Undergraduate /
Achieving academic success, revolutionary research, studying in Paris - Why UChicago? [10]
upon spotting the famous museums and attractions
, I was jolted from my haze of worn cement and white lines
exploring my passion for Political Science and Psychology in the Social Sciences division of The College - why is the college capitalized
I found
so much more.
I resolved to spend my next four years wearing maroon
, while exploring my passion for Political Science
A medium for autonomy, the quarter system, not only solidified my interest in pursuing- no comma after system
but also set
the University of Chicago apart during my college search
I loved everything about
the University of Chicago-from the - i think a comma would work better than a dash
from the core curriculum, small class sizes,
the theological seminary,
and Regenstein Library to the house system with resident masters. - I would cut some of these to help with the flow
Moreover , with the flexibility offered at UChicago, I knew I could flourish, be innovative, and fuel my creativity. - I feel like the moreover does not fit here
with the flexibility offered at UChicago, I knew I could flourish, be innovative, and fuel my creativity. - be specific what kind of flexibility are you talking about. What will allow you to flourish and be creative? the classes maybe
the campus traditions such as scav hunt, summer breeze, estro and testo fest, Super- these are all names of events so they should be capitalized
and dance marathon, compelled me to want to participate, or even initiate my own tradition.- no comma after marathon
As I browsed the shelves of
the co-op bookstore,
studying abroad in Paris
with the social sciences programI
imagined saw myself as a Maroon- saw is more definate