Undergraduate / A Blessing In Disguise (determination and interdependence) - common Application [NEW]

Hello everyone, this is a revision of my previously posted essay for the common app. Reviews left would be highly appreciated,thanks.

Ever since I was young, I have watched my mother portray determination and interdependence, from living and raising her daughters in a polygamous home where there was no hint of love to traveling to a foreign country to set her roots. Though she was faced with odds from home, she did not let the odds become a hindrance to her ambition. Coming through these challenges in an unfamiliar country has been one of her most influential motivational factors on me. One of her innate qualities that never cease to amaze me is her determination that reflects in all her decisions.

My decision of studying abroad almost seemed like an impossible goal, even though I knew from the onset that it is what I really wanted. I was dealt with a big blow that almost crushed me , the very first time I ever let myself believe that I could depend on someone I called my father. It was too late before I realized that my father has not been in support of my career choice and my choice of studying abroad. It was only then that I learned the importance of determination and interdependence that my mother has always portrayed.

My mother was the only one who was there for me emotionally all through the way when I shot the whole world out, the only one who saw through that dark heart, a girl who has been badly betrayed by someone she taught cared about her. She was the one who was there all through the way when I was fighting my inner demon and who saw to it that I pulled myself through. I remember her saying, "Rebecca all I have tried to teach you and your siblings is that you can succeed with or without anyone's help. Maybe what you are going through is destined to be, so you could see the importance of the independence I have always portrayed. I know you can get through this, I have seen you get through situations tougher than this. Now all I am asking you to do is take that year that you will be losing as a gap year, to figure out what you really want. So, the choice is all yours; you are either going to let that betrayal bring you down or going to let it strengthen you. But whichever decision you make during that gap year, you will have my full support".

As a result, I was not surprised when she gave her whole support in every way possible, when I showed the determination to go to college in a culturally diverse country.

Gazing at the mirror, I see a girl who is reaching out for her goals and whose mother will always be ready to guide her through whenever it seems right. A girl who knows that the world is hers for the taking -thanks to her mother's support and dictum: 'determination is the key'.

Undergraduate / Yale Is A Match Made in Heaven. Short answer to the why yale question. [2]

I really need honest reviews for my short answer.
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The college of my dream has always been the one where I would be excited to go to lectures because of the relationship- the passion to unravel the twisted principles of the power of the mind -between me the professors.

A Yale professor of Psychology, Professor Marvin Chun who said, 'I came to Yale for the students...I try to teach each student as somebody who is going to do something very meaningful and influential in life', shares that relationship with me.

Thus, Yale is a match made for me in heaven, because Yale manifests all I want in a college: excellent professors like Marvin Chun, who possess great passion and dedication of lecturing their students

Undergraduate / "Working at my father's real estate office" - My Princeton Summer Essay [6]

I started writing this essay some few minutes ago and this is what I've got so far. Proof reading, reviews and feed backs on it would be appreciated. Thanks in advance xD.

During the summer 2011, I worked as full-time assistant at my father's real estate office. Waking up at 6:00 am and thinking about all the paper-works I will have to sort through during my day at the office was more fulfilling than spending the day at the beach with some friends. Not only was I able to get more acquainted and build some friendships with the workers, but I also learned lots from my various visits to the Court house and sitting through some tenancy court hearings.

However I tried a different approach towards spending my summer 2012. During my first summer week, I devoted on focusing more on getting my body into good shape, building up and organizing my work out routine, not that I have not always done that, but this time I had so much fun doing that. During the consequent weeks, my siblings and I met up with our cousins. Due to the fact that it was our first time seeing them since they relocated to Nigeria, we stayed for some weeks and had some memorable time catching up on the various events happening in our respective lives. I also had some alone time to catch up on reading some British historical novels, which by the way was the highlight of my summer 2012.

Undergraduate / WHY YALE SHORT ANSWER; 'Fred Plaut Recording Studio and The Shubert Centre' [4]

As an international student who has always longed to experience the cultural diversity America has to offer, Yale's location in New Haven, the cultural center of Connecticut, will enable me experience that cultural diversity.

Consequently, the specialization of Yale's Psychology program in research of clinical psychology, among others and the musical resources such as The Irving S. Gilmore Music Library, The Fred Plaut Recording Studio and The Shubert Centre for Performing Arts, that Yale and New Haven provide will make it possible for me to pursue my passion for a Psychology and Music double major.