vangiespen
Dec 27, 2015
Graduate / Research on geophysics what explores fascination about the earth and planetary science [17]
Mohammad, this version of your essay is certainly more usable and provides necessary information. Just had to edit the second paragraph because there were some parts that were unnecessary so I just edited it and corrected some punctuation issues. Here is that revised paragraph:
The undergraduate curriculum in pure physics at BBB university introduced me to a wide scope of subjects. In that time, one of the professors taught us about relativity and geophysics and not only increased my curiosity , but also made my focus on the gravitational and magnetic field greatly. He taught us some of geophysical and relativistic methods in his course including seismic evaluation and curvature coordinates and when I asked question about that he made a clear notion that if you want to understand about the magnetization and gravity properly, then you have to understand about the layers of earth or layers of that particular planet or thing and it's mass variety and difference of materials.
Use this version in place of the one you have at the moment. I believe that your essay is ready to use at this point. You can already submit it if you feel that it already delivers on all the points that you want to highlight in it :-)
Mohammad, this version of your essay is certainly more usable and provides necessary information. Just had to edit the second paragraph because there were some parts that were unnecessary so I just edited it and corrected some punctuation issues. Here is that revised paragraph:
The undergraduate curriculum in pure physics at BBB university introduced me to a wide scope of subjects. In that time, one of the professors taught us about relativity and geophysics and not only increased my curiosity , but also made my focus on the gravitational and magnetic field greatly. He taught us some of geophysical and relativistic methods in his course including seismic evaluation and curvature coordinates and when I asked question about that he made a clear notion that if you want to understand about the magnetization and gravity properly, then you have to understand about the layers of earth or layers of that particular planet or thing and it's mass variety and difference of materials.
Use this version in place of the one you have at the moment. I believe that your essay is ready to use at this point. You can already submit it if you feel that it already delivers on all the points that you want to highlight in it :-)