EF_Simone
Oct 1, 2009
Book Reports / Anne of Avonlea and Anne of the Island [3]
What in the world do you mean by that? Do her words depict her character? If so, how? What do they say about her?
This would be her philosophy or viewpoint on life, not her character.
I'm not sure why you variously use varying numbers of hyphens, but I am sure that no composition instructor will like that. Use standard punctuation.
This is a sentence fragment. Attach it to the previous sentence.
Who is "we"? Also, this sentence is poorly constructed. Do you mean to say something like "This might be called 'the root'"?
Why is this in parentheses?
This is awkward. Say, instead, "These are Anne's thoughts." The rest of this paragraph is very strong.
Her sentences depicted her characterization in an undirected way.
What in the world do you mean by that? Do her words depict her character? If so, how? What do they say about her?
Sometimes we can not change what life gives us, but at least we could decide how to live within our lifetime.
This would be her philosophy or viewpoint on life, not her character.
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I'm not sure why you variously use varying numbers of hyphens, but I am sure that no composition instructor will like that. Use standard punctuation.
While something inside her body, deep into her blood would not change.
This is a sentence fragment. Attach it to the previous sentence.
Something we call it, the root.
Who is "we"? Also, this sentence is poorly constructed. Do you mean to say something like "This might be called 'the root'"?
( The sentence reveals her passion for her hometown.)
Why is this in parentheses?
This is the thoughts of Anne's.
This is awkward. Say, instead, "These are Anne's thoughts." The rest of this paragraph is very strong.