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qomoco   
Jun 23, 2010
Student Talk / How to study in America? [6]

I know there are tons of international students here, so I would like to get some insight informations on how to study in America? The country of origin is China.

I would like to know both about on how high school students and college students can study in American (from China).

Thank You.
qomoco   
Apr 26, 2010
Writing Feedback / Semester Paper Intro (what we did throughout the course of year) [2]

Feedback please.

Throughout the course of year, we have read many different literature, most of them are just sad. Perhaps it is through sadness that we can really understand and start to appreciate the true meaning of life. We might never appreciate something we had in the first place until we lose it since we would think it is rightfully ours. These things can be from our everyday normal object such as phone, computer, and even pencils to abstract things such as our relationships. Hey, who would care about a "stupid" pencil. But what do you when you no longer have it? The same concept goes to our everyday relationship with people that are around us. Though with relationships, the concept is more abstract, and hard to get just as literature is. Nevertheless, one would not argue with that companionship dominates literature in every way, since no story revolves around one individual. No themes can have nothing to do with companionship. Take Frankenstein for example, what is it in the entire world that the monster desires the most? A companion. All he wishes for is someone he can talk to, does not matter if she is being created or not. It takes two person to lie. One to lie and one to listen.

These recurring themes are dominant in Oliver Kitteridge as well, though maybe in somewhat different forms. Olive Kitteridge explores the dark realities we are afraid to face, secrets we are afraid to share, and fundamentally the unknown - the inside of a house (family matters), the human conditions and interactions, the progression of life over time, and the suddenness of life. Though, these might appears to be a lot to deal with; they are actually interrelated. Life can be sweet, but there are moments which are just sad, but that doesn't necessary mean we want to share those moments, thus it creates secrets, which in turn creates loneliness. And yet perhaps sometimes it is loneliness that creates secrets. We, people, are social beings. We need interactions with other people to survive. Pretty much, Olive Kitteridge centers around the theme that we, humans, are "companion beings," who can't survive alone and yet at the same time we won't admit it. Whether it is because of pride or self-pity, we don't know, but we know one thing for sure, that it is a universal truth yet at the same time a universal secret - we can't survive alone, and one doesn't make a pack. "Loneliness can kill people - in different ways can actually make you die". (Strout 68).
qomoco   
Apr 16, 2010
Writing Feedback / Daddy's Little Princess - analytical essay [2]

A analytical essay of Pocahontas. Wishing for your feedbacks, please.

Daddy's Little Princess

"You think that only because you don't know any better" says John Smith in the Disney movie Pocahontas. Though John Smith says it for what he means to say, ironically, I find it to become the central message of the movie. Through out the movie, Disney clearly shows Pocahontas as a rebellious princess - she runs off all the time - that represents our everyday teenagers, who doesn't know any better for most of the time according to the parents. Though the rebellious part is not the only thing that Pocahontas has in common with modern teenagers; she is starting out her life journey just like the majority of teens, who will from time to time find to be lost, and perhaps will never really understand what their life goals are, but the journey has to continue. Pocahontas starts out as a lovely and lively girl, but as the suddenness of life struck, she slowly becomes lost. When she was pointing to a "right" path, her rebellious nature doubted it, thus leads her on to the quest of uncertainty, which will eventually become her life journey. Come on DADDY! Tell you little girl she thinks that only because she doesn't know any better!

One can tear apart Pocahontas in several different ways, but one should not miss the rebellious nature that it represents. Pocahontas is just like our everyday teenager who disobeys his or her parents, which makes the parents think he or she doesn't any better, at least initially. The river water represents as both the path of life and the inner nature of us - smooth on the surface, but underneath, it is not steady at all. A great storm is brewing inside, waiting. Several incidences through out the movie support this such as when she would runs off on her own, jumps off the cliff, and of course be friend with John Smith. All of these example shows how rebellious she is. She does all this even after her father specifically told her not to. Also when Pocahontas is presented with two path: one smoothest possible and one full with obstacles, she chooses the unsteady path. According to the movie's ending her choice is "right", why would she choose that particular path in the first place though? If it's not the rebellious nature then what is it? She is psychic? Despite the part of she being right, and despite that she could be the a "very wise and understanding" seven year old - yes, a seven year old - rebellious must be a factor of why she chooses that path.

The other link Pocahontas shares with modern teenagers is the quest of life's uncertainties. As mentioned above that the river also represents the path of life. Just like the poem of Robert Frost, The Road Not Taken , divergence around the river bend represents uncertainties. How many of us really know where we want to go in life yet? Some might think they do but the truth is they don't. Even though Pocahontas in the movie is an animated character, she shares the same fate as us or perhaps she is "us" in the mirror. Again, several incidences in the movie support this, as well, such as when she asks grandmother Willow for advice. The advice is simply following your heart. Though it appears really easy in the movie - she can just listen to the spirits around her - it would not have been so easy in real life, nevertheless, Pocahontas can not find her way as the suddenness of life struck again. Kocoum is killed by Thomas and Smith has taken the blame. Now she faces another divergence of life as if it is all fate. She is lost. Our lives are just the same, times from times when we thought we have found the right path, a simple change as small as moving could change everything.

As the song Just around the River Bend in Pocahontas suggests: "you can't step into the water twice, since water is always changing". Thing are the same in life; the passing period never stops just like the river will always flow, and we will always change. Though we might appear as steady as the beating drum, but like the beating drum, we tend to give out loud beats of sounds, which calls out for our inner-self. Pocahontas is simply just like a everyday teenager, who has a rebellious nature and who is always lost, eagering to find the right path. Though for every decision we make maybe it's because we don't know any better but we can't be sure, since in life the only thing one can be sure is that nothing is for sure.
qomoco   
Apr 5, 2010
Research Papers / How do I make a general outline for a 12-15 pages paper. [4]

Assignment: Focus on a critical issue related to the novel, research the issue, and write a 12-15 page essay voicing your opinion in the critical conversation. Narrow down your argument to a thesis. To prove your argument/thesis, you will need to use support from the novel itself and from your secondary sources.

I'm trying to write this paper now, but I find it hard to write without an outline. Unlike a short paper, I can't just write an introduction, then 2-3 points of interest, and end the paper with a conclusion.
qomoco   
Mar 6, 2010
Grammar, Usage / Do you need to cite a mere summary of a novel's scene? [4]

Ok, thanks. Since that one wasn't a direct quotation, but a mere summary statement (you can't write something about a book without some sort of summary) so you don't need (Austen #).
qomoco   
Mar 3, 2010
Grammar, Usage / Do you need to cite a mere summary of a novel's scene? [4]

Do you need to cite a mere summary of a novel's scene?

such as

"In the novel Pride and Prejudice, Elizabeth rejects Mr. Collins proposal."

That would be from my memory after reading the book, and certain events/actions happen over a course of few pages, though if we have to do "(Austen page #)" then how would I do events took over the course of few chapters?
qomoco   
Feb 28, 2010
Book Reports / Olive Kitteridge semester paper thesis. [4]

Assignment: Focus on a critical issue related to the novel, research the issue, and write a 12-15 page essay voicing your opinion in the critical conversation. Narrow down your argument to a thesis. To prove your argument/thesis, you will need to use support from the novel itself and from your secondary sources.

Olive Kitteridge explores the dark realities we are afraid to face, secrets we are afraid to share, and fundamentally the unknown - the inside of a house (family matters), the future, the reasonings behind the "acts", the human conditions and interactions, the "changes" over time and the suddenness of life. When Henry and Olive were captivated by drug seekers in a local hospital, with thoughts of death been near, they shared with each their secret opinions of their son's leaving. Later having survived, Henry assured those tirades originated from fear,though Olive know their relationship has been changed. Human life is so fragile, so delicate; our souls, our hearts is just like a finely polished glasses - crystal when handled with care - though one day it's destined to shattered.
qomoco   
Feb 1, 2010
Grammar, Usage / General Grammar Questions. Let's perfect (if possible) Grammars! [4]

Give these old coats to ____________ seems to need them most.

whoever or whomever?

The answer I got from other website says it's whomever but according to their rules (him+he use whoever), so I'm confused.

I will have a lot more grammar questions keep coming. :]

Does anyone have more who vs whom quizzes? I need more practice(s). lol

practices or practice?
qomoco   
Jan 25, 2010
Letters / Letter to Financial Aid Office - FAFSA and CSS [8]

FAFSA question

"Select the rigorous high school program of study that you completed "

I don't really get this question, and the drop down has depart of defense program DoDEA

should I leave this question blank?
qomoco   
Jan 25, 2010
Poetry / Poem on 5 senses (dream theme) [11]

honestly, over half of your peom is mine lol o.o, and I don't know how your new add stuff relates to mine at all.
qomoco   
Jan 24, 2010
Poetry / Shinigami - Death God [9]

EF_Susan
Thank you, that does make it sound more clear and fix the grammar error and keep the rhyme.
qomoco   
Jan 24, 2010
Poetry / Poem on 5 senses (dream theme) [11]

It's pretty good, but I need to read more lines to give more comments.

Is there any particular form of poetry you are suppose to write?

if not and if you like short poem, try haiku.

not sure if you can fit everything into 3 lines though, I had hard time writing haikus.

I found it easier to write a poem by writing out the "contents" first, doesn't matter about if it's like poetry. Then I start editing it into a poem, it took me like 10 hours for my first poem. And for real poets, it took them years to edit a poem they like, and some will continue editing.
qomoco   
Jan 24, 2010
Poetry / I will get what I desire. [7]

Well, one can always come up with new expression. :] Maybe someday this expression will become famous.

or I can use

If you think I'm playing with fire. I guess this way people might understand better.
qomoco   
Jan 24, 2010
Poetry / Shinigami - Death God [9]

Ok, thanks! I will try that when I feel to write another poem. :) Sometimes the rhyme does make the meaning a bit unclear.
qomoco   
Jan 23, 2010
Poetry / Poem on 5 senses (dream theme) [11]

Touch, see, smell, hear and taste.

Dream, like the flowing river without an end
Melody, the cheer of crowds, might as well be
My best friend
The raising of audience, can't you see?
Are always there for me
The feeling, is
So sweet, honey
Been success is not always about money.

This is what I got, you can use this as an example to help you with your poem(if you think mine is better, I think an example from a student just like you is better than a peom from a poet). I don't really know much about poetry, but I think you should break your lines up (1st, 2nd last, and the last lines), and try get some rhyme - at least that would make us newbies sound more professional lol.

Hope this helps!
I panicked when I had to write my first poem too, I think you will do fine.
qomoco   
Jan 22, 2010
Poetry / Shinigami - Death God [9]

EF_Kevin
Red is blood (bad stuff o.o), so I have to run away!

Anyway, blood represents death. Since most people fear death, they run away covered with fear.

or any suggestion to make a stronger ending?
qomoco   
Jan 22, 2010
Poetry / I will get what I desire. [7]

"lose that thought."

haha, I was wondering if that sentence sounded too immature but I guess it adds some humor to the poem.

Looking for fire means looking for trouble(fire will burn you) or looking to fail(when you want to achieve something great, a lot people would say "That kid is just looking for more trouble; he is going to fail." Or "That kid is just talking big (that's where calling me a liar came from)"

:)
qomoco   
Jan 18, 2010
Poetry / Shinigami - Death God [9]

Death God

If death is what I sought
Perhaps I won't get what I desire
Since my will will surpass the kill
It will be the one ending up dead
Then I will have to fled
Since I really hate the red.

or this is better?

Death God
If death is what you sought
Then you won't get what you desire
Since my will
will surpass the kill
You will be the one ending up dead
Then I will have to fled
Since I really hate the red.
qomoco   
Jan 18, 2010
Poetry / I will get what I desire. [7]

I will get what I desire
For I'm reaching for the higher
Though, times, I lost sights of the stair
Nevertheless I still acquire
If you think I'm looking for fire
Then you are calling me a liar.
I will get what I desire.

or

I will get what I desire
For I'm reaching for the higher
Though, times, I lost sights of the stair
Nevertheless I still sought
If you think I'm looking for fire
Please lose that thought
I will get what I desire.
qomoco   
Jan 18, 2010
Poetry / Limericks or poems. Started to like poetry... maybe [2]

Angel's Decision (Seeking Death)

Shall I compare you to light or fire?
For I'm the petrified moth in desire.
Light? Is that you? Unlikely,
Fire? Is that you? Likely...
Though I still search, for my straits are dire.

Shark

I saw a man reaching for the red moon.
Forty years later, I saw him again at noon.
I was a curious little boy,
Confronted the man with "why?"
"Why not," the man replied, a sharp harpoon.

well I wrote these for college but I couldn't get much comments from the essay thread so I decided to post here.

tell me what you think
qomoco   
Jan 18, 2010
Poetry / What smile gives witness, proof for you to judge?; First Stab at a Sonnet [17]

Jeannie
the letters are the rhyming patterns

I wrote two for my english class, how about read it and give me some comments too? I have always hated poetry but now I'm starting to like it lol

here is the Italian sonnet

Italian
Love & Hate
Shall I compare love to light, hate to dark? A
Oui, for hatred could cloud peoples' small mind. B
And love is the one to cause people blind. B
Why can love and hate be so alike-hark! A
Attitudes toward each are so unlike & dark. A
Is it easy to understand peoples' mind? B
Or is there a true way of truth to find? B
But one thing is sure, each will leave a mark. A
For love can be sweet until people lie. C
Then death cause people to shed tears of flood. D
Good God! Love is such a spell that binds. E
But hate can be so sad, cause one to die. C
It does not shed deep flood, but tears of blood. D
Devil! Why can you cast the spell that binds! E
qomoco   
Jan 18, 2010
Faq, Help / Question about EssayForum - How does this site work? [103]

Envie
I didn't speak any English so they might not grade as harsh as they would to other students. I wasn't a Chinese who spoke English.

I don't really know lol, I guess I wasn't very confident about myself.
qomoco   
Jan 18, 2010
Faq, Help / Question about EssayForum - How does this site work? [103]

don't worry, just keep on trying. I'm Chinese and I have been a "failure" in English for years. I never know how good/bad my essays were; my teacher never failed me once but I'm not sure if it's because I'm Chinese. Nevertheless I kept on trying, right now I'm in AP English but I still have doubts in my mind if I really deserve to be in that class. So for years I have no clue if my writing is any good... because well you know I thought maybe the teachers are been nice not to fail me since I'm Chinese... that's what I have been thinking for years

Right now I have gained some confidence (all thanks to this website), I just wrote my college essays and posted. The first few ones sucked ( I know from all the comments, and that's why I like this website, honesty and harsh is the key lol ), then the later ones improved. In just a few months (2-3), I think I have improved a lot.

So maybe just write and post away! we will read it.

p/s excuse me if I made any errors, you are always welcomed to point them out - Mistakes are the stepping stones to success!!!
qomoco   
Jan 2, 2010
Student Talk / Application Question January [127]

well I submitted 01/01/2010, but it's downloaded by them at 01/02/2010... that's won't make me late right...

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