jkjeremy
Jul 1, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS : The high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of ads [3]
The length of your introduction isn't the problem.
Look at the prompt:
The high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of ads.
In the intro, you need to agree or disagree. You've done that. You did it in only one sentence, but you did it.
Each body paragraph needs to discuss a separate reason why ads are powerful.
What I'm saying is that the entire essay is too short. You need to divide the topic and elaborate on each part.
The length of your introduction isn't the problem.
Look at the prompt:
The high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of ads.
In the intro, you need to agree or disagree. You've done that. You did it in only one sentence, but you did it.
Each body paragraph needs to discuss a separate reason why ads are powerful.
What I'm saying is that the entire essay is too short. You need to divide the topic and elaborate on each part.