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Gks-U medical major personal statement

4 - @Beacon of hope Focus on making the essay more concise by emphasizing the key moments that shaped your passion...

ScholarshipBeacon of hope - Aug 7, 2024Vera24 - Aug 8, 2024
numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia

2 - Good formatting for the summary overview. You correctly attached the trending statements with the summary overview. You will get...

Writing Feedbackchidung - Aug 7, 2024Holt - Aug 7, 2024
[IELTS ACADEMIC WRITING TASK 1] Participants for activities in a social house in Melbourne

2 - Try to keep your task 1 essay to under 200 words. Never cut into the writing time for the...

Writing FeedbackPikes_2006 - Aug 7, 2024Holt - Aug 7, 2024
The final race of an athlete - UBC Personal Profile

2 - You do not have to introduce yourself and the origins of your family in Canada. That is not required...

Undergraduateitsmedavis - Aug 6, 2024Holt - Aug 7, 2024
Do store knowledge on the internet outweigh stored knowledge in books?

2 - It is unfortunate that you have only written 232 words for this topic. The minimum word count is 250...

Writing FeedbackTHANHNGAN241 - Aug 6, 2024Holt - Aug 7, 2024
College Essay on my journey and passion towards Health, Safety and Environment

2 - Do not close the essay with a reference to Cornell and Professor Nellie Brown. This is a personal statement....

UndergraduatePrial - Aug 5, 2024Holt - Aug 6, 2024
The maps below show a bookstore in 2000 and now.

2 - There is a lack of coherence and clarity in your presentation based on these 2 problem references....

Writing Feedbackhihihihithu - Aug 5, 2024Holt - Aug 6, 2024
How people aged 25-34 are housed in the UK - IELTS Writing task 1

2 - "Almost" means "not quite or very nearly". It is not the same meaning as "most" greatest in amount,...

Writing Feedbacklee2nhw - Aug 5, 2024Holt - Aug 6, 2024
[WRITING TASK 1 IELTS] THE DIAGRAM SHOWS HOW LIVERTON DOCKS CHANGE SINCE 1980

2 - There are only 2 illustrations provided for this report. One from 1980 and the other, is present day....

Writing Feedbackmal880 - Aug 4, 2024Holt - Aug 6, 2024
In the developed world, average life expectancy is increasing. What are the problems and solutions?

2 - This is your personal opinion which is not reflected in the original discussion. You cannot make such claims...

Writing Feedbacklamlinhlinh - Aug 4, 2024Holt - Aug 4, 2024
GKS-G KOREAN LANGUAGE MAJOR, PERSONAL STATEMENT

4 - @vivibimil I'd recommend focusing more on your transformative experiences in Korea, detailing how they shaped your academic and personal...

Scholarshipvivibimil - Jul 15, 2024Vera24 - Aug 4, 2024
2025 GKS-U Study Plan on how to improve foreign language

3 - @kumaaa Your essay shows a thorough and proactive approach to learning Korean, emphasizing cultural immersion and practical application. Your...

Scholarshipkumaaa - Jul 23, 2024Vera24 - Aug 4, 2024
Addiction and Substance Abuse

2 - 1. The research paragraphs should not end with in-text citations. These references must have additional discussions included. The insight...

Research PapersJlentz13 - Aug 4, 2024Holt - Aug 4, 2024
English and Korean Languages - Study plan for the gks

2 - You have very good pre-arrival plans for both English and Hangul language proficiency presented in this essay. The problem,...

ScholarshipVera24 - Aug 3, 2024Holt - Aug 4, 2024
Task 1 - The chart below gives information about the age of women in Australia had a baby

2 - Avoid using a run-on sentence for your summary overview. Concise references rely on your ability to present one idea...

Writing FeedbackUnessayforum - Aug 3, 2024Holt - Aug 4, 2024
Some people feel that the cost of space exploration is far too high for the benefits it brings

2 - This is an incomplete thought. There is a missing verb here that would have completed the sentence idea...

Writing Feedbackkeylie tran - Aug 2, 2024Holt - Aug 4, 2024
Essay for a low income student scholarship about learning something new

2 - The discussion of EcoTech is not aligned with the prompt requirements. That total paragraph can be removed without affecting...

Undergraduatelofpty - Aug 1, 2024Holt - Aug 4, 2024
GKS-G Personal Statement Major in Tech Management (Switching from game development)

3 - @daBaby Your personal statement clearly outlines your passion for Technology Management and game development. It effectively connects the GKS...

ScholarshipdaBaby - Jul 23, 2024Vera24 - Aug 3, 2024
The bar chart below shows employment figures in different tourism-related industries

2 - What sort of chart was provided? The chart type is important because it will help the reader envision...

Writing Feedbacktangthuyduong304 - Jul 31, 2024Holt - Aug 1, 2024
How many overseas conferences held in Cities - IELTS 1

2 - You are missing the past tense word "were" which indicates a plural past for the conferences. This is...

Writing FeedbackLeMaiPhg - Jul 31, 2024Holt - Aug 1, 2024
TASK 1: the number of people who don't have occupation

2 - Please remember that the task 1 essay will score best once you write between 175 to 200 words. These...

Writing Feedbackphuthinh - Jul 31, 2024Holt - Aug 1, 2024
IELTS Writing task 2: Essay about healthiness problems and measures for that

2 - The paraphrasing is incorrect. It should mention, in your own words, that the weight increase is happening in some...

Writing FeedbackKitrute - Jul 31, 2024Holt - Aug 1, 2024
IELTS TASK 2 [Doctors and engineers, should be required to work ....]

2 - Hello, for a review of this essay based on the band sectional scoring and possible final score, you must...

Writing FeedbackQueen02 - Jul 31, 2024Holt - Aug 1, 2024
It is important for all towns and cities to have large public outdoor places like squares and parks.

2 - The paraphrasing is acceptable, although calling this an argument is an exaggeration. A discussion would have more aligned as...

Writing FeedbackTuyet Trinh - Jul 30, 2024Holt - Jul 31, 2024
what do you think will be the highest-paying occupation 50 years from now?

2 - Hmmm,,, the title of the essay and the content of the paragraphs are two extremely different and highly disconnected...

Writing FeedbackJane Mai - Jul 29, 2024Holt - Jul 29, 2024
Some people think that economic progress is the only way to measure a country's success

2 - The essay is lacking 2 words to meet the minimum word count. Deductions, which will be applied to the...

Writing Feedbacktrannhatminh - Jul 29, 2024Holt - Jul 29, 2024
Registration of a paper in an identified academic field?

2 - It is customary to ask that the writer or researcher register in one academic field just to give yourself...

Research PapersLililo - Jul 28, 2024Holt - Jul 28, 2024
Can discrimination be escaped?

3 - @Holt thanks so much on your feedback!...

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UBC Personal Profile - Various perspectives

2 - Avoid the reference point "I" in the descriptions from your parents and friends. You need to make sure that...

Undergraduatemdamissu - Jul 28, 2024Holt - Jul 28, 2024
The future of the automotive industry

2 - I realize that this is a draft which leaves you plenty of room for improvement. I would probably start...

Writing FeedbackRcD - Jul 27, 2024Holt - Jul 28, 2024
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