Writing Feedback / Comparison between unemployment rates and earning according to level of education [2]

Question: The graph below show joblessness rates and average salary according to level of education. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Answer: Two graphs illustrate the joblessness's percentages and average salaries according to education's level in 2008 and are measured in proportion and U.S. Dollars. Overall, although graduate degree is the lowest level of education, it is the highest salary.

The percentage of high school diploma for nonemployees, the highest proportion, is over one in twenty, but it only acquired $600 for salary which has been the lowest earning. Furthermore, some college which is the second highest unemployment rate reached 4.2 percent, although significant difference rate between this subject and high school diploma, these graphs do not show crucial unequal salary. Afterwards, college degree just got two point five percent, but it offers good salary about $1,100.

Finally, graduation degree is the highest rate of employment and award spectacular salary. It can be seen that, even though graduate degree is the lowest percentage of unemployment in 1.2%, it is the highest earnings which peaked at $1,500.

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Writing Feedback / Young people have enough capability to consider their professions [2]

Question: In your opinion, should young people choose their professions, or should their parents choose for them? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

This day and age, young people desire a comfortable occupation. Because of this, they could maximize using the internet to collect some information for considering their choice in profession as there are numerous data provided by the internet for the young generation to opt their future career.

There are some reasons why young people utilize the internet to pick their jobs. First of all, after they obtain the information from the internet they will know how far their ability for job because they can seek the step how to be a professional and what are the consequences such as information about tricks to be biochemist that could be searched in Google. In addition, they absorb many references from the internet about model people who succeeded in their careers because the biography generally explains the result of profession. Such biographies of Albert Einstein, Barrack Obama and Soekarno.

However, many students when collect the information by using the internet usually confuse to make a best choice for right occupation as so many information and consideration given by this advanced technology. For example, student who graduated from medical degree often hesitate to choose particular medical subject in Master degree like course of hurt disease, lank and soon.

To sum up, young people would be able to decide their future career by collecting information from the internet. Therefore, they have enough capability to consider their professions. It is imperative that this modern technology take an important role for helping young generation find out their best occupation.

Writing Feedback / Is level of academic capability a necessary? [3]

Everybody should be allowed admission to university study programs regardless of their level of academic ability.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Continuing study at university is a dream for every student. As such, people have same right to apply subject of study to college without taking care about academic achievement. Although there are pros and cons in this statement, I personally agree with this statement as it can reduce bribes for student who has not enough level of academic capability and also it cannot be guarantee of student favorite subject.

Academic-ability qualification could help students to choice the best academic way for them as this ability is the most important factor to determine their comfortable subject in university such as all of universities in Indonesia requires the certificate of academic level to select the proper student for the correct course. As a result, people can easily improving their real skill.

On the other hand, there are many reasons why degree of academic capability is not essential. First of all, every person tends to bribe university employees for allowing them study at college as some people have a big motivation to study but less academic capability such as bribes are often happen in many universities in Indonesia. Furthermore, this level does not be guarantee of favorite subject which can make student has good motivation to study because although they have good skill in one subject, but they do not enjoying it. Take an example, most of students in advanced country is recommended to choose their favorite subject not their good capability of courses.

To sum up, degree of academic ability does not predominant for entering university as it will cause bribes and it reduce student's motivation. Therefore, I prefer agree with this case.

Writing Feedback / Is foreign language important for children? When to start teaching them? [2]

All children should study a foreign language in school, starting in the earliest grades.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Language is the most predominant key for education. As such, learning foreign language is an obligation for whole students in elementary school. Although there are many pros and contras in this case, I strongly believe that a new tongue is essential today for earliest grades.

Elementary students have to focus on studying their basic languages and do not concentrate on learning a new tongue as study foreign language in the primary school will disturb students' patterns in speaking their main language such as Malaysia's students who learn English have difficulty to speak "melayu" well. As a result, schoolchild could not make a good communication in their society.

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Writing Feedback / Pie charts on the degrees granted at National University; computer science is the highest proportion [3]

Three pie charts compare levels of granted in several different subjects among three decades at National University and are measured in percentages. Overall, as can be seen that computer science is the highest proportion of these chart.

Computer science increased gradually from 1990 to 2010 representing from more or less one in third to more than two fifths. As such, it has been most popular field in National University. In 1990, suddenly, Law is always be the lowest proportion of subjects for following three decades, it can be proved that it stood at 10% and never increased until 2010. Furthermore, although medicine was the second lowest proportion in 1990, by 2000 and 2010 it increased steadily and it was be the second highest percentage.

Less change was seen in the remaining one subject, business fell to one in twenty in 2000, but it still decreased slightly to fifteen-percent in next ten years.

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Writing Feedback / Many kinds of integration problems for people living abroad (%) [2]

The bar chart illustrates many kinds of problems which people have when they go staying abroad and is measured in percentage. At first glance it is evident that, learning the local language is the highest difficulty in this case.

About 45%, making friends is the highest trouble for adult. This decrease dramatically to over one in third for people aged 35-54. However, elderly people only approximately twenty-three percent find hardness in making friends.

Finding somewhere to live is still to be a highest percentage for people aged 18-34, although it fell steadily for ones aged 35-54. Next, this is the lowest percentage for elderly people.

The last, almost thirty percent learning the local language is not becoming the hardest problem for the mature people. Furthermore, it rose dramatically to one in third for human aged 35 to 54. Then, it is peak at 54% which is so difficult for old men when they visit to live in another country.

Writing Feedback / Information device help people to work outside [NEW]

Information technology enables many people to do their work outside their work place (eg. At home, when travelling, etc.) Do the benefits of this mobility outweigh the advantages?

Influenced technology has improved worker's lifestyle. Because of this, ones tend to do their jobs in anywhere and anytime that suitable for their condition by using information devices. Although, there are many merits and demerits of this case, I personally believe that information technology has more positive impacts.

This technology alleviates job's concentration as work outside is related directly with plenty things which is not connected with their career such as person (father) who work in home is usually disturbed by his son for playing games. As a result, he cannot concentrate for his job. Therefore, I believe that worker unable focus for working in outside.

On the other hand, there are some benefits from work outside by using this device. Firstly, people can reduce their bored in job because work outside in several different places give new experience which minimize boredom such as in fact said that people will feel it when do activity in same place for long time. In addition, by using the internet, businessmen also could make a deal with their partner whenever they are as it serves workers to keep in touch with others in different time and place. Taking an example, skype's teleconference is usually used for commercial meeting today.

In conclusion, while work outside by using information technology has disadvantage, these case has huge merits as well. In my opinion, work outside in difference places can delete bored and internet will help them to keep contact in working every where and every time. I hope all companies allow their employees to work outside and provide internet service for them.

Writing Feedback / Is watching television better for learning about another countries? Is there another way? [2]

Some people say that you can learn more about another country by watching television programs and films about it than by actually visiting it. How true is this statement? Is there anything you can learn about another country by visiting it that you cannot learn by watching programs and films about it? Give reasons for your answers and including any relevant examples from your own experience.

Some people say that you can learn more about another country by watching television programs and films about it than by actually visiting it. How true is this statement? Is there anything you can learn about another country by visiting it that you cannot learn by watching programs and films about it? Give reasons for your answers and including any relevant examples from your own experience.

Television has become information source for people all over the world. As such, some televisions programmes spread around the world very fast such as BBC program for most people as people will get information about other nations without spending more money to explore a place. However, I personally believe that visiting place is more efficient since people need updating information when the television has provided incomplete the latest information.

Many reasons people tend to watching television programs for knowing another state. Firstly, television programs are easy to find as television companies are race providing news and unique programs to satisfy watchers such as Al-Jazeera news. In addition, ones do not need spend more power and time as they only need television and sit down in their place like watching television in dinner room. Not only this, television performance is a basic tool for people improving their knowledge as now, it has been a easy guide to develop their information such as information about healthy, politics and tradition.

However, sometimes, the information is not up-to-date, so people should visit that place for justifying data as some fact said that development of developed country has changed so fast such Malaysia's development of infrastructures. As a result, information has to be updated every time. Therefore, television programs cannot always show new data that they presented.

In conclusion, although visiting a place is a way to ensure updated data, sometimes televisions program also provide it and those spread so fast because those simply for getting information. Therefore, I strongly believe that television programs have more positive impacts.

Writing Feedback / Can living in the same location make people close to their family and friends? Isn't that boring? [2]

in the past, people usually stayed in one place throughout their life. These days, people often move around. They often live in several different places in their lifetime. What are the advantages and disadvantages of both?

in the past, people usually stayed in one place throughout their life. These days, people often move around. They often live in several different places in their lifetime. What are the advantages and disadvantages of both?

Few years ago, some people spent their whole life only in one place. As such, some people believe that living in the same place can make them close to their family and friends, but this condition probably caused them bored easily. On the other hand, now, some others really like staying in several different places for getting new experiences, but it will deplete their money. Therefore, I prefer living in a special place in my lifetime.

Benefit of staying in particular place is easy to be chummy with others as they permanently survival in specific place for long time, as it can be seen that ones who make good interaction with each other for long time are more compact. However, it cause rise boredom for several people because they solely meet same inhabitants and environment. Taking an example, John east wood, Alexandria frischen, Mark fenske, and Daniel smilek in the September, 2012 issue of Perspectives on Psychological Science said that one of some reasons causing boredom is environment. As a result, the same habitats create people close each other, but ones tend to be bored by staying in a place regularly. Therefore, I personally believe that living in a place has more drawbacks.

There are some reasons why people more likely move around in some different places. The first, they can get new beneficial skill as every place has another knowledge which improving their future such as foreign languages. On the other hand, they need more time adapting with new atmosphere which might be totally different from their origin because most people are often shock with unusual culture. For example, it has mostly occurred when people migrate from countryside to industrial city. In addition, migrating to some new places would provide better job opportunity as people tend to pursue better life by having an appropriate chore such as working in metropolitan city. However, they will spend more money on moving places as they have to rent or buy new resident. Taking an example, in fact, people have to rent some cars for moving furniture.

To sum up, most of people prefer staying in a place, but others are really keen on moving surrounding several dissimilar places. I personally believe that staying in some different places has more benefits.

Writing Feedback / Nowadays, advanced buildings adorn many places in a country. [3]

Some people say that modern buildings are ugly and are ruining our towns and cities, especially when these buildings are very different from those around them. Others say that they add variety and interest. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

Some people say that modern buildings are ugly and are ruining our towns and cities, especially when these buildings are very different from those around them. Others say that they add variety and interest. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

Nowadays, advanced buildings adorn many places in country. Because of this, some people believe that there are many reasons why modern buildings have special attractions. However, others say that spectacular buildings spoil cities' environments as those cause noisy pollution such as smog from industrial buildings. Therefore, I personally believe that new buildings have more positive effects.

Tall buildings can give more benefits. First, those provide a lot of job opportunities as they need the number of employees such as archipelago international hotels, resorts and residences need more than 1.000 employees in 2013. In addition, they have been a symbol of economic power for a town because developed city is recognized with a lot of advanced building such as KLCC in Malaysia. Not only this, modern buildings also can improve government's income as every spectacular property should pay taxes city councils such as the property tax in Denmark is 1% for property valued at less than DKK 3 million and 3% for property valued above DKK 3 million.

However, many tall buildings can decrease steadily characteristic of cities as modern property with new style that often different with common buildings such the robot building in Japan. As a result, spectacular properties disturb variety buildings of towns. Therefore, modern buildings only annoy citizen habitats.

To sum up, although ones believe that many tall buildings have more benefits, some others say that those make cities and towns scenery in trouble. In my opinion these building give more advantages in many aspects especially in economy and scenery of towns and cities. I hope government can balance between spectacular buildings' development and town features.