Writing Feedback / Tourist arrivals in Japan from 4 different countries between 1990 and 2010 [2]

The bar chart depicts the visitors who come from four different countries in Japan over 20 year-period and is measured by the number of people. Overall, the main fact that stands out is United States of America led by far than Australia, United Kingdom, and South Africa. Moreover, over the timeframe shown, USA showed a gradual increase while the others fluctuated.

In 1990, the sum of people from USA stood at roughly 45,000. Then, it rose steadily to around 48,000 in 2000 and reached above 50,000 people, which was the highest than three other countries by the end of the period. UK, on the other side, experienced a fluctuation from time to time.

On the other hand, Australia and South Africa had a similar pattern, which increased in the first ten years, but then dropped in the end of the period. Firstly, from 1990 to 2000, Australia grew gradually, which hit more or less 25,000 people, yet it was followed by a dramatic fall to approximately 12,000 in 2010 whereas South Africa initially stood at 10,000 people but then fluctuated to end around 11,000 people, the least than other countries.

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Writing Feedback / Children should be taught both to co-operate and be a rival with other students [NEW]

Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion

It is generally held by some people that competitive climate amongst children should be supported while others assume collaboration with another student is more worthwhile in order to be useful grown-ups. Although, to some extent I agree that rivalry amongst students is good for children development, I firmly believe children who are preached to work collaboratively with one another will gain social skill and be more heedful to other people. This skill is absolutely helpful when children grow up and become a part of workforce.

To begin with, a competitive sense would encourage children to believe in themselves. When students in earlier ages, their parents usually register them in many of contests, such as drawing, modeling, or child-related contests, so as to instill the sense of self-confident so that children believe that they could be better if they strive for it. It is immensely useful for child development, because at childhood, the most important thing is how to enhance the children's improvement even though it is merely beneficial for themselves. Nevertheless, collaboration should be taught as well so as to prevent children to be more selfish or self-centered.

Regarding to the second idea, different situation happens when children become an adult, in which they should work together with other people. Therefore, the sense of working collaboratively with other students will helpfully improve children's social skills. For example, the children are given hard tasks which only can be finished if they work together. As such, students will realise they should be neck-and neck with other students, otherwise they will fail. Thus, they will know how to co-operate and be more sensitive with others. To work collaboratively with others is important, social skill when they are mature and entering job market.

in light of what has been said, children should be taught both to co-operate and be a rival with other students. Both of which are good for children development because they are still in their infancy. However, more attention should be paid on how to co-operate with other people owing to be more worthwhile when they become grown-ups and enter job market.

Writing Feedback / Population in the state of Oregon by County from 1940 to 2000 [3]

The line graph portrays the growing number of population, which is measured in thousands over 60-year period in Columbia, Yamhill, and Washington. Overall, the main fact that stands out is that in all counties experienced an increase in the sum of inhabitants. Moreover, Washington's population rose significantly among two other counties.

To begin with, in 1940, the number of residents in Washington stood at 75,000. Then, it increased gradually to roughly 122,000 by the end of 1970. Subsequently, the population of Washington showed a dramatic growth, which hit a high of around 245,000 people in the end of the period.

Turning to Yamhil and Columbia, both of which experienced a similar pattern from time to time. Firstly, they stood at 30,000 and 25,000 respectively in 1940. Over the following 30 years, Yamhil and Columbia grew slightly to 45,000 and 35,000 and then rose dramatically to 90,000 and 77,000 successively in the timeframe shown.

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Writing Feedback / The most attraction places to visit by different people living in Australia [3]

Some locations, which are visited by distinct people's background that live in Australia, including those who were born in Australia, new migrants born in English-speaking country as well as in other countries, are presented in the bar chart measured by percentage. Overall, the most significant fact to emerge is that cinema becomes the most attraction place to visit by all different people in that category. Moreover, zoo and library are in the second places while theatre is the least attraction location to visit.

To begin with, cinema is in the first place as the most attraction place, in which more than 50% or above different people living in Australia visit this spot. However, people born in Australia sit in the first bar chart which hit 70% and it is followed by new migrants who were born in English-speaking countries as well as in other countries which reach around 65% and 50% respectively.

Subsequently, zoo and library are in the second locations to visit by average people in category, in which zoo becomes the main attraction reaching at 50% for new migrants born in English-speaking while library becomes the primary attraction spot which hits roughly 55% for new migrants born in other countries. In addition, theatre is deemed as unattractive place to visit by distinct people's background, the lowest in the bar chart in general.

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Writing Feedback / Every student should be encouraged, regardless his achivement [2]

Some teachers tend to reward students who achieve high academic results. Others, however, support and reward students show the most improvement.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

Students achieving great score in academic results, believed by some people, should be awarded while others assume students who display significant improvement related to their academic history are prioritised. I firmly believe both of them should be conducted in balance, regardless whether they show high academic results or most enhancement. This will make students motivated to learn, which is good for their academic development.

On one hand, students who are rewarded due to their high academic achievement will feel elated and respected because they think what they have done in school is not in vain and is valued by their teachers. For example, when one student gets first rank in class and then the teachers give them a present, it will bring out what best in them and they would be more confindent about themselves so that they could maintain their achievements.

Turning to the next idea, students showing impressive improvement regarding to their educational process should be supported as well. This matter will encourage them to learn from their mistakes and it will make the students realise that they could be as smart as another student if they strive maximally. For instance, if students get bad score, but they try to change it by learning consistently in the next days, teachers should also appreciate them. Because sometimes, it is not about merely the good academic record, but it is all about the progress that students made.

To sum up, both students in those categories should be rewarded and encouraged so as to maintain their academic record. By doing as such, students are more likely to stay motivated in the learning process so that it will be benefits them more. In addition, it will make them believe in themselves at the same time.

Writing Feedback / Improving public health by providing affordable medicine as well as hospital for everyone [2]

Some say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sport facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

Improving public health by rising the sum of sport facilities is generally believed by many people, while others assume it does not have significant effect on public health and needs other solutions. It is agreed to some extent that sport amenities could improve one's health; however, I firmly believe another solution, such as building hospital which can be afford by the poor would play important role in increasing public health.

It is well-known fact that sports could keep you being healthy, because by working out, for example, in sport facilities, your body will be sweating, which is great to improve indvidual's health. For example, many people in vibrant city will go to gym when they want to exercise due to lack of public space to do as such in out door. When they go to the gym, they have to be a member and pay some money in order to harness its facilities, which is not everyone will get the benefits because some people do not have much amount of money.

Since the idea is to increase public health, so everyone should get the advantages from it and that is the primary reason why another measure, such as establishing affordable infirmaries, is needed. This is because when rich people can go to the gym as well as a decent and expensive hospital so as to maintain their health; on the other hand, the poor can go to affordable infirmaries to buy medicine they need. Because when it comes to improve public health, the first thing we can do is by providing affordable medicine and hospital for every person.

In light of what has been said, although the sport facilities could improve one's health, but it is not play significant role to improve public health. Thus, another solution like affordable hospital is needed. By doing as such, I could assure public health will increase significantly.

Writing Feedback / The production of energy from coal in Denmark, Germany, Sweden, and France [2]

The graph gives information about the percentage of energy produced from coal in four countries, including Denmark, Germany, Sweden, and France, over 15-year period. The main fact that stands out is that the production of energy from coal in all countries experienced a decrease over the period shown.

Denmark and Germany began at fairly similar levels of 60% and 55% respectively in the proportion of energy from coal. Subsequently, both Denmark and Germany jumped sharply to under 20%, when Germany hit a low of 5%. However, there was a slight increase for Germany, in which German overtook Denmark to finish around 18%, while Denmark finished at 10%, the lowest of that year.

On the other hand, the energy from coal which was produced in Sweden and France stood under 40%, and then fell slightly to same or under 30% in 1998. Over the following three years, their proportion remained stable, which were followed by a short fall in 2004 and leveling off at this rate for the remainder of the period.

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Writing Feedback / The causes and some possible solutions to overcome traffic congestion [3]

Many cities have serious problem with traffic congestion

What are the causes of these problems and what are some possible solutions?

Every metropolitan city in the world must be facing the issue of traffic jam. This happens because of some reasons, such as uneven development which led to transmigration from rural to urban area, the growing number of cars on our streets, and at last, the road space which remains unchaged from year to year. The government must take initiatives to handle this problem by proposing some fresh solutions, such as encouraging people to use public transportation, limiting the ownership of private cars as well as the number of people in cars when it is used.

Traffic congestion is not a new problem; however, government, for example in Indonesia, finds it hard to overcome this matter. The primary reason of this issue, I think, comes from uneven development in each province so that it is triggered many people to move so as to seek a decent life by working in modern cities. Another cause of this problems comes from the increasing sum of cars which are used by many people, but this is not followed by constructing new roads; consequently, many cars bogged down on the streets due to lack of roads.

Regarding to this matter, some solutions could be proposed in order to help reducing traffic congestion. One of the solutions is to encourage people to use public transportation so that the number of private vehicles on the streets go down. Another solution is to introduce laws which forbade people to have more than 2 vehicles as well as to limit the minimum number of passengers in cars, and thus people do not use, for example, one car for one person. By doing as such, I strongly believe the traffic jam on the streets will decrease progressively.

In conclusion, the issue of traffic congestion is something like people cannot shun in many modern cities and needs strenuous effort to be overcome. The causes of this problem could come from many aspects as what has been explained; thus, government will play significant roles by proposing some policies to reduce the congestion.

Writing Feedback / How much coffee were exported from 3 countries between 2002 and 2012 [3]

The amount of coffee, which was measured by kilograms and exported from three countries between 2002 and 2012, is illustrated in the figures. The most significant facts to emerge from the graph are that all countries, including Brazil, Colombia, and Costa Rica, experienced a growth in coffee exports by the end of 2012, in which Brazil always leads Colombia and Costa Rica.

Brazil and Costa Rica began at fairly similar level of 12 and 15 consecutively. While Brazil saw an increase over the following 4 years with reaching 15 million kilograms, Costa Rica fell to 7 million kilograms in 2006. Subsequently, Brazil's exports rose gradually to 20 million kilograms, which was followed by a short fall to 17 million kilograms in the following two years. At the end of period, Brazil hit a high of its exports with 25 million kilograms. In contrast, Costa Rica experienced a steady increase per two years starting from 2006.

Columbia, on the other hand, stood at 5 kilograms at first. Then, over the following 4 years, there was a gradual rise, in which Columbia surpassed Costa Rica with 12 million kilograms in 2006. Subsequently, it was followed by a sudden decrease in 2008, when its exports hit a low of 1.5 million kilograms. From 2008 to 2012, Columbia's pattern grew significantly to 15 million kilograms at the end of period