Writing Feedback / A comparison of information of the average daily rates for Channel One News from January to December [2]

TASK 1
The graph below shows the average daily figures for Channel One News over a 12-month period.

Answer:

A comparison of information of the average daily rates for Channel One News from January to December as a projected, a 12-month year, is revealed by the line graph and measured by million. At a glance, although roughly all time categories shows the fluctuation figures, there is one time category which witnesses an increase and decrease sharply that is 11pm.

In January, there are three time groups of viewing rates for Channel One News comprising of 1pm, 6pm, and 9:30 pm. The highest number of viewers is 4,9 millions for 6pm, whereas the lowest is experienced by 1pm of 1,2 millions. Then, 9:30pm displays 3,1 millions as the middle position. In May, 11pm comes to be a new part of the groups of time in watches Channel One News.

Moving to August, 9:30 has presented a steep drop of the rates of the four timetables to 1,1 millions since May, and 11pm has increased significantly by approximately 4 millions. On the other hand, 6pm witnesses a slight fluctuation , but tends to decline at 3,2 millions. In the end of period, December, nearly all number of the viewers who see Channel One News have a dramatic fall. Interesting, from January to December, Ipm experiences relative constant at 1,2 million of viewers.

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Writing Feedback / Local People Have Less Interest to Museum ___ IELTS Task 2 [2]

TASK 2.
Many museums and historical sites are mainly visited by tourists rather than local people.
Why is this?
What can be done to encourage local people to visit museums and historical sites?

Answer:

History is a moment for reminding people about the important things that happen in the past. Nowadays, the way to keep the history is by constructing the museum and protecting the historical sites. But , there is problem that these places are scarcely visited by the domestic tourists, while the foreign visitors firmly feel enthusiastic to visit and the figures of them increase significantly for every year. For this case, i strongly believe that there are some reasons why local people lack of interest to come in the historical places because of the lack of appreciation and perception, and then some methods can be taken to convince the regional tourists to visit.

Going to the museum and historical building is not interesting activity for domestic visitors, but it is the reverse for People from abroad. Firstly, international tourists reckon that museum and historic sites have provided the culture of life from people who live in days of yore, so as they appreciate it by visiting and learning it from the museum or exhibition or places. In contrast, for local dwellers, it had been common culture that happened in daily and they feel nothing special. Secondly, foreign travellers consider that history is the valuable knowledge to be comprehended in order to make life in the future to be better, while native people think that story in the past is not essential to understand by coming to the museum or other historical buildings because it has been done enough to learn it in school.

However, there are some steps to attrack the local people to visit the museum. Firstly, the museum the official of the historical places should give special offers such as discount or even free ticket entrence for all domectic tourists. This way will be more effective to persuade them to come frequently. Secondly, there are attractive events to draw attention of local people that the museum can hold such as talkshow,historical book fair, writing competition, and many more. By doing those shows, definitely the museum will be more crowded and popular for local dwellers.

In conclusion, between local people and foreign tourists have different appreciation and perception of visiting to museums and historical sites. Then, there are some ways to make local people interest to come such as promoting special price and organizing events.

Writing Feedback / Electricity Evocation in Germany in a three-decade period, is revealed in the pie chart. [3]

TASK 1.
Electricity generation by source in Germany.

Answer:

A comparison of the figure of the five resources for electricity evocation in Germany between 1980 and 2010 as a projected year, a three-decade period, is revealed in the pie chart. Overall, it can be seen that natural gas and coal became the main source in 1980, while nuclear was the main resource in 2010.

By 1980, the tremendous quantity of electricity had come to both coal and natural gas of 28% for all, whereas hydro was 7 percent to be the lowest resource. Then, in the middle rate, there were two sources of electricity generation which had roughly same figure by 2%.

Moving to the pie chart in 2010, the bulk of electricity evocation went to nuclear of 155%, and then coal and petroleum witnessed to 28%, 27%, respectively. The smallest figures of electricity generation were natural gas and hydro which belonged to similar number of 2%. Interestingly, from 1980 to 2010, coal unchanged for resource's rate of electricity of 28 percent.

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Writing Feedback / Living Alone is The Right Choice [3]

TASK 2
In recent times, many people are making the decision to live
alone.
- What are the causes of this?
- Does it have positive or negatives effects on society?

Answer:

In numerous countries, there has been increasing for people who live alone and leave their family. It becomes a majority choice in the society because of some causes. Then, this decision can lead positive and negative impacts in the social community's life. Therefore, the analyzing about these cases will discuss more detail in this essay.

The reasons why persons dare to stay far away from their family to get individual life because of financial and relationship problem. Firstly, economical motivation drives young people to move on to another place which has provided ample job vacancies so that they can earn innumerable money to support their lives. For example, the graduate students who live in the village and they attempt to apply the job in the city centre. As a result, when the job seekers are accepted in the company, they have to live in near the working place. Secondly, relationship problem amidst members of family drag people to go out from house and live alone. For example; the parents who have over protective to their children will make their children decide to live individually out of the hometown.

The habit of living alone can bring advantage and disadvantage to the society. Firstly, a benefit is to teach someone to be independent person. For example; children who live together with family will feel more comfortable because family provides every necessary, while others who live alone must account for themselves to do numerous things in life. Secondly, a drawback is youngsters who separate far from the family will have lack of love. For example, if the independent persons face the problem, thay will save it on their mind and there is no member of family that can give advice to them. Consequently, living alone affect on human's life to get missing affection.

In conclusion, lost-relationship of family and financial matters have increased more people living alone, and Although this case can give positive value, it also has negative effect for community.

Writing Feedback / Proportion of Visitors to England who enjoy four different tourist attractions in Brighton - IELTS 1 [2]

TASK 1
The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to England who visited four different attractions in Brighton.

Answer:

A breakdown of the proportion of the visitors to England who enjoy four different tourist attractions in Brighton between 1980 and 2010 as a projected year, a three-decade period, is revealed in the line graph. At first glance, from the beginning to the end period, all categories attractions displayed a fluctuation, however, the pavilion and festival were the highest figures over all the years.

There were four categories of the attractions such as Art gallery, Pavilion, Pier, and Festival which became choices of destination attractions for tourists to come to Brighton. By 1980, it had been beginning period that showed the Festival having the highest rate of 30%, while the lowest figure was 10% for Pier. Between Art Gallery and Pavilion stood at 22 and 24 percent, respectively.

In the middle of period, 1995, the visitors who came to England to select the attractions such that Pavilion increased significantly twice to 48% and Festival decreased steadily by 5 percent. Then, Art Gallery unchanged at 22% for visitors and Pier had a small rise of 13%. On the other hand, in the end of period (2010), Pavilion and Pier witnessed a dramatic incline of tourists to see these attractions to 31%, and 12%, respectively, whereas Art Gallery and Festival dropped to 8% and 27%.

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Writing Feedback / Students Unfocus on Education ___ IELTS Task 2 [3]

TASK 2.
These days, many children have difficulty paying attention and concentrating in their classes at school.
- What are the reasons for this?
- How can it be dealt with?

Answer:

Recently, some educators have found the fact that children cannot focus on their study and all academic activities at school. The various lessons and the location of school can be two causes why pupils feel hard to concentrate with their education. This essay will explain more detail about the factors and give some solution to overcome this problem.

One reason that makes the young students lack of interest to pay attention to the academic activity is many subjects at school. The children often complain about their lessons at school because they reckon these lessons to be burden which disturb their life. For example, the pupils who got many tasks from school and they do not have enough time to fix them on the dateline. As a result, they will get stress. Therefore, to solve this problem, the educational ministry and school have to create the specific curriculum which provides the some subjects regarding to the talent of students. It can encourage the children to enjoy their education.

Another factor that causes young students cannot deal with their academic which is the location of school near city centre. Many schools have been built approximately in urban area which offers the various entertaining facilities to society so that it can attract the children to come. For instance, pupils easily play truent when they get trouble at school. This possibly happens because they have many nice destination places to visit. Hence, to tackle this case, the authority of education has to contruct the building of school far from city centre and it is better to set it in the countryside. In addition, the teacher should use the interesting way to teach the students so that they love their class.

In conclusion, the children cannot pay attention to their education at school because of too many subjects and location of school in the crowded area. However, the solutions are to set the specific curriculum, to place the school in countryside, and attractive teaching method from teachers.

Writing Feedback / The Criminals Lead People To Stay At Home...___...IELTS Task 2 [2]

TASK 2.
Many people are too scared to leave their home because of a fear of crime.
Some people think that more should be done to prevent crime, whereas others feel that nothing can be done.
What are your views?

Answer:
In this modern era, many kinds of crime have occured in the society specifically robbering or stealing in the street or even in the house which makes people worry to go ouside longer and they prefer to stay at home. For this case, i believe that dwellers have opportunity to take preventive ways by providing technology security and socializing with the neighbours and the community.

The high frequency of criminal cases in daily life such as perpetrating the crime in the public areas influences the citizens to protect themselves by living in the house and some members of community feel that there is nothing to do to reduce this problem. The reason is because the doer of crime seldom commits his action alone, but they are in a group. For example, several bad young people try to conspire doing an abduction to women, and then, they divide the duties for everybody among them to run their aims well. As a result, the women become victims of the case. This will make society have fret to do something outside.

However, there are some solutions to tackle the crime that always happens in the society. Firstly, security. The household has to set up the security camera or rent the security men at home and it is also must be done by government to put the CCTV in the street or the area which many people have passed through there. Secondly, socializing with neighbours. The police have to patrol routinely and socialize to the community to work together in watching and reporting to the police for everything that looks the suspicious behaviours of strange people. All in all, if the authority get work together with all institutions in the region and the wached cam is installed in everywhere, the crime will decrease significantly.

To sum up, Although some people hesitate about how to keep controlling the negative impacts of the criminal actions, i am absolutely convinced that the problem can be handled by putting camera on the risk areas of targeting crime and patrolling around the district. I also recommend that government should provide the facilities of security in public places.

Writing Feedback / The Oldest People Love To See Cinema ___ IELTS Task 1 [4]

TASK 1.
The line graph below gives information on cinema attendance in the UK.

Answer:

A breakdown of the proportion of four age groups who came to the movie theatre in United Kingdom from 1990 to 2010 as a projected year, a two-decade period, was revealed in the line graph. Overall, it can be seen that all age categories experienced a significant increase from the beginning to the last year, but in the middle of period, there were a slight decrease for all age types.

According to the data, in 1990, the two age groups such as aged 44-54 and 34-44 stood at the highest rates; 37%, 36%, respectively, while other classes (both aged 24-34 and 14-24) started from 24 and 15%. Then, in 1995 saw an slight rise about 1-3 percent for all categories. Unfortunately, in next five years, approximately all age types except the oldest ages fell steadily over the rate of the beginning.

By 2000, it had showed that the highest figure of visiting to the cinema was still held by the oldest group, whereas the lowest stage was displayed by aged 14-24; 12%. Furthermore, in the middle of period, all age types of movie viewers inclined dramatically about 10% and in 2010, nearly four categories did not witness increasing significantly .

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Writing Feedback / Smoking is Littering - this habit should be limited in public areas. IELTS Taks 2 [3]

1. Smoking not only harms the smoker, but also those who are nearby. Therefore, smoking should be banned in public places.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Answer:

It has become debatable for smoking case in the public areas and almost the great number of people believe that tobacco is the dangerous substance for human's body. For this case, i strongly agree that smoking is not allowed in the crowded places such mall, school, and station because of distructing health and littering.

The rule of banning to smoke in the society can cause the drawback in the community like less profit for shop until closing down the business. If the dwellers are forbidden to light up their tobacco in public region, it will lead them to stay away from the crowd. For example, when the smokers want to smoke, they try to stay away from the crowd. It means that the shoppers in the centre of entertaining locations such as recreation places will experience a gradual decrease of the customers. Consequently, the owners of business have less income and even they think of setting of the stores.

The habit of consuming the cigarette makes some problems for smokers itself and environment. Firstly, smoking will distruct the health. This case has been hot issue which is frequently discussed in every meeting in the social forum that tobacco can induce many deseases like lung cancer, tuberculosis, and impotent. For instance, in Indonesia, many adult people are risks to get deseas easily because they have smoked since teenagers. Secondly, littering. It is common for the smoking people who suck up their tobacco in the public locations throw the cigarette butts or the packs in every where. For instance, the youngsters who get in touch with their group in some places, it can be ensured that they have a smoke and the areas will be mess and dirty because of cigarette ash and packages.

In conclusion, smoking habit can bring some negative impact for smokers and environment so that the use of it in the public areas should be limited. Therefore, i have the recommendations for the cigarette suckers that they have to respect other people and keep clean the environment.

Writing Feedback / The journey from a fresh salmon and potatoes into the Frozen Fish Pie ___ IELTS Task 1 [2]

The diagrams illustrate the manufacturing process in the frozen fish pie company. Overall, it can be seen that there are two steps for making these pies such as producing potatoes and fresh salmon.

To begin with the first stage, the potatoes are delivered up to one month. Firstly, they must be entered the cleaning machine before coming into the feeling engine to waste disposal. Secondly, the potatoes are sliced to be boiled in the next machine. Moreover, they are added by chili and sent to the store. Here, the potato's batter is run into the another engine to get the farther process.

Moving to the second stage, it needs 12 hours or less to deliver fresh salmon. Firstly, tones of fresh salmons are given lemon juice and salt before going into the steam oven. Furthermore, the skin and bones will be removed by the workers to waste disposal and this way is watched by an inspector. After that, the salmons are added with peas and sauce. Secondly, the salmon's batter is blended together with potatoes in the mixer machine. In the end of process, the products are wrapped and frozen, and then they all are collected in the storage before dispatched to the retailers.

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