Writing Feedback / The main principle of the businesses is to get maximum profit, Do you agree? [3]

The purpose of businesses is to make money and they should concentrate only on this. Do you agree or disagree?

It cannot be denied that the main principle of the businesses is to get maximum profit. However, I really disagree when the entrepreneur do not notice some things related their business such as the surrounding environment, satisfaction of their costumer and their labor.

There is no doubt that some companies have spoiled the environment. They have produced the sewage or factory smoke in large amount. The excessive factory smoke has caused the depletion the ozone layers which will trigger the global warming. According to the recent data from United Nation Framework Convention on Climate Change (UNFCCC) the amount of factory smoke has increased every year, as the number of factories built has also rose, and as a matter of fact, some entrepreneurs do not care regarding this issue. In my point of view, they are supposed to try to reduce the factory smoke produced.

Improving the satisfaction of their costumer and their labor is one of pivotal thing which must be noticed by entrepreneur, due to the reason that the level of customer satisfaction will influence the amount of revenue. To improve the pleasure purchaser, the entrepreneur must repair the service and the quality of their product. Moreover, the satisfaction of the labor is one of things which must be noticed. It cannot be denied that some factories do not care related their labor. For instance, in recent years there were plenty of labors complaining related their working hours excessively.

All in all, the head of the factories should notice a wide range of things not only regarding the total of revenue but also related the surrounding environment, pleasure of their costumer and their labor.

Writing Feedback / The presence of children do not influence significantly the happiness level for their parents [2]

A comparison breakdown regarding the happiness levels for married and unmarried people and people who have children can be seen in the bar charts. At first glance, we can notice that the happiness rating of married people is much higher than unmarried people and the presence of children do not give the significant influence towards the happiness level for married couples.

Moving to a detailed comparison, married people aged 18-29, 30-49 and 50-64 have the happiness rating 45%, 44% and 40% close behind. These figures are tow fold higher than the figure for unmarried people in the same age. Interestingly, the happiness level for unmarried people aged > 65 is much higher than the other figures in the same category.

It is important to note that the presence of children do not influence significantly the happiness level for their parents. It has proved from the data which shows that all categories of married couples have the happiness level above 40 %.

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Writing Feedback / The workers have a good relationship not only with their directors but also associates [3]

A detailed comparison regarding the relationships of employee with their supervisors and others employees between 2005 and 2009 can be seen in the pie chart. Catching a glimpse of, we can conclude that the workers have a good relationship not only on their directors but also on their co-workers. The number of workers who had a well relationship with their manager and the other staffs showed a steady increase from 2005 to 2009.

Moving to a comprehensive analysis, in 2005 the percentage of workers who had a good and very good relationship with their supervisors and the other employees was 87 % and 91 % close behind. In 2009, these figures showed an increase steadily at 87 % and 95 % respectively.

In addition, the percentage total of workers in 2005 who had poor and fair relationships with their director and co-workers was 10% and 8% close behind and in 2009 these figures declined by 2% and 5 % respectively.

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Writing Feedback / The consumption of bananas and coffee in several European countries [2]

A detailed breakdown regarding the sales total of Fairtrade -Labelled coffee and bananas in five develop countries located in Europe between 1999 and 2004 measured in millions of Euros can be noticed in the tables. At first glance, it can be seen that the sales total of Fairtrade-Labelled bananas saw an increase in all countries.

Moving to comprehensive analysis, in 1999 the UK, Denmark and Switzerland had the biggest revenue in coffee sector. The figures were 1.5, 1.8 and 3 close behind. These figures showed an increase of 18.5, 0.2 and 3 in 2004. Based on the data, we can see an increase dramatically in Denmark.

The sales total of Fairtrade -Labelled bananas approximately showed a similar trend with the sales total of coffee in 1999, due to the reason that the countries which had the biggest revenue were Switzerland, Sweden, and Denmark. These countries dominated the other countries in this sector. The figures were 15, 1.8 and 2 respectively. In 2004, the figure for Switzerland showed a significant rise of 32. On the contrary, the figures for Sweden and Denmark declined by 0.8 and 1.1 close behind.

Writing Feedback / The Interest of students on the subjects learnt will influence the learning motivation of them [2]

In recent years, the majority of people have tended to learn science and technology than the other subjects, due to the reason that these subjects will be more useful in the modern era. However, some people consider the students are supposed to learn their interest in the university. In my point of view, it is better when subjects learnt by students should have benefits in the future.

The Interest of students on the subjects learnt will influence the learning motivation of them. They will be more spirited when they learn their favorite subject. The students who interest to learn art, but they are forced to study science and technology or technique will influence their learning motivation. It cannot be denied that is the learning motivation is one of predominant factors which can pressure their learning outcome. Therefore, some people consider the subjects learnt by students are supposed to be related their curiosity. However, the benefit of their subjects in the future is pivotal part which must be considered as important.

It is indisputable fact that some universities have provided plenty of subjects considered do not have pivotal role in this modern era such as music, art and the other subjects and a wide range of students prefer to study there to improve their interest. It cannot be denied that these subjects will not encourage their career in this era. According to the data from International Labor Institute (ILI) in 2015 showed that the majority of students who are alumni of these subjects have the opportunity bigger to be unemployment, due to the reason that their subjects needed on this era.

All in all, I consider that the students are supposed to study the subjects which will encourage their career in the future.

Writing Feedback / The best age to send to school our children [3]

The age of children is one of pivotal consideration which must be noticed by parents when they will send to school their children in the primary school. Some people dispute that the children are supposed to not be sent to school until they are seven or eight years old. Intrinsically, I agree with this statement, due to the reason that at the age, they are ready to receive the lesson from their teacher.

The children will finish their study in young age when they begin their formal education in primary school at four or five years old. It cannot be denied that there are several benefits which will be got by children in this category. For instance, they have excellence when they enroll to be worker in the companies, as the majority of companies prefer to receive the young people aged than the old people aged based on several reasons, one of them is they can dedicate longer in the corporation. However, it is important to note that the parents are supposed to not force their children to be sent to school in the early age, as it can give rise to severe problems towards the psychology development of the children.

Some Psychologists consider that seven or eight years old is the best age from the children to be sent to school, as at this age, their brain development is ready to receive the lesson from their teacher. According to one of research results published in Psychology Journal of Humboldt University in 2014 showed that the children who mentioned previously will grasp easier every lesson received and they can enjoy their school. It cannot be denied that the children will get the high learning outcome when they can grasp their lesson and enjoy their study.

All in all, I agree that the children are supposed to begin their study when their brain development is ready. Ages 7 or 8 years is the best age to send to school the children

Writing Feedback / A comprehensive procedure regarding the making process of the frozen fish pies produced by a company [2]

A comprehensive procedure regarding the making process of the frozen fish pies produced by manufacture and the ingredients used can be seen in the pictures. Overall, we can witness that the main ingredients to make a fish pie are potatoes and fresh salmon, and the majority of this process use sophisticated machine.

Moving to a detailed procedure, the fresh salmon must be steamed in oven, however it must be mixed lemon juice and salt previously. Salmon which steamed with mild temperatures separated from their skin and bones. After that, pear and sauce are mixed on the salmon. This ingredient is already to be blended with the potatoes and the other ingredients.

Another procedure at the same time is preparing the potatoes as one of the main ingredients. The potatoes will be peeled and sliced, but previously, it must be cleaned. The next step, this ingredient is boiled and after that be chilled in the few hours. The last step in this part is mixing the potatoes, salmon and the other ingredients into the dough machine. These ingredients will be processed to make a fish pie and then be wrapped to be sold to societies.

Writing Feedback / Museums are supposed to be affordable to all people [2]

One of the revenue sources of museums is the selling result of admission ticket to visitors. Intrinsically, I do not prompt when people must buy a ticket when they will visit a museum, due to the reason that museums are supposed to be publicly, where all people can visit this place to get plenty of insight regarding history.

The main income sources of the majority of museums come from their visitors, as the budgets allocated by governments to evolve museums is considered not enough, as to give the best service to visitors is needed large budget. According to the recent data from Cultural Assessment Centers (CAC) of Indonesia shows that there are plenty of museums are closed, as they do not have budget to manage and evolve the museums. They just depend on the budgets from governments, as they do not charge for admission. Therefore, the selling of admission ticket is pivotal to encourage the improving of museums. However, it is important to note that museums are supposed to be publicly where it can be affordable to all people.

There is doubt that museums are pivotal to increase insight of folks regarding history in the past and all people should have a right to be able visiting museums because it is public building. Therefore, museums should be affordable to all people, as it cannot be denied that one of the factors which influence the interest of visitor who will visit museums is the price of admission ticket. As a result, to increase the interest of people to visit museums, the government must eliminate the regulation regarding ticket admission. However, government must increase the number of budget allocated to museums.

All in all, intrinsically the disadvantages of charging people for admission to museums outweigh the advantages. I prompt that museums are supposed to be affordable to all people and the government must facilitate all people to be able visiting museums.

Writing Feedback / After 4 years in Lower River, salmons fry will grow into smolts which have size roughly 12-15 cm [2]

The comprehensive information regarding the growth of salmon from egg until adult can be noticed in the diagrams. According to the data, we can see that there are 4 development steps which must be passed by salmon such as egg, fry, smolt and adult. Generally, they need 5 years to grow into adult.

Moving to detailed information, the first step which will be described is egg. The habitat of salmon eggs is around small tones in Upper River. In the few months later, these eggs will grow into fry which have measure around 3-8 cm. At this step, they will move another habitat; as they will prefer to stay in Lower River.

After 4 years in Lower River, they will grow into smolts which have size roughly 12-15 cm, and they will stay in Open Sea. To be adult salmon which have measure around 70-76 cm, they need 5 years.

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Writing Feedback / The total rentals and sales of movies over 9 years period from 2002 to 2011 [2]

A comparison breakdown regarding the annual total of rentals and sales of films over 9 years from 2002 to 2011 in a particular store can be noticed in the chart. At first glance, we can conclude that the number of rentals and VHS sales of films declined over the period as a whole, whilst the number of DVD Sales dominated over the last 7 years.

Moving to a more comprehensive analysis, arguably in 2002 the majority of people preferred to rent films. It proved that the number of rentals of films at the time was around 180.000. However, this trend cannot survive until the last period, due to the reason that till 2011 the interest of people to rent films declined by 122.000. The similar trend was showed by VHS Sales, from 2002 to 2006, the figure for VHS sales dropped by 88.000 and over the last 6 years; there were no people who interested to choose VHS sales.

The different trend was showed by figure for DVD Sales and Blu-ray . The figure for DVD Sales in the first period started at 49.000, this figure saw a dramatic increase of around 100.000 over the period. Interestingly, in 2007 there was a new format to sale films called Blu-ray sales. However, this figure was much lower than the other formats.