/ "Sparta and Survival Instinct" - Stanford Short Essay. Intellectual Vitality.
I don't have time to go through your work with a fine-toothed comb (it should be obvious where you have ungrammatical phrases), but here's what I can list for you after a quick read.
When I first learned about the Greek city-states in sixth grade, Sparta was the one that really caught my attention parallel structure needed, When I ... I was...
Spartans were the hard,
relentless people, loyal to their state and strong.Me being me
, I exaggerated these characteristics in my mind--Spartans were nearly immortal
by the time my teacher separated the class into "city-states". However, that chapter in our social studies book was done after while
and it wasn't until I saw the movie 300 a year later that my interest in Sparta was born again. The movie was incredible. It magnified the characteristics that I admired about Spartans, zoned in
on the already prominent militarist culture of the state.
Just as the ticket-selling characteristics attributed to Spartans were milked in the movie, one of Sparta's unpleasant qualities was also put on display. Spartans practiced eugenics through infanticide. It was Spartan law to get rid of weak infants, for they weren't useful to Spartan society. They could neither bear strong warriors or be them
I questioned what it was that triggered one's allegiance to their government to overpower the innate characteristics of humanity, such as the want to protect one's child. I had to take into account that the modern world is much more agreeable than the ancient one. Their laws maintained them; Spartan loyalty was to Sparta, but it was ultimately to their own will to survive
. Infanticide is unacceptable, but the eradication of certain phenotypic
characteristics was a necessary evil. Only the fit survive.
As for your second question, a quick look to the last sentence of your work should be enough to see what I'm talking about; you said verbatim that you approved of eugenics.
Hope that helps!