Graduate / "my knowledge in the marketing arena" - Describe any achievements you have made [2]

Hi everybody!
It is the question:
"If you are a re-applicant to the NUS MBA Programme or its Double Degree programmes, please describe any achievements you have made since your last application."

and it is the essay I have written! would you check it and give me a feedback?

"It is the third year in row I am applying for NUS MBA programme. The last year I was lucky to be shortlisted for the interview but unfortunately, I was not successful. So, I decided to improve my qualifications.

In this regard, I took part in two international conferences. The first one was "Marketing and selling of life insurance policies" in which Kevin Kelly internationally acclaimed motivational speaker on entrepreneurship, leadership, sales, creativity and personal excellence talked in it.

Mr. Mehdi Fakharzadeh one of the most successful insurance agents was another lecturer of the conference. Five members of MDRT (The Million Dollar Round Table) also talked about their experiences and methods of marketing.

The second one was international selling conference. Sylvia Perreault, trainer and coach in proud success, Richard Denny, an inspirational business speaker from UK were two of the lecturers.

These conferences helped me to remember how important the knowledge and dream is in my life. Therefore, I decided to apply for the NUS MBA for the third year to achieve my dream of continuing education in a prestigious university.

My paper, "Marketing of life insurance policies; a practical experience" was accepted in the third national conference of "improvement of Iran Insurance Industry".

To expand my knowledge in the marketing arena, I have started reading
To have a better focus on our department operations and optimize our performance, I am learning SPSS."

Graduate / A re-applicant to the NUS MBA Programme - list my achievements or write an essay? [6]

Hi everybody! I need your help again!!!!
I am applying for NUS MBA programme for the third year! One of the questions is "If you are a re-applicant to the NUS MBA Programme or its Double Degree programmes, please describe any achievements you have made since your last application."

Would you give me some idea? You think to list my achievements or write an essay.

Graduate / "give an objective description of yourself including your strengths & weaknesses" [5]

Dear all, i would be happy if you read my essay and give me a feedback.
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Please give an objective description of yourself including your strengths and weaknesses

It is very challenging to write about my own strengths and weaknesses, because sometimes there is a huge gap between what I think I am and what I really am! To get an objective description I tried to ask my friends and colleagues who know me very well that what they think about me.

I think one of my distinguishing strength is the diversity of experiences I possess. I have studied management in the only English language university of Iran and I have more than 5 years of full time and part time work experience at different industries. All these elements have given me a very broad point of view.

While studying at ***, with students from different countries, and working at United Nation High Commissioner for Refugees (UNHCR), I was exposed to cultural diversities. Those were Valuable experiences which helped me to learn how to work effectively with people from all backgrounds and easily blend with different people to achieve shared goals and optimal results.

In addition, I always try to care about those around me regardless of their wealth or social class. I make an effort to show respect and treat all persons with dignity without distinction whatsoever of race, gender, religion, national or any other distinguishing feature. Working at UNHCR as a humanitarian organization helped me to improve this quality.

It is more than one year I am working as Insurance Expert and I have to support and have communication with over 400 agents. Daily I receive many mails and phone calls so I learned when any conflict occurs, I express my disagreements in constructive ways that focus on the issue and not the person.

My experiences also have taught me that my success strongly depends on my accountability level. Therefore, in any activity, I seek to assume responsibility for the deliverance of high quality outcomes in both good and bad times, and take ownership of all responsibilities within my own role.

By joining a team, I challenge others to excel my sense of community, creative thinking and persistence in finding answers to the questions rather than ignoring them and expect others to do the same. Moreover, I encourage my teammates to explore the problem from different angles in order to come to mutual acceptable compromises and a practical solution to the dispute with a focus on maintaining a functioning work environment. this is the way I trust I can help to maintain a high working standard for a team. Our department successfully could increase its portfolio more than 200% and it was not possible without a high quality team activity.

Like any normal person, I have far and wide weaknesses but the point is that I try to use my strength to overcome my weaknesses.

I get a bad attitude when my colleagues do not do their best or when they do not care about improving procedures to work more effectively because it always has done like that.

I am also too patient. May at the first glance it seems a strength but not about me. I usually try to be patient about bad behavior or mistakes of others instead of talking about it and finally I get angry and reflect in a bad way.

Sometimes since I think I am the only one who can do things right, I can't trust others to delegate my authorities and responsibilities.

I am also frank about my viewpoint. In my culture to be too frank is not appreciated and this trait usually causes many problems for me because it seems I am the only one who disagrees!

Finally I know to have a successful life both in personal and career, I need to know myself. And I am working not only to strengthen my strength but also improve my weaknesses.

Graduate / Essay on"your career plans & how this programme will help you attain your goals?" [3]

Dear all
I am going to apply for International Master in Entrepreneurship Education and Training (IMEET) programme and this is one of the essays I should submit. I would be more than happy if you could kindly check coherency, transparency and structure of my essay.

The vision of this programme is to create an elite of teachers, trainers,and consultants who can contribute both to the fostering of entrepreneurial individuals and to the development of entrepreneurial organizations.

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Describe your career plans and how this programme will help you attain your goals.

Today the business world is facing challenges associated with downsizing big businesses, as well as major reduction in the size of governments. In the near future, information will be replaced by the creativity and entrepreneurship will be a key foundation of future business world by introducing new jobs and ideas.

Because of my strong belief in importance of entrepreneurship, working within entrepreneurship field is my long term career objective. I know in order to work efficient and effective, I first should gain a great depth of theoretical and practical knowledge on the entrepreneurship and get the necessary qualifications to do well. IMEET enables me to do this by combining theory based and practice oriented learning models.

My experience as a teacher also motivated me to apply for this programme. One of my functions as insurance expert is teaching life insurance policies and company web base system to agents. This experience came very natural to me. By a mutual feedback, I tried to know what comes best to my classes and find appropriate and innovative methods to transfer my knowledge and also motivating them for learning. It was a valuable experience to me. Until now, I have successfully trained more than 150 agents. IMEET will strengthen me in this arena by concentration on knowledge of didactics, pedagogy and learning process.

I want to help young people might be possible to become an entrepreneur and control their destiny free from any restraints the world of work has on them. It is a challenge for many of them to consider themselves as entrepreneurs, especially when they have no experience in doing so. It is my desire to help them to see opportunities and possibilities to find ideas that might be new and different and IMEET programme as an extremely innovative programme will help me to achieve my goal.

Furthermore, the interaction among the participants of IMEET programme with a range of experience in the field of entrepreneurship will enhance everyone's prospects for success as a consultant or teacher in entrepreneurship; that will simultaneously enrich the learning environment.

IMEET international environment will also give me the opportunity to share with other participants the notion that we have risen from a culture and grown up, studied and worked in environments entirely different. Sure participants would have interesting stories and ideas about success, failure, gain, loss and also prominent entrepreneurs of our countries.

Graduate / "International MSc in Entrepreneurship Education & Training" application letter [2]

Dear,
I am going to apply for International Master in Entrepreneurship Education and Training (IMEET) programme. I have not too much time because my deadline is close and I would be grateful if you could have a corrective look at my essay and give me a feedback.

The vision of IMEET is to develop and run a unique international learning space targeting learning facilitators in entrepreneurship such as advisors, coaches, consultants, trainers and teachers.

I am sorry for any obvious mistake :D

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Briefly describe what you expect from the IMEET Programme.
Iran's high inflation and unemployment rate, lack of academic knowledge beside my interest for entrepreneurship, creativity and innovation concepts motivated me to apply for IMEET programme; therefore I look forward that IMEET programme complement and sharpen my academic and practical knowledge on the mentioned arenas to master in the facilitation of entrepreneurship learning and consulting arena.

We live in a changing world, so knowledge of standard situations and the routine ways of dealing them is not sufficient and new ideas are needed to design our way in to the future. I have also recognized that critical thinking is excellent but it is not enough and we need generative, productive and creative thinking so I expect IMEET teach me "what can be" instead of "what is"; And I wish to learn how to instruct constructive thinking.

I know this is hard for many people to imagine themselves as entrepreneurs and be responsible for their own income, especially when they have no experience in doing so; consequently I wish IMEET programme equip me with pedagogical tools for appraising entrepreneurship ideas and business plans and also strengthen my knowledge on situated learning theories as well as innovative methodologies to build an entrepreneurship culture.

I trust the world class learning environment of ASB IMEET programme give me the opportunity to interact with and learn from best professors and participants with different cultures and backgrounds to become skilled at the field of entrepreneurship arena.

I desire the programme focus on different theoretical descriptions of the entrepreneurship process, the phases involved and the process of organizing the entrepreneurial venture.
By doing field work of IMEET in an international environment, I hope to be equipped with methodological ability to carry out practical studies of entrepreneurship learning facilitation to build

I hope team based assignments of IMEET also develop my communication and team work ability.
Finally I hope by attending IMEET can give back to my community.