Writing Feedback / If we choose an animal to like, we should do our best to protect them [4]

Nowadays, pets can be found in many houses and apartments, how to support and act them have been a controversial question among the people. Some people believe that they should be behaved like family members. Although I understand the people who are worried about this attitude, I agree with the idea of being kind with pets. There are several reasons to support my preference.

First and foremost, animals are as emotional as the human. They need our kindness, help and support. An independent study has been conducted on pets behavior recently. Based on this research, pets that were treated like family members live longer than the others. It can show us the importance of a good temper with animals. Therefore, we should be aware that how much our behavior affect the animals.

The other reason is that we should respect to animals. If we choose an animal to like, we should do our best to protect them. No one more than human kinds have been damaged their living place. Therefore, it is our duty to be with them like a lovely friend. Besides, we can teach our children to respect animals by this temper too. In the end, I hope we will have a better behavior against animal in the world and try to show a positive point of view to our next generation. After a while, by living with animals, it is necessary for us to treat them like family members. We can take advantage of this behavior to show a better way of the future in treating with animals to our children.

Writing Feedback / Barcelona (where would you like to travel and why) [4]

Barcelona is my favorite city that I would like to travel to. This city is best place for tourism because of its monument, climate and soccer.

First and foremost, Barcelona can be described as an ancient city in Spain, rich in civilization. There are lots of memorials in its museum, covering the most of the historic events. You can enjoy its monuments too. Barcelona has been well-known by its historic buildings. There are lots of eye-catching structures visible throughout the city. Many famous architects have displayed their abilities by developing amazing buildings and make it be one of the most interesting cities for tourism interested in monuments like me.

Second, Barcelona enjoys a Mediterranean climate with mild- cool winter and warm summer suitable for sunbathing. It has several beaches around the city. Snowfalls are not prevalent in the city but those are common on the outskirts of the city. its humid weather is so pleasant and often producing no rain. It is a sunny city and suitable for me to travel.

Last but not least, Barcelona has a long sporting tradition specially soccer. FC Barcelona is a sport club best known worldwide for its soccer team and I am one of its dedicated fans. Messi, who is chosen as the best soccer player in the world, is playing in this team. "camp nou" is FC Barcelona stadium and lots of matches will be held in there every year. Being in "camp nou" and seeing my favorite player is one of my dreams that can be achieved by traveling to Barcelona.

Hope I will get enough money for traveling to Barcelona and reach one of my dreams. Then I will actually write another essay about my experiences on the trip.

Writing Feedback / TOEFL: Some people like to communicate by email and voice mail. Other face-to-face. [3]

Some people like to communicate by email and voice mail. Other people like to communicate by telephone or face-to-face...

Nowadays, due to saving time, many people would rather communicate by email and voice call. Although I understand them and see their limitations, I support the idea of communicating by telephone or face-to-face. I have this preference because of some reasons that is mentioned in following paragraphs.

Communication should be clearly and obvious and it can be better done by face-to-face connection. The format of the face, the way we look and our temper can be transfer only in this matter. Therefore, less misunderstanding would be happen and our connection has more guarantee. For instance, I watched a film last week, there was a woman who was too shy to accept her boyfriend proposal directly and the man thought she does not love him anymore on the internet. I think if he proposed while looking her eyes everything would have been changed. So, face-to face interacting may cause less doubt in comparison to the other methods.

We can take advantage of communicating by phone or face-to-face to allotte more time for each other. Nowadays, many people suffer from depression in the world. A pressed article in a popular magazine was describing the reasons of this happening that one of the most critical reasons was not sharing the feeling and emotions with our friends. As a result, the more allotting time, the more benefits we can reach.

As stated above, I thought we should preserve our costum and do not let technology damage our living. But, in case of need, communicating by emails and voice mails are so beneficial. It has many benefits like its price and rate, but it is not always suitable like talking with your mother. In my preservation, the advantages of face-to-face interaction overweigh the merits of connecting by emails.

Writing Feedback / Originality does not mean thinking something that was never thought before; it means [8]

Dear friends, please help me to paraphrasing some general sentences in different manners and tell me some better synonyms in this essay. Thanks in advance.

"Originality does not mean thinking something that was never thought before; it means putting old ideas together in new way." (It's a GRE issue)

The author points out a new definition of originality. He states, although many people believe that originality is considering something that was never thought before, it means collecting ideas in new way. I strongly accede to this assertion that originality is not only gaining a new result, but also creating a new method and the way of thinking can be called originality too. Nowadays, the world around us needs more creative ideas to improve, and the first step in this process is announcing a define definition of originality to the world, which shows all critical aspects effect on it. In fact, two examples give support to my favorable attitude towards the subject, are mentioned below.

First and foremost, in the scientific area, Newton is one the best examples of a creative man. Many years ago, when Newton was alive, people had a different idea of researching. They were looking for the exceptions, and most of the aroused questions were about the reason of exceptions in the world like eclipse, earthquake and so forth. Scientists were not curious about basis reason of an issue. All their energies were put only in justifying the phenomena. In a case of need, they were not able to prove, relating the phenomena to magic and superstitions were prevalent. On that time, Newton was sitting under a tree, when suddenly an apple dropped on his head. The question of why this apple dropped was born. As a result, many fundamental laws of dynamics discovered and now the rudimentary question well-known as a turning point in the world. The most important specification of Newton was his novel attitude. He tried to prove simplest rule of nature, not paying attention only on exceptions. Then, when scientists faced with problems, they looked back on the initial assumptions and theories and tried to revise them.

Another example is about a famous cardiologist, Michael Fox, who is well-known due to his combination theories in medicine. In 1914, he was graduated as a mechanical engineer from Imperial College London. As far as, he was not interested in his major, he made a decision to further his education in medicine. At that time, a common problem among cardiologist was blood clotting disorder in heart valve replaced patient. At the first time, this surgery was done by implanting a pig's heart valve for a patient, but this valve could be used longer than one year, and then it would be rejected. Another proposed solution was using artificial valves, which could only postpone the death to more than one year after replacement. To settle this problem, Fox proposed a new design of valve that was using in evaporating machines. He did not invent a new device, he just utilized a trustworthy valve in medicine, but his proposal became a revolution in cardiovascular system. After a while, biomechanics, an interdisciplinary major, was introduced to the world. This example shows that just by looking around more precisely and combining old devices lead to cheerful invention.

To sum up, I strongly believe that originality is not only creating new thing, but also collecting old theories in new ways. Besides, revising and restating previous theories show us more practical aspects in modern technology.

Writing Feedback / TOEFL, The best things in life do not cost money, agree or disagree [9]

Nowadays, no one can neglect the importance of money in life. Having a great deal of money helps you overcome many problems like buying a house and educational tuitions, as well as paying taxes on time. But, the aroused question it is that whether the best things in life cost money or not. I totally believe that the most significant factors in our life do not cost money. There are some reasons due to my preference that are mentioned below.

Growing technology in the world tends people to be busier with earning money. They allot all the time to think about how can their expenses be paid and what is the best way to gain money rapidly. According to the psychologist, money is the first priority for many people nowadays, and this issue makes them be greedy. Based on a research conducted in United Stated, the majority of employees who immerse themselves in making money, have a psychological disorder, and that is due to not being satisfied from their life. The psychologists believe that most of them suffer from emotional problem, and by becoming a rich man they want to pretend being a successful one. Sometime, it is necessary to look back in our life and estimate what have higher preference in our life.

Being relaxed is one of the most important factors in every one life. Although expenditures can creates stress, enough money will never make you relaxed. How much the kindness of a mother cost? Of course, no one can answer this question because the best things which can makes you calm do not cost anything like love, kindness and forgiveness. For example, among the rich people, divorce is more common in comparison with the other levels of society. They believe that by money one can reach everything, but actually real love cannot be achieved by money. And it's the reason that unfaithfulness and infidelity are prevalent there.

To sum up, it is better to look for what are the best things in our life. However money is necessary in our life, it can never be replaced of love and kindness in our life.

Writing Feedback / GRE: The greatness of individuals can be decided only by those who live after them [6]

The greatness of individuals can be decided only by those who live after them, not by their contemporaries...

The author states that contemporaries are not able to understand the importance and greatness of individuals who live with them and it will found only by future people. I partly agree with this assertion that by time passing many ambiguities may become obvious, but in some cases, many great men have been acclaimed, when they were alive. I believe that this assertion highly depends on the social condition and religious beliefs that people have at that time, as well as subject area of the issue. There are some examples to support my preference, which are discussed below.

In many respects, people strongly believed to their religions. Religious fanaticism made them accept many superstitions as facts. Even being curious about these so-called facts was an illegitimate action. For instant, Galileo, a famous astronomer, lived in such situation that every questionable issue was answered by religious leaders. At that time people believed that the Earth is center of the world and every planets and stars, even the Sun, rotates around it and this assertion was written in religious books. During that particular time, Galileo devoted himself to studying about planets movement. After a great deal of attempts, he discovered a shocking fact. He stated that not only the Earth is not the center of the world, but also it rotates around the Sun. He actually deserved great acclaims, but unfortunately he called as a criminal person, who tried to ignore religious beliefs. Due to his claim, he was condemned to spend the rest of his life in prison.

On the other hand, nowadays, Bill Gates is well-known as one of the most successful and richest men in the world. He immersed himself in computer programming and his efforts became a turning point in computer science. Every one of us is taking advantages of his inventions during working with computers. Microsoft is the most popular computer-based corporation, which its chairman cannot be anyone but Gates. Moreover, he has been acclaimed in any ceremonies and people like to buy his trustworthy software.

Now some questions may arise in one's mind after reading the claim that no great man is highly praised by contemporaries. By having a more precise look at the reasons, we will find that being acclaimed is highly depends on the need of people on the time. Nowadays, improving at the dissemination of information and computer software is one of the most necessities that Gates put all his energy on it. On the other hand, the movement of earth did not only change the people lives but also would destroyed their religious beliefs. From other point of view, the authorities play an important roles to makes someone be famous or not. If one's theory would not be harmful, they may let it publish. Some assertions are like a threat for the authorities, which most of them are related to political or religious matters. Therefore, the field which great men work at, can cause them to improve or not. Artists, scientists and athletes who their improvements have no conflict with the bases on social beliefs and the authorities power have more chance to be acclaimed by their contemporaries.

Writing Feedback / The purpose of education should be to provide students with a value system [4]

Hi guys, help me to improve my writing. Thank you in advance for your time and consideration.

"The purpose of education should be to provide students with a value system, a standard, a set of ideas-not to prepare them for a specific job"

The author asserts the idea that the goal of education should not be preparing students for a specific career, but providing them with partially a value system and a standard, as well as a set of idea. I generally disagree with this assertion that the only purpose of education is preparing students for having a moral life in the society. I believe that this claim should be divided into some parts: (1) the purpose of education and its influence in society; (2) study of importance of teaching value systems, moral standards and social limitations; and finally (3) why preparing students should be a part of educational duties.

The purpose of education should derive from the needs of society. Being familiar with a value system and a standard can be count as the primary goal of education. To use an analogy, it would be like entrancing a new place. Beforehand, one should learn all the rules and regulation governing there, as well as the customs people must respect. Therefore, making students ready to entrance the society is the first duty of education that includes all about rules, standard, limitation and so forth. Moreover, students should be ready to play their roles in society, and this is what educational systems should meet.

As I mentioned above, the primary goal of education is learning a value system and a suitable pattern for living. One should know all governing constraints and moral values, which make students to behave in a way that they do not harm other people. Besides, they should be aware of all social harm, such as addiction, and learn how to avoid it. Admittedly, students will face many problems in the future. A good educational system will prepare them to choose best strategies towards difficulties. As this rudimentary kind of information is necessary for all, it should be taught before pupils are graduated from high school.

I totally agree that pupils should be educated for a specific job. At the first step, the authorities ought to specify what is needed in country, due to obviate the needs, many jobs will announced to educational systems. Therefore, educational systems will do their best to prepare students for a career based on their interest and what jobs are needed in society. This process will indicate the future of a country, and it will definitely clarify the importance of educational centers. For instance, becoming a doctor requires many years of research, education and experience. Admittedly, if a medicine student is educated only some ideas, standards and values, how could they do a surgery in the future?

To sum up, one has two types of interaction in the real world. First and foremost, we should be aware of what the society expects us and what are the rules and values in gregarious life. Then, the needs of a society can be obviated only when people do their job perfectly. Admittedly, it is educational systems duty to prepare student not only for a value system, but also a specific job.

Writing Feedback / Our ever-increasing use of technology significantly reduces human interaction? [NEW]

Some people believe that our ever-increasing use of technology significantly reduces our opportunities for human interaction. Other people believe that technology provides us with new and better ways to communicate and connect with one another.

The author states that people can be divided in two parts according to their beliefs towards the effect of growing technology on people's communication. In the first group people who believe that technology will actually reduce their opportunities for human interaction are place and in other group you will face people who believe that growing technology provide their better ways to communicate with each other. I totally disagree with this controversial separation. Increasing use of technology led to both negative and positive effect on human interaction, which should be discussed widely.

In respect to the first group, I generally disagree with their attitude. For instance, I would like to speak about one of the most popular social networking service, Facebook, users may create a personal profile, add their friends to the profile, and exchange messages and pictures. It has a powerful search machine that one can find their old friends based on the name and the position, as well as your mutual friends. You can take advantageous of this website by sharing your ideas with your friend and chatting with them in a kindly virtual world. Moreover, in the past 30 years, phone conversations and letter writing were the only ways to communicate with someone in another country. People had to cost allot to connect each other from far distances. But now, one can make video call via internet easily and almost everyone can afford utilizing this technology to communicate in a very user-friendly way. Therefore, it is unfair not to seeing any advantageous of growing technology in communicating.

For the next group, who believe that technology provide us better and new ways to connect each other. I partially agree with the assertion to some extents. I actually believe that it is not always better ways to communicate and it highly depends on the situation. Although new arrival technology to communicate is so time and money saving in comparison to old ones, it is not suitable for every time. Admittedly, this ways are not suitable when one wants to communicate with their spouse or mother. If there is someone in our life, who is respectful and lovely, we should actually allot our time to have a face-to-face communicating to them. It is the oldest way of connecting, and best way for sharing feelings. Besides, some misunderstanding may occur when you use new ways of connecting such as chatting. Because the what you look and the way you speaking are not transferred when chatting, one will understand your meaning incorrectly. As a result, it cannot be count as the best ways always.

To sum up, neither agree nor disagree with the effects of phenomena is not the best way to settle it. The best way is using it to obviate our needs and do not let it control our life.

Writing Feedback / Teachers obligations are much greater that can be summarized only in compliment and punishment [9]

"The best way to teach is to praise positive actions and ignore negative ones."

The writer states that the best way to teach includes two major points, acclaiming positive actions and ignoring negative ones. I do not agree with the assertion utterly and I believe that it needs to be discussed widely. Some questions may arise after reading this claim, such as the ways of teaching and whether ignoring negative actions works well is every situation. There are some reasons, based on my position, which are mentioned as follows.

First and foremost, praising or ignoring is only one part of teachers obligation, so it cannot necessarily be counted as the best way. Nowadays, teachers are looking for finding the best methods to teach students. A great deal of research has been conducted by psychologist to find out the best method of teaching. According to the one of their articles published in Associated Press, there is no best way to teach for all students. They found out that for every student there is only a way which can be counted as the best one and teachers should know all teaching methods and the best time to utilize them. At the first step, teachers should discover the students aptitudes and fit the techniques in germane to the students abilities. For instance, in the field of music, some students learn via their ears; It is enough for them to listen to a music several times then they can play the music well, others prefer to learn music based on traditional method, such as reading notes. Although both the ways should be taught, teachers should adopt a suitable approach to upgrade his educational styles for every student.

In the past time, teachers believed that best way to teach is punishing. This method had a detrimental effect on students and makes them escape from school. After a while, praising replaced punishment and it became an important turning point in educational methods. Nowadays, praising positive actions is counted as one of the best way which help student to improve, but ignoring all negative ones may not assist them to reform, in some cases they may consider their actions as a social accepted ones. For instance, children should learn moral values and social patterns as well as social constraints. If negative points of children behavior are not reformed, at the time they want to enroll social group, they will face will many problem, which are due to the differences between educated pattern and social values. Moreover, I believe that although praising in public help students to improve, criticizing has detrimental effects in this situation, such as social complexity. According to behaviorism, teachers should disregard negative action in public, and then criticize him or her in private.

So, based on all the above mentioned points, teachers obligations are much greater that can be summarized only in compliment and punishment. Moreover, ignoring negative points does not help students to reform their behaviors. Besides, students should not be criticized in public and teachers should consider their negative actions and talk about it later in private.