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alina967   
Apr 3, 2011
Research Papers / Social networking Effects on Career [4]

Thank you so much Susan & Kevin, for editing it. I went to the writing center of my school. They helped a bit. I will try not to make any of these mistakes again.This is is first APA paper for me. I tried many time to write thesis statement, but it is so tough. It seems like impossible for me to write the whole idea in one single sentence. Can you give me some suggestions?
alina967   
Mar 21, 2011
Research Papers / Social networking Effects on Career [4]

Abstract
This paper explores three published article that reports how career and businesses are interrelated with social networking sites. The articles are varying in their field from individual to professional companies. Tribble (2008) suggests that one can easily find more job and interviews on social networking sites then search engines. Other articles describes many employers use their employees' and their interviewees' personal profiles for background check and ban of these sites during work. This paper mentioned an incident about an aspiring teacher turn into nanny because of her photo on a social site. This paper also examines how social networking's definitions are changed by their users as they needed and how they affect their professional lives.

Social Networking and their Various Kinds of Effects on Professional Life

Introduction

The 21st century's great and popular topic is social networking. Few sites are becoming part of our daily normal life. As a college student, I decided to investigate how much these sites can affect one's career or how businesses using social networking sites.

In my view, these sites are not just to connect with friends and family, these sites can be used as a great tool to grow business, find jobs, interviews and increase the networking within your field. These sites provide a wide range of people from various fields and they are from across many cities and states. One can easily find a job which fulfills his dreams on his terms and conditions. Whereas big or small companies create groups, web pages, forums and communities on the most popular sites like Face book, Twitter, LinkedIn, and Blogger or Word press. They post latest updates, vacancies and necessary information about their companies. Numbers of business firms do advertise through these sites for their products and brands. So that I believe, social networking has many positive effects on a person's career and business.

However, as every coin has two sides, social networking has also negative side. There are many cases of firing employees because their posts or photos on the networking sites, or doing social networking while they are on workplace. Another aspect of these sites is used by recruiters to check the background of their future employee or interviewee.

Summary and Respond of the three Articles

From The New Times, my first article shows that social networking sites are helpful and crucial in bad economy. In Tribble (2008), the purpose is to use social websites as new tool of networking in business. Especially, the author's main argument is that job seekers should not avoid social networking sites; they can helpful to get your desirable interviews, jobs, and recommendation letters from the employers. Tribble gave the example of Mr. So from Calif., whose job was going to end, but in the less than 30 days he found new job with more salary since he signed up for social networking site, LinkedIn. Users make profile, upload resume and photo on this site. This site provides connections to add others in your contact list. The most influential idea is to get the really old contact in touch by just few clicks of the mouse. One can get back to meet past employers and colleagues easily, no matter where they are or what they are doing. Tribble gave the example of Mr. Lunn, who lost the contact over the years, but thanks to the website such as LinkedIn, which found out many of him past contact from its database, which are very useful to him now.

There are more than 85 million active users of face book and the fastest growing group of 25 year old or older people. Where, LinkedIn has one new networker every two seconds or 25 million users and adding 1.2 million at rate of every month. Many users out there, that does not mean that you add each and every person. One should make his own circle of people, who may successful and helpful to him in bad times. Users should make their connections strategically and maintain the quality of the connections. (Tribble 2008) From your contacts or connections your social image is created among your networks or friends on the websites. Face book is more informal way connects with others, where LinkedIn is more formal. Face book features classified ads in the marketplace, job hunting applications like Jobster. The only over sharing of personal info can be harmful. The best suggestion would be "Keep the social separate from the networking." (Tribble 2008)

My second article is based on the studies of employers who check the background of the interviewee or job applicant by looking at unprofessional websites like Face book, MySpace, Blogger. This article showed that your personal profile and data can be checked by future employee, one should not post anything that harm his in future career because it made the first impression bad, which is so important to get any job. Palank cited that often employers deny of searching or looking up at job applicant's profile, but they do it all the time. For example of Ziggs named website put results of their users on the top 20 search engines' results. There are some kinds of websites which even demonstrate the judgmental skill of applicant and insight idea into profiles, and employer can get it anytime on the web. Although there are privacy settings are provided by websites, they do not give guarantee that you data will not be use or given to anyone.

This article reinforced my thoughts on use of social networking for job purposes. On one hand, it supports that if your profile is good and impressive then your chances for jobs are increasing, on other hand if employer found anything inappropriate about you, it will take down your image in the eye of employer and your chances to get job will be very less. Palank reported that "Of the employers who said they use Web sites, 41.2 percent reported occasional use, 35.3 percent said their use was infrequent and 7.4 percent called it standard practice." This statistical data supports that recruiters uses social websites to check the background of job applicants. It is challenging for users to post and to be on social websites, when their employers are out there to search the information about them. Whereas, some institutions made it compulsory for applicants to go through background check and they would use Google or any similar website to verify the information given by applicants. (Palank 2006)

When it comes to Google, there are tons of information out there, you can not trust on any source easily. Credibility and reliability are the most important keys of any article. The article is credible and reliable because Palank is professional reporter for newspapers like The New York Times, The Washington Times, and Dow Jones. She gave the statistical data and cited views of executive of social websites and employers. Survey is performed on more than 254 employers by The National Association of college and employers. In the same way, Tribble is also reporter for well known newspapers. She gave the statistical data and the example of users who have benefited from social networking.

Final the most important article is the case of "Drunken Pirate", which became benchmark for future. An aspiring school teacher ended up in being nanny because she has posted a photo on a social website, MySpace. Stacy Snyder was a student at Millersville University and she was about to graduate. But the administration found her photo with pirate and hate and a plastic cup in hand, captioned as "drunken pirate" which is encouraging underage drinking, so they denied her degree. (Rouge 2007) This is an eye-opening case for every employee and students. This incident shows everyone that future dreams can be crushed because some photos and posts.

Discussion

I have learned from small rules to big ethics and professional skills after the research. Currently, this issue has been rising more than past years with upcoming new graduates and employees. Social networking site is colliding person's professional world with personal activities. Users are not protected under the federal law. Employers can track down any activity of person, they want to hire or working for them or part of their institution. People can draw a line between sharing and over sharing info. Once there is data or post updated, it will remain like that forever, even though in future someone can find out. Students and employee should be more careful and think about their career first when they post something unprofessional. By putting some unprofessional posts or comments you end up your future career, job opportunities or current position. It is proved by a case of "drunken pirate."

My views are changed after researched on this issue. Previously I was thinking that social networking can help a lot to job seekers and companies. Likewise, Tribble gave examples of people who have great jobs because of social networking site such as LinkedIn. It is the easiest and quickest way to reach the most favorites employers and for employers best way to find about employee. However, the dangers of losing job are more than the benefits of getting a job. As Palank has said in her article, numbers of employers look up at Websites, before they hire people for jobs. There are many cases about firing employee at workplace, for socializing during the work on the internet or for badmouthing about their boss. From now my view is, one should proceed with caution when they are on websites of social networking and finding a job.

Despite of easy way to find a job and many benefits, social networking sites put you in endanger because employer can access the personal data. The main purpose behind social networking sites is to make connection and interact with others, but it should not cross the line of ethics, morals and professionalism.

References
Crosman, P. (2009, Nov. 1). Anti-Social Networking. Wall Street & Technology, p. 9.
Palank, J. (2006, July 17). Face it:'Book' no secret to employers; Social sites used as background
check. The Washington Times. p. A01.
Rouge, B. (2007, June). Denied Teaching Degree; she sues Millersville.
Women in Higher Education, p. 4.
Tibble, S. J. (2008, Aug. 14). The Social Network as a Career Safety Net.
The New York Times. p. 6.
alina967   
Feb 16, 2011
Student Talk / Hi everyone! Welcome at EssayForum thread. [412]

HIi, EVERYONE,

This is Archana Sevak, undergrad student at Oakland University, Michigan,US

I want to share some thoughts and need some brainstorming ideas for my next research paper.
So, My topic is, How does social networking sites effect a person's real world life style.
alina967   
May 8, 2010
Scholarship / Earthquakes, tornadoes, Did you feel it? [3]

EF_Kevin
I will make sure about small mistakes.
Thank you for your compliment. I am really happy after three weeks' hard work.
alina967   
May 4, 2010
Scholarship / Earthquakes, tornadoes, Did you feel it? [3]

I told myself that I'm gonna die, and everything is lost and no one can help me, when I saw natural disasters. The limitation of the human kind against power of nature, is realized when, people saw floods, tornados, volcanoes' eruptions, earthquakes, or landslides.

An earthquake is the biggest destructive natural disaster all over the world. Today people felt frequently earthquakes than past years. The shaking and trembling movements of the earth's surface are called the earthquakes. According to the U. S. Geological Survey (USGS) there are ten levels of intensity of the earthquake. However, they do the work which is impossible to be done by government or politicians. Ignazio Silon quotes," An earthquake achieves what the law promises but does not in practice maintain - the equality of all men" (Ignazio). On one hand earthquake, collapse worlds, on the other hand after an earthquake, people help each other without worrying about any cast, status, color.

Nowadays, science has advanced technology, and we have more knowledge about earthquakes than 17th century. However, scientists cannot predict the earthquake. They could tell that where it will come, and which place has the most probability to occur the quake. But they could not tell when and at which magnitude it will occur. Some people believe that earthquakes are predicted by animals like dogs, toads, bears, sneaks. Animals have sense about the earthquake. Dogs bark continuous before the earthquake, toads move from their places to another place, snakes and bears come out from their cave.

Generally, people believe that earthquakes occur because something happened under the underground. USGS described the quakes as the result of seismic waves, which released energy as vibrations under the earth. According to Lisa Wald, the earth's surface is created by plates of rock, mantle, and rough crust. The plates' edges and boundaries have many faults. When these plates move the earthquake occurs at these fault lines. The plates stopped moving when they moved enough. Between the "tectonics" plates of the earth's surface, strong stress created. When this stress released quickly, the vibrations of seismic waves would go upside of the earth, and earthquakes occur. Other earthquakes occur at fault lines or near the fault lines (Wald).

The earthquakes last for less than a minute, and huge buildings, structures wiped in tenth part of a second. People can only think about of themselves, when earthquake occurred. The below the image from photo gallery of Earthquakes, National Geographic, shows the 800 miles (1300 kilometers) long fault line between pacific ocean and north America.(Photo Gallery).

Lisa Wald also described that before or after the earthquake the many constructions start to fall down because of slowly vibrating shocks, which are called aftershocks. Under the earth's surface, there is a center of earthquake, focus and the point above the focus is called epicenter of the earthquake (Wald). Sometimes, aftershocks do more demolishing than the earthquakes. After the earthquake people were freighting and they were running back in forth in the houses or outside of the houses. People thought about their important things and properties which were in their houses or they worried about the family members, relatives who left inside the houses. Some time they forgot that there is still possibility of aftershocks, and lost their lives.

Earthquakes come up in many ways. David J. Wald and James W. Dewey described about different ten levels of intensity. Even a Small event produced at intensity of level IV to V at 4.4 magnitudes. This intensity felt by some people, hanging object, glasses, glass dishes crash in the house. The walls have cracked plasters and the buildings have cracked windows. An earthquake can also affect the clarity and level of water. Whereas, a large event can produce intensity of levels VIII to X at 7.1 magnitudes This intensity felt by many people and they find it difficult to stand; some are forced to thrown on the ground. In house, furniture falls from the shelves, big furniture moves bizarrely. Specifically, intensity level of VIII buildings which are resistant of earthquake slightly damaged and poorly designed structures fell down. At the tenth level of intensity very severe damaged happens to the resistant buildings, ordinary buildings collapse and trees damaged, rocks fall, landslides and liquefaction happened with increasingly severity (Wald & Dewey).

After that recently Haiti had major earthquake of 7.0 magnitudes on January 12, 2010 at 4:53 pm. The quake's epicenter hit just 10 miles west of Porte-au-Prince. The quake sent 33 aftershocks ranging in magnitude from 4.2 to 5.9. Three million people need of emergency after this major earthquake. More than 9000 peacekeepers are living in Haiti since 2004 which includes 1,266 Brazilians ("Fast Facts").

The Miami Herald highlighted the story of James Gulley, a Colorado citizen who came in Haiti for three day trip with Commission on Relief. He and other four stuck in six by eight foot space with only feet of overhead space for 53 hours before the French rescue team came and got them out. Gulley told that it was so dusty and they hardly take breath. They had no water for hours (Gulley).

On The Huffington Post, David McDaniel, blogged on January 14 about how they help injured people in Haiti. He wrote that many people were sleeping on the road. They felt unsafe in homes because rock houses had holes and the cracks of walls were so large, they could fall down on them with little jerk (McDaniel). U. S. people helped Haiti in best ways they can do it. People give donations, and send primary things like food, clothes, etc. The Huffington Post also stated that U. S. families adopted 254 Haitian children. Jennett Benedict, a two year child describes it: I was just shaking...Just hysterical. Just -- I don't think any way I can describe it. Her parents who adopted her, asked US Gov. to issue visa and passport to take their child with them to United States (Swan).

Many people came in Haiti as travelers and they started to help injured people. Jesse Hogopian is one of travellers, he had no medical experience but he gave treatment to survivors of quakes. People came with broken bones, fractures and head injuries and he gave them medical aid (Hogopian).

Earthquakes occur in many different countries in the world. In year 2009, 17 earthquakes of 7.0 magnitudes occurred in worldwide. In year, 2008 more than 88,000 people die worldwide in earthquakes ("Fast Facts").

Personally, I have experienced aftershocks when I was eleven, in year 2001. It was the most deadly earthquake in Indian history. Gujarat 2001, an article on Gujarat earthquakes gives data on that the epicenter of quake was Bhuj, Rann of Katcha in Gujarat. The magnitude of 7.6 trembled Gov. of India. The official death numbers are 19,727 and number of injured are 166,000 ("Gujarat"). Coincidently, the day was our republic day, 26th January. On that day, I came from school after celebrating republic day, and entering in door of house. My mom shouted to get out of the house. Every one of my family, neighbors were on streets. Across my house there is a multi-story building, which swinging like a podium of clock. After two seconds it collapsed in front of my eyes. Some people who are in that building die under the ceilings and walls. After some hours the emergency rescue team took a half body of person and many more bodies of dead people from building. It was terrible moment for me; I just prayed God for saving us from it. Few people were survived from quake and few more were injured badly.

The next day on January 27, made this event worse, when we heard in news that 25 children with teachers dead under the school building ("Gujarat").Because of that bad event, still everyone had fear about entering in their own houses. The other people who had lost their houses, they started to live in tents. Govt. started to give treatments to injured and other necessary like food, water, medicines. After some days, the schools again started to teach children in tents. They showed great sprit against the curse of the nature. This is the truth that numerous people dies in natural disasters like earthquake.

I always tried to see the positive side of any event. I learnt another lesson of God that we are all same and we are son of almighty God. Every person tried to complete basic need of food, medicine, clothes without seeing victim's cast and social or financial status. At that we are all same. India received help from America, China, Switzerland, United Kingdom, Russia and Turkey, Australia. I realized that I am living in a global village and that includes whole world. I felt the feeling of love as human to another human being.

Works Cited
"Fast Facts: Haiti Earthquake" World (2010) Fox News.com. Web. 2 April. 2010
Gulley James "Survival stories from Haiti evacuees arriving in Homestead" The Miami
Herald (2010). Web. 2 April, 2010 .
.Hogopian Jesse "Stories from Haiti: How People Are Coming Together To Help Each Other"
(2010).The Huffington Post Web. 1 April, 2010.
Ignazio, Slion "My Quotation" Earthquake Web. 8 April 2010.
"26th January 2001 Bhuj earthquake, Gujarat, India" Gujarat 2001 (2008). 2 April. 2010.
McDanial David "Stories From Haiti: How people are coming together to help Each other"
(2010). The Huffington Post Web. 1 April, 2010.
"Photo Gallery: Earthquakes" Environment Natural Disasters National Geographic. Web.
15 April 2010.
Swan, Erin "Stories from Haiti: How People Are Coming Together To Help Each Other" (2010).
The Huffington Post Web. 1 April, 2010.
Wald, Lisa. "The Science Of Earthquake" The Green Frog News (2009). Web. 8 April 2010.
Wald David J. and James W. Dewey "Typical Effect of different Intensity Levels"
Earthquake Hazard Program. U.S, Geological Survey. Web. 2 April, 2010.
alina967   
May 4, 2010
Scholarship / Influential Person , Neila [6]

Thesis is always most important part of the essay. Once I missed the thesis and I got lower grades. So please add thesis to your essay. Proffesors always grade according to your thesis. Actually, I think the thesis will make it intersting to readers.

Overall, it is a nice essay. I didn't see any grammer mistakes.
alina967   
Mar 25, 2010
Undergraduate / Oakland University Writing Center [4]

This one is most difficult essay (profile) for me.
I worked hard for it, and I know, I need conclusion but I don't know what to write in conclusion.
alina967   
Mar 23, 2010
Undergraduate / Oakland University Writing Center [4]

There was cursor blinking on the blank document of the MS Word on Computer. I was thinking that which place I will choose to write profile on it. Suddenly I thought the Writing Center of OU is the best place to describe. Oakland University Writing Center is located in Kresge Library. When I walked in the Writing Center I saw two big plants in the entrance of the room and that the walls were painted with orange and blue. There were tables, chairs, a reference desk and an office inside. This room was different than other rooms. They also posted paintings drawn by students from OU's Art studio.

Normally, students come with simple papers or essays with confused and frustrated faces. After working with the tutors in the writing center, they got their papers ready to be graded. When they came out from writing center they have smiles on their faces and they are proud of themselves. Because of the writing center, the future of the students of OU would be shining and brightening with their writing. Another benefit of the writing center is that it is the best place to get experience for those who want to become future teacher. Students who have difficulties in Business Communication come to the OUWC to get help on their work. The OUWC also offers an individual writing course, WRT 104. In this course student come regularly to work on their assignments with a teacher. It is designed to help students by encouraging and improving their writing. It is open for both undergraduate and graduate students of OU.

In the forty minute sessions, a consultant finds out what difficulties students have and how to solve them. They focus on rubrics, assignments, or the topics given by instructors. First, consultant read aloud through the paper. The writer and the consultant both think together on what is the best way to explain the main idea through detailed examples. The consultants go through each sentence and word of student's work to check and make sure everything is used correctly. If any word, sentence, or idea needs to be changed then the consultant first asks the student if they understand why that word or sentence should be changed. The consultant then gives full explanations on how to correct mistakes. The consultant might ask questions like "is this the way you want to write?" and "did this essay express your feelings about the topic?"

The Writing Center is also called The Joan Rosen Writing studio." The writing center was dedicated to Joan Rosen on October 23, 2006, in recognition of English professor Joan Rosen and her husband Robert whose vision is to bring writing center to the students and faculty of OU, and community was established through their founding gift. The Writing studio is named in honor of Joan Rosen's generosity, long time commitment to excellent in writing and communication. The Oakland University Writing Center provides individual and small group support for students, faculty and staff. Consultants and administrators seek to engender independent writing practices. The Writing Center supplements, but does not replace, the array of communication and writing courses offered by various departments. A university program that serves all clients regardless of discipline or task, the Oakland University Writing Center is the "write space" for the entire university community."

"The OUWC helps both strong and struggling students benefit from collaboration as they seek to draft, organize, and revise their compositions. Their consultants are not editors but seasoned readers who offer each student a fresh set of eyes from which to see an assignment or a draft." The Oakland University Writing Center supports all stages of writing. These stages include writing topics, organizing thoughts and developing, clear and concise hypothesis. Consults have extensive experience, and full knowledge about the courses of study. There are more than twenty consultants who assist students daily. To arrange an appointment, one can go to oakland.edu/secure/wc/schedular

"It's highly trained peer and faculty consultants can help students to verbalize ideas, transfer thoughts from head to hand, articulate informed arguments with appropriate claims and reasons, learn and follow APA, MLA, Chicago, and other documentation guidelines for writing. Graduate students engage in a writing-rich environment, one in which they must write on demand. The faculties of the writing center assist on the draft for publications, compose a thesis or dissertation, and assemble a teaching portfolio. "

Mrs. Leba Rautrbort is one the members of the writing center who not only professionally but also emotionally attached to the students. There is a bonding between her and students who learn with her. Students ask questions which they might be afraid to ask in a class. When students are successful , she feels pride that she is there to support them. For this lavish support of consultants, students no need to pay anything except their attention during session and preparation about their assignment. Some times when a student writes nothing or writes something in their language which cannot understand by the tutor, it feels so bad for tutor. In this situation the consultants could not help that student. Ashley Liening is an English major whose prior experience with the Fundamentals of Grammar course. Ashly is a student of WRT 320 is consultants of writing community. She loves to promote students towards goal of the writing. Some students come here regularly as part of their individual writing course. She is going to be teacher on the base of the experiences which she gets as consultants in the writing center.
alina967   
Mar 23, 2010
Undergraduate / commerce supplemental --what is leadership? [3]

Leaders must have confidence in the decisions they make in order to gain the respect of people-this is a run-on. I would write in this way-

Leaders must have confidence in their decisions; in order to gain the respect and love from people .
communicational
qualities that
comfortably in
I sat
entrepreneur who owning -
I dont understand this line- His ideas were ingenious, selling cars he found on classified ads to students on campus at UBC

And yes it is short, you have a nice starting but it can be long, it has only 121 words.

You should leave that part, when you such a great skills why you showing your problems, be confident and best of luck for Sauder. I pray for you that you can take addmission in Sauder's.
alina967   
Mar 23, 2010
Writing Feedback / Is Technology changing the world for better? [4]

hygiene
three hundred thousands
can we avoid

can avoid us from

You have the examples about bad events, not good, and you also dont have explanation. You have the facts about that bad events but how the technology is involved in that events.

The other suggestion for essay would be why dont you write about good aspects of technology

like technology helps people to connect with their reltives, they can talk and see the person who is living far away from them.

The second one incident is really bad, it unbearble, how can the head of the sanula could do this?
What is the fault of that infants,they just came in our world. I never knew about this before reading your essay.
alina967   
Mar 23, 2010
Writing Feedback / Response to Scholarly Reading of Paulo Friere's "Banking" Concept of Education [3]

In my school years in India, I felt like I was in one kind of prison which controlled my thoughts, and my mind. I could not think outside of this St. Xavier school in Anand, a small town near Bombay. When I was in the fifth grade, a teacher read from the science book that Newton had found the rule of gravity when he observed an apple fall down on him. I was thinking, Is this possible for me? Can I observe the same as Newton?

Suddenly my teacher asked me, "What are you thinking? You should read the book and understand the rule." I was shocked that I could not think on that. Why can I not ask questions? After some time I got used to it and I became like others, an "object," without any thinking, just accepted everything and repeated it, memorized it. At that time I did not realize that I was passing through the "banking Education," as it is called by Paulo Friere. Every school or college does not have "banking education" but there are also some schools in other areas where sources of information are not enough compare to others. In today's world, people have realized and accepted this "problem-posing" method. Students and teachers do many activities such as presentations, projects, and group discussion to teach the students. The school education is base of the college level education or higher education. We send children to the school because they can prepare for the world and one day when they face problems of the real world they can solve them with their own sense instead of being frustrated. The future people can increase their skills and get new experience. Furthermore they can advance and grow themselves. Until students are treated as "objects" they can never understand "biophilia," the love of life. People should remove "the banking system" and introduce the "problem-posing" method to the students and teachers.

The imprudent society has trained students and the teachers to use a misguided system where they can never think for themselves. They are "depositing" the books in minds of the students. Students are nothing more than depositors and they think those who support banking education would become the perfect human for the future world. In my view, the teachers are like the warden of the prison and classroom is our prison room. If you do anything outside of the warden's order, then you will be punished for it.

The teacher says you have to accept anything from books and you do not have any rights of asking questions or thinking over it. This system turns men and women into "automatons," people who act like machines. According to Friere, "knowledge" is not something which can be measured, but it is gain by experience, understanding and creativity. Banking education has reduced the creative power of the people. Friere said that "Their response to the challenge evokes new challenges, followed by new understandings; and gradually the students come to regard themselves as committed." This means that when the students try to answer the question and respond to that question, they found new questions under new understanding. At the end they gave up and accept to follow the "banking" concept. Likewise, this happened to me in fifth grade, and I accepted to "receive" whatever my teacher read or wrote. After that incident I have never thought critically or given my opinion on any topic. I felt that there is no need of thinking and I adjusted myself in that world. Here the world has been leading me through a misguided system, which neither gave true knowledge nor true culture.

In the present world, education is applied with technology and it can distribute in any part of the world. Students need to see, read and examine the study on the global perspective. Schools need to teach with "dialogue" which involves teacher and student and makes them think together on the topic and do applications to be conscious of it and use it. This process is a "problem-posing" method. The "problem-posing" method is continuous, attaching with the real world and talk about reality. I became conscious about it when I started studying in my college year as a freshman at Oakland University. I got to work with others in groups. During the group discussions, I discovered studying is easier to comprehend when we work with others and are active in the real world. For my first profile essay I had taken interviews of many people and when I talked with my colleagues; furthermore I knew about my essay topic. I had written a good essay which is connected to reality. As Friere said, "The distinction, however, is essential: the objects which surround me are simply accessible to my consciousness, not located within it. I am aware of them, but they are not inside me."(p.16) I have known that things are around me, I need to analyze them and when I think about them critically, discuss with others. Then, I would have the" knowledge" about those things.

"Has to start from what we are and what we do as a people, not from what some people think and want for us."(p.106) Spoken by one of the students of Freire's literacy work, it shows that one's importance in the world. Because of the "banking" system students have extracted their souls from the experience and so are isolated from goal or the search for goal. According to the Freire the "problem posing" method is dynamic because, according to the text this method is associated with the continuous change in reality. I enhancement strongly that way about most of the rest of "content" learning as well -- history, geography, science, literature, art -- that it is by plunging into the world of those things which are meaningful to use and transformational for us, that we learn them best. As Freire says, "The world -- no longer something to be described with deceptive words -- becomes the object of that transforming action by men and women which results in their humanization."(p.43) People will change the world into creative place where one can learn new things at every moment as human not as "objects" of something.

Works Cited

Freire, Paulo. "Paulo Freire: Chapter 2 of The Pedogogy of the Oppressed." New York:
Continuum Books, 1993. Bob Corbet. Philosophy of Education. Course Website.
Jan.-May 2000. Philosophy Department, Webster University.
alina967   
Mar 23, 2010
Writing Feedback / DREAM BRING ME TO ANOTHER WORLD [4]

matters returned
i nternet,
You have very good concept. From your Essay I can say that you love your father from deepth of heart.
alina967   
Feb 9, 2010
Essays / How should I write this thesis statement about the environment? [5]

Do you have any specific issue on environment?

bcs.bedfordstmartins.com/conciseguide5e/default.asp?s=&n=&i=&v=&o=&ns=0&uid=4993928&rau=4993928

This is a link of a book. It is free for student account. See last chapter if it can help.
alina967   
Feb 9, 2010
Undergraduate / Essay On Remembering Events as FRESHMEN in Oakland University, Home Sweet Home [2]

Hii Guys and Girls
This is my first Essay On Remembering Events as FRESHMEN in Oakland University. I need some suggestion on Grammar and Mechanics.
Thanks

Home Sweet Home
It was my last day in "C-5". Adarsh Society was the name of my street, and "C-5" was our house number for the last 10 years when we lived in India. We decided to leave this house. It was a moment of happiness and sorrow at the same time. I was sad, because I had to leave a place where I was born, played day and night, and where I felt like I was in heaven. However, my family was happy because we were going on a big trip. We decided to migrate to the USA. My uncle who lived in the USA for more than 20 years filed documents for immigration. I knew that a day would come when this file would be opened and we would go to the USA, but it was faster than I thought. I was not ready for this change.

] When I woke up at six o'clock, our luggage was outside of the house on the ground. My mom said to be ready in an hour because the movers would be coming in the next thirty minutes. After I got ready, I remembered our bathroom was the reason of fights between me and my sister every morning. Mom assigned me to see that all the boxes were arranged properly. Everything was happening faster than I could think. I saw a small red candle stand which I made in second grade. My sister was throwing it outside with other things. That candle stand had so much meaning for me; she can't throw it in the garbage. I complained to my mom, but she told me that it was broken and not useful. I agreed with her, but still it was important for me. I threw it out with my own hands, but I was so sad.

My father came, and he brought snacks from my favorite shop. I can still experience the fragrance of hot snacks and see the symbol of the Green Parrot of that shop . My sister and my brother and I were eating the snacks. I heard mom and father were talking about how the upstaris floor was full of cupboards and boxes which were filled with glass accessories. They needed to take more care. I decided to go over and see all that stuff. I was amazed when I looked at little dolls,a train,a small telephone, a foot long a cricket bat and my first prize, a watch. I was feeling so happy with them and I felt that it was the most joyful movement in my life. I took all things from open boxes and started to play with them. My brother came after me and he started playing too.

"Beeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeep...." the train is coming my brother told every single time when he played with it. In the main hall had a big TV box where we put our notebook and charts. Furthermore, the showcase was arranged with awards which were won by our family members. The reason behind this was make us remember that we are students and our goal is to achieve score. When I heard the voice of my sister I felt like awaking from sleep. I moved to next room of temple where I beg good scores to God before every exam. It was special moment when I pryed for exams. Now, the paint of the wall was going to faint because of the roof was licking. It needed to repair the roof, walls and terrace.

The occen was nearer from my house. Our terrace was really good place for seeing to the whole city. Cool wind was coming from the sea and leaves of the tree were moving slowly. Whenever I feel uncomfortable or angry with someone, I came over here and forgot my all sorrows and anger. I was on stairs and my mom called me again. I knew that there must be some work for me. I wan to spend some time on terrace but my mom called me downstairs. Therefore I went back in work and forgot about terrace.Again I was busy in packing and moving the luggage with my family. That was the first time I saw the moving and packing from house. It was too complicated than I thought. Everything from one knife to big sofas should move properly and packed properly for future use. We all together completed the moving work. Now, my little house was looking huge than I ever saw it. We all were amazed when we wandering in the empty house. Taxi would come for us to take us new place which is going to be our home for next 15 days. After 15 days we are going to the USA by airplane. We are moving to the new world. I was so excited by just thinking about the USA, a country where people have their freedom in true way. The living style of that country is luxurious than us.

At this movement I made mistake. In thoughts of an America I forgot my beautiful house where I used to laugh, cry and enjoy the every day of my life. We sat on the back seat of Taxi and my father and mother sat front seats. I was so happy in my thoughts of the USA. I didn't know my father and mother was crying with neighbors. I never understand the relations between people. I thought this all is nothing more than formality. Slowly, taxi started but there were tears in my parents' eyes. I am laughing in mind and thinking that they are all fool. Why we should thinking about the house when we have sold it to another person? It is now his responsibilities to maintain it.

Finally, after 4 months I was sleeping at my uncle's house in the USA. That night I dreamed about terrace of my old house where we were flying the kites and enjoying the cool wind. I realized that I would never see it again. However, I want to go back again and see it for the last time. The next morning I told my mother about this dream. I asked her to go back for just one moment. I realized I can't go back in time. We can have nothing more than its memories. That minute I realized what we had lost and why my parents were crying before leaving the house. I felt a deep relationship between me and that house. It was too late now, I was in America. My House in India was the most important part of my life. I was angry at myself. How could I have forgotten it ? No one can bring the time back for me. It was the best place in the world for me.
alina967   
Nov 22, 2009
Undergraduate / Compare taking traditional classes (classroom only) to online classes [4]

Today an online class and traditional class are two choice for students. Sometimes students confuse to decide that which class is better for them. The traditional class and an online class offer interesting three points of similarities and difference to the students in three area of environment of classroom, teaching instruments, and communication to the students. Students have a good study environment in traditional ...
alina967   
Nov 22, 2009
Undergraduate / Advice about the course - Writing 100 or 100ESL [3]

I read your essay. And I want to add this statement:
students have many choices to leran writing. It is depend on students that they should take ESL100 or not.

I am also ESl student, I know its easy to say" hard work"but when we do it, we realize it; how its hard.
alina967   
Nov 12, 2009
Undergraduate / From Black and White to San Francisco [3]

Sorray If I wrong but I tried a lot to understand your 9 to 12 lines but I dont understand that what are you trying to say.
alina967   
Nov 12, 2009
Undergraduate / "I also dreamed to help someone if I could" - Best I Ever Had [3]

In our community, we see so many persons who always come forward to help the helpless or poor people in their routine lives. Sometimes these kinds of well-wishers make all these things - helping community's poor people - their life-long motives. We can easily find these kinds of many organizations in our area without any difficulty and we will come to know that they run these organizations without any margin of profit. Sometimes we also see some radio stations or other business companies organize some entertainment shows or this kind of shows to donate those funds, which they earned, to helpless or witnesses of natural calamities people. We have recent example in front of us, on 23rd of this month i.e. September a private radio company organized a public show featuring some well-known singers and donated the collected money to an orphan children's care organization. I also dreamed to help someone if I could.

Fortunately, I got a chance and why not, everyone gets at least one. It depends on you that you hit the bull's eye or you missed it. In my case, I turned that opportunity to one of my proud feelings - memories that lasts life-long. I'd like to share that experience with you and I'd love to. Those were my school days, my precious ones. I did so many things, regardless of those were good or not, and that made my school days like a one has always dreamed. After that earth-quake which trimmed India in 2000, India was quite shocked. Most of all the countries showered handful of help in many ways. They supported our country in its bad time and tried their best to help those victims of national disaster. We also had so many helpful people in our country that never stopped helping that time. Everyone was helping the country to come out that crisis and to make country stand on its legs once again. From our school, we had also sent some help to those people who really facing the worst time of their lives and needing help. Besides that we, friends made a group, decided to visit those affected people and to help them in some way.

Front Picture of Mansi Tower

Next day, after completing our school hours, we rode our vehicles and drove to the place which was extremely badly affected and one would have of course shown pity after watching that place. The place wasn't very far from our school, so that was convenient for us to reach the place. Collapsed multi-stories building and crap of wracked steel-bars and other building creative materials, was the scenario. The most threatening things were killed - hunted - bodies which have pierced steel-bars through their bodies and the blood was here and there like someone played with the red color and spilled the color everywhere!!! On watching that anyone would have said, "OMG! Save us from this." and prayed for their lives to rest in peace. Affected people that survived were living near that sight in tents provided by the Government till they got the new residing place. We went there to know more and help them.

In those "Tent-Colony" besides of those people's tents they had also provided a small medi-care centre. We first went there and it was hard to watch all those scared and injured people. Those people were admitted there and you would have surely couldn't stop your heart from crying for them. We met them, talked to them and came to know that how that happened to them. Our hearts were melted for them, and I was crying from inside. We gave some of that money which we had collected money and also some clothes and other things that are useful in our day-to-day lives. We distributed all those things which we gave them equally among them. We spent some time with them and then look forward to meet other tent-people. I didn't count and if my memory serves me right, we had visited about 5-6 tent and they all were so happy after knowing that they are not alone and they all shared their sad-stories with us and we couldn't stop ourselves from showing sympathy after hearing those stories. It was "Out From Under" - from our hearts. We distributed something and something among all of them. Probably we had spent our whole afternoon n some of our evening there. They were so happy and also us. They were giving us their blessings and their well-wishes for us. What else they could give us at that time?

Quake Victims In Tent

At the time of returning, we had met almost all the people and we were having feeling that we did something for which we can proud for whole life. We were preparing to go home and just at that time, I saw a girl crossing road and trying to coming to her family-tent from the other side. The traffic was so fast and busy and green light was steady. Everyone was rushing and trying to reach in their "nests" as early as they could. I understood that girl's intension and was sure that she would try to come without considering the traffic. I wasn't wrong, she tried. She was alone; I couldn't see any guardian with her. She was in her own rhythm, ignored that fast and furious traffic. I screamed, "Hey! Stop...Stopppp..." "No...No...Don't cross...Don't...". She didn't hear. I don't know why - because of traffic's noise or any other reason. She was halfway and suddenly a scooter punched her, the biker tried hard to stop the scooter and tried to save that girl but he couldn't completely save his scooter from touching that girl. That was a light blow not that much hard. Oh poor girl!

She felt down and started crying. We rushed at her and the place started being crowded. As that scooter just touched her and biker had managed to control the speed, she was quite well, just slightly injured. I took that girl to that tent Medicare center and they treated her and made her feel better. Her mother and father also reached at the place and they felt so happy on watching their little "Barbie" alive. Later I came to know that on the day of trimmer that girl was trapped in the lift with his father and as they just managed to come out of the lift and than their flat, that block collapsed! How fortunate she was! And here again she cheated death once again. Lately, when that girl felt good and everything was as it was before, we left the place.

We really had so much fun with those peoples. They were also just like us; common people and company of same kinds people always make us feel good. After arriving home, I talked with my parents about all those things which happened today. That night I slept with the most comfort and why not I was feeling so proud for helping people and saving a life. That was just one day, but it feels like every yesterday which I passed. So in this way, I think I used my chance completely to make myself proud for something. I am still very young to give an advice but I think, we should try our best to get that opportunity and to convert it into one of those golden pages of our history. We won't get it every now and then. I think we get at least three of those; one in young age, the other in middle age and then the other in your older years. I'm waiting for my second one, hope I'll get it soon!

Useful Links:

en.wikipedia.org/wiki/2001_Gujarat_earthquake

gujaratplus.com/news/archives/arc82.html

-Archana Sevak
alina967   
Nov 12, 2009
Undergraduate / Essay about my life - Common app essay [7]

your essay is superb...i have never read this type of the Essay.

I am An ESl studnet in MI USA.

I recently migrated to the USA. I am learning english as second langage...so i don't know wheres you need correction.

By the way, India is my homecountry, I really appreciate your help to those people.

Why don't you chek out my essays its similer to your.
alina967   
Oct 24, 2009
Undergraduate / Libraries needing is necessary but sports activities can also help students. [3]

University should spend same amount of money to students for sports because it is also

important for them. Sports give them energy and strength to body , skill of teamwork , leadership

to everyone. Unlike, the library material sports things need to buy only one time, it doesn't

change by year or technology. Next year university can spend on library.

After the whole day of studying students need to some exercise to remain healthy for

next day and stay refresh for study. Sports give them physically exercise and, make them fit. If

university spend money on playground, swimming pool, gym more students come to there. They

enjoy the activities, then they can join class or study with fresh mind. Games make mind activate

so student can more concentrate on subjects.

Many skills learn from various games or sport activities like teamwork and strategy,

leadership. University could make a player in athlete, by sending them into competition of national

level. This can be also make the university famous and increase it's reputation. More and more

students attract to these universities.

In conclusion, library's needing necessary but sports activities can also help students.

Students can use library which is in town. In my opininion university should one year students'

sport activities and next year spend on library.
alina967   
Oct 24, 2009
Writing Feedback / I like to live in big city like "Ahemdabad" [7]

Thanks , for your comments.

Now,I know I need more work at orgenization and grammar.

I remember those things, in my next essay.
alina967   
Oct 23, 2009
Undergraduate / Duke supplement----Why Duke engineering?----Seeking feedback [6]

I don't understand your first paragraph....what information you trying to give?

Tell mor einformation like how is the buliding, how the system of off-campus, what finacial help they give or not?

You can chek my essays, there is mistake or need of correction tell me about.
alina967   
Oct 23, 2009
Writing Feedback / Win is always your if you do fight from your deep heart. A success does not depend from luck. [8]

"When people succeed, it is because of hard work . Luck has nothing to do with"

You must work to achieve something and be successful



Behind every succeed are many aspects works, and some time luck is also works. I believe that if hard work is not enough luck is not important. Hard work is necessary to achive a goal or target. Who doesn't like hard work, they depend on luck. In world history and today's world people are succeed because of struggle with every circumstance.

People who do hard work in their life they don't need or worry about luck. They just concentrate on their target. Bill gates, a richest person in world, he had a time that he has nothing. But he done efforts to his life, year by year he became more rich. In my country, Dhirubhai Ambani, a famous businessman. In his past time he was selling newspaper in streets. Then he started selling another things and slowly he start a small business and that business nowadays turn in cores rupees impair. These is not happened in few months, it takes 25 year and more. However, noticeable thing is that succeed people never wait for chances. They grab chances from everywhere to achieve the goal. If they wait for call of someone or think that their luck will work, they couldn't became a successful person.

Sometimes if you have luck but you do nothing work, the luck is diappear from your life. In childhood, everyone heard the story of King Midas, Who has the power to change thing in gold. He changed every things of his castle in gold and his daughter, when he touched her. Luckily, he had a power but he lost his daughter. As this way if you have a luck and you don't use it with intelligence you couldn't be a succeed in life.

Above discussion, I agreed that people succeed because of a hard work. Luck is nothing important to it. I believe that luck always come with whom, who do struggle and hard work in life. Win is always your if you do fight from your deep heart.
alina967   
Oct 23, 2009
Undergraduate / Becoming my own person: common app essay option 1 [5]

You need a lot of editing...You have missing the topic sentence...your introduction paragraph and your supporting paragraph was really bad...just because of orgenization....you are wrtiting an essay....

Your first paragraph will be...

Achivements and riska re part of our life, everyone face them in life once or more. I faced a risk in my high school year, junior year. I faced problems to make myself more strong and sensible to every situtation.
alina967   
Oct 23, 2009
Writing Feedback / I like to live in big city like "Ahemdabad" [7]

This is my 2nd essay, please proofread it give suggestion to improve it.
I like to live in big city like "Ahemdabad". It is in the west corner of the India. City has many features like factories, big business complex, shopping complex, educational institute, hospitals multiplex theaters, parks, lakes. However, as a big city it has the pollution. City has also heritage temple, old places and mountains.

People comes to sell and buy things here, they have handmade things, and they get the best price for it. Normally, clothes which area imported from small towns, city public buy them. as this way business increase. Many factories are give plastic materials, glass material, synthetic material. In addition, they produced cement, silica, Iron, steel bars, to build houses. They are far from community and houses. Everybody, is gets various type of jobs here.

City has a international airport, railway station and bus station to travel in city. Transportation and moving done by different way and easily, to any part of state. Big management institute. IIM, which is first ranked in the country. From many states students come here for higher education. There are colleges for different steams like, the science, the commerce, the arts. Asia's large hospital, CIVIL is in the Ahemdabad. There are many hospitals for mother and child, they give free services for them.

City has town hall, multiplex theaters, shopping centers, and parks, lakes. Sabarmati named river, cut city in two part. Front of this river, are ware parks, rides, hotels , museum, a zoo. In the weekend people enjoys in the park, take dinner at hotel by watching the flow of river and traffic. As any other city, the pollution is a big problem, several communities try to decrease the level of carbon in environment. Problem of cleanness is also face by government, they try some plans to keep clean the city.

In short, city provide every necessary thing clean water, electricity, communication, business, education, entertainment to resident of a city. The weigh of benefits are more than disadvantages, so I love my city. Because of these reasons, I prefer to live in a big city.
alina967   
Oct 22, 2009
Essays / Best way to practice writing essays... [5]

I also try this , It helps a lot but sometimes I unorgemizaed my essay....what to do ?I wrote conclusion on top and topic sentences in bottom.

In TOEFL exam we are not allowed to cut and paste what to do i am so confuse
alina967   
Oct 22, 2009
Writing Feedback / TOEFL: Should parents make an important decision for their children?? [5]

In my opninion you writnig is so emctionally. If you write essay for exam,use formal verbs and words.
And one more thing my teacher says"if you use first, second, third don't use it because everyone use these words,sometime examiner feels boring to read." You need tranjection words, don't use it with every sentence.
alina967   
Oct 22, 2009
Writing Feedback / "TV is a such idiot box."; INFLUENCE of TV and MOVIES on people's behavior [9]

In 20th centaury TV and movies are big part of our life. Movies and TV are the best source of entertainment for people. Many bad effects are on people's behavior by TV and movies. From movies and TV shows people learn bad things, children try to copy to act, they have weakness of eye, they become more fat. Information about world, country, states, weather, traffic are getting from TV. Some movies are on the great person's life, it learns good manners in our life.

One state is that "TV is a such idiot box.", I believe that it would be true, if some one is watching it all time. From children to older age all like to watch TV. Normally, TV is in bad room, kitchen, living room, restaurants, offices, shops. There are many shows on TV like, NEWS show, cooking show, sports show, cartoon show, drama serials, and movies. Children like to watch superman, batman, Spiderman type of cartoon, and they try to act like them. Some children want to jump from high building, they also want to run like them. They try to do that, and injured or in some cases they loose their lives. This is a really bad thing for us, this all happened because of a TV show.

Some people also learn crimes from the movies, they first watch movie and do as they saw in the movie. Bad movies inspire them to do bad things, they try to robbery in a bank, but forgot that this is a real life. They caught by polices, stay in prison for long time. Another bad effects are happened to our health. By watching all time TV, people sat on a one place, they didn't go or move from TV. As this way their body become fat, day by day. They gained a lot of weight on their body. Some children's eyesight became weak or they have glasses from 2 years age. The noticeable point is that a person's nature become more addicted, more angry. They want to live alone, they feel like movie or TV character.

However, are also some benefits of TV and movies, such as people get weather forecast, see a far countries, a sport match from close. Some movies are on great person's life, they change our life style and mind in positive way. People inspire to do good as they can for themselves and another. They have to choose the positive sides of TV shows and movies, so they could better in their life.

In conclusion, the weigh of disadvantages are more than benefits. There are several good things like getting knowledge, but bad habits, bad behavior, crimes are also come from TV and movies. In addition, TV shows and movies are waste of time and energy of people. They should manage their watching activities by time.
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