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Harvard commonapp supplement essays- about use of education [8]
When I visited my local hospital to get treated for a cold, I was floored by seeing hundreds of people waiting in line for hours to see one of the two doctors present. I found myself thinking of applying what I had learned about neural networks in an online class to develop a system for automatic recognition of diseases based on symptoms. But due to lack of adequate research facilities, and 'professional' programming skills, I failed to create such type of programs.
Sometimes I even think why not we have programs which do not require any human interaction. In my high school every day I observe teachers signing in a registrar's booklet to mark their presence in the school, and further another person uploading the attendances' data in a computer. Why we do not have programs which just by reading teachers' faces put up their attendances. Then we will save a lot of time and indeed, a lot of paper. Programs are potentially very powerful, as I said when we will save paper, and then we will definitely save trees.
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Change these two paragraphs. You sound extremely pretentious by mentioning these hypothetical examples. "A system of automatic recognition of disease based on symptoms." If we were to have that, we wouldn't have doctors anymore.
"programs just by reading teachers' faces put up their attendances"
You're not a genius. Don't try to sound like one. It makes YOU sound pompous and fake.
Sorry for being harsh.
