Writing Feedback / Toefl essay: Eating out or Eating at home? Home food is the best! [8]

Eating food at home is so better than eating food at restaurants, but some people have different opinions about it. Nevertheless, I prefer eating at home because of healthy food, variety of food, and quietness and tranquility of home.

When I'm eating at home, I'm certain the food is healthy, but when I enter to a restaurant, I'm not sure the food is healthy. A cook in the kitchen, for example, a mother cooking and the others in the family knowing that their mother paying attention whenever she is cooking. Also, the quality of materials, for instance, rice, meat, etc., can be better than the quality of materials at restaurants.

Moreover, the variety of foods is considerable at home, because any cook can cook from traditional foods to fast foods. For example, my mother can cook Kebab as a traditional food to Pizza as a fast food, while the restaurants divide to traditional or modern ones.

Furthermore, when I am eating at home, I feel tranquility and quietness, especially I can speak with my family and watching TV or the others act that I can do at the same time. Also, I can eat foods in a diversity positions such as standing at a counter to sitting on a carpet.

In conclusion, I prefer eating food at home rather than at a restaurant, because I feel healthy, and I'm able to tasting various delicious foods, and I feel tranquility or quietness at home. Therefore, I suggest everyone to choose home for eating foods, and trying to go to the restaurants less than one time in one month.

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Writing Feedback / TOEFL: If no food at home we should have a restaurant in the neighborhood [4]

It has recently been announced that a new restaurant may be built in
your neighborhood. Do you support or oppose this plan? Why? Use
specific reasons and details to support your answer.

Although many people oppose to this plan, but I support of a new restaurant in our neighborhood. I prefer this plan as a fun, when we are in a hurry, and we need to eat foods quickly, and when there is no food at home.

Most of the people in a society, especially in these decades, go into the restaurants as a fun. Indeed, the varieties in the foods at restaurants are motivating the families. In this regard, I often go into the restaurants on the weekends, but if a new one be built in my neighborhood. I will go a week twice, and I can invite my friends in the restaurant.

Moreover, many people go into the restaurants when they are in a hurry, and they do not have enough time for cooking a meal. They sometimes can choose another way, waiting at home to be sent their foods. Nevertheless, it is possible that the food is not prepared, and we finally have to do our job without eating the food.

Furthermore, one of the most significant reasons for supporting this plan is, lacking the materials or the groceries at home, especially at night when most of the supermarkets or the grocery stores have closed and preparing them is hard. Also, I can not cook like many people. Therefore, I think our neighborhood needs to a new restaurant.

In conclusion, If we want to resolve our needs in our neighborhood such as when we are in a hurry, and there is no food at home or have a fun with the family. I suppose that we should have a restaurant.

Writing Feedback / Improving public transportation could reduce air pollution in a city [NEW]

Some people believe that governments should spend more money on developing public transportation, such as buses, trains, and subways. In this regard, I think that governments should pay attention to public transportation because increasing convenience of the people, decreasing traffic and air pollution on streets.

Mainly, improving public transportation could bring the convenience for the people of a city. One kind of the convenience refers to cheapness of public transportation due to the fact that they feel tranquility and calmness. Also, during the route they can feel relaxed without any stress of driving by a personal vehicle, and even they can sleep in this time. In addition, when they drive a personal vehicle, occur an accident is possible, so this important for governments to develop public transportation.

Moreover, developing public transportation is, cause of decreasing traffic in a city. Enhancing of buses, trains, and subways could cause of decreasing the attendance of personal vehicles on the streets. For example, Enhancing buses in main roads cause that fewer cars attend on the streets because the people have to pay money for gasoline or other expenses. In addition, public transportation's vehicles are able to move faster in special roads that cause of decreasing traffic on the streets. Also, the noise from traffic would reduce through expanding buses system, trains system, and subways system.

Last but not least, improving public transportation could reduce air pollution in a city. In this regard, the fewer cars attend on the streets, the less smoke and fume would inhale on the streets. So, trees and plants would stand for more times, and the people in the margin of streets, especially old people and children feel healthy. Therefore, governments should give attention to public transportation as a way of reducing pollution in cities.

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Writing Feedback / Why do not enjoyable things: necessity, importance for the future, families and friends in our lives [5]

Some people try to avoid some things that they dislike or don't enjoy doing them. From my point of view, we have to do some things that aren't favorable because these things are necessary for us, are linked to our future, and are related to our families or friends.

Mainly, there are many things that seem essential in our lives. There are some things that could be identified as our requirements and needs; so, if we keep away from them, we might lose some other things that could be more significant for us. In this regard, avoiding our requirements and needs sometimes could cause of losing things that related to our lives. For example, I may dislike my job, but I cannot find a new appropriate job, so I have to continue my job for a long time.

Moreover, some things that we have a negative view about them are linked to our future because we maybe get better position in the next few years. Also, doing these things that are disliked, beside the cause of improving our positions, may be increased our prestige in the future. For example, mathematics as a difficult lesson among other ones is not a favorite lesson for many students, but it is helpful to become a professional engineer in the time to come.

Finally, we have to do some things that appear to be not enjoyable for us, but are related to our families or friends' lives. They occasionally ask us to do some things for them inasmuch we like them; we perform for them; on the other hand, they maybe have done some things so that they are expecting us to compensate for them. For instance, I lend some money to my friend because I really like him, or I lend money because he lent me some money formerly.

To sum up, people should do some things they do not getting a pleasure from doing due to a necessity of doing them, importance of them for the future, and positions of our families or friends in our lives. Therefore, doing some dislike things can change our life to being beauty.

Writing Feedback / The media should consider famous people's lives [7]

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Television,
newspapers, magazines, and other media pay too much attention to
the personal lives of famous people such as public figures and
celebrities. Use specific reasons and details to explain your opinion.

I disagree that the media pay too much attention to the famous people's lives. From my point of view, the media, such as televisions, newspapers, magazines, and so on, should consider the famous people's lives because people pursue their private lives to know more, the media's producers want to provide such programs, and governments desire for organize the society through role modeling.

Mainly, people as audiences would like to enlarge their information about the famous people's lives. People consider these kinds of programs as the best ones on the TV or other media, so they expect more programs about celebrities or public figures. In addition, many people regard several famous people as their heroes or heroines, such as some artists or some sports stars. Also, many people consider knowing about their heroes or heroines as a way of having fun or entertainment. Thus, people wait eagerly for these types of programs.

Moreover, the media's producers yearn for providing such programs. They are avid for exhibiting the positive qualities of famous people's lives for their audiences due to produce fine works. In addition, they create such programs for make more money through huge projects. The importance of these kinds of programs refers to the weight of audiences' interests because a lot of people would like these programs, so the interests of people are significant for producers.

Finally, governments desire for organize their community through role modeling. They try to maintain values and beliefs by role modeling in their society, especially among young people. Also, they attempt to conduct thoughts of their people by signifying a few famous people's lives, like religious well-known people in my country. In addition, governments pay attention to the next generation beliefs, and planning for them through role modeling.

To sum up, I believe that the media should pay attention to the famous people's lives in the way of people, producers and governments desires. Therefore, I think that these sorts of programs should be provided in each society.

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Writing Feedback / 'everything appears to be fun' - childhood is the happiest time of a person's life [3]

In my view, childhood is the happiest time in the whole time of people's lives. In this regard, the rest of life is not as enjoyable as childhood because in this period, there is no responsibility, gaining anything appears to be easy, and everything seems entertainment. Mainly, children in their life don't have any responsibilities. Their parents care about them, and pay attention to their needs and requires. Also, the children's mind generally concentrates on their toys and plays, so they don't worry about anything around themselves. In addition, following the previous point, they have no stress, or get angry about a certain job. For example, they study at school without any stress about their examinations' results. Moreover, children think that gaining anything seems easy. Indeed, they think that obtaining anything is not difficult because their mind is not similar to an adult's mind. In addition, their wishes and desires jog them to ponder that their environment is convenient and comfort. Also, they think that for gaining everything there are no problems or difficulties. For instance, finding a friend is so easy, and they can trust to anyone. Last but not least, children think that everything is fun. They consider that everything is entertaining and fun because they don't have any knowledge about it. Additionally, children try to know the rules of objections or people's relations, and they think about anything as a way of having fun. For example, they want to make a group of friends around a certain game, like a football team, thus they intend to learn the rules of football then biased on these rules they will play for their entertainment.

To sum up, childhood is a period that human don't have any responsibility, obtaining everything seems easy, and everything appears to be entertainment. That's why I agree to this statement that childhood is the happiest time of a person's life.

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Writing Feedback / "advantages in groupthink" - Toefl [2]

The article states that there are several advantages in groupthink, and gives some pieces of information about it. However, the lecturer explains that although there are many advantages in groupthink, there are a few disadvantages in it, and refutes the author's points about it. First, the reading claims that a group is capable of pool its intellectual resources for arrive at a better decision. The lecturer rebuts this point by saying that many things may be ignored when people make a decision through a group. Second, the article asserts that people don't be worry about a big responsibility for making a decision also their motivations would be encouraged. On the other hand, the lecturer says that individuals might think that they are not smart enough to decision making alone. Third, the reading says that people would be benefited by learning new negotiation, management skill and many new things. The lecturer opposes this point by illustrating that the group ignores anything that doesn't fit their vision.

Writing Feedback / Teofl - I support that businesses hire somebody as their employees or workers. [3]

Businesses should hire employees for their entire lives. Do you agree or
disagree? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Some people agree with this statement that businesses should hire employees, but some people disagree with that businesses should hire employees. In this regard, I agree that hiring employees or workers has several advantages. I support this idea because businessmen have more important jobs, they are capable of develop their business, and they can get the convenience.

Mainly, businessmen should concentrate on their more important jobs. Businessmen should give attention to the significant affairs, such as management. Also, they have to control their business, and their employees or laborers' activities can help them. For example, businessmen may want to have a business with a firm or company, and they have to manage something around their conventions. In this time, their employees or workers are able do something about materials or preparing goods or commodities, and businessmen are able to adjust conventions.

Moreover, businessmen can develop their business. The most significant purpose of a businessman is making money, and more money will be found in a developed business, such as a businessman who has a lot of money and more capital, so he can invest more and more to make more money. In addition, businessmen plan to expand their business to overseas or foreign countries. For example, some businessmen pursue to export their goods or commodities, and earn more money.

Last but not least, businessmen feel relaxed, and they can get the convenience. They have no stress, and they don't get disturbed because their business towards to a wrong way. In addition, they are able to make a decision easily and strongly. For instance, businessmen are capable of make a decision faraway through telephone or Email.

To sum up, businesses might hire some employees or laborers whom they can pay attention around more important job. They can develop their business, and they can take comfort. That's why I support this statement that businesses hire somebody as their employees or workers.

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Writing Feedback / Toefl - 'the Earth is being damaged through human activities?' [NEW]

Some people believe that the Earth is being harmed (damaged) by
human activity. Others feel that human activity makes the Earth a
better place to live.What is your opinion? Use specific reasons and
examples to support your answer.

In my view, the Earth is being damaged through human activities rather than make the Earth better place to live. So, human activities would change our planet because we don't pay attention to our environment, there are a few disadvantages in many devices refers to technology, and we just think about development.

Mainly, people don't consider to the nature and their environment. Most of all, people don't have knowledge about their activities and their job. Also, people just regard their benefits and their interests, and they don't worry about other things even some things that affect their lives indirectly. For example, many people pursue their aims for building their home in nature, but they ignore that their desires may destroy their environment.

Moreover, using the technology has several disadvantages for the Earth. Indeed, people use technology to exploit the Earth extremely. Therefore, the Earth might encounter some drawbacks. Many people don't know how to use technology, or they use it improperly. For example, they don't know that many trashes have disadvantages for the Earth, especially atomic trashes or something like that. Last but not least, people follow their purposes to meet development. A number of people are selfish and don't pay attention to nature. In addition, people want to develop their lives. However, they grow, and population would be an important danger for the Earth. For instance, many people would dwell in the Earth, and our nature will destroy.

Finally, the Earth may be destroyed because people don't pay attention to it, misusing the technology, and think just about development. Surely, we can't continue our lives if we don't aware about our planet and the future of the Earth. That's way I agree with this opinion that human activities cause the Earth meet changes improperly.

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Writing Feedback / Toefl: Attending a live performance is exciting, amusing and energetic. [NEW]

Some people prefer to stay at home and watching a live event on television; however, others would rather attend in a live performance, such as a play, concert, or sporting event. In this regard, I argue that there are several positive advantages for someone who decides to be present in a live show or performance because attending a live one is exciting, amusing, and energetic.

Mainly, many people and families, especially young people go to the show hall or stadium to watch a performance or a match, and they experience exciting emotions there. Indeed, people who visit face to face their popular artists and sport stars might get thrill and excitement more than someone who watches on television. In these places, people encounter cheers and shouts of the crowd or listen to the interesting music that increase exciting feelings and emotions. For example, I watched a football match in a stadium, and my favorite team won its opponent. As a matter of fact, I felt extremely excitement when I was beside other football spectators. This presence is a new experience for many people that would be ensued exciting emotion.

Moreover, this performance could be amusing for somebody who wants to be present in the show hall or stadium. Since feelings would be transferring from artists and sport stars to spectators directly, people seem to be more amusing than watching on TV. Also, a performance per se is entertaining and interesting. For instance, many people might be overwhelmed a match or a show why this is amusing when people view from near. In addition, a performance brings various, strong feelings for spectators, like tranquility or exciting emotion, which could be amusing.

Last but not least, attending in a show hall or stadium is energetic for onlookers. The attendance of people indicates unity among onlookers, and it causes obtaining energy of them. Wild shouts and cheers of the crowd, for example, are full of energy for me in a stadium. In addition, same reactions and emotions of onlookers as an indicator of unity contain positive or negative energy, such as sad or cheerful emotions. Generally, the attendance of people brings happiness and joy or sadness and unhappiness energy.

Finally, watching a live event on television is not similar to attend in a live performance due to the attendance causes exciting, amusing, and energy for people. That is why I think it is better for enthusiasts to be present in show hall or stadium.

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Writing Feedback / TOEFL:The expression "Never, never give up" [4]

The expression "Never, never give up" means keep trying and never
stop working for your goals. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

I agree with the statement that "Never, never give up." In other words, human should attempt to gain their goals and desires. In this regard, I argue that effort has several positive advantages because it causes encountering development, avoiding disappointment, and obtaining practical energy.

Mainly, many people try to meet progression in their lives, and endeavor to get it intently. Indeed, development is the most important purpose of human, such as develop in medicine, technology, and so on. Also, someone who concentrates on his or her abilities may gain other goals. Students, for example, keep trying to study their lessons seriously, so they might meet their bigger aims like a good career or job. In addition, people know that the purpose of evolvement is permanent quietness and tranquility, so attempting to achieve it seems logical. For instance, a drudgery to get more money and meet welfare would bring silence.

Moreover, some people hesitate or cease to follow their goals, which it causes disappointment and sadness. Many people cease their efforts, but I want to mention that many people keep an interval or hesitate, so they would lose time. Students, for instance, sometimes look disappointment to keep doing their study hard, so they lose opportunities and may fail the exams. Indeed, plenty of people don not try to reach their goals, and stop working for gaining them, so they cannot meet to flourish. For example, students don not study; thus, they cannot pass the exams, and they will fail. In addition, people who don not try might lose their life expectancy, like many African people who don not attempt to get money, and they think that they live poorly, so their dead would be inevitable.

Last but not least, keep trying renders positive energy. If people think "Never, never give up," they would observe that their endeavors might increase and seem energetic. Also, the repetition of this statement helps us to think optimistic. For instance, those students are able to get a good score, and be encouraged to continue their study hard. This emotion, I mean optimistic feel would promote people's abilities and capabilities to reach their goals sooner, such as successful students who improve their skills about their lessons.

To sum up, people's goals are accessible if they decide to keep trying to reach them contiguously. Attempt to reach these goals causes development, keeping away an disappointment, and getting practical energy. That is why I agree with this declaration that keep trying and never stop working for our goals.