roswita116
Nov 24, 2019
Writing Feedback / IELTS WRITING TASK 1: the changes of West Park secondary school from 1950 to 2010 [2]
@emme4665
Hi, there. I would like to give you some feedbacks about your writing.🤗🤗
The structures of your IELTS writing task 1 are clear, which contain introduction, overall and 2 paragraphs.
However, some IELTS textbooks or teachers may advise that in writing task 1 it would be better to write 4 paragraphs, taking a closer look at your writing, it seems a little bit awkward for your paragraph 4. Frankly to say, this one sentence cannot be a paragraph. I would suggest you that you can either combine this sentence to paragraph 3 or seperate paragraph 3 into 2 paragraphs so that you can have 4 paragraphs.
I would like to advise that if you do not have sufficient time to write the total 4 paragraphs, the best way is focusing on your paragraph 3 and overview. Without overview, the band score will below 5, and it's better to write a good paragraph 3 than just rush to finish 4 paragraphs.
Hope my feedbacks would help your future writing!🤗🤗
@emme4665
Hi, there. I would like to give you some feedbacks about your writing.🤗🤗
The structures of your IELTS writing task 1 are clear, which contain introduction, overall and 2 paragraphs.
However, some IELTS textbooks or teachers may advise that in writing task 1 it would be better to write 4 paragraphs, taking a closer look at your writing, it seems a little bit awkward for your paragraph 4. Frankly to say, this one sentence cannot be a paragraph. I would suggest you that you can either combine this sentence to paragraph 3 or seperate paragraph 3 into 2 paragraphs so that you can have 4 paragraphs.
I would like to advise that if you do not have sufficient time to write the total 4 paragraphs, the best way is focusing on your paragraph 3 and overview. Without overview, the band score will below 5, and it's better to write a good paragraph 3 than just rush to finish 4 paragraphs.
Hope my feedbacks would help your future writing!🤗🤗