Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 1 : average annual Gross Domestic Products (GDP) [12]

The graph below shows the average growth in domestic products in wealthy countries, countries that have adopted a global approach to business and countries that have not.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below

The bar chart belows show about average annual Gross Domestic Products (GDP) growth in a four edge between 1960s-1990s. There are three kind of countries whom take part in this report; Wealthy countries, Globalisers, and non-Globalisers.

In the beginning, let us see the chart movements of wealthy countries. In 1960s, the number of GDP growth about 4,8 percent, and it is become the highest portion in over a 4 years edge. The number was gradually falling in the twenty years forward. Started around 1 percent decreasing, the number of GDP become 3,8 percent in 1970s and falling again to 2,2 % in 1980s period. Then, this condition sharply falling about 2 percent in 1990.

Let us turn into Globalisers GDP growth whom condition contrary different. The GDP number awake about 1,2 percent in 1960s and rising to 2,9 in 1970s period. To look forward, the percentage was increasingly arise year by year. In 1980s the number of GDP is about 3,2 percent then the highest percentage nearest to 5 percent happening in 1990s.

The last group of countries which called Non-globalisers become the last discussion. Start with 2,2 percent in 1960s, the bar chart rolling fluctiative. In the 1970s the number rising become 3,3 percent before decline into 1,8 percent in 1980s. This condition changes in the 1990s, number of Non-globalisers increase again about 1,2 percent.

This is important to view that those of groups have different pattern in each. The Wealthy's countries GDP start with high percentage and then gradually falling in last year reporting. In contrast, Globalisers countries take position from below and rising as highest GDP point of whole groups after 40 years period. The last group have roller coaster pattern, whereas falling and rise in a-4 year period.

To conclude, Globalisers countries has the best GDP movement than others. Nevertheless, both of others groups should be evaluate to improve their GDP in the forward.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 1: Process of Making Chewing Gum [11]

The diagram below shows How chewing gum is made.

Turning to the chart indicates the process of making gum which is the detail steps from melting the raw material to package the product.

First in all, the pieces of gum are poured into a container and are heated until the pieces of gum are melting to be the single form of mass. Moreover, straining of the melting gum is the next step to extract the dough more smoothly. Next, the gum is placed into another container and is added with the flavoring, softeners and sweeteners. This mixture is blended until all of the ingredients are mixed together.

Moving onto the next step the gum is delivered into the different machine which uses rollers to flatten out the gum. When the gum has been thin sheets, they travel to the cutting machine which cuts the gum into rectangular shapes and is broken into the single piece. Finally, the gum comes to along a conveyor belt for packaging process and ready for distribution.

Clearly, the chewing gum process, which has six steps, is connected with each other step in the gum's factory to create the various flavors. A more detailed look at the picture depicts the process of making gum and the ingredients are required.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 1 : The Chart in Global Sales of Games Software, CDs and DVD or Video [9]

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This appearance was presented the global sales in three types creation; games software, DVD/video, CDs in four consecutive years, ended at 2003.

Reviewing in past four years CDs take the highest number of sales. The peak of trade occurs in 2000 nearly 40 billion dollars. Whether we peruse, sales of CDs was declined slightly from 38 billion dollars in 2000 to 32 billion dollars in 2003.

Meanwhile, opposite sales ensue in the other groups. Games software has progressive increase between 2000 and 2003. Inception with the trough at 14 billion dollars sales, this figure improved steadily approach 20 billion dollars in the end year reported. Moreover, DVD/video sales had more double sales than games software in each year reported. Started out at 17 billion dollar in 2000 and subsequently rose annually to reach topmost sales about 31 billion dollars in 2003.

Hence, this data should be best reference to evaluate for reach advance sales. Generally, in over 4 years all of creation seems rose gradually until finishing the period. Even though the number of CDs sales is the highest, sales of DVD/video dramatically become the best progressive. It is because total numbers of sales over 4 years increase beyond 10 billion dollars, whether CDs sales position just among 30-40 billion dollars.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 1: Summarising two charts (Demand and electricity usage during typical day) [6]

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These two figures show regarding demand for electricity in UK during typical day. The depictory of line chart reported unit of electricity using during winter and summer, while the pie chart shows percentage of purposing using in electricity.

According to the line charts, Britons desire to use electricity in winter rather than summer. The electricity consumption fluctuated among 30-40 thousand units in first half of the winter, then reach a peak nearly 50 thousand units before felt dramatically onward. Nevertheless, electricity using in summer remained stable among 10-20 thousand. Both in the winter and summer, the low of trough of electricity usage occur before noon, but the peak routine come about evening.

The second chart represented what the electricity is used for. Around 15 per cent Britons use electricity for two groups; kitchen or entertainment, such as vacuum cleaner, food mixer, electronic tools, lighting, TV, and Radio. However, the more tripled per cent electricity using was for heating, either room or water, it was around 52,5 percent. The other residual percentage was used for oven, kettles, and washing machine.

In conclusion, both of data are coherence. The most favor electricity using is for equipments which function to make warm..

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Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 1 :World population figures and urban population in different world region. ) [4]

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The graphs below provide information on global population figures and figures for urban populations in different world regions. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Line chart below show the world nations growth between 1800 and 2100, whether the urban growth in different world region was figured by another bar chart consecutively.

Generally, the first graph illustrate whole of world population whom rose steadily from 1800 until middle period of report. While in the last half growth of citizen rose sharply before felt decreased onward.

More clearly, the number of inhabitants inception from 1,8 million and rose gradually approach2 millions in 1930. In 1940 this figure continued sharply and reaches a peak by 8 million people in 2040. The worldwide population onward abruptly fall a gradual from 8 to 6 millions in the last 30 years.

The second chart provides information about the differences of urban population in wealth and poor region in the range from 2015 to 2040. We can see according to the data, urban population drawing in wealth region had been stabled for all of years about 1,2 millions. In any case, city residents in developing region increased steadily average 5 millions in each 5 years measurement. This data, however, can be material for predict the urban growth in both of countries.

Overall, developing country has huge contribution to world rate population whom their inhabitants stepped up year by year.

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Writing Feedback / Weather in Dubai is extremely contrasted - IELTS Task [7]

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The table and graph below give information on the weather in Dubai. The graph shows annual rainfall and the table shows annual temperatures.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The table and the graph shows the average temperature and annual rainfall in Dubai.

The table tells us Dubai as a warm place. The coldest is about 14 degrees, and the hottest is around 48. These two of condition occur between January and February, in the other hand the peak of temperatures are from July to August. In the remaining months motions of temperatures is restricted among 14 and 48 degrees.

Graph, as the second reference, provide how much rainfall there is over. According to the graph from May to November are the low of trough point which indicates almost no rain, indeed. In a first quarter month, annual rainfalls begin from 12 centimeters and then gradually increased until reach a peak in February at 32 centimeters. What is more, the motion of graph continue fall to under 5 centimeters rain fall in May. In May rainfall is rise again, and this increase to 15 centimeters in the end of the year.

In the nutshell, the weather in Dubai is extremely contrasted, rainy in the winter and dry over the summer.

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Writing Feedback / Report of Numeracy Skill in 24 Countries [10]

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The given pie chart below shows the adult numeracy competencies in 24 different countries.

Overall, the result of numeracy skill was different in each country. According to the data, we can classify them into 3 cluster; lower by 15 point, middle by 15-20, and the over by 2 point. Then, every condition in each group is interesting to see more.

Firstly, the lower groups contain with 8 countries, and dominated by countries from European continent. The motion of numeracy skills in this group is around 15 point to the low of trough point of whole measure.

Secondly, the middle cluster is more fascinating, Japan whom came from Asian continent achieved good numeracy skill for their folk paralleize with other 8 developed countries in Europe. However this is a nice to see while Japan could be compete in the numeracy among developed country in the world.

Lastly, the result survey earn that the highest group with 6 countries have more variety with continents involved. It is United States from America, Ireland-Germany-UK-Spain from Europe, and Korea representative Asia. The topmost expert population in numeracy is attained by US by 2,7 point. Whereas Korea, achieve 2,2 poin and also sign as the only Asian country which stand in the highest cluster.

In the nutshell, whereas based on quantity countries out of Europe are less, their inhabitants strongly enough in numeracy skill, indeed.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 1; Rechargable vs Disposal Battery [5]

The chart below give information about sale of two kind of battery. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparison where relevant.

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Nowadays, battery is the main utensil as power supply for many electronic sources. Avicenne energy released the prediction about worldwide sale between disposable and rechargeable battery in the 13 years forward start at 2009. This data consist of general battery and does not include batteries for cars, laptops, tablets, and smartphones.

More clearly, in 2009 rechargable battery was sold by 5 billion dollar and will continuing rise to 25 billion dollar in 2025. In every five year the increment prediction of this figures average by 5 billion dollars. However, according to the table we can see that the chart movement of rechargeable battery predict very sharp year by year.

Move onto disposable battery using. From 2009 measurement, the number of sale slightly decreased year by year. Start at 12 billion dollars, and it is continuing fall to fewer than 10 billion dollars in 2025. Interested to see that each of line will be meet in 2015 with about 10 billion dollars sale each.

Clearly, we can see that in the upcoming rechargeable battery using is preferable than disposable one.

Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 1 : Diagram of Earthquake-resistant buildings [5]

The diagrams on the right show two types of building design that help reduce the effects of earthquakes.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The figures are apartment block and house which build it the volcanic area. In each of building have sameness and also differences aspect include that interested to see more.

Rectangular, is the grand shape of the figures. However, the other similarity is from roof which is made by concrete, and also the steel pillars buried deep into the ground. The apartment block contain of rubber that absorb shocks in the ground level to move perform.

Heigh, is the main main differences of the buildings. In contrast, apartment is taller than house, so metal support to strengthen interlinear wall purpose is used. In the other hand, house construct with hollow brick to lessen damage when it falls.

Next, reutilize stone is placed to build house floor. It can be the best combinations to scaffold strengthen of pillar steel. Moreover, high-rise building contains of sprinkler system. It is such a modern feature service and benefitted for prevent residence from fire.

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