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IELTS TASK2:learning to play a music instrument is a waste of time [10]
1. I'm sure he (like every teacher) had some valuable tips. However, you need to beware of any "one-size-fits-all" suggestion. If any of them worked, everyone would be using them. The fact that most people (even native speakers of English) do poorly on standardized writing tests tells you all you need to know.
2. As I said, there's no ONE way to organize ANY essay. What
is universally true is this:
a)
You must answer the question thoroughly as it is asked.*b) You must say something unique.
c) You must NOT tell your reader what he already knows.
An essay is scored according to the following criteria (pretty much in this order):
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ORGANIZATION* (I'm NOT necessarily referring to how your paragraphs are arranged. See "a" above.)
---VOCABULARY (which does NOT mean the use of "big" words)
---SYNTAX, including GRAMMAR, PUNCTUATION, and USAGE.
If you insist on a template to use for each paragraph, here's one:
INTRODUCTION: State your opinion on the issue. If you'd like, you might acknowledge other viewpoints here (as someone else mentioned above).
Some regard musical training as a luxury or even a mere hobby. However, its benefits are vast and numerous.You can write a little more if you'd like. However, I've sat in many reading rooms and you can trust me that on a timed test, the reader expects a very short intro. Often, it just gets skimmed.
Each BODY PARAGRAPH would discuss one of these benefits. Support with facts if you can, but don't overdo it. They're looking to read YOUR work...not an encyclopedia (whatever that is).
Lots of people have been "taught" that a CONCLUSION "repeats the ideas from the introduction." Wrong. Nothing should repeat. Instead, your conclusion needs to do what it says: it draws conclusions about the subject of your essay.