Writing Feedback / Living in a small community allows to build a common bond and safe neighbourhood [4]

In the past, most people lived in small villages where everyone knew everyone else. Nowadays, most people live in large cities where they only know a few people in their area. What do you think were the advantages and disadvantages of living in a small community?

In past, most people lived in different situation with most people who live in the modern era because they live in smaller communities. There are some advantages and disadvantages to live in those circumtances.

First of all, in small area societies aware with each other, they know who are their neighbours well. Therefore, they should always give attention to everyone in their area. Second, living in small villages is saver than in cities because these are enough security guard to protect those areas. Hence, there should be hapenend an increasing of crime rate .

However, there also several disadvantages to settle in little villages. First, it is time consuming because people have a social responsible to maintaining their relationship to neighbours, therefore, it can be offend their own bussiness. Secong, people may have limitted acces out of their communities. The reason is they only have few colleagues in other places.

To sum up, living in small communities allows for better society and saver enviromental security. In the opposite, people in a smaller areas have to deal with uncomfortable individual privacy and limitting of the more extended connection.

Writing Feedback / Most people use a private transport to enjoy their vacation in New Zealand [4]

IELTS writing Task 1 - International Visitors to New Zealand: transport used during visit

The provided bar chart show what transport chosen by visitors while visit New Zealand. The highest level of visitors use car. the second choices are plane and coach and others go by train and both.

Just under 70 per cent of the foreign visitors use car to enjoy their vacation in New Zealand. However, there are the same rate for visitor who use plane and coach, more than 30 per cent for each. While 20 per cent visitors use train in New Zealand and just under 10 per cent visitors use boat for their holiday transport.

Tn the conclusion, most people use a private transport to enjoy their vacation while others who are accounted for more 80 per cent choose public transport like plane, coach, train and boat.

Writing Feedback / The best kindergarten by Takaharu tekuza, ted talks [2]

Takaharu tezuka is one of the architects who design this kindergarten in Tokyo, 2007. That is a cylcle unique building with a large playing roof. This building is only 5 metres tall.

Mr. Tezuka believes that five years old children want to more and more time to play. Therefore this kindergarten is desinged with a handrail and a net sticking out from the edge of the roof and some trees popping through. More facilities are leg washing place and classrooms. It was constructed as a completely open places because he doesn't want any hiding corner for children.

Mr. Tekuza and his team consider that this building should help children to learn about social interactions and the way to survive. Hence this is a place where there are a lot of noises in order to encourage students to talk to others and show up their own ideas. This is also a place with few posibilities of dangerous because children needs some injures to learn how to survive in their live and to help each other.

Writing Feedback / Polio back in Nigeria two years after being wiped out in Africa [4]

Nigeria has faced polios since along time. In 2012, the country accounted for more than half of all cases globally. Immunization is encouraged by the government to eradicate the virus. Nigerian government has a strong collaboration with WHO's polio eradication programme to abolish polios. That huge public health effort has overcome the problem for two years lately. It can be seen by only 21 wild polio cases have been reported so far this year, compared with 34 at the same point in 2015, and WHO has been predicting that the virus will be completely eradicated by 2019.

Unfortunately, in this year, two cases were reported. It was caused by complacent reactions from the government. However the overriding priority has been given to all children around the affected area immediately. The government wants to ensure that all the local children have been immunized.

newscientist.com/article/2100902-polio-back-in-nigeria-two-years-after-being-wiped-out-in-africa/

Writing Feedback / Just a few hours' exercise a week makes your heart grow bigger [4]

Keeping fit is one way to get healthy life. Nowadays, modern lifestyle has brought negative impact to human heart. For example, there are many people who dies from hearth attact. It should be caused by consuming too much junk food and doing less exercise.

However, in fact people only need three hours per week to have better heart condition. Declan O'Regan at Imperial College London and his team discovered that doing three or more hours of exercise a week can have larger hearts too - and may be misdiagnosed as having a heart condition. This research was done by scanning 1096 people who had healthy hearts. They found that, on average, the more exercise they did, the larger their hearts were.

People who did as little as three hours of exercise a week have 2.4 times larger left ventricle and 4.4 times larger for those who exercised for between 3 and 5 hours a week.The right ventricle was 1.7 times more likely to be enlarged in people who did 3 to 5 hours' exercise a week, and 9.1 times more likely to be bigger in people doing more than that.

O'Regan said that change of heart shape and size could lead to a misdiagnosis for heart conditions.

newscientist.com/article/2100358-just-a-few-hours-exercise-a-week-makes-your-heart-grow-bigger/

Writing Feedback / HOW I TEACH KIDS TO LOVE SCIENCE [3]

Cesar Harada is a teacher in Harbour School, Hongkong. He has succeded to improve the way of teaching science to the kids.

Here they are his way:

First of all, he let his student imaginations wrong and wild becouse children has unlimitted ideas.
Whereas, his job are to collect, combine and make those imaginations to be workable.
Then he let students to participate in a experiment .
All the invention are based on local problems. Children think of those problem, imagine, and make the solutions.
He set an industrial mega-space to be his classroom because he want to provide a larger place for the students to make their dreams come true. In there, not only students but also adults can play and study together.

His goals are to prepare young generations who cares about enviromental problems and to preserve their imaginations that needed to invent the solutions.

Link: youtube.com/watch?v=jAemh_JxgOk

Writing Feedback / Orangutan learns to mimic human conversation for the first time [5]

Summary from article

Adriano Lameria, from the University of Durham, UK and his team found that orangutans are able to emulate sound from human conversation. An ape ,'Rocky' who was studied at Indianapolis Zoo in US, between April and May 2012, have produced sounds similar to words in a "conversational context".

This experiment observed for more than 120 orangutans from 15 wild and captive pupulations. The procedure of that experiment are by conducted a game where the ape attempted to copy sounds made by human in variation of tone and pitch. That was recorded for more than 12,000 hours. Then, the reaserchers compared the collected sounds. This research proved that orangutans have the potential capacity to control the action of their voices.

Journal reference: Scientific Reports, DOI: 10.1038/srep30315

Link: newscientist.com/article/2099090-orangutan-learns-to-mimic-human-conversation-for-the-first-time/

Writing Feedback / HOW TO FIX A BROKEN EDUCATION SYSTEM WITHOUT ANY MORE MONEY [3]

Summary from TED talks

As we know that education is one of the most important aspects to build a prosperous country. Education creats good human resources for the country. Meanwhile, in a developing country like Indonesia there are a lot of educational problems such as a lack of money to support the improvement of teaching quality and quantity. The same problematic cases are also experienced by India.

In India, 11 year- olds cannot do basic ability like construct a simple sentence and most kids are 13-14 year-olds are dropped out from school. It is happen while India's public schools set not only free education but also free books, even free meal as well. More over, parents are prefer to put their children in private schools.

Seema Bansal, an education innovator from India, explained her experience to reform 15.000 schools in Haryana, India. First of all, to addresses the problems she had to make a focused goal. Therefore the goal will be used to measure the result. Second, she had to be aware about the issues : there are no teachers teach inside the classrooms and there is no additional money to make them more trained. Hence, she discussed the problem with her team everywhere and every time. Eventually she found that new simple concept or daily examples make teachers and students more interested. Consequently, she and her team made a concept for each topic in the text books to help teachers teach inside or outside their classroom easier.