Scholarship / Creative idea about survive in the desert exchange scholarship [4]

For exchange scholarship...

You just went to the Land of Oz to learn some magic spells. However, on the way back, the Wicked Witch of the Waste spotted your hot balloon and mercilessly knocked it down. Even though you survived, you found yourself lost in the Abandoned Desert alone. You walked back and forth to find the way back but you were hopeless. But at that moment you were going to give up, you came up with the greatest idea on earth. You would use your spell you have learned from Oz. In no time, you cast the spell, and what you ended up with was an online WalMart catalogue, $200, and a transmitter that could only be used to order stuff from WalMart. Then you knew how you could get out of the desert!

Write an essay to tell us how you used Walmart' things to get out of the desert. Limit your essay to 300 words.
(Do not worry about how WalMart will deliver you stuff. Magic of the Abandoned Desert does all the work.)

I can think too simple plan such as buy cell phone and survival kit to calling, signaling and waiting for help. It's not really creative and interested idea. Also, I don't exactly know what they're looking for from this question. Please advise, any idea would be really appreciated:)

Thank you very much

Undergraduate / Turning Point Essay for Stanford Exchange [9]

This is my essay for Stanford Exchange Program. I'm not English native. Please help me about grammar and make it more beautiful and flow. This is so important to me. I also wonder is this story good enough for the topic. Every ideas and edits are really appreciate:)

Please write a response to ONE of the prompts below in English. The answer should be between 500-700 words.

3) Describe a turning point in your life. Why is it so important to you, and what would your life have become without that that turning point?

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When my sister turned to face and gave me a last smile before she entered the departure gate, I felt my heart sink. I did not see her at all for the 10 months that she has studied abroad. I only wished for her safety and hoped that she got a great experience. But there was one little voice in my mind that told me that I was afraid. I was afraid that she would not be my same sister who I knew so well, my sister who I had shared all my happiness and grief with. I knew that this was one of the significant moments in her life, but I never thought that it would be a turning point in mine as well.

This is the first time my sister went abroad so we always kept in touch with each other. However, every phone call, her clear happy voice made our worries disappear. Also, each e-mail, they filled with wonderful experience. I saw her rapid growth. I admired her effort to make her dream came true. Also, this made me saw my weakness that I always neglected. However it's not strong enough to change me. One day we made a call again. My sister and I shared many things happening to each other. We talked, teased and laughed. I joked about her weight by caring about her health. Suddenly my turning point came. Before she hung up on the call the last sentences she talked to me "Don't play to much computer, dear. There are load of wonderful things to do for life"

This statement pierced my heart. How could such a simple sentence make such an impact? It pointed out my reconsidering life. Time management would become a priority. It was time to take action. Leaving my fantasy land for the real world would make a difference in my life. Being a good student with good grades, being a team player and a responsible daughter were already in place. But I considered that was not enough to fulfill my expectation about myself. Although my sister didn't verbalize this, through her actions she illustrated this and the ways of the world for me. Looking back, it always appeared that she was a natural success because her efforts. My sister who is younger than me for five years woke me up and taught me about who I was and who I wanted to become. Now, I was not afraid my sister will be stranger. But it was turned to terrible fear that maybe I'm not good enough to be her sister anymore. At that point, I committed to being a better person for her, for myself, and for us.

Releasing the fear, I take more chances. Taking responsibility for myself and my life, from now on, I welcome new opportunities. For example, I attended to pharmacy for society and camped out to North-Eastern of Thailand. I got experience that I never met before. I closed to local people and understand them so much better. I offered myself to professor to help her research project. I challenge so many new things every day and proud to tell myself this is first step of my enjoyable life. I feel everything is so much brighter in my eyes. I wondered I can do great many things in this time.

Without her spark, I don't know how long I had growth and maturity. All of these good experiences I have got, have to appreciate her. She not only put me in deep consideration to discover my inner self but also to push me so hard forward to reach my goals. Not only visible growth but also in mental growth is invaluable. I believe turning point can come into everybody' lives, it's without fanfare or any announcement to express itself. But it is never be true turning point without deep understanding. This is my important turning point because it came with my realization about who I am, what my mistakes were in the past, and what I want to do in the future. My sister and her experience give this wonderful gift which can make me realize because our love for each other.

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Its over word limit. I think I should focus on my turning point more than write about my sister but I don't know which sentences should cut off.

Thank you very much, I will check it every time I can:)

Undergraduate / Failure can be part of the ticket to success, Stanford exchange program [4]

Failure can be part of the ticket to success and part of life.
1. Describe the time that you think your world has come to an end?
2. How did you cope?
3. What did you learn from it?
4. how has it shaped who you are today?

Is this story good enough for Stanford exchange program? I would like to answer all of the question more completely and clearly. I try to rearrange but I think it need a lot of improvement.

Please advice any ideas are really appreciate

When I found myself nowhere to studying, at that time I asked myself with tears how this can happen to me. I love to go to school, love studying, love to meet and do so many activities with friends. I believe all the time school is one of places that I can do my best. I always got excellent grade, my student profile is very good and I was school's representative. I always challenge myself in many competitions, I never missed. When I studied grade9, I went to admission new high school. This school is first ranking and very popular. I also agree because this school is very good at science which I'm interested. But this time was not like anytime. My old school refuse to accept any student back if students sent application and went to have a test other schools. However, I knew I don't consider much about this. I think it's like other competition which I'd ever had experience before. However, the test is very difficult for me, some of questions I never know before. When they announce result, I was in very late back up ranking. The first time when I knew, I was shock. That night I remember I burst of tears before I was slept with the voice of my parents talked outside my bedroom.

Next morning, my mother and I discuss what to do next. We decided to apply to every school we knew. I accepted I felt so hurt but I knew everything must go on. My mom is the best encouragement for me. We went everywhere to find my new school. It was very hard time for me and especially for my mom who had to leave work some day. And this point hurt me so much. It's not only I'm fail about test and lost some confident in my mind but it make someone who really love me and I love her very much in trouble. It's much harder that I though so much although I am good student al of my life. I failed great many times at plenty of schools because almost school open for grade7 and ministry of education can't give us any detail to find new school. I understood them that they had so much works to do more than find school for only one student however they give us encouragement. So many people at that time blame me and gave many discouragements. Only thing I do for cure this mistake I made is take a responsibility accept my failure and have to go on to find new school.

That happen taught me many things. The most important thing I learnt is failure is a part of life. Anything can't be better if I can't realize it is my fault. Preparation is very important things for life not only for examination but also in everything I do. It makes me to be more prudent person. This experience called failure also be my great chance. Studying in old school for 9 years at this time I change to new high school is so fantastic. I went to new environment, met new very nice friend who are be my best friends since today. I see the world wide and I learnt to help myself to do many things which all made me grown up. If I never get the chance to fail at that time, I will miss so many great things that I have today. It help me for make a plan for entrance to university and for life, search and use sources as much as I can find to gather and see whole picture, don't pride much about self. And I learnt that failure is not a monster, it doesn't kill us. But they empower me more strength. This failure doesn't make me afraid new challenge but it tell me to brave to take new thing. And do the best when I decide to do anything. After that I was admitted to academic Olympiad in mathemetics and biology which give me invaluable experiences and I still got top student prize at the last year of high school.

Failure is only success turn inside out. It's some kind of challenge that everyone has to encounter. I never feel this is my failure now because I already known the only failure in life is fear to failure.

Thank you very much

Undergraduate / Short-answer questions for Exchange Program [3]

3 questions for Stanford Exchange Program

I'm not English native. Please help me about grammar and make it more beautiful and flow. This is so important to me. Every ideas and edits are really appreciate:)

1.Tell us about you imagine yourself in the next ten years. (Maximum 150 words)

I got 131 words (MS word count)

Question1

137 words

In the next ten years, I see myself having graduated a PhD in Biochemistry, my interested field from great university. My dream is to discover new innovations that can help better our humanity and life as we know it. I not only want to do research but I want to teach my findings by becoming a professor; I love sharing knowledge with others. I also love art and wish to combine science and art to create a small business so I can begin my own farm, making fine pharmaceutical and agricultural products from harvest. In ten years I will have expected to travel many places and see and learn many new things. I will bring all honor and happiness to my parents. More discovery and understand myself and the world. Can share happiness to people all around

Question 3

149

Embodying my outlook for the future, Stanford is the only place in my vision. Your prestigious school is a world-renowned university with strong academic programs in biochemistry, my choice of major. Stanford has the best environment; outstanding professors, diverse and creative students, extracurricular activities and wonderful campus are all fascinating for me. I would be honored to study and attain my doctorates degree from this school. Besides the above reasons, I strongly want to participate in STEP. I feel Stanford has great opportunities for Thai students. Every year, I've applied for this program, I feel closer to Stanford. If I am accepted, it will be my first time to go abroad; my one and only chance to see and experience a new world. I wish Stanford is my first place "To make the wind of my freedom blow" and to expand my prospects for my academics and my life.

PS. Do I choose forum[Essay & Term Papers] correctly?

Thank you very much, I will check it every time I can:)

Undergraduate / Which ideas are better for "Turning Point" Essay to win exchange program? [6]

This is only first draft, without grammar correction, I know it has a lot of mistakes. I mean how's about ideas and impression in two drafts. I want to know which one is better or more suitable for topic "Turning point in life" So, I can put my effort on only one.

This is for Stanford exchange program. Please help me it's really important for me...

Also, how to write it smooth and beautiful. I'm not the english native, Please advice! Any ideas are very appreciated

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Have you ever think about someone, appear like a magic, make an unexpected turning point and change your life forever as a dream come true. You will be so lucky if have that chance. Unfortunately, I have to tell I'm lucky too. But it is because I never have that chance. My turning point was not suddenly appear. I proud to tell, it came from efforts, devotions and duration of time. My turning point is not a sharp peak graph of life but it is smooth beautiful curve that adjust my life turn into succeed every goal of life. That is my love of reading.

When I was young, my parents read for me every night. My home fulfilled of variety type of books. Beginning from enjoyed to listen bedtime story, I began to read for my own and I could read faster than other children. Books give me not only knowledge but also many useful skills such as can focus or concentrate with work for long time or survive my school and university life with good studying. Also, reading gives me endless imagination and happiness which no where else can have. Reading makes me have a lot of friends. Reading makes me know I'm never alone and I love to share my experience through reading with friends. We tell and listen, query and answer, and that make us closer. Reading teach me give me good attitude and good example. I never think my life without reading. It will be nightmare. Everything will finish slower and harder without reading. For me reading give me know who I really am, give me source of information and inspiration for my future. Reading makes me appreciate how much love from my parents. Reading is root to my mind and blossom in my soul and I never live without it forever. So, love of reading is the most important turning point in my life.

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I want to be a scientist, work in laboratory since I was young. But when it came true during my studying. I feel not comfort and lost my attention to it. But one day, professor asked all class why everybody has to come to studying. Why everybody has to lock ourselves up in the square room call laboratory. Doing correct but don't realize what are we doing. I suddenly understand all the reason of my unenergetic and unhappy. I never prepare myself for studying well enough so, I don't know what to do and what I gain in everday. Now I knew the key to lives that not only set goal but also really want to know! If I want to know, I will happy to learn or do anything. Give my heart in goal and I will get more than I hope.This is my important turning point because I believe turning point came when I realized who I am, what my mistake were in the past, and what I want to do in the future. And this give me all of that!

Thank you!!

Undergraduate / failure, extreme sport, turning point - choosing essay topic [2]

I have 3 topics to choose but I can't decide because I have some reasons about each topic

1. Failure moment. How did I cope, What did you learn from it and how has it shaped who you are today?

I never think the world has come to an end with any problem in my life. I don't know that is because I have little experience or not. The most hard experience I can think is I failed admission to number one high school of my country. My mother had to exhausted to find my new school although my GPA is very good. That is because my old school don't want any students have chance to admit to new school so they reject everybody who had gone to exam other schools. I don't know this is good to write and I don't feel it's failure.

Or , if I write in the way that I never think I got failure, It's experience. Is it too risky to write it in essay. It's not straight to the question. So, I'm not sure

2. About extreme sport, it is risky but players say it's rewarding. What was the most rewarding risk you have taken? Why did you decide to take it and how has that decision helped you become who you are today? The risk you took can be either physical or mental.

I can think the answer of this question but I never do any extreme sport. Is it wrong if I never do them but choose this topic.

3. About turning point in your life. Why is it so important, and what would your life have become without that that turning point?

as same as 1. I don't feel I have real physical turning point. I think true turning point come when I realize who I am, what is my mistake in the past and what I want to do in the future. It's not the event, so I feel it's not straght to the question too.

I'm very serious, Please help me! Any idea are very welcome..

Thank you very much