Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 1: The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of en [2]

The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph provides information about the consumption of energy by fuel in the United States of America since 1980 with projections until 2030.

The most dominant fuel sources throughout the period are petrol and oil. Starting with 35 quadrillion units in 1980, it reached about 42 quadrillions in 2013. It is estimated that by 2030 this fuel source will reach 48 quadrillion units.

Consumption of energy derived from coal and natural gas is quite smaller. From 20 and 15 quadrillion units in the beginning of the period, natural gas had a slight decline and coal a gradual increase. The two fuels were equal from 1985 to 1990, when coal began to lead. It is predicted that coal will increase steadily to 32 quadrillion units in 2030, while natural gas will remain stable at 25 quadrillion units.

The least prevailing fuel sources in this period are nuclear, hydropower, solar and wind. All of the fuels started with 4 quadrillion units in 1980. Thereafter, nuclear risen to 7 quadrillion units in 2010, while at the same time solar and wind increased only by 1 quadrillion unit. Hydropower had some insignificant rises and fell to the 1980 figure. It is predicted that all these fuels will maintain their levels until 2025, when nuclear, solar and wind will rise slightly.

Overall, the United States of America will continue to rely on petrol and oil with less significant usage of sustainable, nuclear and environmentally friendly fuel.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 2: The best way to improve public health- increasing sports facilities? [4]

Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that his would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Everybody knows that to stay healthy a person must exercise, eat wholesome food and prefer a life without alcohol, smoking and drugs. One of the solutions governments usually provides to improve public health is building more sports facilities in the area. There are people who find these actions useless and think that other measures should be required. I, personally, agree with the former opinion and believe the increase of sport facilities would have a big enough effect on public health.

First of all, sport facilities are vital for less motivated and busier people. This kind of individuals are more likely to give up exercising and keeping healthy lifestyle, so such small difficulties like long distance to gym or even bad weather can become a great ordeal. By increasing the number of sport facilities in the area such people might not give in their health so easily.

Moreover, the increase of sport facilities can motivate new people to start looking after themselves, since noticing that more and more people round about starts taking exercise in a new gym in the area might encourage a person to try doing sports himself. A great example of this is my hometown Kaunas, where our local government decided to build new eighteen sport facilities in the open air. Now, these open-air gyms are crowded with people.

On the other hand, those people who are less interested in sports and who do not have such active friends might not even notice new sport facilities and will keep living unhealthily. Yet, to be honest, I think that this kind of people will also ignore other kind of measures taken to improve healthy lifestyles. They simply will not care about their health until getting some serious illness.

Overall, every time I go through open-air gyms in my hometown I become more and more certain that the increase of the number of sport facilities is one of the best solutions to improve public health.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 2: unpaid community service makes children kind and unselfish [3]

Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes (for example working for a charity, improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports to younger children)

This time I tried to be less careful about my grammar and things like formal, informal and concentrated more on different kinds of sentence's structure. I am hoping to get all kinds of comments but it would be great if you could say a few words about the grammar, formal, informal verbs and so on. Thanks.

It seems that nowadays at high school children are being taught everything about Pythagorean Theorem and almost nothing about real life experiences and social problems in their country. I personally believe that this could be changed, if unpaid community service became a compulsory part of high school programmes as this type of job gives children the opportunity to discover the real non-Pythagorean problems of today's live.

First of all, when doing unpaid community service, children become more responsible for the things that happen in their local area. For instance, I honestly think that even one day of cleaning the neighbourhood from litters can strongly affect child's mind set and after this community service the child will not throw litters wherever he wants.

Secondly, by doing unpaid community service children experience new things. Kids can learn how to work in a group or separately. For example, they can divide in small groups, then raise all kinds of charity events, make plans and suggestions how everything should look like, or, on the contrary, teach younger students independently, work on their own, try to make ideas by oneself. Either way, free community service will benefit children a lot.

Finally and most importantly, unpaid community service makes children kind and unselfish. After the experience in charity children become less ignorant about social problems in their country. Such children do not hesitate to help others. Money becomes less important than work itself.

Overall, free community service should become a compulsory part of high school programmes since it gives a lot of new experience and, after all, makes children much kinder and happier.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 1: The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephon [5]

The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002.

The bar chart provides the information about the popularity of three separate categories of telephone calls in the United Kingdom from 1995 to 2002.
First of all, the graph clearly shows that local fixed line calls were the most popular throughout the period. It was followed by nation and international fixed line calls and mobile calls, both of with were becoming increasingly popular.

Furthermore, the local fixed line calls were rising steadily popular from approximately 72 billion minutes in 1995 to the peak of 90 billion minutes in 1995. Then suddenly from 2000 the numbers began to fall and in 2002 the number was back to the 1995 figure. On the other hand, the popularity of both national and international calls on fixed line were raising through all of the period, starting with 38 billion minutes in 1995 and ending with 60 billion minutes in 2002. However, the most significant rising was noticed in mobile calls. Beginning with approximately 3 billion minutes in 1995, it raised to 45 billion minutes in 2002.

Overall, the bar chart emphasizes the enormous growth in mobile calls and a steady fall in local fixed line calls between 1995 and 2002.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS:become a huge ordeal; Children learning foreign language in primary school [6]

Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school.
Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

In today's world when people tend to travel all over the world, the knowledge of foreign language becomes of great importance. Consequently, more and more people become bilingual or even multilingual. So if foreign languages are so important in our lives, should our children start learning them at primary schools rather than secondary schools?

To begin with, children who begin to learn a foreign language at primary school have the advantage over those kids who do it at secondary school. For instance, when a child become acquainted with a foreign language in early ages like at primary school the language is learnt quicker and better as a kid gets used to the sound of a foreign language. Moreover, the sooner children begin to learn a foreign language, the sooner they can use it in his day to day life in such activities as playing computer games, watching TV or online chatting.

On the other hand, if children begin to learn a foreign language at primary schools, the actual danger arises to the country's native language. For example, English starts to overwhelm mother-tongue in Lithuania. Therefore, the majority of teenagers and young adults in my homeland tend to use English instead of informal Lithuanian language. Furthermore, young children are not so motivated to learn, in general. They have no responsibility to learn new things. Henceforth, a foreign language might not be interesting for young children to learn.

On the whole, knowing a language is quite necessary skill these days. Yet, trying to learn it in a childhood might become a huge ordeal. Nevertheless, from my own experience I agree that learning a language at primary school is very beneficial practice, which should be encouraged.

Writing Feedback / The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facil [3]

The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities.

The two maps provide the information about the contrast of tourist facilities of an island before and after the construction of some tourist activities.
In the first picture, we can see a small, unspoiled island surrounded by sea on all sides. The length of the land is about 250 meters in length. Some palms are scattered over the west and east of the island. There is a small natural beach on the west side of the land.

The second map indicates how tourism infrastructure has changed the sight of the island. Two huge constructions, a restaurant and a reception, were built in the middle of the island. The accommodation buildings are situated in two circles not far from the reception center. Moreover, the beach on the west side of the island is now used for swimming and can be reached from the western accommodation through the footpath. Furthermore, the vehicle track connects the center of the island with a pier in the south sea of the island where the tourists can go swimming. On the other hand, the east side of the island has not been touched.

Overall, it is clear that significant changes were made in terms of constructing new facilities like accommodation, paths, vehicle roads and a pier.

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Writing Feedback / Tourism; When visiting another country, huge cultural differences may arise. [3]

Nowadays people tend to travel on daily basis. When an individual visits another country, sometimes huge cultural differences arise. Some people suggest that visitors should follow local customs and behaviour, while others state that the host country should welcome these cultural differences.

To begin with, having a variety of different cultures in one country can lead to very positive and economically powerful results. Cosmopolitan countries are usually very attractive to foreign visitors. For instance, in such countries like the United Kingdom or the United States of America foreigners can feel comfortable and do not feel like they are not accepted by local people. Moreover, cultural differences in a country can be very beneficial when talking about other countries' cuisines as people in such places can taste a wide range of different traditional foods. Finally, it is more interesting to communicate with a person who is a little bit different, has his own values and does not try changing just because of someone else.

Nevertheless, there are some people who harshly disagree with the idea of having different cultures in one country. There is some sense in their words, since the cultures which came from abroad can seriously endanger local customs and behaviour. The old traditions can be changed by the new multicultural ones. Furthermore, the whole idea of travelling and visiting different countries is to discover the new ways of life and experience something fresh. Besides, following local customs is a great way to show respect to the destinations visitors go to.

Overall, I, personally, think that when visiting another country, people should try to follow the local cultures and traditions, yet local people of the country should tolerate other cultures, too.

Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 1: The graph shows the demand for electricity in England during typical days [6]

The graph below shows the demand for electricity in England during typical days in winter and summer. The pie chart shows how electricity is used in an average English home.

A line graph provides information about the main trends in the demand of electricity during winter and summer in England, while a pie chart illustrates what electricity is used for in an average English household.

The first graph reveals that people are using more electricity in winter than in summer. The consumption of electricity during typical day in winter is between 30,000 and 44,000 units, whereas in summer people usually use only from 12,000 to approximately 20,000 units of electricity. Both in winter and summer the high peaks of electricity usage is met at about 9 or 10 PM. The least demand for electricity happens to be in early mornings between four and nine.

The second chart explains why the usage of electricity in different times of the year has such a sharp contrast. The pie char shows that 52.5% of the electricity in an average English home is used for heating process. Moreover, ovens, kettles and washing machines consumes 17.5% of electricity followed closely by the house lighting, TVs and radios which cover 15% of the electricity in an average English household. The same amount of electricity is utilized for vacuum cleaners, food mixers and other electric tools.

Overall, it seems that the amount of electricity used during the day is coherent to the need of keeping the house warm.
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