Writing Feedback / The importance to use leisure time for activities that improve mind [5]

TOPIC: Some people think that it is important to use leisure time for activities that improve the mind, such as reading and doing word puzzles. Other people feel that it is important to rest the mind during leisure time. Discuss.

Leisure time is much important for all humans, because every one need to release their stress of work and everyday life. Personally, I am using my free time for relaxing and listening music, because I am a job holder and I need to have keep my limbs freely and I need refresh my mind, but leisure time can be used for various reasons.

Some people like to have their free time by watching movies, reading or brows internet. These types of activities may be help to release their stress and they can refresh their mind. I have an experience about this situation, when I was studying my degree course, I liked to spend my free time for playing basket ball and cricket, because I need to keep my physical fitness in good condition.

Job is another factor, which also effect our leisure time. Software Engineer, for example, he has been spending his work until complete of his target or software. Hence, he wants to siting in front of his computer and need to program his software and he needs to directly face to computer screen log time. Then, end of the working day he would like to have relax in a comfortable chair.

Working place also may effect our leisure time. People, who work in indoors, they like to have their leisure time in outdoors also reverse same for the outdoor workers. I am job holder in a university and all the time I am working in my room, so I like to visit beautiful places and stay with listening music.

Person condition also depend on their free time activities. Pregnant mothers, patients they like to have rest during the free times. Elderly people, who like to read books, listening radio, watch television etc.,

In conclusion, people would like to spend their leisure time by choosing best for them. This is depending on their work, job, condition etc,. In my opinion is, it needs to be helped to our future success.

Writing Feedback / Studying the English language in an English-Speaking country is the best [4]

Topic: Studying the English language in an English-Speaking country is the best but not the only way to learn language. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Studying a language is a grate advantage for our lives. If we can learn language like English, it is better to learn in a country such as Britain, Australia etc., but there are another ways for learn English. Hence, Studying English in a native speaking country is better, but it is not only way to learn English.

In native English speaking countries, they have been organizing their all academic activities in English. Therefore, they have a chance to learn grammatical patterns, habits etc., during their primary, secondary and higher studies. Furthermore, they have an experiences, about their societies and culture also. When I was doing my masters, in Britain, I met lots of British friends and families, then I got valuable experiences of handling of my English language. Also, they have high slandered language proficiency, than non-English speaking country person.

On the other hand, all around the world, many English language programs are conducting. Most of their higher studies programs are conducted in English, such as undergraduate programs, masters, etc., Now a days, as a optional, many countries of the world, conducting their primary and secondary education in English. Hence, there are many other ways for learn English with good slandered. These non-native English speaking contries, conduct the international recognized exams, which evaluate the English language such as IELTS, TOFEL, etc.,

In conclusion, it is important to visit English speaking country, then we can learn English language in high standard way, but that is not only the way for learn English. If some one need to study English from non-English speaking country, there are many other recognized ways for study English such as exams, academic programs etc., then they can improve their language proficiency for their future prosperity.

Writing Feedback / Essay: Disruptive school students have a negative influence on others. [4]

Topic: Disruptive school students have a negative influence on others.
Students who are noisy and disobedient should be group together and taught separately.
Do you agree or disagree. Give reasons for your answer.

During the school time, students need to study, which is the main target, but unfortunately there are some students, who disturb others. Some students fail to study, because of these stray from students' activities. Hence, it is a necessary to plan for revive these disruptive students.

One solution is to take these students away from the school and other proper places for them. They can study on that place under supervision of well experienced teachers. Also, it is necessary to introduce a set of rules for them and try to bring them into correct path. Otherwise, they have to face limitation of their education. Government is responsible for establishing this process and parents can compel their children if necessary.

These disruptive students may have strategies in specific fields such as mechanical, plumber, electronic etc., Then we can compel them in vocational training school or some relevant place to improve their abilities, because some of these students do not like to stay long time in a seat. Then we can gradually motivate these students by giving them to lessons, workshops, meditation programs etc.,

Perhaps we need to study why these disruptive students behave badly before we separate them. Sometimes they need extra lessons to establish the proper state of mind. In this stage we have to approach them to very precisely, and need to identify the stress or problems, which are in her mind. Then, give him to necessary treatment for release stress or solution for the problems, who has.

In conclusion, before taking action regurding the disruptive school students, we have to identify the problem they have, and then need to make a treatment for them. Government and the parents, who are the responsible for this issues, and identify the correct solution for them.

Writing Feedback / Essay: We are becoming increasingly dependent on computers [4]

Topic: We are becoming increasingly dependent on computers. They are used in business, hospitals, crime detection and even to fly planes.
What things will they be used for in the future? Is this dependent on computers a good thing or should we be more suspicious of their benefits.

The computer is great invention, which can be used in many fields such as mechanical, electronics, robotics etc., Hence, usage of computers in modern society is increasing significant. This invention may cause change in our life style and it has been saving our time, also it has been a common device in our homes now. Computer technology and it's implementations are updating very fast.

In the near future, in banking sector going to become a fully computerized network, which may be used any where in the world. Therefore, customers can access their accounts anywhere in the world, and they may have the ability to make any kind of transactions. Furthermore, due to the huge development of software engineering, image processing techniques may be applied for the security purposes. Hence, your personal accounts such as bank, e-mail, etc., can't be accessed with out you or your finger print.

Computer base examinations are introduced now in many international and local authorities. Additionally, in the education sector, some universities are used to handle the examinations in paper base, but now they implementing their course in computer base online courses, so students do not need to come every day to universities for their studies.

Mainly computer systems are being used for store the information such as patient records, customer records, students records, reports etc. These saved records are being used for various purposes such as report generating, research purposes etc. Hence, we don't have any other device other than the computer for these activities. But, some other ways also available for our work, but they need to spend long time for end of the process. Also, in near future it might be increased the number of unemployment percentage, because job holders places are replaced by the computers.

At sum up, computer is important equipment for our lives and it included advantages such as fast, accuracy, clear etc., and dis-advantages such as increase of unemployment number, it may cause to some diseases. Hence, we have to amendments of constitution of computer use, then we can get the better output from the computers for our future prosperity.

Writing Feedback / Essay: Smokers can cause themselves serious health problems. [3]

Topic: Smokers can cause themselves serious health problems. The choice to made freely and with knowledge of danger. Smokers should therefore, expect to pay more for medical treatment than non-smokers. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

Any person has the choice of being smoker or not. But, smoking is harmful for our health and may cause to damage themselves. Due to this smoking habit it may cause mainly respiratory problems and heart problems. This effects of smoking is educating through the media such as television, news papers, magazines etc., Hence, people who are involving this habit is already know about this danger, but they still enjoying with their habit. However, I do not entirely agree that these people should have to pay more to receive all the medial treatment they need.

There are some situations, that do not have any relationship between the smoking habit. Then I believe that smokers should not be required to pay more than the non-smokers for their medical treatments. Car accident as a example, have no any connection with smoking, but people who injured from these type accidents may cause to serious injuries, also they might spend lots of money for recovery. Viral infections, another good example, any infected person needs to get the treatments and it is do not consider this infected person is smoker or not also the treatment charges are also same for both types.

On the other hand, any smoker may have high possibility to take a treatment, which may cause to his smoking habit. These treatments need to pay lots of money than the non-smokers, because most of the cases of smokers are carcinoma cases. This is very harmful and have high possibility for death. They may have to suffer during their life time due to this smoking habit. Therefore, smoker have the responsibility for what he/her has been doing.

In conclusion, I believe smoking persons should pay more in cases related to smoking, but in other cases they have to pay same as the others.

Letters / Letter: You will move to a new city for work. You know some people who live there. [3]

Letter: You will move to a new city for work. You know some people who live there.

- Ask them for help finding accommodation
- Tell them where you would like to live
- Tell them the type of place you are looking for

Dear Sir,
I am writing this letter to you, I am coming to work in city and I need a help to find a place for keep my few things before I start my work.

My new working place is situated at near the City Police station. Therefore, I would like to live close where I am going to be working or in the downtown. It is also would be better near to the shopping complex, movie theater. As I really love sports it would be grate to near a gymnasium too.

I'm looking for small place, but if it can be a flat, it is grate, rather than a house. So, a place with one bed room is fine. Also, I need separate bathroom, it would be private and not shared bathroom. Small kitchen and living room is better, but I am not really concerning it. I would like to have separate water and electricity bills, and I do not need any telephone connection, because I have wireless internet connection for my Laptop, also I have my mobile phone.

Could you please try to find a place for me. I am looking forward to you.

Thanking you,
Your's faithfully,

Writing Feedback / Essay: Most writers of fiction do not earn enough money to live from their writing. [3]

Topic: Most writers of fiction do not earn enough money to live from their writing. Do you think the government should give them financial assistant to help encourage good literature?

Reading is the important factor of our knowledge and also it is help to conduct our life style. Any reading can make effect, it is necessary to reach the quality standards. The writers are the persons who are involving this writing process. Most of writers write books and then they publish the book to to the public. Then writers can earn money by selling their writings.

But, depending on the the quality and value of a book, earnings may be varied. These earnings are used for next publications. Government should have the responsibility to provide sufficient finance assistant for the book writers, because some may not have enough money for next publications. I personally think, support from the government should have negotiation with the writers about the quality of their writings. The quality may depend on title of the book, vocabulary used, grammar patters, and also it depends on what kind of material is going to be use for print the book. There are several types of books such as novels, educational, etc. These books popular among the people according to the type and also the content it has been included.

There are several factors, why some books are not going through the people. First factor is target people, some writers target students, some are target elders so on, if that targeting people are not interested about the book, then the selling rate is going down. Hence, if any writer need to finance assistance, the government have to evaluate the writings of the author. I think government have a responsibility to protect the writers and also they need provide sufficient sources and assistance to them.

In conclude, I am agree with the statement, government should give finance assistance to the writers, but it needs to evaluate their writings, then considering the importance and the ability of the writer then government can provide funds to her. It is also necessary to encourage the writers to write.

Writing Feedback / "main target is education" - attend college or university for many different reasons. [4]

Topic: People attend college or university for many different reasons (for example, new experiences, career preparation, increased knowledge). Why do you think people attend college or university?

People attend colleges or universities for several reasons. But, out main target is education, this education can be used for various purposes, as we need. I personally think there are three main reasons for attending the college or university. It is add education qualifications, to have new experience and career development.

When we go to get a job interview, they asking about our qualifications. Therefore, I personally think, gain of qualification is the most important thing during the study period in college or university. Most of the students trying to get high marks for their final examinations and try to get higher positions from final examinations. They think it might be able to get good job for them. Furthermore, some students are planning to do the masters or PhDs after their graduation, if they have good results, then they can get scholarship for their higher studies.

Students also go to schools to have new experiences. During the school hours, they have been studying and they can attend extra curricular activities. Then, they gain more experiences from these sports activities and studies. Other than the sport activities such as scouting, cadeting, St John's Ambulance Brigade etc., are very interesting activities which may improve their leadership ability.

During the studying period students are attending the Information Technology class and they improve their IT experience, because many companies now are asking the IT experience from the applicants. Then students can have better career guidance through their colleges or universities.

In conclusion, People, who are attend the school or university for various reasons they have. First reason is find better job, because it is very important for every one. Some students, they need experiences for their abilities, which also can be helpful to find a good jobs for them. Career development is another reason, that some students are like to have.