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I am quite confused with coherence and cohesion.
I start with the differences between the concepts of "coherence" and "cohesion" in writing. "Coherence" refers to a reasonable relationship between sentences. For this purpose, you should use good transitional terms, and related examples as supporting sentences. "cohesion" refers to the ideas' connection. For providing a good relationships among your ideas you should organize your essay before writing it. I have written some templates for different types of topics that may help you to improve the cohesion and organization of your essay.
Type1: Agree or Disagree
Introduction: (Motivator/General back ground; Thesis statement/reword the topic; Your opinion (Agree or Disagree); Blueprint)
Body: Explain your opinion (agree or disagree) through two or three paragraphs. Use statistics, examples, quotations, researches' results, etc, for supporting the topic sentence of each paragraph.
Conclusion: (Reword the first paragraph or the topic + clincher(ending statement))
Type 2: Multiple questions:
Introduction: (Motivator/General back ground; Thesis statement/reword the topic; Blueprint)
Body: First paragraph (Answer the first question which is asked in the topic)
Second paragraph (Answer the second question which is asked in the topic)
Conclusion: (Reword the first paragraph or the topic +Give your opinion+ clincher(ending statement))
Type 3: Advantages and disadvantages
The introduction and conclusion in this type is similar to type 2 but in the body you should write one paragraph for advantages and one para. for disadvantages. It would be better to compare them in the third paragraph of the body.
Type 4: Cause and effect:
The introduction and conclusion in this type is similar to type 2 but the body is different. You can choose on of the following ways for writing the body : 1) in each paragraph write a cause of an issue and its effects. In fact, you should write one cause and one effect in each paragraph; 2) write one paragraph about causes and one para. about effects.
Type 5: A Problem and Solutions
The introduction and conclusion in this type is similar to type 2 but in the body you should allocate one paragraph to the problem stated in the topic and write another paragraph for suggesting some solutions.
Regards
Ahmad
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