the consumption of 3 spreads from 1981 to 2007. Overall, there are three spreads: margarine, low fat & reduced spreads and butter. It is noticeable that butter was the most popular of the three spreads in 1981.

Between 1981 until 1986, Butter consumption increased from around 140 to a peak 160 grams per year. During the same period, consumption of margarine decreased from around 90 to 80 grams per year while low fat & reduced spreads had not consumed yet until 1996.

By 2007, butter had significant descended since the first year. The highest consumption of spread is low fat and reduced spreads that had significant rose since the 1960's, to approximately 70 grams per year. The second place, occupied by butter with approximately consumption 50 grams per year. The lowest consumption of spread is margarine with average consumption 40 grams per year.

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