Writing Feedback / The causes of losing productivity of global land and the regions affected by the degradation in 1990 [2]

The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. the table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1900s.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The figure shows the causes of losing productivity of global land ant the table informs the data about the regions affected by the degradation in 1990s. Overall, over-grazing is the main cause of global soil degradation. The Europe is the region having the highest percentage of land degraded.

It can be seen from the pie chart that over-grazing is the biggest number of degradation with 35 percent. Logging is the second rank with 30 percent. Then, over-planting gives 28 percent of causes of degradation. Other causes can be combined with 17 percent overall.

Europe is the continent that having the impact of soil degradation with 23 percent. Deforestation is the reason why there are many land degraded at that region. The group of islands in south pacific including Australia and New Zealand - also known as Oceania - is the second degraded land which mostly impacted by over-grazing with 11.3 percent. There is no over-planting here. The last region is North America having 5 percent degraded land. The main cause is over-cultivation with 3.3 percent then over-grazing with 1.5 percent.

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Writing Feedback / Writing Task 2: Is dress smartly more important than quality of work? [NEW]

Some organizations believe that their employees should dress smartly. Others value quality of work above appearance. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Can a Good Appearance Do a Better Job?

Today is an era when there are a lot of companies searching for an efficiency which can make some advantages for those. The employers believe that the worker should use the formal uniform while the others think that the great performance of work is the first matter.

There is a popular quote: "do not judge a book by its cover". It means that you should not see the personality of people you meet by the clothes that they wear on. Psychologically, we think in the reverse. We always think that the person from its uniform. So that, some organizations believe that when its employee wear the good dress, it can make the company's image better than they are not. Consequently, it can also attract many investors and increase the profit of the company. Also, this is a good way to promote and expand the good perception towards the company's brands.

However, some people believe that quality is everything for the company. The only way increasing the quality of the company is to increase the performance and ability of the worker. If a company does not have a quality, soon the company will move to red-level. But, if the company has the quality, it will be able to increase its capital and soon lead the market as the consequences of having quality. Also, the good foundation of quality can overcome the competition among the companies.

Personally, I think the question depends on the situation which should urgently solve at first. For the company which has a good quality of its employee, the secondary needs such as making a smart uniform is the good thing in order to expand a better image of the company. For the company started in early age, they should focus on how to increase the quality of its employee in order to face the market competition.

Writing Feedback / Writing Task 1: Comparison between married and unmarried couple and the effect of children. [4]

The charts below show the results of a survey on happiness ratings for married and unmarried people in the US, and the effect of children on the overall ratings of married couples.

The bar chart tells the information about the answer people gave about the satisfaction rates for married and unmarried couple in the United States and the children's effect on their parent's happiness. Overall, the level of the pleasure of married partner is two-fold than unmarried one except for older people and the present of children does not have a big effect on their family.

For the age having 18-64 age, the median percentage of contentment of happy people (43 percent) is almost double than unmarried one (21 percent). For older people, it can be seen that the married people tend to be happier for having 44 percent of satisfaction level than unmarried one which can only reach 34 percent of happiness. The data shows that the happiness rates for American are below than a half.

Children do not affect the happiness of the family. It can be seen that children under 18 only give 44 percent, while for children above 18, they only gave a slight increase by one percent. 43 percent is the happy percentage for a nuclear family without having any child. A small difference indicates that children will not affect the joy of married couple.

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Writing Feedback / Do the advantages for starting their own business outweigh the disadvantages? [4]

Some people decide to start their own business instead of working for a company or organization. Do the advantages for people working for their own business outweigh the disadvantages?

In the modern era when the business is the common thing, there is a popular trend for people to open for business rather than stay as the employee. Even though there are some problems they will face, I believe that the convenience overcomes any drawbacks.

Starting a business is not as easy as we flip our hand. There are many difficulties which often come to the entrepreneur. Some people tend to make their own business without any preparation and it can make the problem getting worse. If the people have a lack of managerial skills, then the employers will lead their company in a red-light condition. Also, competition, sometimes, makes a new culture shock for people who have not a good mentality and valuable business experiences.

However, becoming an entrepreneur is an interesting one. There are many positive things that can be useful for us and people around us. The first one is that we can open the job opportunity. The unemployment issue around us can be easily solved by the appearance of their new company. Also, as the owner, they can control the flow of money which can be allocated to the employee and mostly to the owner so that the owner can increase their wealthy level. The last and probably the most advantage are that the entrepreneur is able to be much closer to their family. They can interact more than they have done before because they work at home.

All in all, I think that the advantages of becoming an entrepreneur are greater than the disadvantages. However, someone that wants to start a new job should make an attention towards their skill because the future problem can only be controlled by their inter-personal skill.

Writing Feedback / The figures inform on the design/location of a machine that can produce electricity from wind power [2]

The diagrams below show the design for a wind turbine and its location. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The figures inform the design for a machine that can produce electricity from wind power and the appropriate location to be placed. Overall, it can be seen that placing the turbine in the sea may not destroy the pleasure of the landscape while the turbine on the hill produces maximum electricity.

The equipment of wind turbine consists of blades created by wood or fiberglass material, wind sensor to detect speed and direction, the generator which can produce 1,5 megawatts power, steel tower, and computer to receive the data and adjust the direction and angle of blades. The process starts when the blades are forced by the wind and the force is converted to electricity by the generator. The direction and blades angle is adjusted by wind sensor and the computer.

The machine can be installed on the hill and in this case, it can be also installed in the sea. Placing wind turbine in the sea may not spoil the landscape while the turbine placed on the hill can maximally produce electricity because of maximum wind strengths. However, the domestic turbine can only produce 100 kilowatts of power.

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Writing Feedback / The kind of problem people often face when starting to stay abroad - according to age. [3]

The chart below shows information about the problems people have when they go to live in other countries. summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make the comparisons where relevant.

The chart informs about the kind of problem people were often faced when starting to stay abroad according to age. Overall, people having 35-54year-olds had the most problematic challenge. To find a school for their children was the least percentage of the problem for all age range while for people aged 35 to over 55, sorting out healthcare was the first rank of the problem.

The greatest problem for young age was sorting out the money with just below 35 percent. Meanwhile, only 35 percent of 35-54 years old people finding it as a problem while older people had 29 percent of integration problem on this issue. Sorting out healthcare was the trickiest problem with people range 35-54 and over 55 age. The former had 33 percent while the latter had 31 percent of problems. However, for the young age, only 32 percent of people faced the problem.

Finding a school for the children was the problem for people in the middle age and the young with 19 and 6 percent. For elder people, it was the least problem they faced with only two percent of the people.

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Writing Feedback / Today, there are many pupils that do not know how to live healthily. [3]

Many children these days have an unhealthy lifestyle. Both schools and parents are responsible for solving this problem.
To what extent do you agree with this statement?

Today, there are many pupils that do not know how to live healthily. There are some opinions that school and the parents are the ones who have a responsibility to overcome this problem. Overall, I agree that giving the children education of healthy lifestyle should be given by the school and their parents as the part of their responsibility for the next generation.

It is popularly believed that young generation has a bad lifestyle, especially in the healthy lifestyle. The lack of knowledge is the main problem that they have experienced so far. The children do not know how to be a healthy person and how is the way that the pupils can choose to be a good person. Eating is one of the main concern of being a healthy person, which they sometimes forget to. For example, they do not concern about how much they eat, what time they should eat, and when they should have a meal. In fact, at least 25 percent of the children having an obesity around the world - data from AC Nielsen survey in 2015.

As the ones who are the closest to the children, school and parents have the responsibility to educate their children or students. Based on the research, teaching with the closest one and the one who interacting every day is the most effective way to expand their way of lifestyle. The students can learn how to be a healthy person if the parents and the school teach them continuously. As the result, the pupils will be triggered to have a healthy lifestyle.

All in all, giving the health education by the one who closest to the children is the most effective method to overcome the problem. As the one having interactions every day, the school and the parents are responsible for solving the drawback of the unhealthy lifestyle of children.