Writing Feedback / TED Summary : How to control someone else's arm with your brain - by Greg Gate [2]

Electrophysiology as the Neuro-Revolution is faced apparently in the cutting-aged world. The brain as the most vital organ has never been acquainted as well in the early aged in school. The main reason for this is about the high expenditure for this instrument such as money and time. People who want to have broaden horizon about the brain should dedicate their time and be focus to explore the matter. Greg Gage who is the founder of a company called Backyard Brains with Tim Marzullo, make DIY neuroscience equipment that is simple, affordable enough and could be learned by an amateur or a high school student, so they may be thinking about possibly becoming a brain scientist. In TED's live performance, he demonstrated the equipment and showed for all audience how the somebody's brain, that have about 80 billion neurons inside transferred an electrical and chemical messages back and forth and could control someone else's arm with her brain. The demonstration illustrates that it is a simple way to conduct another person with our brain.

Writing Feedback / Task 1 - The percentage of housing owned and rented in the UK in 1985 and 2005 [2]

The proportion of private owned housing and rental housing in UK between 1985 and 2005 is illustrated in the pie charts and measured in percentage.

It is clear that while the number of housing owned was a significant increase in a two-decade period which was similar with social housing's trend and broke a record to be the highest position in 2005, the proportion of rental of Council housing went down dramatically in 2005 which was the opposite trend than others. Meanwhile, the number of privately rental house was remained stable in the periods of the question.

In 1985, the number of privately owned stood approximately more than half in the total number and rose sharply of one in ten in 2005. While the number of social housing hovering for a minority number in 1985 and was a slight growth in the last of year, the proportion of privately rented housing was unchanged in the following year and took the same number with the tenancy of Council in 2005. Initially, the number of Council rented housing was in more than in two-fifths in the total number and decrease sharply almost a doubled eventually.

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Writing Feedback / Hiring jobless people develop their living standards, give practical skills and integrate in society [2]

Task2 - Unemployed people should be made to work

The most significant number of unemployed people in the world was caused by a large number of reasons. While it is believed that making people without job to be employee will allow the low-salary as a cheap labor, i would agree that the merits such as building their skill and raise their financial support should be concerned to improve their standard living.

To begin with, the highest population without involving their large number of productive inhabitant, will cause a lot of problems for their city development. The city will not able to enhance their financial budget, if their dwellers and occupants cannot endorse the improvement of their city's economic wheel. Furthermore the people who gain the job have much more opportunities to build up their skills such as be an expert in some field. In addition, they have a good chance to repair their financial condition constructively. Obviously, as time goes on they also able to have a great achievement from their society.

Apart from the previous discussion, the unemployed people who able to become employee usually obtain a humble payment in the beginning career. Their obstacles to get much money in a short time is faced frequently. Absolutely, they should be more patient to increase their career and keep in mind their responsibility for doing their work.

To sum up, people who life without job seem a crum in their society. Making unemployed people as employees allow them to develop their living standards which also build up their practice skills and support their economical goverment

Writing Feedback / Activities and positive thinking; people over the age of 65 can improve health and extend their life [2]

The healthy lifestyle and long life opportunity are expected to generate the retirement aged which are more interested as provide the live full and activity lives to their communities. In my opinion there are two benefits for society which are committed by over 65 aged such as enhance the healthy life for them and improve the broaden horizon and skill as an expert for young people.

It is irrefutable fact that the old people decrease slightly not only about their endurance but also their intelligence. Their relationships with peers become fall out respectively when their friends pass away or deteriorate in health. Keep in health with a lot of exercise such as healthy gym like Tai Chi and do the daily routine especially with regard to use their brain either do game or just open private teaching makes them always in positive condition and feeling.

This also introduces the positive one such as a model which a large number of experiences as an expert. Elderly people have much more expertise in many fields. Their traditional methods are often reasonable than the cutting-edge system. Indeed, involving the people over 65 aged not only encourage their spirit and provide their motivation living but also brings out the great number of motivation and knowledge in severity that right to be shared to young people. For instance of this can be seen in circumstance such as elder people remained not only in work as a senior employee who become adviser for younger employees, but also become motivator into school as an keynote speaker that can share their fascinated stories of life in past.

To sum up, people over the age of sixty-five can improve their health and extensive life with a large number of activities and positive thinking. Their knowledge also influences the society as young people's broaden horizon to face their challenge in life.

Writing Feedback / The statistic characterizing of human population trends in Scotland from 1940 to 2020 [2]

Demographic Trends in Scotland - Task 1

The statistic characterizing of human population trends in Scotland from 1940 to 2020 which was categorized on birth rate, population growth rate and death rate is illustrated in the line graph and measured in percentage. It is clear that the tendency show a declining population in Scotland over a 80-year period.

The birth proportion experienced a dramatic decrease from 2.5 per cent in 1940 to 0.5 in 2020. There were a slight rise in the late 1940s and 1960s accompanied with considerable falls, especially between 1950 and 1960.

The number of population growth was a similar trend during the period question and indicating a strong link between birth and population rate. There is a significant increase between 1945 and 1955.

While the death rate decrease sharply from 1940 to 1955 of 0,4% and then went down steadily over a 45-year period latter, there is envisaged to rise slightly over the next decade which predicted as the old generation growth.

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Writing Feedback / TED summary : The Female Body - Perfect by Leeann Schudel [2]

The image of perfect body that having a stick-thin is beautiful has been affecting people's life, especially for women. According to Cable News Network (CNN), there is one in three women that strive and sacrifice their life in a full of year to achieve an ideal body type. It is believed that mass media that produce much flawless image everyday, television film that generate an issue of impeccable beauty, billboard advertising that provides an unrealistic figure and destructive the opposite views influence the society views to measure the women's picturesque indicators. This situation not only influences the old people but also young people. The cute and pretty Barbie features with impossible beauty and freak in shape in reality are introduced during their childhood. People's life with much of beauty's lies like that should be halted. The most important action to alter this condition is how we can disregard the impossible expectations and receive ourselves for who we are totally.

Writing Feedback / TED Summary : "How to speak so that people want to listen" by Julian Treasure [2]

There are many reason that people don't give their attention to listen the others that sometime causes by noise and bad acoustics. This circumstance is caused by seven human's habit in their life, such as gossip, judging, negativity, complaining, excuses, lying and dogmatism. While gossip is speaking ill that is causal done by people to talk about somebody who's not present, judging gives some obstacle situation. Negativity that results in uncomfortable atmosphere, complaining which as suffer others, excuses that means people is not responsible for their duty, Lying habitual and dogmatism which lack the true are significant to affect the poor communication.

The manner to reverse the situation is to adjust the HAIL (honesty as be clear and straight, authenticity as just be yourself, integrity as be in your word, and love as do wish and think positive to others). In addition, the important things for people who want to be listened with others are to take away and play with : register, timbre, prosody, pace, pith and volume. People who speak with powerful and good environment result in the conscious listening from others.

Writing Feedback / TED Summary: Inside The Mind of A Master Procrastinator by Tim Urban [2]

There are two kinds of people's brain system either to do something or finish their job, which are Procrastinator's and non-procrastinator's brain.While both of them have same in one matter, on the other side they have a significant difference way to influence or conduct the human action.

Tim Urban illustrates with the three elements which usually affect the humans'decision. Firstly, the procrastinator's brain also has an Instant gratification like a monkey which always think that everything is fine. It builds a dark playground in our brain that lives entirely in the present moment, has neither memory of the past nor knowledge of the future and just think about easy and fun. He is always causing a conflict and come out of the Makes Sense circle which is the place that it is filled with guilt, dread, anxiety, and self-hatred of procrastinator's feeling. Moreover, rational decision-maker make the rational decision to do more productive. He makes all of that fit and really keep any work with schedule appropriately, gives us the ability to visualize the future, make long-term plans to be doing right now without procrastinating. In addition, the panic monster is the last factor that wakes up anytime a deadline which gets too close with scary consequence of people responsibility. He is the only thing that can terrify the monkey and control the Rational decision-maker again in the right way.

In conclusion, everyone is becoming a procrastinator in their life. There are two kinds of procrastination. One is about the effects of procrastination which are contained to the short term that involved the panic monster and others is occur in the situations without no deadline.

Writing Feedback / More people in developing countries are purchasing cars.What are the problems and possible solution? [4]

The dramatically rate for dependency on purchasing cars in developing countries come to an abrupt withdrawl of many problems. It is justified that the plenty of negative impacts are should not be neglected. Therefore, I believe collaboration government with the local people seems feasible to tackle these problems with some other measures.

Undoubtedly, purchasing car for many people provide a large number of drawbacks. First and foremost, the expenditure for using fossil fuels stalking offence the harmfull gases as an air pollution that result in global warming. It is caused by the amount of CO2 that also affected the Ozone layer depletion as emissions form plentyful of cars. Moreover, the direct impact of this is deficiency of public health. The decreasing of Ozone layer influences rate of skin cancer diseases, while the air pollution impresses the respiratory disease like asthma and bronchitis. In addition, a number of cars are regarding the terrible traffic congestion that outweigh negative impact for the road user. As time as goes on when the cars user is growing up, the situation will significantly awful as increase the public frustration, stress, physically problem and result in high mortality by car accident. Consequently, the awkward circumstances in the future is reasonable to be concerned.

Apart from the previous discussion, the right action and collaboration between government and local people to solve the problems should be required. Initially, transportation law is the main factor. Government have to imposing high tax dan allowing the low cost public transport to decline privat cars's consumption. Furthermore, they should have the compact and eco-friendly public transport plan to serve people.

To sum up, the incremental negative impacts for buying cars in developing countries should be prevented. It is imperative that government and local people shoud workout together to stop this numbers excessively and solve the problems.