jobymonpj
Jul 28, 2016
Writing Feedback / The younger children need some help from their parents to complete their homework efficiently; IELTS [5]
Hai ichanpants,
Thank you very much for your valuable observations.I have been trying to get a 7 band in my writing for years.In my previous attempts,I managed to score 6.5 in writing all the time,while other scores where 7 or above.So hopefully you can understand why I try really hard to impress my examiner.
So there is no surprise that why many parents are of the opinion that helping children in their homework is essential and necessaryand .In my view, children, especially the younger ones should be helped in doing their homework, while teenagers and college goers should be allowed to do them by their own.
PLEASE HAVE A LOOK AT THE ABOVE SENTENCE WHETHER IT IS GRAMMATICALLY CORRECT NOW?
In conclusion, both views have their own merits and demerits so it is really important for parents to involve cautiously in their children's homeworkcautiously ,whereas helping younger ones have immense benefits.
please correct my mistakes by pointing out the exact mistake
i would be grateful if you could specify the mistakes I made so that I can Iimprove
Hai ichanpants,
Thank you very much for your valuable observations.I have been trying to get a 7 band in my writing for years.In my previous attempts,I managed to score 6.5 in writing all the time,while other scores where 7 or above.So hopefully you can understand why I try really hard to impress my examiner.
So there is no surprise that why many parents are of the opinion that helping children in their homework is essential and necessary
PLEASE HAVE A LOOK AT THE ABOVE SENTENCE WHETHER IT IS GRAMMATICALLY CORRECT NOW?
In conclusion, both views have their own merits and demerits so it is really important for parents to involve cautiously in their children's homework
please correct my mistakes by pointing out the exact mistake
i would be grateful if you could specify the mistakes I made so that I can Iimprove