Holt Educational Consultant
Feb 1, 2017
Undergraduate / Me, as a part of the strategic planning board of one of the multinational corporations [14]
Okay, this version should be good enough to use with your essay. It complies with the remaining requirements that need to be reflected or described in order for the reviewer to get an idea of the kind of leader you can be in the future. I believe that the whole essay is now in its final form. So you should be able to use it with your application now. I don't see how else it can be improved. You have done your best. Your intentions are clear and your sentiments are unquestionable in the essay. Don't worry about the content anymore. It is in a form that can best represent your voice based upon the prompt requirements at the moment. I am not advising you to correct any grammar mistakes because those mistakes represent who you are. They do not distract from the meaning or message of your response so it is best to leave it alone. The reviewer needs to get a clear idea as to how you conduct yourself in the English language and this is the best preliminary introduction he can get from you. The rest will be up to the reviewer's consideration now. Good luck with your application. I know you have a chance just like the other applicants do.
Okay, this version should be good enough to use with your essay. It complies with the remaining requirements that need to be reflected or described in order for the reviewer to get an idea of the kind of leader you can be in the future. I believe that the whole essay is now in its final form. So you should be able to use it with your application now. I don't see how else it can be improved. You have done your best. Your intentions are clear and your sentiments are unquestionable in the essay. Don't worry about the content anymore. It is in a form that can best represent your voice based upon the prompt requirements at the moment. I am not advising you to correct any grammar mistakes because those mistakes represent who you are. They do not distract from the meaning or message of your response so it is best to leave it alone. The reviewer needs to get a clear idea as to how you conduct yourself in the English language and this is the best preliminary introduction he can get from you. The rest will be up to the reviewer's consideration now. Good luck with your application. I know you have a chance just like the other applicants do.