Writing Feedback / ( IELTS essay) college degree is less valuable now compared to the past? [14]

Is a college degree is less valuable or respected now than it was in the past?

A university degree is universally accepted as the document of one's knowledge in depth. However, many people feel that the value of a college degree is diminished now, while others oppose. In this essay, I will explain why I feel that universities are not devaluated.

To begin with, education is a golden key to prosperity. In this age of economic recession, university degrees are vital to get a decent job. Increased levels of education will open the doors of opportunities for students. They can take a profession of their choice, and enjoy doing it, instead of being forced to take a low waged job that they dislike. Besides, a university degree is not just a key to job opportunities, but an answer to personal development. People become more independent, creative and bold. A gainful employment is the basic of a financial stability and can provide a better life for their family and dependents. Thus, their living status and self-satisfaction will increase.

Apparently, education means getting to know and understand yourself and the world. The more educated people, the better the world will be. As they know their rights and duties, they will be an asset to the country. Another point is that, educated workers are not only productive but also attract foreign investment. Most importantly, education is an investment for the future. Presently, many countries are allocating a large portion of their budget for education hold testimony to this view. Moreover, every successful company seeks for employers who have university degree since a college degree serves as a proof that the individual has a good amount of learning ability. Furthermore, people need to learn new skills and courses in order to stay in the workforce of this rapidly changing world.

In conclusion, university degree not only provides deeper knowledge, but also plays an important role in the personal and economic progress. I personally feel, in this age of globalization and liberalization, the value of university degrees are surging day by day, and it will continue in the future too.

Writing Feedback / Changing jobs frequently?I feel it's good to continue at least for six years (IELTS) [4]

People have different job expectations for job. Some people prefer to do the same job, for the same company. Others prefer to change the jobs frequently. Write advantages and disadvantages of each viewpoint.

In this modern fast world everything is keep on changing. It is applicable to jobs too. Some people prefer to change the jobs or even the workplace constantly, while others hesitate to adapt the frequent changes. I my essay I will explore the benefits and drawbacks of both views.

Working for the same company for a long period of time might help people to establish a solid position in that company. As they know the routine of the company and the higher authorities, it will be helpful for them to maintain a smooth relationship with work and life. Their long experience and loyalty are beneficial for higher benefits such increment in salary, bonus, pension and so on, according to seniority. Furthermore, this offers respect from other employees and they become eligible for higher position or promotion. Most importantly, the steady income, and job security are pivotal in this age of economic crisis to lead a standard life. Moreover, they can plan their future in a better way and the savings for future gives financial security and peace of mind. For instance, they can plan the higher education of their children early by starting a small recurrent fixed deposit from their regular income. As it is a small amount, it will not affect the budget and in future, it becomes a big amount. However, the monotonous job may feel boring or de- motivated for so many people and their quality of work may suffer.

On the other hand, there are so many reasons to support changing jobs. Chief among this is that, as they are more versatile and dynamic, they are able to cope with the challenges in their work place in a better way. Another point is that, it improves their employability. Working in several different jobs means that they have more skills. Additionally, constant changes enable them to enrich their life experiences, which is an integral part of an exciting life worth living. They will never get bored in one job or left unemployed, as they have differential skills. Nevertheless, employers may not trust in these people, as they are not loyal. Apparently, the continuous shifting of houses, schools are detrimental for leading a steady life. The problems and challenges of a very new environment are not always favorable. The insecure jobs and income may put their life in a miserable condition.

In conclusion, be loyal to a company and changing jobs frequently has its own merits as well as demerits. One should think deeply about it before choosing either. In my perception, I favor in continuing one company or same job, at least for a period of six yrs.

Writing Feedback / Shifting large factories to countryside helps solve traffic&housing issues... I agree [6]

Traffic and housing problem in major cities could be solved by moving large companies and factories and their employees to the countryside. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion.

In order to utilize the better job opportunities and living standards in the cities, nowadays people are favoring to live in cities. At the same time, large companies and their workforce make the congestion in cities more severe. In my perception, it is better to shift these large institutions to the county side.

To begin with, there are so many benefits in shifting large companies to the countryside. People often are attracted towards the better living standards and facilities. If these large companies are moved into the village areas and provide better facilities for it's employees such as schools, shopping complexes and so on, it will give a different experience to the villagers. Consequently, the living standard of these remote villages will improve. Secondly, the living cost in the villages will be less, compared to the cities. The availability of larger areas also will be a blessing for big companies. If they allocate place for their employees' accommodation near their companies it can reduce the need of living place in large cities for this work force. It undeniably drops the shortage of housing and thus the rent of lodges.

Most importantly, the traffic congestion in the cities always makes the city life miserable. The roads in the cities are not only used by the commuters, but also by the public. It leads to severe traffic block in the city roads especially in the peak hours. This paved way to air, land, water and noise pollution and associated problems. If the vehicles of these employees are reduced, obviously, the traffic on the roads will be considerably trim down. The easy movement of vehicles and good condition of roads enable the city dwellers to enjoy their life in a better way. Moreover, the reduction in the rent and easy availability of lodges improves their living standards.

In conclusion, by relocating the large firms and their workforce to the countryside is beneficial to both the companies and the villagers. This in turn, relives the traffic problems and housing issues. Admittedly, this will improve the living standards of the people in the cities and countryside.

Writing Feedback / ( IELTS essay) Cigarette advertisements should be banned completely? [6]

Cigarette addition is attributed to the uncensored T.V. advertisements of cigarette. For this reason, all cigarette advertisements should be banned.

'Smoking is injurious to health', both for active and passive smokers. As people are more inclined towards the advertisements, so many people would like to see a ban on these unhealthy products commercials. In my essay I will explore the reasons why I am totally agree with this idea.

Admittedly, uncensored television advertisements are one of the most solid reasons of initiating smoking among young people. To catch the eye of more people, advertisement companies put all their best efforts to make it more attractive, such as using celebrities, colorful scenes, good songs and so on. Young generation believes that, what is coming in this commercials are true. As they are not mature enough to distinguish the right from the wrong, they follow it blindly and take up the smoking habit. Moreover, most of them are hero-worshiping and like to imitate what their hero is doing. As a result, these uncensored advertisements put the lives of young generation in trouble. Additionally, banning smoking advertisements and making it less socially acceptable are seems to be most effective against smoking. For instance, if young people see fewer picture of people smoking on T.V, they are less tempted to use and assume that, it as a bad behavior.

Furthermore, young generation is the future of the country and smoking leads to healthy problems. Smoking causes issues from simple allergies to dangerous lung cancers. A healthy future generation only can contribute in the economic progress of the country. Most importantly, it affects the non-smokers through passive smoking. It is the responsibility of the Governments, to provide their right, a smoke free environment. Besides, these non-productive sick people are burden on family, economy and the government. Though it provide tax for the government, it is not even sufficient to give medical facilities for those who are sick after enjoying this bad habit. Governments oblige to allocate more money for this purpose and it is a waste of taxpayers' money. Other family members also suffer and it leaves unfavorable impacts on their family budget and living standards.

To conclude, it is undeniably true that, uncensored cigarette advertisements can cause insurmountable problems to people, family, society, economy and governments. We should take all possible efforts to reduce these adverse impacts. Let us dream a smoke free society and support complete ban on cigarette commercials both censored and uncensored.

Writing Feedback / ( IELTS essay) Computer will diminish the writing skills [3]

Schoolchildren are becoming far too dependent on computer. This is having an alarming effect on reading and writing skills. Teachers need to avoid using computers in a classroom at all costs and go back basic study skills. Do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, modern technology has totally changed our approach to study. In fact, some people believe that modern technology does many of our day-to-day activities, both for young and adult, which in turn will adversely affect our lives. Especially children may lose developing their basic skills such as reading and writing. In my opinion, combining old methods and new technology will be beneficial.

To begin with, the advanced technology plays an undeniable role in the teaching learning process. Access to internet with computers has opened up a new world of information for not only students but also teachers. We can collect the knowledge about anything at any time under the fingers by using internet. Furthermore, new technologies are using to teach alphabets, numbers and words to little children. Through different programs and games, they enjoy and learn these essential skills. Undeniably, in many countries, students no longer have to copy their note by hand from the black board, instead the teacher give them a photocopy. These typed assignments and notes, are much easier to read and are much neater.

On the other hand, the knowledge of writing, reading and spelling are pivotal in every body's life. Undoubtedly, these skills are deteriorated by the over use of computers. The computer even checks the spelling and grammar as they go. As it needs less effort, children may neglect their basic skills such as spellings and writing. It is true that, hand written documents are not look neatly when compared with typed ones. Nevertheless, lacking this skill may create detrimental effects on these children's future lives. They should learn the basics of spelling and grammar. It is impossible to use computer everywhere. Beside, handwriting is a personal identification too.

In conclusion, though technology can have its own merits to improve the quality of teaching learning process, over use of it can cause unfavorable impacts especially on small children. It is better to use the technology to impart these skills in children than blaming it or to shifting to old ways.

Writing Feedback / ( IELTS essay) Advertisements encourages to buy unwanted things? [6]

Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisement tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which you agree?

Undoubtedly, in this competitive world, advertisement plays an important role in the buying nature of the consumers. It raises a controversial issue whether the advertisements compel us to purchase more than our need or it improves our daily lives. However, I believe that wise use of advertisement can uplift our lives.

The vital function of the advertisements is to inform the costumer about the entry of a new product, the manufacture, content, price or a service. It guide people through the market and services and a blessing for those who have not enough time to search all these things and enables better choice. Thus, it is informative and useful.

On the other hand, advertisements not only inform us about a new product but also force people to want them. In other words, modern commercials not merely matchmaker of a consumer but, actually interfere with the buyer's desires and creating artificial needs. For instance, an advertisement of pain relief equipment compels you to buy that, even though your pain is relieving by a pain balm. Additionally, the buying pattern and success of a product is highly depended on the publicity of that product. This shows the importance of advertisements in determining the success of a product. On the contrary, there are so many products, which meet the requirement of the consumer failed to catch the eye of the society due to the lack of knowledge about the product.

Admittedly, many companies allocate a major share of their budget for introducing new products and using wisely for hiring celebrities, making attractive advertisements, giving discounts, providing after sale discounts and so on. Being attracted by the spell of advertisements, people used to buy things, which is even not necessary. Moreover, commercials oblige us to buy things just because they are fashionable or up to date and not because our old one is no longer useful. When a successful person or celebrity introduces these products, people blindly believe that, to become up to date in the fast world these products are inevitable.

In conclusion, advertisement is important, as it provides valuable information about a product. However, it is wise to learn more details of the product and compare it with our real needs before choosing a product. Then only, these advertisement are favorable for us, otherwise it will be a mere wastage of money, time, energy and resources.

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Writing Feedback / ( IELTS essay) ageing population: impacts on society. [5]

In countries like Japan, the population is getting older, are the effects of aging population on society is negative or positive. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

The advancement in technology improved the life expectancy of people. As a result, the number of old age people is significantly increased. These aged population, has both positive and negative impacts on society. I feel it has more adverse effect than positive impacts.

To begin with, graying population can be detrimental to the society as a whole, with its impacts on health care, labor market, economic productivity and on taxation. Firstly, there may not be enough people to work. The economy may be less productive and the government may bring foreign workers. Secondly, employed senior citizens may lead to unemployment to the young generation. Thirdly, there will not be enough young people to look after the aged people. They might have to move old age homes.

An another point is that, elder people don't buy many anythings or to spend a lot of money. This also will reduce the economic growth. Lastly, the financial burden of the Government will surge. They may allocate more money for pension payment, medical allowances, maintaining old age homes and other concessions for senior citizens. They cannot earn lot and less tax return. All these, badly effects the society.

However, not all effects have to be negative. There are some advantages in having lots of experience in life and work. Moreover, some are extremely wise and experienced to take the responsibility to govern an important institution or even a country and lead to prosperity. Additionally, elder people can teach their grand children well. They drive carefully, may reduce the road accidents, not steal or fight, diminish conflicts, and will be less competition for jobs or other needs.

In conclusion, we should appreciate the beauty and potential of the youth and the advice and experience of the old. However, a society with young generation will progress fast.

Writing Feedback / (IELTS essay) Corporal punishment to discipline children? [4]

Some people believe that corporal punishment will spoil the children. While others believe that, it is the best method of teaching discipline to children. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Many parents use physical punishment to discipline their children. Others prefer to use different methods to reward good behavior or punish misbehavior. It became a controversial issue nowadays. However, I am partially agreeing the physical punishment. In this essay, I will explore the both sides of this argument.

Admittedly, there are many reasons to allow corporal punishment. First point is that, for childrens' better future, it is vital to teach them discipline form their childhood onward by using appropriate methods including physical punishment. Some parents feel it is difficult to manage small children without physical punishment. The second point is that, it is quick and effective. For instance, it can be useful to smack a two years old child quickly, who is creaming unnecessarily. Thirdly, as it is more memorable, it deters them from repeating the same mistake in the future. Significantly, it will help them to learn the right from the wrong in a better way if use properly.

Nevertheless, if parents are allowed to hit their children for the sake of teaching discipline, some parents may lose control and can injure children. They may find it as an easy way to release their stress. It will lead to more physical and emotional damage on children. It further spoil the good relationship between the child and parents. Particularly, when it not proportional to their age and seriousness of the crime. For instance, beating 16 yrs old who came late from school once is not good as smacking a screaming 2years old child.

Additionally, physical punishment is banned in some countries and schools because of some solid reasons. Chief among this is that, this will protect the child from abuse. Another point is that, it teaches the children that they can use force to make others to do what we want, especially when didn't understand their mistake. Besides, small words of appreciations and motivations are not only, beneficial for children to understand their mistakes and think about it, but also, to develop and follow good habits.

In conclusion, physical punishment causes adverse impacts on childrens' life. In my perception, it can be a useful method of discipline in small children, if used carefully, as a last resort.