vangiespen
Jan 3, 2016
Undergraduate / The moment I laid eyes on my surroundings in Bangladesh, it sparked something inside me. SOP [7]
As reviewer, I would immediately be drawn in by your discussion of the way that the infrastructure in the U.S. has been deteriorating over time and thus, has hampered the growth and developed of the country that was once a world leader.
Start off by discussing the trip you had to Bangladesh and then your realization that while the infrastructure of Bangladesh was in disarray, you could not help but be reminded of the way that the U.S. infrastructure is also deteriorating at a similar pace. Then, when you say that:
Here in the United States, I'm used to dependable and great infrastructure that I didn't realized the impact it brings to society and country. My life's goal became clear to me that I want to become a civil engineer to fulfill my dream and goal of contributing to society.
You can add that you do not want the United States to fall victim to the same infrastructure problems that countries like Bangladesh have. Make the essay all about wanting to first, help the United States improve itself. Since you come from an immigrant family, make sure that you refer to wanting to give back and take care of the country that gave you a chance at a better life. Second, refer to wishing to help Bangladesh as well after you have done your part in the United States. Focusing your ambitions on 2 achievable missions is better than referring to an international ambition that you know you cannot make happen in the future. Focus only on the doable aspects of your future dreams and plans :-)
As reviewer, I would immediately be drawn in by your discussion of the way that the infrastructure in the U.S. has been deteriorating over time and thus, has hampered the growth and developed of the country that was once a world leader.
Start off by discussing the trip you had to Bangladesh and then your realization that while the infrastructure of Bangladesh was in disarray, you could not help but be reminded of the way that the U.S. infrastructure is also deteriorating at a similar pace. Then, when you say that:
Here in the United States, I'm used to dependable and great infrastructure that I didn't realized the impact it brings to society and country. My life's goal became clear to me that I want to become a civil engineer to fulfill my dream and goal of contributing to society.
You can add that you do not want the United States to fall victim to the same infrastructure problems that countries like Bangladesh have. Make the essay all about wanting to first, help the United States improve itself. Since you come from an immigrant family, make sure that you refer to wanting to give back and take care of the country that gave you a chance at a better life. Second, refer to wishing to help Bangladesh as well after you have done your part in the United States. Focusing your ambitions on 2 achievable missions is better than referring to an international ambition that you know you cannot make happen in the future. Focus only on the doable aspects of your future dreams and plans :-)