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qomoco   
Oct 30, 2009
Undergraduate / Why (or why not)? Perhaps the key question is "Why in between?" [22]

Thank you, do you know what DF_Stephen meant by "forst"

and do you think you can read my 150 words essay for common application, it's one of first ones I attempted to write, but it ends up to be the last. I only have 2 days left...

Thank You.
qomoco   
Oct 30, 2009
Undergraduate / Infinities of Chess, 150 word common application short answer. [10]

oh, I guess I got confused by other essays lol.

and anyway do you need to have titles for all the main essays?

I changed the essay a bit.

Checkmate! As a thinker, I have always enjoyed games ( chess, checkers, puzzles, and riddles) that exercises the infinite possibilities of mind. Chess is among the bests, it not only challenges one's mind but also builds sportsmanship and friendship. Perhaps it is a universe of its own, with pieces called blacks and whites, battle for the titles of good and evil. But which side is which? Or is it universe of phenomenon with laws called the rules of game. Nevertheless every game played teaches a lesson. The key to success is not only intelligence but also persistence. Each mistake made will be a stepping stone to success. Even though it's a game, I do take it seriously. But perhaps all these are wrong? Is chess merely a game for fun? But I'm too ignorance to find out, since it matters not because chess is a part of my soul.
qomoco   
Oct 31, 2009
Undergraduate / Why (or why not)? Perhaps the key question is "Why in between?" [22]

Your essay is pretty original and it was fun discussing it. Best of luck to you!

oh yea wondering if you have thought of another question after finishing reading my essay? like anything can argue about.

one might ask what happen to "why not in between"

My counter argument: I didn't write anything about that because why in between and why not in between could essentialy be the same thing. Imagine it's a strong with two end bended together to form a circle. The point the two ends make will esstiantlly be on the same line as the original mid point of the string. (lol not sure if that made any sense) :)

oh and can you read all my 4 essays(I know that's a lot to ask... but you are very helpful). kind of gave u some credit on the why or why not and why in between paper lol.

one might ask "blah blah blah"
qomoco   
Oct 31, 2009
Undergraduate / Think.Transform.Thrive. From University of Chicago-my desired place to study. [10]

Liebe
it's not too late, I can submit them tomorrow too. I just want a last check, I still have over 24+ hours.

tell me what you think and how can I improve it.

Thanks.

and edit my grammars... if you can

thank you in advance.

oh, and nothing of my current writings can be good enough in my eye sadly...

I have tried to improve, and will always looking for improvement till the last minute, or rather last sec.
qomoco   
Oct 31, 2009
Undergraduate / Why (or why not)? Perhaps the key question is "Why in between?" [22]

yes please, can you just just take a look at my two short ones(#2 and #4) and ummm maybe fix my grammars(my grammar sucks) and tell me if there is anything you can't understand that needs rephrase etc...

no need to look at my longer ones, thank you.

and deadline for early action is nov. 1st, which means I can turn in tomorrow right? I don't want to be too obessed with my essays and miss the deadline lol...

and what college are you in right now? just wondering.

and the answer to your question, honestly I don't know anything or read anything about philosphy. Everything I wrote came from my head lol. It's my own view of the world or human action or whatever. I'm not reffering to anything but simply presenting my thoughts.
qomoco   
Nov 1, 2009
Undergraduate / Think.Transform.Thrive. From University of Chicago-my desired place to study. [10]

don't feel weird, I didn't change anything at all except one sentence in the ending. I thought one of the point you made was good. Your reply was in quotation " " and followed by my response to you. I was attempted to put your name but instead I put "one" because college would think who the heck is this guy lol. Maybe someday you will become famous, then they will know but until then they don't you. Oh shortanswer, aren't these the grammar you fixed? It's all my idea, and I even changed some of my idea I showed you, and took some of your suggestion of deleting something, and put checkmate at the end. But nevertheless they are all my idea, so don't feel weird. I'm just going to use the one I wrote before you made suggestions, but will take your suggestion to move checkmate to the end, and will fix my grammars.

As a thinker, I have always enjoyed games ( chess, checkers, puzzles, and riddles) that exercises the infinite possibilities of mind. Chess is among the bests, it not only challenges one's mind but also builds sportsmanship and friendship. Perhaps it is a universe of its own, with pieces called blacks and whites, battle for the titles of good and evil. But which side is which? Or is it universe of phenomenon with laws called the rules of game. Nevertheless every game played teaches a lesson. The key to success is not only intelligence but also persistence. Each mistake made will be a stepping stone to success. Even though it's a game, I do take it seriously. But perhaps all these are wrong? Is chess merely a game for fun? Though it matters not, because chess is a part of my soul that I can't live without. Checkmate!

And thank you for everything. I have spent "soooo much time" on this and I don't really expect that I can into UChicago. But at least I have to try before I give up. I'm not the kind of person give up without trying.
qomoco   
Nov 3, 2009
Undergraduate / Infinities of Chess, 150 word common application short answer. [10]

EF_Kevin
thank you very much.

As a thinker, I've always enjoyed games with the potential to exercise the infinite possibilities of the mind. Yet, chess is among the best. Not only does it challenge the brain, but also builds sportsmanship and friendship. Perhaps it's a universe of its own, with pieces called blacks and whites, battle for the titles of good and evil. But which side is which? Or is it a universe of phenomenon with laws called the rules of game. Nevertheless every game played teaches a lesson. The key to success lies not only in intelligence but also in persistence. Each mistake made serves as a stepping stone toward future success. Even though it's a game, I do take it seriously. But perhaps I'm wrong? Is chess merely a game for fun? Though it matters not, because chess is a part of my soul that I can't live without. Checkmate!

please tell me what you think, and if you see any errors tell me. Thank you.
qomoco   
Nov 9, 2009
Poetry / Sonnets: Love & Hate (Italian and English) [4]

Italian

Love & Hate

Shall I compare love to light, hate to dark?
Oui, for hatred could cloud peoples' small mind.
And love is the one to cause people blind.
Why can love and hate be so alike-hark!
Attitudes toward each are so unlike & dark.
Is it easy to understand peoples' mind?
Or is there a true way of truth to find?
But one thing is sure, each will leave a mark.
For love can be sweet until people lie.
Then death cause people to shed tears of flood.
Good God! Love is such a spell that binds.
But hate can be so sad, cause one to die.
It does not shed deep flood, but tears of blood.
Devil! Why can you cast the spell that binds!

English

Love & Hate

Perhaps both love and hate exists with time,
Presented at the beginning of dawn.
If you look for it, it's waste of time.
When it's the right time, you will be drawn.
Does not matter if it is hate or love.
Each is the essence of humanity.
Maybe it's true that love can be thought as dove,
For dove represents purity and beauty.
Then it is true hate can be thought as hell,
For it creates darkness and makes people blind.
If love & hate are alike, why does none tell?
Perhaps love & hate were never to be found.
But one thing is sure, that they will be framed,
As long as civilization is tamed.

By QMC

Please tell me what you think.
qomoco   
Dec 22, 2009
Undergraduate / I Cheated on My Wife (Number). U of I essay. [11]

Essay 1: In an essay of 300 words or less, please discuss your academic interests and/or professional goals.

I don't think my essay really answered the question at all lol. I kind of umm went on the tangent while writing this, but please tell me what you think about this essay.

I Cheated on My Wife (Number).
Numbers, what can you do for me? You can neither make me food when I'm hungry nor keep me warm when I'm cold, but I still fell in love with you. Oh, number I have a confession to make. I cheated on you!

Ten years into our relation, I was led astray by the beautiful language into believing that you can't do anything for me. "Math is useless." "Give up on math, you can't do anything with math except be a mathematician or a school teacher." "Your dream is to become a businessman, you need language (English)." Voices venture in and out of my head numerous times throughout the course of my high school career, hence I fell in "love" with English. Even though I took all the hardest math classes my school had to offer and some from a community college, you were no longer my interest but merely a necessity, or I thought? Years, I sacrificed you for English, but now I understand it is you that I love, not English. You are a language of your own. English is the necessity, but you are my love. Confucius once said "If you find enjoy what you do, you will never work another day in your life."

I became interest in business initially because I thought business can lead me into all the candies I can get! Well, you know, make money, buy candies... how naïve was that? Though the thoughts have changed while growing up , but it was not until recently I truly understand what business is about. Reading through the shelves of business books in Barnes and Nobel, I realized how hard it is to be a successful businessman. Not only does it require integrity, leadership, but also friendship. No matter what business one is going to take, the key is people. Building a company is easy, but managing it is not. Business is understanding, trusting, and lasting. Business is math in a pretty dress, it's you. I love you.
qomoco   
Dec 22, 2009
Undergraduate / I Cheated on My Wife (Number). U of I essay. [11]

thank you guys.
yes, my essay wasn't specific enough because I wasn't really sure how I want to write at first then suddenly overwhelmed with ideas... but can't fit them all into 300 words

I guess it's too dense, anyway I can light it up

Also, I was thinking writing about business and how it relates to math (but I have no clue how business relates to math...) because the adimission ppl always say the decision to business school is going to be mainly based on the math subscore.
qomoco   
Dec 24, 2009
Undergraduate / MIT activity Essay---Reading [13]

I think you should tell more about how reading affects you and why you like to read with specific details to support up that one point instead of talking about several differnt things about reading. Not sure if you should waste the word limit by how you were introduced to reading.
qomoco   
Dec 24, 2009
Undergraduate / Violin Concerto, Jade -questions for University essays for University of Virgina [3]

From these two essays: You like MUSIC

but I think the college is looking to know more about you with two different prompts, so I don't really recommend to write about the same topic for both prompt...

and I hope your common app main essay is not about the same topic... because I think it would be redundant
qomoco   
Dec 24, 2009
Undergraduate / Infinities of Chess - U of I at Urbana Champain Essay [8]

In an essay of 300 words or less, choose one extracurricular activity, work experience, or community service project from the list you provided on the application and explain why you initially chose it, why you continued with it, and how you benefited from it

This is the one I wrote for common app, but I think it really does a good job answering the prompt. What do you guys think? It's only 140 words though, should I write more to make it 300 words?

Infinities of Chess

As a thinker, I have always enjoyed games that exercise the infinite possibilities of mind. Chess is among the best; it not only challenges one's brain but also builds sportsmanship and friendship. Perhaps it is a universe of its own, with pieces that represent phenomenon, and perhaps it has its own law called the "rules of game." It's a war on the board but can also be thought of as science, sport, and art. Every game teaches a lesson. The key to success is not only intelligence but also persistence. Each mistake made will be a stepping stone to success. Even though it's a game, I do take it seriously. Chess is the game of mind and soul, and enhances problem solving that can be used in real life every day. It is a part of my soul. Checkmate!
qomoco   
Dec 27, 2009
Undergraduate / NYU Supplement - Multiple Prompts + Topic Ideas [12]

, I would try to go along with him in saving the world. We could feed the homeless, secure the public, and help the world. With Peter's power, we could help the world faster than anyone else has done.

no offense, I think you are lieing(and not very creative here).

So you want to major in business, why not choose someone has to do with business? and talk about why you want to major in business etc..
qomoco   
Dec 28, 2009
Undergraduate / NYU Supplement - famous New Yorker, year 2050, short poem [15]

I disagree with owls. Even though 90% poems he read on here are about striving for success doesn't mean you can't. If that's how you really feel, you should keep it. Unless you just made it up o.o...
qomoco   
Dec 28, 2009
Speeches / What don't you know - a speech to God [25]

After reading through all the comments, Owls (no offense) but you seem to only take the "postive" comments...

I'm not saying your essay is not good, but honestly I don't think it's that good like some ppl said.

and mustafa1001, I would like you to read my essay if you can.
qomoco   
Dec 29, 2009
Undergraduate / Theinfluence 4 letters have had on my life. [4]

I couldn't stand the difference. It made me feel foreign and unlike(maybe a better word?) from my classmates.

Some 3,113 Americans of the 308,236,491 in the United States of America share the same last name as me.

3,113 Americans in the United States share the same last name as me.

">(recently) a segway into an interesting introduction,

I don't get know why it's there...

I agree with partyfann, your intro is really confusing...
qomoco   
Dec 29, 2009
Undergraduate / I Cheated on My Wife (Number). U of I essay. [11]

Love your essay. It's rather funny. ;]

Thank you, yes it helped. My grammar is not that good, was that all the grammar errors...(if yes, I'm surprised lol).

And I'm glad you liked my essay, it makes sense right? :)

oh and should the so be before the I?
qomoco   
Dec 29, 2009
Undergraduate / Story of My Own - NYU Poem Prompt #2 (comment for comment?) [9]

I aspire to overcome what Carnegie never encountered.

if he never encountered... doesn't that mean he didn't have the chance to overcome it?

maybe just simple as

I aspire to overcome what Carnegie never could?

and can you read my NYU essay or commmon app main essay.
qomoco   
Dec 29, 2009
Undergraduate / Ghosts and Gods and Demons and Dragons - UC Prompt #1 [7]

I would prefer people. Never use men because of the gender thing in college, if you ask my english teacher, she would give you at least half hour of explanation...

human has man it right lol?
qomoco   
Dec 31, 2009
Undergraduate / Angel's Decision (Seeking Death?) NYU limerick [7]

This is the NYU limerick... some feedbacks please.

Shall I compare you to light or fire?
For I'm the pertrified moth in desire.
Light? Is that you? Unlikely,
Fire? Is that you? Likely...
Nevertheless, I seek cause I'm in dire.

SOME FEEDBACKS PLEASE!!!
qomoco   
Dec 31, 2009
Undergraduate / Angel's Decision (Seeking Death?) NYU limerick [7]

A new one

I saw a man reaching for the red moon.
Eighteen years later, I saw him again at noon.
I was a cruious little boy,
Confronted the man with "why?"
"Why not," the man replied, a sharp harpoon.
qomoco   
Dec 31, 2009
Undergraduate / Academic and social communities in the University of Pennsylvania [11]

At no other college in the country will I find the diversity, the endless academic opportunities and the rock climbing community that I will find at the University of Pennsylvania.

Honestly, I think you should take this sentence out, like T said above. It's weak, if you can't back it up then throw it out.

and

ending with just this sentence looks fine to me, actually much better. Just my opinion.

As cliché as it may sound, UPenn is perfect for me.

can you read my poems

and essay please.
qomoco   
Dec 31, 2009
Student Talk / Application Question January [127]

Yes, most colleges(if not all) take the Dec. one, and

Havard takes the Feb. one...
qomoco   
Dec 31, 2009
Undergraduate / Angel's Decision (Seeking Death?) NYU limerick [7]

pablito3
but is it good at all lol?

so no one understand the first one?

I'm a rather a weak applicant so creativity is my key to NYU now, so is hard work and determination etc..

I compared NYU to light and fire, myself to a moth. Light represents knowledge, a right path, a future etc... as for fire, it represent something unattainable(also knowledge) and destruction. I'm just like a moth who will never give up even though I know it's most likely to end bad(death/destruction/rejection).

A peom best represent me, who never gives up. If that make sense now
qomoco   
Dec 31, 2009
Undergraduate / "The Forbidden Apple", 2050 Movie of my life. NYU [5]

"The Forbidden Apple"

A boy from an underdeveloped island in China emigrated to America, lived by himself, graduated from the prestigious New York University. This very man also became one of the world's top business leader. How did he do it? What's the story behind this boy who lived by himself and what will be his fate? All he had was an ambitious mind.
qomoco   
Dec 31, 2009
Undergraduate / NYU Sups. Why Business, Jackie CHEN!, and summer. [7]

Please tell us what led you to select your anticipated academic program and/or NYU school/college, and what interests you most about your intended discipline.

Education is not really necessary. I have always known this, but nevertheless, I pursued education. My dad was the one who taught me both. He, as someone never learned how to write his name, became a successful businessman and brought me to America. It was that moment I wanted to be a successful businessman just like him. Though, he is a living example one can succeed without education, we both agree Stern School of Business provides the education I need to succeed but to surpass him.

If you had the opportunity to spend one day in New York City with a famous New Yorker, who would it be and what would you do? (Your New Yorker can be anyone -past or present, fictional or nonfictional - who is commonly associated with New York City; they do not necessarily have to have been born and raised in New York.)

Hey Jackie. Yes, it's that Jackie, Jackie Chen. Perhaps the most well known Chinese in western culture. We wouldn't do anything fun, because we would be running away from a bunch of fans. Besides that, I would like him to introduce me to as much famous people as possible in one day, get a business card of everyone. Why? Because I will need it when I graduate. While Stern School will prepare me for business, a strong social network helps. This is something you don't have to learn in a classroom.

My ideas changed completely, so anyone know how is the New Yorker has the most powerful social network?
What did you do this summer?

I took Calculus II at a community college and worked at a restaurant. I also took and pass the IL Food Service Sanitation Manager Certification class. Other than these, I got a chance to learn golf and tennis from the salesman of Golden Food Company. Also, a sushi chef from a nearby Japanese restaurant taught me how to fish.

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