Writing Feedback / The number of people from overseas who visit five different states, during a four years period [3]

The graph below gives information about international tourist arrivals in five countries.

A breakdown about the number of people from overseas visited in 5 states during 4 years periods. It is measured in millions. Overall, it can be seen that, there was upward trend in the proportion of tourist came in 5 countries. And the most popular was USA and France.

Firstly, from 1995 to 2000, except USA and France saw a small number of tourists arrived Brazil, Egypt and Malaysia. Malaysia stood at 20 while, Brazil and Egypt at 9. However, there was a gradual incline approximately 5. In contrast, USA was the most popular country as much as 70 tourists, and then rose by 15. On the other hand, a dramatic increase experienced at the number of visitors in France from 30 to 60.

Lastly, during 2005-2010 witnessed an extremely increase of tourists went to Malaysia and France. They were grown up approximately 20. Furthermore, the proportion of visitors in Egypt and Brazil was under 20. Whereas, in USA experienced a small decline by 5. (165w).

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Writing Feedback / From January to May, there was a gradual rise of Channel One News viewers at 9.30pm. [3]

The graph below shows the average daily figures for Channel One News over a 12-month period

A breakdown about the number of people watched of Channel One News in 4 different times per day during a year period. It is measured in millions. Overall, it can be seen that a fluctuation viewer at 1pm and 6pm per day.

From January to May, there was a gradual rise of viewer at 9.30pm. It began 3 in January and experienced increase to 3,9. 6pm was the most choice to watch that channel at 4,9 in January, although during that period fluctuated in proportion of viewer. It saw decline by 2 in May. Besides, there was stable trend of figure people watched at 1pm approximately 1,2.

In May-December, there was new time of news at 11pm and the proportion of viewer stood at less than 1. It witnessed upward trend until August and downward over August to December. Afterwards, until August was extremely drop in proportion of viewer at 9.30pm by 2,9 and incline until 3 at December. At 6pm there was fluctuation and decrease at 3,2 while, at 1pm saw a stable trend over a year. (178w).

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Writing Feedback / A responsibility of youths, who are aged under of 25, to contribute to communities [2]

Adult youths are often called up for working for the development of communities. Do you think they should work voluntarily or should they get paid? Give your opinion

Nowadays, Having a job to develop a communities is usually a responsibility of youths who aged under of 25. Some people argue that they should work as a volunteer and others believe that they should get paid. I assume that they must get income when called up for working to do maximal job because they have more responsibility.

Adult youths are the periods which have highest creativity, skills and loyalty. It is important to development of communities, so they are encouraged for doing that. Work voluntarily is usually do them because, they argue that why should get paid to communities, while their organization which teach them about other skills such as leadership, social life and so on. But it can make them do not have more responsibility, so they will work based on their self and when they do not have other activities. This situation does not good to improvement of communities, because they can come or go by themselves, whenever they want.

On the other hand, getting money when working in a organization is good for people to make them more loyal. Without paid they will do anything and just come when they think do not have job. Based on the article in Toronto University, 60% of student have great job to improve their community when get income. They are more discipline than other who do not have paid and it makes their community increase rapidly.

In conclusion, becoming volunteer are good for adult youth but they do not have more loyalty and discipline if compare with people who work with income, because they have biggest responsibility.(268w).

Writing Feedback / The bar chart below shows the percentage of students who passed their high school competency exams, [2]

A breakdown about the proportion of pupils in high school who passed their exams based on lesson and sex, during the period 2010-2011. Overall, it can be seen that, computer science is dominated by girls and chemistry is the less percentage than others subject which finished by boys.

There are three subjects that have bigger proportion than others. It experiences more than 40%, foreign languages are 47.4% by female and 46.8% by male. Both of them smaller than mathematics which shows the number of students who passed exams is 48.4% by boys and 49.2% by girls. However, that percentage nearly 50% but computer science is the highest proportion as much as 56.3% by girls. It becomes the most popular by female students but just 42.1% by male students.

On the other hand, in exact subject, chemistry and geography are the smallest percentage than others. It can be seen that just under of 15% for boys who passed chemistry subject and 20.1% for geography by girls. Besides, physics above 30% by both sexes, while history shows 25.6% for girls and 22.9% for boys. (I81w).

Writing Feedback / The conclusion after analyzing the bar chart on disbursements in some countries [2]

The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in the year 2009.

A breakdown about the proportion of four states namely the United state, Canada, United Kingdom, and Japan which share of expenditures for five categories in 2009. It is presented in the bar chart. Overall, it can be seen that, health care were the smaller percentage than other categories, and housing was dominated in four countries.

To begin with, housing and transportation were the higher percentage than others. It showed above 15% in the five countries, where in United State, housing was the most popular as much as approximately 26%. However, Japan have 10% in transportation categories but other foreign more than that proportion. On the other hand, Canada and United Kingdom experienced share expenditures never under of 15% and above 25% in both of categories.

Secondly, Health care and clothing were the smallest proportion for all of countries. It witnessed no more than 6% and Japan just around 2% for health care. However, in the United state showed shares of expenditures in Health care as much as almost 8% bigger than clothing under 5%. On the contrary, food was the highest percentage then health care and clothing. It showed for four countries the proportion more than 10% and Japan was the highest at approximately 23%.(206w).

Writing Feedback / Children are struggling more pressures nowadays from academic, social and commercial perspectives. [3]

"Children are facing more pressures nowadays from academic, social and commercial perspectives.
What are the causes of these pressures and what measures should be taken to reduce these pressures?

In the present, kids are focused at more pressures from schools or academic activities, social and other suggestions which had became commercial. There are several factors which causes this problems, for instances education system and the biggest promise from parents or environmental. This problems must be reduce with give freedom for student or children to do activities based on their passion or activities.

Developing of science and technology causes more pressure for children. They have been faced in a reality based on the rules or regulation so, it makes them do not have freedom to choose their skills. Education system in some schools has encouraged pupils to know some subjects at the same time and they should understand about that. And the end, they will press their brain and make them stress.

In addition, the biggest hope from parents and social life are the main reason which make students get the highest pressure. Based on the newscientist article, 40% children in Nigeria have faced more pressure from academic, 25% from social life and commercial perspective as much as 35%. Reducing this situation must be done to increase happiness level by kids. Activities which can do parents or teacher to make children have the own passion and free to do anything since it is good for improve their ability. Because more pressure make them stress.

All in all, some parts of life which encourage children to stay in competition and parents who force their children to success causes the biggest pressure. To reducing this situation parents and teacher must give freedom to express their self and ability.(266w).

Writing Feedback / Pros and cons of the education system for kids in their home [2]

Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child's development while others think that it is important for children to go to school. Discuss the advantages of both methods and give your own opinion.

Nowadays, education system for kids can do in home, it is called homeschooling, some people argue that, developing of children will greatest if lesson is done in home, while other believe that, going to school is better than homeschooling. This essay will discuss the gains this argument, and i believe that teaching kids in school makes them to have good communicate, they can more regulate and explore their self.

Recently, homeschooling have became new way of parents to give education for their children. Teaching in home have benefits such as children more focus on subject that is learned, it is caused they can ask and get more explanations, when they do not understand about the lesson. Children have more time to study and whenever they want. On the other hand, this system makes parents can control their child regarding study and social life. Based on the Australia article, explained that 65% children in Adelaide know about their passion in a subject or learning, and it made them more focus to improve their ability. However, it is a great way to make kids more understand, but it will have negative effect for their socialization with other friends. So, going to school is more important.

School is a place where students can meet more friends, and finding best friend in their social life. They will more explore their self because there are many choice about skills. Teacher have prepared some sports, arts, or other ability which can be chosen of pupils. It is same with studied of Brain at Bristol University, he explained that schools is the best place to make students incline their knowledge in several aspects, and 65% kids more enjoy when they are in school, because they can find new friends.

In conclusion, getting lesson in home is good solution that can be done by parents to control their children, but teaching in school more effective to increase their ability, social life and explore skill of them to face modern era in this time.(333w).

Writing Feedback / Childhood is the period of building skills like speaking an international language [2]

Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

Children is the period to improve more skills like international language. People regard that studying a foreign language well when they are study in primary school than secondary school. Personally, I believe that learning at the first education in school for children brings more benefit than drawbacks. This essay will discuss the merit of learning at first education of child and then, explanation of negative effect if kids learn other language than their local language.

Nowadays, system education has put international language in the lesson of students, especially primary schools. This regulation have positive effect to increase kids knowledge about another language. Besides, children who have 7-10 years more easy to pick up other languages than teenagers. Because their brain quickly accept information so, it is good way for teaching pupils when they are in primary schools. It is refers to explanation of Putra at Indonesia University, he said 65% children in Bogor elementary school more easy to understand and remember of vocabulary in foreign language than student in high school level. Because child have good ability to memorize in their brain than teenagers.

On the other hand, knowing other language when begin to school more efficient to development career of kids, it directly makes them easy communicating with other from abroad. And when star for the next level education, kids will not get problem to study about international language because they good basic when primary school. However, it is good but there is advantages of this situation. Children will more respect a foreign language than their local language. But it will not have big problem as long as their environment always uses their mother language.

In conclusion, learning other language in elementary school more effective to develop basic skill of kids, so they will not get problem when want to start study in secondary level. Although, it will make them do not more understand their local language.(318w).

Writing Feedback / Working hard and strong determination are a way to get our dreams. [2]

Some people think that hard work and determination are the keys to success in life. Some, on the other hand, think that there are other factors behind a successful life. Give your opinion

Working hard and strong determination are a way to get our dreams. Some people assume, both of them are the main keys to catch success in life. However, other believe there are other factors which cause people's dreams come true. This essay will discuss both opinions and i extremely believe that hard work and strong push are the main keys to success in life, however big motivation from families be able people goals happen.

Families are a reason some societies hold their purpose in life. As we know that, families always become the first place of people get push. Due to of that, a success usually is caused of that reason. For instance, I have neighbour, she has 5 children , 3 of them aged under 8 and other approximately 9-11 years old. Unfortunately, she had not husband 3 years ago because his cancer. Because of her children, she builds a restaurant and now, she is the one of famous entrepreuneur which able have 7 restaurants and other business. Based on the explanation, we can conclude that the reason why that women success because of her children.

Even though, families can cause people to success, but the main keys is hard work and willpower, personally, I strong believe, without both reasons people can not get their dreams. Based on the phychology article at Australia University, explained 50% cause of people success in Australia is hard work and 25% is big push from their self. In addition, Encouragement by ourself when, doing job is important because humans always have the awareness to make a success as a necessity rather than desire. Thus, the drive to achieve success will be much stronger.

In conclusion, even there are other factors which cause people achieve their achievement but the main point is working hard, and big determination by ourself. (305w).

Writing Feedback / SOME PEOPLE THINK WHEN RECRUITING, COMPANIES SHOULD AIM TO TAKE ON PEOPLE WHO ARE INNOVATIVE.. [2]

SOME PEOPLE THINK WHEN RECRUITING, COMPANIES SHOULD AIM TO TAKE ON PEOPLE WHO ARE INNOVATIVE AND ABLE TO WORK INDEPENDENTLY WHILE OTHERS CONSIDERED THEY SHOULD RECRUIT PEOPLE WHO ARE ABLE TO WORK IN A TEAM AND FOLLOW INSTRUCTIONS. DISCUSS BOTH VIEWS AND GIVE YOUR OPINION.

Developing of companies is affected of capability, skills and loyalty by employees. Some organizations have regulation to recruit workers who have the highest creativity and independent habit when working. But other argue, when recruiting people who is accepted are able to work in team and rigorous in operation. This essay will discuss both opinions and personally, I strong believe that people who want to recruited in a companies are depend on the capacity and the purpose or critrion needs to be prioritized more.

To begin with, there are several factors why the company usually accept worker who have innovation and working individually. Firstly, the creativity ways carry a rapid increase and development of them, because they could solve any problem that are unsolved as of now. For instance, a programer , they can find a new design pattern has resolved many issuees software and also optimized them, so that it helps their company more survive in the world industry. Secondly, working individual on some procedure helps to reducing the risk of error and miscommunication. For example, a designer tend to alone when work because they have leeway to take ideas and big creativity which is created by theirself.

Secondly, accepting workers who have capability in work team and able to follow the organization systems is considered able to work in industry level. It is because in a industrial position would be more efficient than one working alone. Team work helps people when there are any difficult and it can be solve together.

to sum up, even in some companies do not recruit employees who are work independently but I believe that firms where creative production needs candidate with innovativeness and ability to work indepentdently. On the other hand, employees who able work in team and follow the system their company are appropriate for position in operation line. (307w).

Writing Feedback / In the present, developing of modern technology has made our world better than it was in the past. [NEW]

Modern technology is changing our world. This has advantages such as bringing people closer together through communication. It also has disadvantages such as destroying the differences between cultures. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

In the present, developing of modern technology has made world better than in the past. Some people argue that, the benefit of this situation is the communication of each other people more good, but the drawback of that is make the culture from others people or states become destroy. And personally, I extremely believe that the positive effect of improvement of technology and disagree about the disadvantage that is explained.

Firstly, modern technology brings increase of the changing our world, this situation causes people in domestic can know about the information from international countries. For instance, in the past people just found news in radio and just news from local area, but now from the internet ,television or other facilities we can see anything, however we are not there. On one hand, this situation have made developing countries like Indonesia more familiar , because the information rose rapidly, such as information about the pretty area like Bali, Lombok, or Bandung. Although there is merit about the technology, but some people assumed that it will destroy of different culture, and I tend to disagree regarding this opinion.

Technoology causes societies more underestand with other culture in several areas. We can find this information and learn of culture through youtube without pay accomodation to go to there. So, i think that with the modern technology makes humans more get information fastest and it will not damage other culture of people. It refers to explanation of art and culture agency from United States which explained the modern technology rose of understanding of societies fom different countries as much as 15% and it brings positive effect for developing of the cultures like traditional dance, sing, or other arts.

All in all, the statement regarding the merit of improvement of technology makes people more closer than other is true and really happen and then makinng people understand the difference of other culture in different areas.(320w).

Writing Feedback / Average distance per person per year in regard to modes of transportation [NEW]

Average distance per person per year. The table below gives information about changes in modes of travel in England between 1985 and 2000.

A breakdown about the number of distance of modes of transport that is used of people in England over 15-year period, begin at 1985 is measured in miles and presented in the table. Overall, it can be seen that, car was the popular modes of travel over that period, and there was upward trend regarding changes of all modes of transport.

to begin with, in 1985 was the smallest proportion than others. It experienced the average distance per person just 13 around four-fold smaller than local distance, bus and bicycle. On one hand, car was the most popular than local bus and other as much as 3199 far bigger than both of them which just under 500. Besides, walking and train witnessed the number of distance no more than 300.

Secondly, in 2000 there was down ward trend in three modes transportation. It is shown by bicycle, local bus and walking just under 300, while others was a rapid increase. The most popular over this period was car at 4806, while the second popular was other at 585. So, it witnessed the number of all modes increase dramatically from 470 to 6475. However, taxi was a small rise by 22 and train from 239 to 366.(206w).

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