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usalma2002   
Mar 4, 2010
Writing Feedback / University education is mandatory to get a good career. Discuss opinion. IELTS [4]

Some people think that the only way to make a good career is to enter a college/university after school. Others prefer getting a job straight after school graduation. Discuss.

To get a good career, it is essential to study in university or a college is a complex issue. There are many arguments supporting both views, those for and those against higher study.

Admittedly, university provides more specific, extensive, in-depth knowledge to students in each field. Governments invest lots of money in higher education to produce learned generation who will be the most effective for the progress of the society. Since university education is also time consuming, thus it is wise to send relatively studious, meritorious, self motivated students for higher study. Otherwise it will be a complete waste of time and money for a student and the society.

On the other hand, schooling system based on the belief that all students will be able to acquire certain knowledge after completing graduation from here. It is necessarily not needed for all to go for further study. If school certificates shows above average result of a student, he may go through college/university, otherwise it is realistic to find a job. A student having average or below average caliber may gain professional competency and skill if he starts job at earlier age. The company may offer some professional training to make employees proficient and expert as well as some of them may reach to higher position gradually. In this way, these people can contribute to the society and may gain financial solvency and freedom earlier as well. In addition, many of the world famous business magnets do not have university degrees. For instance, International Bata Shoe Company, the founder of the company was a cobbler at young age and then became the successful entrepreneur as a shoe producer. There are many examples supporting this statement where it proves that college or university degree is not mandatory to find a good career.

To recapitulate, I would say to gain a good career university education is not vital. One should decide himself which sector will be suitable for him to be successful in career, either higher study or getting a job completing school graduation.
usalma2002   
Mar 1, 2010
Writing Feedback / desirable lifestyle: as a celebrity or common people. argument IELTS [5]

An argument topic about the benefits of a life as a celebrity was given. Explore the pros and cons of being a celebrity and support one side.

Due to constant media attention film stars, sports professionals, pop music stars and even influential political leaders have become celebrities these days. The reason behind such media attention is public interest- people want to know more about their favorite superstars.

On the one hand, men natural instinct is to remain alive by keeping their name live among people always and even after their death and for forever. Thus they like to become celebrities and even some try to perform abnormal activities too to get recognition. “Greenwich book of world records” can be the best example supporting this argument, where men have created records doing unusual, apparently difficult tasks for ages. And in the free market economy- all businessmen want to make money selling items that are in demand, regardless of what these items are. Thus superstars are always in the center of attention of media and public as well. Consequently, those who are in top position are paid high remuneration, lead extravagant life style with big houses and cars, always are surrounded by supporters amidst great jubilation. Definitely there is a charm in this kind of way of living.

Opponents who posses negative view about being celebrity may show some arguments like these-there are many more careers in the world that hold much responsibilities and serves toward nation by humanitarian activities throughout their lives. Even though they are never appreciated as celebrities, they are much valuable for our society. For instance, doctor, scientific researcher, teacher, nurse etc. professionals never enlisted as celebrities but their work contributes to the society much. Additionally, experience is of much value in these professions and professionals can generally serve longer as well as earn relatively longer period.

On the other hand, the major drawback of being celebrities is that competition is constant and players are tested each time they perform in their relatively short career. Continuously they are in threat to be replaced by someone younger, more energetic and more attractive one.

Meanwhile a primary disadvantage of being general people is that they are never remembered long for their service and most of the time they totally disappear from society after the week of their death. Nevertheless these types of men may get satisfaction and peace in mind due to lead simple, additive-free life.

At the end, I must say both the options can be good or bad, depending on personal considerations. But I prefer to be a general one who leads simple, comparatively less stressful, out of focus life accompanying with friends and relatives ordinarily.
usalma2002   
Feb 21, 2010
Undergraduate / Experiances give valuable lessons-agree or disagree [9]

Remya,here is the answer of your question.I was in doubt like u regarding transactions. Now I read FAQ and understood that, thread writing is absolutely free here. But after writing one, u can not delete it, if it is checked by moderator or commented by any user. In case of confidential essay, if you really want to delete it, then you have to pay a credit for this.
usalma2002   
Feb 20, 2010
Writing Feedback / In achieving happiness,relationship is of more important than anything else. [2]

In achieving happiness, relationship is of more important than anything else in the world. Do you agree or disagree.

I tend to agree with the statement that there is nothing in the world than relationship that makes us happy.
Many people link happiness with many ideas. Some link happiness to material success, while others link it with spirituality. To some relationship is much more important than any other factors for being happy. Over the last half century, there have been immense changes in our views. Thus the most frequent reason given for studying has changed to be an authority in a field or helping others to the desire to make a lot of money. Also personal computers, cellular phone and digital media have begun to integrate into daily life style. Consequently deep rooted transformations have been originated in our culture- a shift away from values of community, spirituality, and integrity toward competition, materialism and disconnection.

Naturally people live mentally healthier through socialization. Man to man relation can be of many types: personal loving relation, blood relation, peers, neighbors etc. Significance of all these relations upon us is denial. They stimulate and energize us through praise about good deeds, resist us from doing wrong by criticism, leads to right path giving suggestions and many more. Even wealth, professional success etc. can not make us happy if nobody shows interest about it.

However, sometimes, we may get deceived by beloved ones. But, it should remember that, life can not be spoiled for ones misdeeds. There are many more around us who can contribute to our happiness too by many other means.

To recapitulate, I would say, relationship, only relationship can make us happy rather than wealth, academic achievement, better career or something else. All achievements would become pointless other than relations.
usalma2002   
Feb 20, 2010
Writing Feedback / TOEFL"It is better to marry some who is similar to you rather than different [4]

It's a very good essay. You have given in depth clarifications supporting your ideas. But, think, what would happen for the couple of same mind, after an era of getting marriage. They may find themselves monotonous, nothing would excite or new between them.
usalma2002   
Feb 17, 2010
Writing Feedback / People are being demoralized day by day.Discuss IELTS GT [4]

Many people believe that there has been a general increase in the antisocial behavior and decrease in respect for other people nowadays. What are the causes of this problem? What can be done to solve it?

At the outset of my writing, I tend to acknowledge that customs and habits have changed a lot with the development of society. But whether disadvantages of these changes overweigh the advantages is a complex issue.

These days our view and standard of living have been changed undoubtedly. Democracy has been established in most of the countries. Men have been more responsible to accept others opinion. People of different religion are living in the same apartment peacefully. Nowadays tribal harmony is mentionable achievement of our progressive culture. A new term “Globalization” has been introduced, which means we all are the citizen of the same earth. Irrespective of caste and creed, men are working from a same platform for the development of the society.

Conversely, over the last half century, the most frequent reason given for attending college has changed from reasons such as becoming an authority in a field or helping others to the desire to make a lot of money. At the same time, personal computers, cellular phones and digital media all began to integrate into everyday life style. Thus there have been large changes in our culture- a shift away from values of community, spirituality, and integrity, and toward competition, materialism and disconnection. Consequently, some are becoming frustrated running after so called success, and get involve in various antisocial activities, such as drug abuse, prostitution, deceive.

However, some measures can be taken to eliminate these problems. Firstly, government can set up counseling offices in each locality, which will help parents and children to solve their problems in this modernized era as more likely both parents work outside.

Secondly, communal organization can be formed in every neighborhood. This club may arrange sports program, picnic in nearby field during vacation which will increase opportunity of social interaction. If elder generation and youngsters interact frequently among themselves in a locality, thus both the generation get benefited in various aspects.

To recapitulate, I would like to urge to our taught leaders to come forward to find ways to cater for these social ills.
usalma2002   
Feb 17, 2010
Writing Feedback / achieving happiness through relationships - IELTS ESSAY [6]

Dear Remya,
I am also going to appear in the IELTS exam soon and trying to write essays like you as well. I tend to say, u need much attention in grammar.The idea seems OK to me if u can express these correctly.
usalma2002   
Feb 17, 2010
Writing Feedback / Narrative Essay (an experience) - "How do I approach him?" [5]

The essay is supposed to be about an experience that has shaped me in some way.
From your essay I did not get any idea that has been developed within you after the experience. You should more take care in introduction and conclusion paragraph to express what u have actually gained from the experience.
usalma2002   
Feb 17, 2010
Writing Feedback / Some people prefer home theater, others cinema at hall, discuss. IELTS GT [3]

Some people prefer to watch movies at the cinema, others like watching their movies at home, as home theaters become more popular. Discuss your opinion.

I agree with the statement that people are becoming more interested about home theater to watch movie rather than going to cinema hall. From the increasing popularity of home theater it seems that there might have some convenience in it.

At present swift pace of life and hectic schedule pushes people to be busy at any time. As a result, it has been quiet difficult for men to go to cinema for enjoying a movie due to time limitation. In addition, we are bound to watch a movie in cinema that is being displayed at the moment whether we like its story, actor-actresses or not. Moreover, we may have to wait in a line to get ticket. Very often we may not get required number if we desire to get a large numbers of tickets. Sometimes, seat, allocated by hall authority may not satisfy us.

Conversely, at the end of a stressful day, one can get pleasure from a nice movie sitting at home during leisure. At home we can enjoy movie casually, either sitting or lying or walking during doing something. For example, dinner can be prepared as well through watching a movie. Even he can review some more attractive portion of the movie, or can have a movie taking break if necessary. Occasionally, at family party, home theater offers us much entertainment.

However, we can go to cinema with friends and family members during vacation. It's a kind of outing that energizes us.

To recapitulate, I would appreciate home theater for the ease it offers us. Due to scientific breakthroughs, we are always shifting away in doing things from the way we did earlier. Home theater can be considered such a development that helps us to cope with modern way of life.
usalma2002   
Feb 17, 2010
Writing Feedback / Revising and ideas..How has your childhood shaped you as a writer [4]

As a child, I was encouraged to be open, focused, as well as descriptive in everything that I did, which are a few reasons that have helped to mold me into the writer that I' am

In closing, my parents once told me, A good writer is one who says all he wants to say, says only
What he means to say, and says exactly what he meant to say. Those few words have helped me to become the open, focused, and descriptive writer that I' am today.

You could rewrite the conclusion to avoid repetition of words that falls emotion.
usalma2002   
Feb 16, 2010
Writing Feedback / mobile phones is destroying social interaction. Do you agree? IELTS GT essay [3]

Some people sat that technology such as mobile phones (cell phones) is destroying social interaction. Do you agree or disagree?

Due to the contribution of technology, like other electronic devices, mobile phone has penetrated in our daily lives. Application of mobile phone is such a topic that seems to provoke a lot of debate in people- those who support it and those who advice us against it. Thereby the industry is booming and there does not seem to be any shortage of opening new mobile phone outlets, so it can not be all bad.

Some people may think because of increasing uses of cell phones, people are getting habituated to keep contact with friends and relatives only by this mode of communication rather than visiting each other. People only use hand phone for all purposes, for instance, to say hello, to express greeting, sympathy, condole, grief, request, complain, order by merely sending a short message or talking one or two minutes over phone. Thus our feelings are being rusted. In addition, it is said that youngsters are engrossed with hand phone to share message, music, video, memory card, voice chat, voice mail among themselves neglecting their studies, avoiding elders around them, even they do not like to see elder relatives when they are at stake.

On the contrary, people who favor mobile phone possess quite positive view. They tend to say that, over last half century, the pace of change in human lives have increased beyond our wildest expectations. With other electronic devices, mobile phone has penetrated in our everyday life style. Now swift pace of life and hectic schedule pushes people to be busy at any time. To constantly adopt to keep pace with it, hand phone seems like a Godsend. Various options of mobile sets allow one to be connected with all around him, even with long lost friends, neighbors. Inside hand set we can save contact number and can get informed if someone calls when the set is switched off too. So no one is beyond reach over very long distances. Internet browsing, email checking options through cell phone also have made our life easier and one can get latest news of any member over a second of time within his social circle.

To recapitulate, mobile phone has become a modern way of life that keeps us closer. At present even people can go for a social gathering keeping their business work unhampered.
usalma2002   
Feb 15, 2010
Writing Feedback / TOEFL - I believe people can get more knowledge from books [3]

Compare real experience and a book.
You could write the sentence using some pretty structure.

To sum up, books are the better way to way to obtain information because books contain more information, experiences and books can teach experience of past. In this regard, I believe book is the better way to obtain information than experience.
usalma2002   
Feb 15, 2010
Writing Feedback / Politicians and scientists have the greatest influence on earth.discuss IELTS GT [4]

Some people think that politicians and scientists have the greatest influence on the world, others disagree. Discuss both views and state your own opinion.

There have been immense advances in most aspects of peoples lives by the scientifically breakthrough. Meanwhile, politicians are playing major role to establish peace on the earth. Thus it is reasonable to say politicians and scientists have the greatest influence on the world.

Opponents of the argument might say that teachers, creative artists, businessmen, civil society have significant contribution on the development of the earth. This is obviously true but the argument is about whose influence is the maximum among way of lives of people in the world. Definitely many professionals have some important role with the growth of the society either actively or passively. In this way above mentioned professionals keep far reach impact on the society whereas consequences of the activities of scientists and politicians are prompt and direct.

In case of politicians, they have got the power to motivate mass people through speech, expressing their future plan, view and motto. When they work as a member of a ruling party, they have right to implement rule and regulations to control unfair means of the society. They can take active action in case of main issues like education, employment, health care, crime to ensure human right. Similarly, scientists have proven their power through their invention. Over the last half century, the pace of change in human life has increased beyond our wildest expectations. Electronic devices, for example, computers, cell phones, have penetrated in our everyday life styles that are changing the whole way we view the world on an almost daily. Due to medical advancement, people live longer and healthier than before and our standards of life have improved as well. Additionally, ways of production of food, handling natural disaster, control of birth situation have been better much. Even both of these practiced can keep much negative effect on the society by their negative perspective in doing things. For instance, wars, invention of deadly weapons are the instant destructive results of their evil deeds.

To recapitulate, I convinced that politicians and scientists play the most effective role in the progress of the world. Thereby they should be more responsible to control all sorts of negative issues on the world because they cannot proceed on being careless by nullifying the greater interest of the world.
usalma2002   
Feb 14, 2010
Writing Feedback / Smoking at public place should be banned. Argumental essay for IELTS GT [8]

Smoking at public place should be banned because it relates too many disadvantages. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Smoking at public place should be banned is a frequent topic of discussion. There should have a freedom for smokers whether he will smoke or not as well as where he will smoke.

There are at least three major advantages of smoking; firstly, it removes one's anxiety at difficult time for instance during examination, problem at work. Secondly, to some it works as companion, makes forget loneliness as well. Sometimes it helps in increasing attention in solving critical problems. Many people, especially youngsters love to smoke at the time of gossiping, watching movie or waiting for someone.

However, bad effects of smoking can not be vitiated concerning health issue. Nicotine is the main source of developing lung cancer which has become an epidemic to poorer nations. Passive effect of smoking is also another subject to count. Medical researches show that a non smoking person living long with a smoker has a great chance of getting lung cancer too and this is called passive smoking. Usually it is seen that children of smoking couple are more likely to start smoking earlier than those whose parents are non-smoker. The eventual effect of chain smoking is severe; most of them die in throat cancer, tongue cancer, mouth cancer and more, even at an earlier age.

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Moreover, smokers probably acknowledge the negative impact of smoking as it is labeled on the packet of cigarettes stating “Smoking is harmful for health”. Thereby they are bound to preserve the burned air within themselves having cigarette in solitary place even at home.

Overall, it would be best if there was no cigarette in the world. Then people may find alternative something than cigarette and as a result at least passive smokers would get relief from breathing nicotine mixed air in public places. In my opinion, smoking must be banned in open air. From the government side proper measures should be taken to make people aware regarding having cigarette as well as breathing burned air with full of nicotine.
usalma2002   
Feb 13, 2010
Writing Feedback / Opinion on famous people's personal news, their hobbies in the media - IELTS [2]

Subject: Newspapers and magazines publish famous people's personal news, their hobbies, where they make clothes and even photos of their private situations. What is your opinion regarding this matter?

Due to constant media attention actor-actresses, sports professionals, singers and even political leaders have become celebrities these days. The reason behind such concentration of media is public curiosity- people interested about the way of lives of these superstars.

In open market economy, all businessmen want to make money selling items what can be sold- whatever these items are. Since publishers of newspapers and magazines know that private gossip of these superstars can be sold as hotcake hot news, they have taken chance of selling these sorts of news to their readers. Even a new kind of journalism, called 'pappayratsi' has been originated. They are employed to invade one's privacy- taking opportunity of one's unawareness; these papayaratsies smell out and publish all sorts of private information and photographs of a celebrity in newspapers and magazines. Surely this tendency should be discouraged.

There are many more news in the world those need attention. But due to money making perspective of publishers, much important news does not get proper coverage. In this regard I can remember about two important facts of the world those occurred almost same time, in the same month at the beginning of the ninetieth decade. Both of the fats were about death of two influential ladies in the world- one was Mother Teresa and another was Diana, The Princess of Wales, UK. In any consideration Mother Teresa was the much more significant character due to her sacrifice in welfare of humanity. Even she was awarded Noble prize on peace because of her life long humanitarian activities to establish peace on the earth. Of course, Diana started to take part on some humanitarian activities too, but she was famous for her glamour, scandal to the people. After their death, newspapers and magazines allocated about eighty percent space for Diana and remaining portion for Mother Teresa along with all other current news. It is also said that Diana died in a severe car accident to avoid a papparatsi who had been following her to take some photographs of private situations.

To recapitulate, I would say that media, newspaper or magazines, should merely sell the newspaper, not the news. Thus much important news will get due coverage rather than one's private scandal.
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