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abcdefgh   
Apr 14, 2013
Undergraduate / 'Chhota mistry' (little mechanic)' ; What has inspired me/ Skills developed [3]

your essay is very good . this sentences is meaning full for me(Along with decision making, patience also prevents one from giving up)(This is as a result of keeping your goals consistent regardless of how difficult they may seem or the time it takes to reach them).

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abcdefgh   
Apr 13, 2013
Writing Feedback / TOEFL, Communicating via e-mail and voice mail vs Telephone and face-to face [3]

your essay is brife . in the introduction, you must describe and explain clearly subject of your essay then you mention your idea.in the body, you couldnot support your idea.in the conclusion , you have to write brifely about whole of your essay , finaly you say about your idea. but your structure is good .
abcdefgh   
Apr 1, 2013
Writing Feedback / I prefer to study in group than studying individually because of perfect atmosphere. [5]

. ( in my belief)in my opinion is better .(there are some benefits of self-studying)self study bring considerable benefit (Self-studying might help us concentrate more on our lessons)self study help to concentrate on our studying(which seems confuse )confused.(students in a group study create a perfect atmosphere to study)studying in a group create a perfect atmosphere , ( because of the benefits from it)because of its benefit(One of the benefits is the perfect atmosphere surrounds the students)it is unclear . (forming group study will absorb their lessons faster than the students studying by themselves.)there are problem in structure and grammar ,why did you use on future: someone who study in a group take on faster than self study(However students have to try their best and keep moving forward whether they choose to study alone or with group. )however have to be eliminated. You must read read and write, write.
abcdefgh   
Apr 1, 2013
Writing Feedback / Who enjoy life more? Young or Old? [6]

major of your issue is that , you think farsi. such as( life was for me full of colors) my life was colorful(in my young and until now that I am between young and middle age)(As I said at above). some of sentenses are unclear such as( I made friends have had some friends). pay attention to grammer(they want to be satisfy)satisfied(those days life )days of life(I am not agree )i donot agree.and so on. in the introduction ,first you have to describe about the topice then you say your idea. there are contrast between your idea in the parageraph and conclusion.you need to worke hard. you must study reading and article more than before that. in this way , you can think english .i am iranian like you.
abcdefgh   
Mar 24, 2013
Scholarship / I still cherish my failures; Singapore Government Scholarship [3]

congragulation because of your excellent essay . i have learned new words and good sentences. please check my essay and edit it like your essay.(Imagine how I felt when the prize slipped away, leaving nothing but a void inside my heart) its meaning is unclear, pleae explain it for me. i have red your essay several times. what is the keyof your sucess ?
abcdefgh   
Mar 23, 2013
Writing Feedback / TOEFL; A HOUSE OR A BUSINESS? Both [7]

(HI DUMI THIS IS MY MESSAGE FOR MALHAMAD ABOUT BREACK BEFORE COLLEGE IAM LOOKING FORWARD TO KNOW YOUR OPINION THANKS)Hello I try to help you find your mistake and improve your essay. First, your essay not to follow on right essay structure. It is very short and brief. You need to support your idea more by example and more explanation. ( I personally believe that student must have a break) in this sentence , it is better you say should instead of must . Because must expresses a strong obligation. (There have been many argument apropos to the previous question) many arguments not many argument. (There have been many argument apropos to the previous question) a right sentence is :a propose of the previous question. (Before getting back in the education battle) this sentence is unclear. It is better you write: before prepare him\her self for education battle. (Some people say that) the word of say is not suitable word for essay. it is better you write: they believe . (Can make the course pass easily) this sentence is unclear instead of it you can write: can make that he\she pass easily every course in the college. (look to that break as a refreshment stage in their lives) you have to write : that break will look to be as a refreshment stage in their life.(I can confidently say )in essay you can say your opinion with personally no confidently it is better you say: i personally believe or in my opinion . in other hand , the conclusion is the result of your essay not only your idea,

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Help with mine â‡' TOFEL; A HOUSE OR A BUSINESS? Both
Help with mine â‡' tofel essay;What do you want most in a friend?humor, intelligence, trust, modest
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abcdefgh   
Mar 22, 2013
Writing Feedback / TOEFL; A HOUSE OR A BUSINESS? Both [7]

hello dumi please check my message for the article about break before college on malhamad
abcdefgh   
Mar 22, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS: Break before collage is good for students! [5]

Hello I try to help you find your mistake and improve your essay. First, your essay not to follow on right essay structure. It is very short and brief. You need to support your idea more by example and more explanation. ( I personally believe that student must have a break) in this sentence , it is better you say should instead of must . Because must expresses a strong obligation. (There have been many argument apropos to the previous question) many arguments not many argument. (There have been many argument apropos to the previous question) a right sentence is :a propose of the previous question. (Before getting back in the education battle) this sentence is unclear. It is better you write: before prepare him\her self for education battle. (Some people say that) the word of say is not suitable word for essay. it is better you write: they believe . (Can make the course pass easily) this sentence is unclear instead of it you can write: can make that he\she pass easily every course in the college. (look to that break as a refreshment stage in their lives) you have to write : that break will look to be as a refreshment stage in their life.(I can confidently say )in essay you can say your opinion with personally no confidently it is better you say: i personally believe or in my opinion . in other hand , the conclusion is the result of your essay not only your idea,
abcdefgh   
Mar 19, 2013
Writing Feedback / TOEFL; A HOUSE OR A BUSINESS? Both [7]

thank you dumi i try completly to use your guidness . i think on your message , i only have problem in the strcutre of my essay and another point of my essay is good . i am wait to hear on you
abcdefgh   
Mar 13, 2013
Writing Feedback / TOEFL; A HOUSE OR A BUSINESS? Both [7]

Having both of them is crucial in my own life. i cannot choose one of them. Of course, in special circumstance in the life, somebody prefers to have one option. In my attitude, if I hire my professional skills and I come them into business, after awhile I can make enough money. it means I can provide all things that I am in need such as house , automobile and so on. I belief, our dreams are infinite so having a successful trade is more imperative than having a house.

1) Everybody cannot begin a successful initiative of business. Individual should have a sense of risk and have a strong desire to be successful. The significant and notable point is that we have to start a trade to relate our own professional skill. In additional, we must believe and be certain that every fail is starting of a new successful and experiences.

2) Maybe improving and making progress in the business appears to be difficult and take many years on you. But their result is sweet and available. In during these years, you had learned to employ all your own experiences to manage dilemma matter in your trade. At this time, you are an independent person. In this point, you are taught how to move ahead on your own competitor.

3)I confess honestly, being active in the business never are company with feeling of secure and comfort and happy. In the most case, you have thrown yourself into the subject of business that you neglect and have lost having happy moment with your friends and family. You are far away on yourself; you don't know what it is to make you happy. Now you have a nice house but you cannot put a lot of time to enjoy it.

4) In the conclusion, even if I am obliged to every day involve with my business, my priority is a business. But the significant point is that I take on in my own attempt to get pleasure from my life. In the short and useful, I work for better life not to life for firm work.
abcdefgh   
Mar 13, 2013
Writing Feedback / TOEFL; How the Internet has helped with my studies? [5]

in the your essay , the introduction and boddy and conclusion is not clear. the first sentences of paraghraph is your main idea then you only have to support it .
abcdefgh   
Mar 11, 2013
Writing Feedback / toefl essay; What do you want most in a friend? humor, intelligence, trust, modest [5]

What do you want most in a friends?
Doubtedfuly, you need to make a friend. The human has created sociable. Naturally, all people get away on being alone. Certainly, you tend to be a friend with how has the particular feature. For instance, sense of humor, intelligence, trust, modest and sympathetic. I value most intelligence, genial, sociable and successful. There are two conspicuous (noticeable) and evident aspects as follows.

To me, before having intimacy, I evaluate them that whether intelligence or not. In my opinion, an intelligence friend is a gold key in our life. When you are in need, without wasting more time and getting confused, they can offer a comprehensive guide about your issue. They can help you go abruptly up the steps of thriving in overnight.

Further, you can create a big change in your life, if you get along whit a sociable and successful friend.. Most they have depth and positive personality that are impressed the your life. You are learned from their experience and how easy to get on with people. i had studied a book about successful key of famous persons. A substantive reason of their thriving was in high social contact. There are a correlation between being successful and being sociable.

Sense of humor and easy going are one of the quality that is important for me. You know, we have to keep in touch with phone, e-mail and have to spend a lot of time with them in the vacation and the restaurant. Thus, we prefer to have wonderful time with their not that we discuse about serious problem.

In sum up, we will remain in friendship if our friends have the acceptable features. I value most genial, intelligence, sociable and successful. I believe, one of the thousand ways for making progressive in life , this is that you have a best frien
abcdefgh   
Mar 7, 2013
Writing Feedback / In university, we can augment our knowledge; why go to university? [4]

hello dumi my essay is for tofel. please edit and check it. how can me improve my writting? now, i try to study more article. in your idea , what is my score in tofel? i need to hear your suggestion for improvement. thank you so so so so so much
abcdefgh   
Mar 6, 2013
Writing Feedback / In university, we can augment our knowledge; why go to university? [4]

Why go to university

In The past time, if someone was determined to be trained his\
Her own interested job, he\she had to find one expert job. The problem was that, one had to cope with a possibility issue arising from it. Otherwise they should ignore to pursue his\her own dream.

Today, having an interested job is not inaccessible dream because of university. There are personality and generally goals for university education. The following paragraph, I give my personal reason.

First, we can be trained and educated in our interest subject. In university, we can augment our knowledge, acquire practical experience and get familiar with how to encounter and solve our job requirement. Unfortunately, some student study systemically. It causes that, after graduation we only get degree on university not more things.

The Second most important reason, with higher education, we can easily enter to business world. Most company prefers to hire educated individuals. The university education is an efficient and effective way to create improvement and development in our financial life. Nearly, it can diminish finding job problem.

Third, higher university education creates value in society for you. This value doesn't depend to your degree. In reality, your accomplishment in developed character and job skill create this value. University is where Along with studying, you enhance your self confidence, improve and expand your social skills and contact; it helps us to raise our awareness of ourselves and surrounding and gives us a fresh and different perspective.

Finally, I attended university for myself. Not this that society says me or my parents encourages me. The University has given me apparent advantages; these encompass studying in my favorite subject, working in my favorit job and having value in society. Now, I prosper and will prosper in my job, observe a brilliant future for my life due of going to university.
abcdefgh   
Jan 18, 2013
Writing Feedback / Cleaning is the most important job in my city [8]

hello dumi i am appreciated to check my response to riak about cleanig is the most my job in my city. i like to know your oppinion about structre and grammer and suitable using of words
abcdefgh   
Jan 12, 2013
Writing Feedback / Defiantly, our parents have a depth and direct effect in the whole of our life. [7]

parents are the best teacher? do you agree or not?

Defiantly, our parents have a depth and direct effect in the whole of our life. Unfortunately, some of them don't be regarded as the best teacher; they neglect and ignore their responsibility about their child. They consider affording requirement stuff of children is just their responsible. The following paragraphs, I will indicate how parents are best teacher in distinction stages of our growing.

In the initial of our life, they train our physical skill and our Main personal figure in this time. We should know to our personal have inherent and acquire original. In the Inherent personal, they don't have direct role, whereas in the acquire personal. They teach us how to encounter with problem, they favor us distinguish a polite and impolite behavior, how to communicate with other, encourage and prepare a appropriate situation us to pursue our interested dream. Within this stage, we are prepared to reach the real world which its external seems attractively and its internal is frightened and hard.

In the stage of teenager and younger , now we reach to the real world, but we cannot continue without our parents' supportiveness. They know exactly that their teenager should achieve qualified to live alone and safe. They provide us with useful advice in according to their experience. If we are in the wrong way, they struggle to point out a direction in our way life. They sacrifice their whole life to us that live in way to love it. we owe to our parents

In conclusion,. Maybe they are not the best teacher in whole of our life but undoubtedly, they lead us through a real destiny. Consciously and unconsciously they are effective to our mental maturation and broaden our perspective in our favorite future

In the initial of our life, they train our physica
abcdefgh   
Jan 12, 2013
Writing Feedback / Cleaning is the most important job in my city [8]

Hello chaz my name is nasrin . I live in Iran. Your opinion is very interesting. On three jobs that you mention, I like to plant excessive trees. Green place is very charming for me. The first reason is that green place is full of positive energy. These gives you the sense of living. I red a book on james red field . he had told the trees absorb negative energy and exude positive energy for this is that in the forest we feel freshness and power and happiness . Now you imagine you live in green city because of being energy , you always sleep deeply , wake up happily and come to an end your day whiteout exhausted. In winter and summer you observe a beautiful singe on behind of window.every morning you soak up a fresh air . the second reason is that the trees soak up co2 and exude o2 cause that air pollution become less.  
abcdefgh   
Jan 12, 2013
Writing Feedback / Less stress, more harmony; is it better to live in small towns or big cities? [6]

I prefer to reside in suburb of big city because in the same time I reach to two my goals . to Live in calm and empty area and to have access to better facilities .

To live in calm and empty area is one of the significance my dream. In This environment, usually have less population. The important point for me is that I can live a duplex house with a big and green yard and I have my privacy area and I don't oblige to bear a neighbor who don't know role of apartment.

Basically, main and significance conveniences accumulate in the big city. Such as the best university, the best entertainment, the best education institution, the successful company, the best market. You need for making progress and improvement in your job to are hire in a big and famous company .

Personally, I believe , after coming to an end a busy and hard working day , we are in need to relive our tired and reach to calmness where the house, become far away n the big city..( hello riyak , my nam is nasrin i live in iran . i am about 37 years old and you? )
abcdefgh   
Sep 29, 2012
Writing Feedback / Human cloning - is it moral or immoral? [2]

The meaning of the humans cloning is that scientist creates the lab human. They copy the genetic real human, in the during process, they will make a human cloning who is the similar a real human on appearance. That topic is arguable. Proponent try to legalize it .opponent believe, it is immoral.

Some people support it, because the human cloning has beneficial and valuable for the world. Of course, their ideas are different. Some think, this technique assists to people who are in lists donor. When an organs goes bad, physician can replace bad organ with a healthy clone's organ. Some one considers, this technique would save endangered animals and plants. Some women have problem for pregnant. It helps them have a baby. It gets rid women of worry about a baby. Others think to employ it for endless life. If a member of their family would die, they can again see his alive.

Some people are against with the human cloning .they believes, scientists play rule of god and it is immoral. Some others believe, appearance of the colons human is the same with the real human, but they are different on the way of action, dealing the problem and memories.

However, scientists know what matters are in this technique. Advantage aspect of the cloning is that they would eradicate some disease on the genetic human and would improve cure of the disease and create a resistance for some disease. But, they are concerned on the same population who would be susceptible (vulnerable) for a infection disease to threats the same population. Scientists assume (suppose), the cloning make a life shorter. Because a clone's baby has been make on a genetic of older human.

In summaries, the human cloning is a heat discussion in the world. Some people think, GOD want that scientists are understood this technique .because he put us on the earth to grow and improve as the human being .otherwise, others believes, it is against the nature.

Scientist play main rule in this technique .the first, they must solve serious its issue then they allow to be used it. I agree it .if it only use for the medical.
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