Writing Feedback / IELTS extinction of languages in globalization are highly considered problematic [2]

IELTS task 2:
Every year several languages die out, Some people think that this is not
important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Few languages have been used extensively as official international communication for centuries. This situation has resulted in extinction of other less frequent spoken languages. Although some people believe that life would be simpler with one or two languages than in the past, this tends to have more disadvantages.

Unsurprisingly, English as widely-accepted language plays an integral role not only on international business but also on effective communication to foreigners. Chinese, another example, is also spoken globally because of the highest Chinese population in the world. Such circumstance affects people to abandon their mother tongue in order to acquire more widespread used languages as mentioned. In addition, the internet is so easily accessible that has an influence on language popularity.

On the contrary, disappearance of several languages is highly likely to cause the loss of national identity. For instance, people imitate not only clothing but also eating habit like Mc Donald or KFC and ignore their traditional food. It will subsequently lead to vanishing of invaluable heritage and tradition. It is therefore essential for authorities to promote the essence of their native language. One effective strategy is to broadcast language channel to their people.

To sum up, extinction of several languages in globalization are highly considered problematic despite of easier communication. Government should solve this problem in terms of encourage people how importance of their mother tongue to prevent loss of national identity.

Writing Feedback / IELTS: people believe "unpaid community service should be compulsory part of shool" [2]

IELTS task 2
Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes (for example working for a charity, improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports to younger children).

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Thank you in advance for every comments

As has been often said, many high schools have increasingly participated in community service. Such activities contribute a wide range of many facilities from charities to small libraries in remote areas. Although some people have tried to reinforce the schools to have this curriculum in compulsory education, the disadvantages will be more apparent.

Schools have traditionally extra-curriculums such as hospital volunteers, senior facilities or serving meals at home of disabled children. Students not only obtain many experiences from performing their abilities to alleviate some social problems, but people can also receive their assistance. In that case, the students finally can also learn the definition of conscientiousness. In addition, if these activities are mandatory and unpaid, they will then probably be sustainable customs.

Despite the fact that all people benefit from such free service, the work for community might be problematic from inexperience students. Hospital volunteers especially from compulsory programs, for example, need to feed patients at risk of aspiration. Most of them are in hurry and careless for special feeding technique, the patients might come down with pneumonia from choking. On the other hand, if any children or teenagers voluntarily do community service by themselves, they tend to be more cautious. This is therefore essential to consider highly whether obligatory or optional community service take more advantages.

In brief, beneficial effects from obligatory education of community service are learning social responsibility of students and in turn, alleviation of some social problems. However, voluntary students take more advantages especially in skillful jobs in terms of relatively high attention.

Writing Feedback / IELTS: Money for: successful sports professionals vs other important professions [3]

Thank you for every comments
IELTS task 2:
Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

As has been often reported, many eminent sportspersons are capable of acquiring huge amount of income. Such financial benefits have resulted in gap differences among professionals. This can then lead to controversial issue surrounding inequality. Although this seems to be problematic, there are more beneficial effects.

Not surprisingly, there has been recently heat debate related issue about high disproportionate of annual income, among high profile jobs. Andy Rodrick, for instance, who is the world's famous tennis player can afford on average millions dollar each year which is considerably more substantial than other jobs such as doctors or lawyers. It then comes to a question why there is such a large difference if our world based on the same fundamental doctrine of equality. In addition, other professionals are also essential in our running community.

On the other hand, sport plays a crucial role in many ways to keep inhabitants healthy. Sports professionals are also taken into that part.They are not only a positive incentive for their followers to do physical activities, but also entertaining their fans in game competitions. These are enough to be the main reason why they, particularly successful sports professional, can afford millions dollar a year. From my point of view, these careers have also helped decrease global health budget because whenever people have an increasing trend to participate in sports, they will end up with a good health which this means medical cost reduction.

Ultimately, extremely high compensation for successful sport careers is essential not only for being people's role models but also entertaining their fans in competitions. However, this seems to cause less significant problem in terms of salary inequality.

Writing Feedback / IELTS: How can income generated by tourism benefit the poor? [2]

IELTS task 2
Most of the world's poor live in countries where tourism is a growing industry. The issue is that tourism does not benefit the poorest. How can the income generated by tourism benefit the poor? And how can we ensure that tourism does not destroy traditional cultures and ways of life?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

Tourism is arguably a financial source for poverty in developing countries. Such growing industries have resulted from exploiting natural resources ranging from mountains to beaches and even mangrove forests to be successful in national income. However, this comes to two serious questions of the beneficial effects for poor people as well as the consequences on traditional cultures and ways of life.

The general view has been that booming tourism in low-income countries play a crucial role in improvement of financial status. Reduction of unemployment rate, for example, is a primary result to help create jobs for under-privilege citizens. In addition, profitable income from this sector can enhance not only for education, but also for health care system and, in turn, it leads to contribution for higher standards of living of their citizens.

Despite the fact that tourism attract loads of multicultural travelers, this can bring about an interesting situation of cultural merge and subsequently takes risk of loss their national identity. It is therefore essential for authorities to take responsibilities to encourage their people to make use of their culture and customs as an alternative way to achieve their tourism goal. In addition, the governments should promote their cultural values by mass media to maintain these precious things in their communities.

To sum up, business tourism is of crucial importance of both increasing people's income and funding for other public sectors such as education and health care. On the other hand, loss of national identity should be highly considered so that the governments should not only represent their unique cultures as another source for tourist attraction, but also give priority to retain this national assets in the way of broadcasting.

Writing Feedback / IELTS: some people argue modern works of art are not really art, people are being led [3]

IELTS task II
Some people argue that some modern works of art are not really art at all. In their opinion, people are being led to believe these works are outstanding and paying large sums of money as a result.

Modern arts are arguably valuable equally to many classic arts. In official auction houses, such arts can be purchased as unimaginative costs more than a million dollar; this comes to a question by comparison with the worth of Renaissance or old arts. Although some people believe that these works of art in present era are not unique as in centuries ago, modern works of art still express depiction of current situations and issues.

Ancient forms of art are not only considered to have meticulous and well-planned details as in Mona Lisa painting, but they also consist of great amount of artists' effort and talents. While modern type is a product of nondescript objects that has been through human hands. Such modern works, for example, result from only grabbing a canvas and painting it a color with some shapes, then are represented as "My Happiness". As a matter of fact, arts still need emotion, beauty and also need to be a window to the artist's emotions which could be scarcely found in many works of art of this decade.

Despite the fact that whenever people are talking about the definition of arts, this usually means as expression of human creative skills and imagination. As long as many forms of art meet the criteria, they are still arts. The works of art in this period also play a crucial role in initiatives about current circumstances and modern lifestyles. It is therefore essential to justify the core values between current works of art and the classic one.

In brief, many works of arts are interestingly compared between modern and the older classic types in terms of the amount of the money. Interestingly, however, it can be seen clearly that this situation is very difficult to be debatable on the grounds that the change of art is depend on the alteration of lifestyles of people.

Writing Feedback / Advance in the field of Information technology is altering people's lifestyles [5]

IELTS task 2:

Information technology is changing many aspects of our lives and now dominates our home, leisure and work activities. To what extent do the benefits of information technology outweigh the disadvantages?

Advance in the field of Information technology is altering people's lifestyles ranging from home to leisure or even at workplace. Such technology plays a crucial role in a considerable amount of information related to not only broadcasting on mass media but also social networking. Although some believe the information technology has some drawbacks, many beneficial effects seem to be superior.

Unsurprisingly, because this technology helps spread widely a lot of information across the world, people unnecessarily enter the libraries anymore. Inevitably, they tend to be physical inactivity and subsequently are vulnerable to modern diseases such as diabetes, hypertension or cardiovascular disease. In addition, when it comes to a lot of information, the details might be untrue or exaggerated unless people learn to interpret data.

Despite those drawbacks, information technology can be adopted not only in cosmopolitans but also in rural areas. A fisherman in third world, for instance, can look up the weather forecast by only clicking on his computer at his workplace. Furthermore, this technology can be adapted as library at home so that students are capable of solving their homework or even playing game online as their leisure. It is therefore more advantages if people do both exercise on regular basis and manage information in the right way.

In brief, it is clear that technology of information contributes people to spend life more comfortable. People can apply this not only to predict their works' outcomes, but also to enjoy as their leisure at home. Interestingly, however, they should be aware of physical inactivity and management of information.