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Posts by aqeel
Joined: Dec 26, 2012
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aqeel   
Dec 26, 2012
Writing Feedback / Sports & no risky behavior; What do you do for good health ? [5]

During my thirty years, I have learned a lot of things in my life, but an important thing is healthy living and importing the wisdom how to be healthy as possible to other people. For most folks, healthy person who does not smoke and is at the healthy weight. Those are great things ,but there is more to health than just having healthy weight .For example , my friend john has healthy ,but he has heart -related problems . There are many aspects to healthy living

At the first, the important thing to the healthy living is doing the sport exercises . If a person keep going to gym , there are many health problem will be solved. The running exercise helps the body to decrease the heavy weight. Other exercises help to melt the harmful fats . For instance , my cousin reduced the heavy weight by exercising. Now he always go to the gym and do exercise.in short . Should person do exercise , he / she will be healthy.

In addition , organic breakfast is sufficient at the morning. Then the good time for lunch at mid-day . A person have to eat some fruit at the night to avoid the unnecessary calories.I had some problem with my stomach. After I make this healthy schedule, I feel well.There is equate says " you what you eat" , if a person eats organic and healthy food , he / she live healthy .

Finally, stop risky behavior and focus on good behavior. A person have to stop the smoking . It causes many dangerous disease, and a lot of people die daily. The another thing is drinking alcohol . It causes lever related problems . On the other hand , we have to take enough time for sleeping , and drink sufficient amount of water. In fact the human body has 60-70% of water , and it is important chemical reaction in side the body. We have to drink a lot of water in the morning and little before the sleeping . The healthy person should sleep for eight hours daily and drink water in 7-8 times per day. In sum , the healthy person have to sleep enough time and drink sufficient amount of water.
aqeel   
Dec 26, 2012
Undergraduate / I followed my dad/ Johns Hopkins Supp/ Something about you [3]

ayue7890
Hi
it is unclear assay. there are many grammatical errors. for example
I began to battle with language developmental delay since I was thirty months old
maybe you mean that:
My battle with language developmental delay was started before thirty months ...
good luck
aqeel   
Dec 26, 2012
Research Papers / Drinking age, lowering age to 18 - research paper [21]

Hi
I recommend that anyone not only have to stop drinking , but also should not drink forever .
my another reason: keep people healthy because it causes liver related problems.
good luck
aqeel   
Dec 26, 2012
Writing Feedback / "How to be a parent"/ What makes a person an adult? [5]

During my thirty years, I have learned a lot of things in my life, but an important thing is how to be a parent. For must folks , the parents have to feed the children with healthy food, , help them in their homework and provide them with good health insurance. Those are great things, but there is more to help children to be an adult than food and health insurance. For example, my friend John have tow sons . Even though they were provided with suitable teaching , organic food and covering health insurance, they are still adult children.there are many aspects to help the children to be an adult.

At the first , the parents have to help their adult child to be independent.When the child adult get a job , he/ she will be independent, because he going to earn money. He/ she can travel with a friend, and study in an university, adult child have to support their family by pay the rent of his/ her room. If child adult can not get a job. The parent have to support their child with essentials such as money to buy groceries or pay the bills, but the adult child should do some household chores . In short the parent have to help their child to be an adult by making him/her independent.

In addition, the parents have to encourage their children to move home.Then they have responsible. They should pay the rent the apartment, do errands ,and sufficient health insurance. For instance the oldest son of my teacher moved home. He became bigger than he was with his family. In sum, I think that if the child move home , he will be an adult.

Finally, a child will became an adult ,whether he/she study at the university. He have to do hard to pass the exams . It is big responsibility.

A student have to make plan to study , work , do homework,and get entertainment. For example , I was so lazy before I study in the university.I surprise in the new system of my college . Then my father help me by planning my time , so I did well. Now I am an entomologist in the university.

The child can be an adult by getting a job opportunities , moving home and studying at the university. I am sure your children life will be better if you help them in their life.
aqeel   
Dec 26, 2012
Writing Feedback / IELTS - petrol price increment (Traffic and pollution) [3]

Hi
it is a great essay , but you did not solve the pollution problem in your essay.
I suggest that
the government should build the high ways which decreasing the traffic problem in crowded cities. in addition , new cities should be constructed at new places.

regard
aqeel   
Dec 26, 2012
Writing Feedback / organization deal with recycling; The one thing you do to improve your community? [3]

I have learned a lot of things in my life , but an important thing is to think positively where I have lived .Many people believe that the good man who is teaching person and has a nice family . This is great thing, but there are more to be teaching person and have a nice family than to be positively where you life . I have lived in Basra city , Iraq since I was born . It nice place to live , but I really worry about environmental pollution, so I want to share the solution this problem by making an organization of recycling.

At the first ,I will make a plan to contact with the local government about the environmental pollution. I know that the families throw a lot of cans , papers, plastic and etc. If these substances analysis .it will be polluted the soil and the rivers . The government have to contact with a company deal with the trash and recycle. This company will provide the families with different kind of sacks for each kind of trash . In short , i make an organization deal with the recycling.

In addition , I will make a workshop for the people . It will be at the schools and I going to invite the families to explain the problem of the environmental pollution and how is to solve the problem . I will talk about the recycling importance .I will encourage them to support the local government to success this idea . For example , I read about the an recycling organization in Baghdad city stated with the families . Then it was successful in their solution. In sum , rely in the families to success the project.

If I decided to share the solution of the environmental pollution in my city , I will make an organization deal with the recycling, contact the local government and talk with the families to support my idea .
aqeel   
Dec 28, 2012
Writing Feedback / Which should your school choose to buy -computer or books; 'advanced science' [4]

your school has enough money to purchase either books for students or computer for the library . which should your school choose to buy -computer or books?

During my thirty years, I learned a lot of things in my life, but an important thing is helping the student to learn advanced science. Many people thought that students have to study in the regular book. It is a great thing, however, more importantly, the student study in the computer to learn the advanced science. I prefer to purchase the computer for the students in my school, if I have to choose the books or the computers for many reasons.

At the first , the computer has many options , therefor the student can use it in the reading lessons. The computer has advanced program contain such as the reader book. This program can be used by the student simply. Also the computer has other programs. Such as database , power point , excel etc . when the student learn them , he/ she can be creative in other lessons such as math ,chemistry , physic , etc . Moreover , they can get a entertainment in the computer, as they can play the music or draw a beautiful paints. In short, the computer has many program that help the students in the lessons and get fun.

In addition , the computer was found where you are. if the students used to study in the computer in the school.Then They can use it in the other daily activities . For instance, they can excess to the Internet, and know many things about the science. In fact I have an experience in my city , the students who used to study by the computer get high degree in high school than the student who study by the book. In sum , the computer provide the students to learn many things in the world.

In the conclusion , I would like to purchase the computer to my school if I have money because the computer has a lot of programs which help the student in their study and it the student can use the computer to excess the internet . I am sure the students learning will be better ,weather they used the computer in their study
aqeel   
Jan 1, 2013
Writing Feedback / PERCENTAGES OF HOUSEHOLD ITEMES; ( IELTS) table graph [6]

At the same time in 1972 the top three position is use were occupied by television, vacuum cleaner and refrigerator respectively.
you can say that : In 1972, the highest three positions were television, vacuum cleaner and refrigerator respectively.
aqeel   
Jan 1, 2013
Writing Feedback / Should the parents plan their children s leisure? Yes [5]

some people believe that the parent should plan to their children s leisure. Others believe that the children should decided to plan who to spend their free time.

During my thirty years, I have learned a lot of things in my life, but perhaps, the most important of all them is to be a parent. Many of people believe that the parent should feed their children with the organic food and provide them with suitable health insurance. However, more importantly, parents is responsible about preparing their children to life, including planing their leisure for the following reason.

The first reason can seen by every person that the children still do not know the life well. There is a proverb says " the person who older than you in a day know more than you ". As a parents, they have got experience in many things. They know the nice and safe place where the children can go. To illustrate this, there is an example that is very persuasive. The entertainment land have a lot of dangerous game such as fasting train , if children ride in it , they may fall from it.

The second reason for my propensity for parents should plan to their children is that the children may be a murders in the future if they still decide what they want to spend their free time . I now still remember that the report about the violence programs in the television. If the children keep to see this movie , they will be a worst person.

In conclusion, I prefer that the parents should plan to their children to spend the leisure For the experience of the parents and some of the violence program which may be seen by the children at the free time. I am sure that if the parent plan the free time of the children, they will enjoy at their leisure.
aqeel   
Jan 4, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS: go to university or start work after school? going to uni is a better choice [5]

here are some mistakes which I found in the first para.

More and more people decide to graduate from university, because they believe that the skills and knowledge they gain will help them get a good job. However, there are still people who do not agree with this view

Many people decide to graduate from university because they believe that they will get the skills and knowledge which help them get a good job. However, others do not agree with this view

sound better with this sentences
Many people hold the opinion that they should graduate from a university, ....
aqeel   
Jan 4, 2013
Book Reports / writing essay about the Great Gatsby and Hamlet [3]

I have learned a lot of things about the literature when I started study... , but perhaps the most important thing that I read marvelous plays and novels. Many student believe that they should read more nonfiction books to pass succeed in this class.This is very great thing. however, more importantly the good student who has the ability to criticize the literature

good luck
aqeel   
Jan 4, 2013
Writing Feedback / Some people tend to study a subject on intensive way over a short period of time [6]

Some people tend to study a subject on intensive way over a short period of time,while others tend to study a subject constantly or long period of time. What is the better way to of learning ?

Some people hold the opinion that they should study a subject constantly over long period of time. However, more importantly, people who intend to study subject should study in a very intensive way over short period of time for the following reasons.

The first reason that people who study in a very intensive way over short period of time will save the time , thereby increasing the profound the knowledge. To illustrate this, there is very persuasive example. The students who study the English in full time at the English language institute can pass the TOEFL exam faster than the students who study the language constantly in part time in the same institute.

In addition, the studying a subject in very intensive way can be allowed to the people to study more subject compare with the people do not. Now I still remember that my friend Ail who could get two degrees in short time by using the intensive studying in the university.

Further more, The studying a subject constantly over long period of time is somewhat important as well. It can be helped people who can not understand the topis quickly, or need more time to figure out the complex topic. For instance, some student at the math science need three to four year to graduate from the college.

Nonetheless, I still prefer people who study a subject in a very intensive way over the short period of time I am sure that they can save the time and can study more than they do not.
aqeel   
Jan 6, 2013
Writing Feedback / the best way to raise children is to encourage them to be independent thinkers. [5]

Some people believe the best way to raise children is to encourage them to be independent thinkers. Other disagree with and say that children need to discipline in order to become successful.

During my thirty years, I have learned a lot of thing in my life, but perhaps the most important thing of them all is how to be a good parents. Many people believe that successful parents who is feed their children with organic food, and provide them with suitable health insurance. These are very great thing. Whoever, more importantly, parents are responsible for preparing their children for the future. Due my experience with four children, I prefer that children should be taught the discipline to be successful for the following reasons.

The first reason, children are not mature enough to practice the bad or good activities. Scientist refer that the children could be taught before their birthday. They notice that newborn baby can figure out his/her mothers voice. My sons were taught a lot of the right habits from his mother and me. So they are all intelligent children. For example, my sons were scheduled their day time for teaching many things such as bilingual skill, art, computer. A lot of time and money was spent to provide them with new technology to learn different sciences.

In addition, children never have any experience with life. We are passing on very materialistic era. There are many social, financial, moral problems which we faced through our life. If we leave our children to discover it by their own, they may encounter the danger cases. Some problem can not be solved with any thing such as the health problems. For instance, if they drive a car without any assistance, Probably, they make an accident. For that, children should be taught whatever they need to learn, before the practice it without assistance.

On other hand, raising children to be independent thinker is also important in some sides to built their character. Thereby they can to be a successful adult in the society. For example, parents should encourage their children to choose their clothes, books, and hobbies. At this way, child will be creative person where she/he will live.

Nonetheless, I prefer that children should be taught discipline in order to be successful because they are not mature and have not experience enough in life.
aqeel   
Jan 20, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS: Ageing population. What are the advantages and disadvantage [6]

In the introduction
The effects of an ageing population are considerate. While I accept that population aging presents the positive effects, I believe that this trend's advantages are outweighed by the disadvantage.

Even though I think that the most important population in the society is the older people , I know that the aging society has some disadvantage
aqeel   
Jan 20, 2013
Writing Feedback / Different maniacal types in cultures [4]

There are many maniacal types in our cultures, such as sporting mania. The fans go to the football game because they want to watch the team who supported put a ball in the nets. Likewise, in the religious mania,We noticed the weeping in some religious occasions, or there is rapture in the other religious involvements. However, can the mania be good, alarming, or bad ? I think that some kinds of the mania is important like learning English for the following reasons.

English mania can devoted people to learn English, then they will have a good opportunity job, so they can get better life. I have watched a documentary movie about the learning English of the china students. They study 12 hour a day for three years to determined their future. While they were studying English with huge group, they shouted " I want to speak English. I want to change my life". In short, English learning may help the people to improve their life.

The yearning of English learning as a second language can be involved to solve the global problems. As the music which is used as language of the motions over the world, English is considered as a global language which is helped the specialists and to talk with others who are from other countries to solve the dangerous problem, such as the environmental pollution, drought, and hunger. Even though people recognize that native language is our life, they figure out the importance of the English language in the global problem`s solution.

In the conclusion, English learning intensively can help people whose have this mania to improve their lives. Moreover, it help the scientists to solve the universal problems.
aqeel   
Jan 21, 2013
Writing Feedback / Different maniacal types in cultures [4]

thank you Dumi
the promote is
Do you agree or disagree with the say: Some people believe the best way to change their lives is to be English mania.
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