ershad193
Jun 20, 2010
Writing Feedback / Car has helped people a lot, but the negative effects of automobile exceed the positive effects [2]
i think the first line can be rewritten as
"It is obvious that the automobile is one of the great inventions of the twentieth century".
The advantages of automobiles such as the ability todelivertransport people and goods to any location we want with a litter amount ofwithin a short time has helped people canto be in contact with each other and contribute towards the development of business.
However, there are some disadvantagesfromof automobileswhich make me believe that the automobile isthey are destroying our quality of life, such as,by causing air pollution, car accidents, and makemaking our economies depend on oil ofthe few countries that produce oil.
lamktqd , I think your essay needs heavy editing but that may leave the final product seemingly unoriginal. So, i suggest you pick up a good grammar book and go through the fundamentals, then rewrite the essay and post it here for a review.
Cheers!!!
i think the first line can be rewritten as
"It is obvious that the automobile is one of the great inventions of the twentieth century".
The advantages of automobiles such as the ability to
However, there are some disadvantages
lamktqd , I think your essay needs heavy editing but that may leave the final product seemingly unoriginal. So, i suggest you pick up a good grammar book and go through the fundamentals, then rewrite the essay and post it here for a review.
Cheers!!!