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asokapalama   
Apr 7, 2010
Writing Feedback / Age of marriage in today's world [5]

Your arguments about the age of marriage are quit right. However, I would like to give some additional points for your topic.

1.Legally there is a minimum age for marriage. So people can marry after that age
legally.

2.One should marry when he/she physically and mentally mature. Then only the couple can face to the problems successfully and also have healthy children

3.Before marry one should have stable employment or source of income. That is why some people have to wait.

4.Right age for marriage depend upon the individual and also the country he or she
lives.
asokapalama   
Apr 7, 2010
Writing Feedback / Violance Against Women [2]

Please write your ideas about this topic. Thanks

Violence against women

. Woman's status or position in a society is depending on where she is living. In western countries women are more independent and more-or less equal to male in the society. It is different in the Asian countries. Woman in south Asia is much dependent character and her main aim is to build a family. In South Asia there is no life without family for a woman. Asian society treats her as a mother. However, there seems to be changing this position with the globalization. Our society believes woman should have a family in order to complete her life. Also our society expects her purity in the marriage. These cultural norms were developed over the years with religious background. Buddhism and Hinduism are religions that believe some kind of male dominance in the society. Buddhism has described how one should treat his wife with respect. According to Buddhism one should provide his wife everything she need for comfortable living and necessary protection. According to Buddhist philosophy husband is the head of the family and the decision maker. But that does not mean he can ill treat his wife or ignore wife's views. In Buddhism only males can become full priests. Male Buddhist monks are our real clergies. This is also reflects the state of the male in the society. Still male dominance attitude is present in the Asian cultures. South Asia has family centered society. Not like earlier days now women are employing almost every field. Under this situation women are more expose to violence than before. New rule and regulations are required to protect women when they are in the outside from home. However, we have to take into consideration the culture when we want to change the position of women in the home or any law introduce in order to deal with home violence against women. By education women make more independent and they will come to know their rights. Then the males can not easily violate the women rights. More home violence was recorded in the bottom stages of societies. This indicates poverty is also a factor that contributes lot in the home violence. Laws give strength to the women. But it should not aim for the punishing husbands. Family is a voluntary association with trust, faith and love. Punishments are not help to build trust, faith or love. However, I strongly believe poverty and lack of education women are subjected to home violence easily.
asokapalama   
Apr 12, 2010
Writing Feedback / IELTS TOPIC: Telecommuting ; GOOD OR BAD? [5]

You have indicated correctly advantages and disadvantages of telecommuting. Telecommuting can be applied only to certain survices such as accountancy. Atmosphere of a office is made for workers to work. So the worker can achieve high effecinecy when he work in the office. Going to work is a kind of change for a person. It gives a new strength to work. Eventhough sometimes people think travelling from home to office and back is a tiring and time wasting process, it gives opportunties to meet people and make new relationships etc. There are people who found their life parteners because of travelling. How many of them start life long relationship with the office colleagues. Hope you can get some more points for your topic from this.

Asoka Palamakumbura
asokapalama   
Apr 14, 2010
Undergraduate / Tell us something about yourself - your present and future goals [6]

I feel it is better if you can write about yourself little more in the first paragraph. You have to state what you are doing at present. You have not organized your facts carefully in the second paragraph in oder to attract the reader. You can write well. Only thing you have to oganize your ideas. You can write a few words about the Palm Beach Atlantic University. Good luck.

Asoka Palamakumbura
asokapalama   
Apr 15, 2010
Undergraduate / Waitlist letter to washington university st.louis [3]

First you have to introduce yourself in this kind of letter. Then you can write why you select that university for your higher education. After that you can let them know what kind of course you would like to study. At the end you can ask them to select you for the course. I think you have to organize your writing.

Thanks
asokapalama   
Apr 19, 2010
Research Papers / Quantitative Research paper-should same sex couples be allowed to adopt children [6]

Lord Buddha lived more than 2500 ago. He has not mentiond about same sex couples. In Buddhism there is no place for same sex couples. If you like to have a healthy well balanced person then both male and femal parents are important. A child recognized his parents seperately from very early stage of development. Therefore his respons are different to mother and father. You can write some psychologicial aspect on child development in your essay.

Good Luck
asokapalama   
Aug 19, 2010
Writing Feedback / Agricultue as livelihood [3]

Welcome your comments and grammer corrections

Agriculture is the main livelihood for people in some Asian countries including India, Pakistan, Bangladesh, Sri Lanka, and the Thailand. In Sri Lanka more than 60% of people engage in agriculture production activities and connected services. A few decades ago by exporting tea, rubber, coconut and spices earned the highest foreign exchange or dollars. In addition to the above commodities Sri Lanka now exports fresh and processed fruits and vegetables to the Middle Eastern and western world. However, the position of foreign exchange earnings by agriculture products has dropped to third place now. Remittances from the migrants/ workers abroad are the highest foreign exchange earnings to the country now. According to recent statistics there are more than 1.6 million Sri Lankans work abroad. Majority of workers are women and they serve as housemaids in Middle Eastern countries. However, agriculture is the main force of the country's economy as it supplies our staple food rice for 20 million people.. Sri Lanka is almost self-sufficient in rice production and also fruits and vegetables. However, per capita consumption of fruits in Sri Lanka is lower than the quantities recommended by nutrients. The total value of the agriculture products that generate in Sri Lanka is the highest all.

Tea, Rubber and Coconut, known as plantation crops and play an important role in the national economy in Sri Lanka. Apart from the foreign exchange that brings, plantation crops generate employment opportunities to the mass. These crops found as large plantations and manage by companies. Different categories of workers including field officers and laborers are employing in these companies. The field officers and laborers can be treated as the farmers of these crops. The price fluctuations in these crops would not affect the workers very much as they are wage earners. When there are very big price drops the government intervenes and helps to make adjustments. Young people like to work in this sector as there is no uncertainty of income and also rewarded with a lump sum or monthly pension when they reached the retiring age.

Farmers who are engaging in other crops such as paddy, fruits, vegetables and fields' crops the situation is different. Individual farmers have to grow and sell the products in the open market. Sometimes farmers sell their products to whole sellers through agents middle men.

Prices are usually determined in fruits and vegetables on the day's supply and the demand. In respect of rice or paddy prices are much more stable compared to fruits and vegetables but still slightly dropped during the harvesting time in Sri Lanka. The prices of fruits and vegetables fluctuate year round and thereby incomes of the farmers are also change and there is some uncertainty. There are instances farmers have to sell the products lower than cost of production. This is because of same type of vegetables received to whole sale centers in bulk. In Sri Lanka usually there is no any advance agreement with the whole sellers and farmers of fruits and vegetables as in developed countries. Taken into consideration from the past experiences in respect of income received, or the seed materials that they have at hand farmers decide what to grow. Also vegetable production can be affected by unusual climatic changes and pest and diseases etc. Therefore uncertainty of income from vegetable production is much more than any other crops. In respect of paddy profit margin is lower but uncertainty of crop failing is lower than the vegetables. This is one of the reasons why young people are not very enthusiastic to take agriculture as their livelihood. If the governments want to attract young people to agriculture these uncertainties have to be dealt with proper solutions..

Also the size of the land available for a farmer is limited in Sri Lanks. Average vegetable farm is around 1/5 of hector. And most instances available land is not sufficient to generate income for a family to lead a decent life. Especially in vegetable production land preparation, planting, harvesting etc are carried out by manually. Due to small size of the fields use of big machinery is not profitable. Also machines can not be used in some farmer fields due to the setup or the location. This is also draw back and may one reason to young people moves away from the agriculture. Sri Lankan Government has realized some of the short comings and now making some adjustments. Efficient marketing system also helps to increase farmers' income.

A few whole sale marketing centers were opened recently with necessary storage facilities in order to compete in prices of perishable commodities. This is very positive step towards get away from middle men in vegetable and fruit marketing. Then the farmers can get higher prices for their products. Also government is buying rice or paddy at fixed prices in order to keep the paddy prices realistic value.

Efficient and low-cost transport and preplanned vegetable production schedule can reduced the over production. In Sri Lanka we have extensive railway lines covering most of major agriculture production areas. Also government is planning to build new railway lines cover the other production areas. However, still we have not fully used the railway in transport goods. Transporting goods by railway is much cheaper than transport by trucks. Very small quantities of fresh vegetables and fruits export to Middle Eastern countries. The quantity is less than one percent of the production. There is potential to expand this and export vegetables to Weston countries. Farmers could fetch higher prices for the products if they can produce fruits and vegetables with required standard. This is a other scheme that can workout for increase farmers income. In order to attract young people to agriculture the government can device a system to pay compensation for crop fails and pension scheme for farmers. I think people will take agriculture as their livelihood if it is profitable and income is sufficient for comfortable living. For this governments have to play major role.
asokapalama   
Aug 22, 2010
Writing Feedback / Agricultue as livelihood [3]

Dear Kelvin,

Thanks for the valuable advises.

Asoka Palamakumbura.
asokapalama   
Aug 22, 2010
Scholarship / How to start an essay about obstacles in life? [4]

Obstacles in life

From the birth till the end of life we all are facing obstacles. First we all try to identify our surroundings. Then we try to pass our feelings to others. That is a big obstacle. The child will find a way to pass his feelings. New born child can pass his feeling to his mother by crying. In the latter part of the life we have to overcome more obstacles such as learn to walk, learn to speak, write, pass exams, find an employment, select a suitable life partener etc, etc, etc.

You can enlighten a few of these in your essay

Asoka
asokapalama   
Sep 4, 2010
Writing Feedback / The advertising is the main cause of unhealthy eating habits. [6]

Here are some facts about foods

I do not agree with advertising along can change a persons habit of eating. There may be some effect but it is not the root cause. Root causes are ignorance on the food values people's attitudes. Our education system and mass media have not given enough effort to educate our people in respect of healthy food. Also people are not known how nutrients are affect or health and daily activities. It is well known fact fresh foods are the best in the sense of nutrients. Also people are little lazy in marketing and food preparation etc. Therefore they rely on the advertisements in buying prepared food.

Asoka
asokapalama   
Sep 8, 2010
Writing Feedback / informative essay; human trafficking [3]

For me human trafficking is more than human beings are used in tread for sex, slavery.. But now people who want to find green pasture or live in a developed country also get help from the traders who transport to developed country illegally. In this way south Americans are entering to the North America. South Asian people are entering to Australia and New Zealand. The transport of people illegally to other country is also come under human trafficking.

Asoka
asokapalama   
Sep 11, 2010
Writing Feedback / Generation gap: your generation is different from your parents' generation? [5]

We can conclude our essay writing some solution to this as follows.

Elders not appreciate some behaviors of young generation due to generation gap. That is a common in any society. As members of young generation we should understand this situation and act accordingly.
asokapalama   
Sep 13, 2010
Faq, Help / Love to be here on EssayForum [14]

It is a nice way to spend your leisure time with EF. It facilitates to exchange your views and also builds your confidence in writing.

Good luck

Asoka
asokapalama   
Sep 13, 2010
Writing Feedback / Learning from books or from experience ? What is your opinion? [9]

Learning from experience is the best if you can do it. Because that will give you first hand knowledge. But certain things we have to learn from books too. Basic Arithmetic, History we have to learn from books. So both are important for you to success in life.

Asoka
asokapalama   
Sep 15, 2010
Writing Feedback / Happiness is a state of mind; Realizing Happiness [2]

Dear Frinds,

I would like to have your views about the following short essay. You all can contribute.

Thanks

Asoka

Realizing Happiness

People from all walks of life try to achieve happiness through different methods. Happiness is a state of mind that seems to come and go, vanishing over a period of time. When one is happy, one feels free, with beautiful and attractive things around. Most people in this world are unhappy for a majority of their lives, with no real reason. The things that gave happiness changs over the time is a natural phenomenon. So people can not achive permenent happiness in this world. Even for a tempory happiness one's sound health is important. Health is the greast wealth for a person. Without good health one can not think of happiness. A person can be happy more frequantly if he can satisfied what he deserved to get or without over ambitious .
asokapalama   
Sep 19, 2010
Writing Feedback / Everyone would benefit from taking more exercise do you agree? [13]

Here are some point for your essay.

Exercise is a systematic way of activation of your body parts. This will make your body parts or organs work faster including heart and lungs. In exercise ones heart start working faster and thereby supplies more blood to all parts of the body. This makes the body organs more active and keeps healthy. Perspiration is another useful activity that promote in exercises. Perspiration removes various substances produced as waste in different physiological activities in the body. And also exercise is a process that can removes excess energy from your body. This will help to keep your blood sugar level in optimum. Over and all exercise exercises help you to keep your body in shape and healthy.

Asoka
asokapalama   
Oct 2, 2010
Writing Feedback / Having two children VS. Having More than two children in every family [6]

Do you know this?

It has been found that child's great part of the mental development is completed during the early childhood. During this time parents affections and associations are very important for the child's mental development. Sometimes child does not get the required affection and care in a crowded family. For two children family each child gets the maximum attention.

Asoka
asokapalama   
Oct 3, 2010
Writing Feedback / "Don't be angry" valuble piece of advice my father once gave me. [7]

It is nice to read your essay. It a valuable advise. I like to make some statements in respect of your topic. Congratulations.

Getting angry is a spontaneous and normal reaction for human beings. Important thing is how you behave when you are in angry. People with strong personalities seem to manage angry properly. They are not easily disturbed when a person is attack physically or verbally. Usually with maturity people are learning to control angry up to some extend.

Asoka
asokapalama   
Oct 3, 2010
Writing Feedback / TOEFL: Artists have the capability of soothing the minds of the people. [3]

It is good to make an in-depth thinking on scientists and artistes. All trades are equally important for us. Here I am sending some other thoughts about the topic.

All the machines that used by people in their day to day life are products of combine effort of scientist and artistes. Who design the attractive shape and beautiful interior of a car? It is a work of artistes. Architects are professionals who design buildings, towns, bridges etc. We know there are beautiful bridges in the world. Architects are artists who have some knowledge in engineering too. Therefore in addition to entertainments artistes make this world beautiful and attractive.

Asoka
asokapalama   
Oct 27, 2010
Writing Feedback / What is the best way to pursue happiness? In class essay assignment [4]

Here are my views about happiness. Some point you may include in your essay.

Happiness is a state of mind and changing over the time. So the state of happiness in one's mind is not static. Materials bring happiness to the people for a short period. A new bicycle can bring happiness to a child for a few days. The happiness brings to your life if you can satisfy with what you get rather than what you like to have. Over ambitious people rarely achieve happiness. They run one after other for happiness but never satisfied. There are people who lead a happy life because they satisfied what they process and what they get. Cultivate good habits and correct life style one can avoid unhappiness. Good habits and life style one can maintain healthy life. That is very important for a person to be happy. How can a sick person be happy? However, people in this world subject to different situations therefore happiness would not remain through the life.

Asoka
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