Writing Feedback / IELTS Task I : Coastal Villange changing (Map Description) [5]

This picture below shows the changes of a small village and its surrounding in the coastal which expand into tourism area.

As we can see, the significant change from the coastal area is looked from numbers of building. Previously this area has many spaces and day by day changes become crowded.

In the top picture is seen that the resident area is take place in the centre point. Nowadays buildings in the centre altered with different modern buildings including skyscrapers, hotels and resort in the west and the east. Furthermore, land conversion also occurs in the border of the sea. This conversion makes the harbour and the residence area reformed into a large marshal area which use for tourism activity.

Changing is also happening in the left and right corner. The woodland demolish into land without plant. Also, we can see government build Main Street to connect groups of housing in the mountain with city centre.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS Task II : Equal number of gender in the universities entrance [12]

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Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extend do you agree or disagree.

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Emancipation in education should be asked nowadays. As we seen university approval based on gender become debatable, should be it equal or not. Some groups argue that outnumber of male student or female in every subjects will be challenged emancipation, and vice versa. It is interesting to discuss what universities should be decided about this issue. Based this I quietly disagree that universities should be accepted student equal, it should be unequal.

Firstly, sex ratio in our population is not equal. However the number of male and female who entrancing university also has differences. This difference for several people is a violation of emancipation. They tend to make same number for each gender such as 500 chairs for male an also for female.

Secondly, enrolling university should be based on the examination result. It is important to select the candidates from their ability based instead proportionate them quantitatively but lack. In addition, examination scores gaining is the criterion to candidate for eligibly accepted them in a subject. This means that numbers of each gender are unpredictable when the requirements are set solid. Student in each genders also have different interest in different subject. For instance, Engineering faculty has quota for 500 students and the examination results 375 male and 25 female selected. Accordingly, impossible for universities gains similar student number of each gender.

In conclusion, it is illogical that universities should be equalizing numbers of gender in annual acceptance. I agree that early examination as the best way to decide the proper candidates.

Writing Feedback / IETLT Task I : Spending leisure time by young individuals and couples [9]

These graphs show the result of a survey, 100 people (single men and women and couples with/without children) were interviewed to find out who they typically spend time with on a free day. The percentage shown here are averages

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The bar charts below are results in 1000 people separated in two groups (single and couples). Both of these charts also contain with the average of age and the descendant having that correlated to activity they are chosen in the leisure time.

Overall, both couples are favor to spend their time with family while the singles choose friend and family for most favourite to accompany their leisure.

To begin with, most of single men spend their leisure with friends by 47 per cent besides the other trends, 25 and 28 percent, are use for family gathering or just enjoy free time alone. Likewise, majority of single woman tends to attach with family by 46 per cent rather than take a hang out or enjoy their leisure alone.

The other leisure percentage shows differential especially in couples living. Although both of them are favor to spend time with family, childless family become the second with 53 percent while a couples with children becomes mesmerize with slightly above 70 per cent. However, portion for friend or alone have dramatically decreased merely fewer than 20 per cent.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS Task II: Dress reflects Chracter [10]

Some people believe that a person character is reflected by how they dress. Others said that the way she (he) dresses may not say anything about what the y really like. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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"Don't judge the book by its cover" is the common English expression that we usually heard. This terminology probably affects some people to perform as much as his (her) expectancy. Therefore, people tend to cover their body with nice stuff which is directly portrayed their characters. In the previous, the expression guides some people point of view for marked someone's character as his (her) appearance while critics disagree about this.

Behaviour is a product of mental aspects. Indeed, behaviour is not merely about how their walking, talking, or thinking . It is also consisting in how they dresses which is seen as a media to express their character. The style of dressing inclines people taste and unconsciously picturing their character. For instance, girly woman likes to wear colorful pattern with unique accessories as complement. On other hand, elegant man , likes to use simple shirt pattern with less ornament. The pro group usually takes evaluation about human characteristic just in surface with their first impression, and this is not fair indeed because people have several backgrounds which cannot understand just in a minute.

Nevertheless, the opponent groups resist this opinion. They tend to argue that knowing someone characters from the appearance is not wise enough. Human character is complicated and deeply need assessment to decide where group of character involve. For example, we should use some psychological measurement to decide people as shy person or childish such as EPPS or Kraeplin. This is the valid way to conclude someone. I tend to agree with this opinion because this is far from common sense.

In conclusion, to understand well other people characters needs some assessment stuff and we have to know people from entire of their background not just from the appearance .

In conclusion, to understand well other people characters needs some assessment stuff and we have to know people from entire of their background not just from the appearance .

Writing Feedback / Some people deny changes and choose to stay in their comfort zone [10]

People naturally resist making changes in their lives. What is the kind of problems can cause this? What solution you suggest? Give the reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Human change is a natural law. Some people, however, against changes and chooses to stay in their comfort zone; while, the others have hard effort to get variation in their life. Therefore, the human changes also followed by several triggers which are personally different. Anyway, I believe that being resistant cannot develop people to get actualization. Then, we should be braver to out of our comfort zone.

It is undeniably that most of people are staying in the circumstance of their coziness. They tend to do their daily presented and noted as the destiny that they should do. For instance, a marriage women do their daily as house wife such as clearing house, cooking, serving husband without any desire to do more outdoor. However, sometimes convenient life occurs because people are afraid to face the different environment. We can see that most graduated school children do not prefer to continue their study neither in the same city nor in abroad.

Futhermore, as a developing figure, we should improve ourselves to be better life. This can be gained if we bravery breaking our comfort zone and facing the new challenge for actualize ourselves. For example, Hellen Keller, dumb orator, braved to defeat her weakness and success became proficient with her disability. This success story is not only for Hellen but also for people who broke the block inside his (hers).

To sum up, it is difficult to overcome from a good condition; therefore, we might brave to move forward for self actualization purposes.

Writing Feedback / IELTS Task I : Housing owned and rented in UK [11]

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The given chart below shows the information about the housing owned and rented in 1985 and 2005 by British people.

However, the overall growth numbers of housing in UK increased dramatically in over 20 years with fascinating number by 22 per cent increasing.
In 1985, the pie chart also showed private owned housing as the top most percentage by more than 50 per cent while social housing became the least by 10 per cent resident prefer lived there. On the other hand, people who chose for stay in the council rented were 45 percent, and in the private house lived was 25 percent.

The differences of each group member occurred in the next 20 years period. Despite decreasing number of council rented housing, yet there were rising number among trends. Privately owned housing increased to nearly 75 percent while privately rented reached 15 per cent and 5 percent is gained by social housing.

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Writing Feedback / IETLS: The revolution of nuclear technology brings huge merits and also demerits [3]

To what extend is nuclear technology a danger to life on Earth, What are the benefits and risks associated with its use.

Nowadays unchangeable energy sources stock becomes less, while nuclear technology appears as new impressive source energy beside fossil fuel. Evidently, this feature raises paradoxal view relating to the essential and the destruction factors followed.

One of the benefits of nuclear technology are for valuable source using to ensure energy for human basics. In the previous, some countries fulfill the dweller electrical needs with extending energy of fossil fuel or with exploiting the natural resources. Indonesia State Electrical Company (PLN), for example, uses voltage regulator modifying fossil fuel become electrical energy. This way viewed has number of weakness because cost production is tailed by oil fluctuation price. However, this view raises desire for some countries to develop nuclear energy to fulfill the domestic needs of electricity. Iran, western Asia country, recently develops the nuclear technology for domestic electricity consumption. Policy to use the alteration of nuclear is seen as effective decisions which need little of nuclear atom for produce huge energy.

Nevertheless, nuclear also has the weaknesses. The huge power, covered by petite nuclear atom, has drawback and it is very sensitive exploit. However, not only nuclear explosion influences human until the smallest entity but also the radiation itself causes degenerative consequence, while there is impossible way to reform. For example, the Chernobyl tragedy or the Fukushima burst has horrific impact for locals surround. Residual of nuclear causes dead of creature or strange mutation which cannot predict. However, the impact also influence environment. Ecosystem affected by atomic nuclear transform to irregular structure that unnatural.

In conclusion, the revolution of nuclear technology brings huge merits and also demerits. It is wise to proper the entire stabilization of cycle in the sphere before decide developing this feature.