Essays / Global Warming research paper- what kind disasters do global warning cause? [11]

If you don't know where to begin,it's not time to write yet. The natural way is like this: You get an insight that is so important you must share it, and then you decide you want to write.

So, how can you get a unique insight? You have to read a recent article. Look at all the great articles you find if you search google!

Search for: What impact will the natural disasters of have on the global economy

Do not think about how you will write your paper. Instead, just find an article that is interesting to you. This process might make you have an insight that determines the course of your life. : )

When you get one great insight, that is enough. One paper = One big idea.

Undergraduate / 'something new to slip my bookmark into' - Common App Supplement- personal narrative [5]

However, on many summer evenings I ignore the passage of time for three or four hours, and fall asleep without noting my page, splaying my novel face down.

The beginning of the essay was a little bit confusing, until I picked up on your writing style, which is interesting and great! I hope you're taking creative writing courses, so you can get the feedback you deserve, as you really are a unique writer and should keep it up!

Good luck in school and have fun!

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Graduate / 'a natural match for my personality and lifestyle' - PTCAS Essay [2]

Lifting weights has been a hobby of mine since my early teens.

Learning about all these components has inspired me to become even more fit and to learn even more about healthy living.

However, it was the best thing because for the first time in my life I was introduced to physical therapy.

I remember my evaluation well, the physical therapist at the VA hospital checked my range of motion, strength, and pain levels.

The ER doctor had diagnosed me as having a minor rotator cuff tear, but my physical therapist disagreed and sent me in for an MRI to find out later it was a labrum tear.

With a new outlook and a direction I began looking further into physical therapy.

This is a great essay! Good luck in school and have fun!

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Graduate / 'a chemical engineer by education and training' - Statement of purpose for PhD [3]

In my first job in a dyestuff manufacturing facility, I encountered many industrial problems.

I found that how inefficiency affects not only the production but also the environment, which is the ultimate resource for any process.

I learned a great deal about water quality, standards, testing, and later on, about the worldwide water crisis.

My urge to learn more about advanced technology, ---no comma here--- led me to do my Masters degree at XXX University, where I focused my studies on the nanomaterials, their properties, and their applications.

Rigorous training at your facility, which tirelessly maintains its hard earned reputation as a breeding ground for engineering talent, will help lead my aspirations to fruition.---Great sentence!

They'll see by your essay that they'll be lucky to have you as a student. Good luck!

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Writing Feedback / "Respect everyone" is the most important school rule - O level [3]

Rules, always a part of our lives, which have been imposed on us ever since we were born.

School rules are no exceptions either, which can defer greatly from one school to another.

The amount of defiant students in schools are rising and fights are occurring more frequently and I believe that most of this attributes to the school rules imposed by the school , which are fairly ineffective.

It is not unusual to see students, especially those in high schools or in junior schools wearing their school uniforms to school every day . ---'Every day' is 2 words here.

Students should be punished severely whenever they are late for school severely .

The reason is very apparent because being late to school will hamper their learning in school .

Respect is a moral that I believe every single person should have.

Every problem that occurs is usually because of a lack of respect for the other party.

An example is Japan, which already has this rule imposed on students already.

... be late as they would not be respecting the teachers if they are late and they would also not wear sleazy or offensive clothes to school as this would means that they would not be respecting the school.

Good luck in school and have fun!

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Speeches / Conference Opening Remarks by Minister of Health [2]

This conference invited nineteen international and local experts, including government official, scholars, representatives of pharmaceutical industry and consumers, in which we will have a full discussion of every crucial issue regarding generic drugs.

This conference is truly as a successive event of importance after the FAPA Congress last year in Taipei.

On such occasion, I would like to deliver my utmost greeting for our international scholars and professionals - thank you for your contribution in the following two days, and thank you all for your participations ; it certainly will be a fruitful weekend.

Promotion of the use of generic drugs is obviously the trend of the world, due to the aging population and the mounting of medical expense in every country.

The main goal of this conference is to explore the generics of crucially importance in different respective; from the standing point of law , government policy, industrial point of view, to the vision of customers.

I believe the big discussion among each stakeholder should poses positive meaning, and...

Last but not least, I wish the success of the conference and wish you all health and happiness .

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Undergraduate / "Why do you do trivia?" - Common App-Extra curricular short answer [7]

... or what the nickname of the 19th first lady was (Lemonade Lucy), except maybe to be super annoying at parties.---This is great writing!

But yet I love them.

AndIn a life that can seem so insulated and fall into routine, a cool fact is like a flash of ball lightning (which is said to have rotational motion, by the way).---Ha ha, so true!

It's hardly a divine sent miracle-but surely, each fact is a little reminder that the universe is bigger than going to school, than clubs, doing homework, sleeping, repeat .---(?)

This is why I can't wait to dash out of 7th period on Wednesday afternoons-it's a highlight in the middle of a humdrum week, because even the goofiest or seemingly most "worthless" fact can bring me joy.

I like your essay!! Have fun in school and good luck! And who knows, you might end up on Jeopardy!

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Undergraduate / 'look for new groups to jam with' - letter to your future dormmate [2]

Skip the small-talk and don't ask me, "What is your favorite genre of music?"---This immediately pegs you as a rude and uppity snob, leaving a bad first impression with any reader. I'm sure this isn't the way you want to be perceived!

When I am reading or working on homework I listen to relaxing music. W hen I am lifting weights I listen to energizing music, and when I am walking I listen to music I can march to.

Ricky Nelson captures the 1950's pop culture, while the vast amounts of modern genres illustrate the diversity of our society.

My mind travels to another world, a world without problems.

If you play an instrument or simply love music, we will get along. ---Again, this does not sound good. What if you get a deaf roommate, or someone who is more interested in other things than music? Also, you're not saying anything personal about yourself, other than you fight with your mother and love music. I think this essay would be much better if you try to sound more laid back and open to other people.

Good luck in school and have fun!

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Writing Feedback / Cause and Effect for Biological Purposes of Alcohol [3]

The biological effects of alcohol has affected a person's mental status , job performance and mood.

Alcohol is toxic to the human body and, if you digest enough of it , it can be deadly.

Most people have heard of alcohol related disorders such as alcohol abuse...

I assume this is just the beginning of your essay. When you finish it, send it back through and we'll have another look at it.

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Undergraduate / 'it was great that a freshmen would be a leader' - Short Answer on Common App [5]

I attended a new school, made new friends, and started playing a varsity sport.---Your essay will be much more personal, if you mention which sport.

During m y second week of high school I got a job tutoring at Legacy Christian Middle School.

It was a simple job, meeting with a sixth grade girl to help her complete her homework.

She was near tears, thinking I wasn't coming.

I had thought I couldn't be in a leadership position because I was a freshmen, while she thought it was great that a freshmen would take the time to help her study.

I think you could use a closing sentence, but other than that, it's fine.

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Scholarship / Doctors: how furthering your education beyond high school will help your dreams. [2]

That's why my biggest dream has always been to become an OB/GYN.

My choice in particular, is that I want to major in is Reproductive endocrinology and infertility.

I have always been fascinated by child birth and the reproductive system, and in this field I get to work with both.

Therefore, by continuing my education beyond high school I can get the proper knowledge I need in order to follow my dream of becoming an OB/GYN.

Good luck with school and have fun!

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Graduate / My study background and performance--statement of purpose for Msc in Economics [2]

And I learned that his every strategy and every transaction in the market were based upon rigorous calculations and precise assessment of the economic situation.

It enlightened my thinking of mathematics and economics as the cornerstones of finance.

Thus, I worked hard on courses in mathematics such as calculus, linear algebra, and probability, and in economics theories including microeconomics, macroeconomics and econometrics.

But the mathematical level can't appease my thirst for knowledge of mathematical foundations underlying economic concepts.

All these harsh trainings have laid a solid foundation for my further study and scientific research .

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Undergraduate / "Drawing portraits" JHU supplement:something about yourself or your interests [2]

Yes, I do portray people as S uperman or Spiderman and create comics, just for fun.

Having to change schools frequently, I feared that my life would be beautiful fragments that make no sense when they were put together.

Familiar looks and expressions convince me that my life was not a waste in the past because I have loved people truly.---This is beautiful!

You are a wonderful writer and an intelligent and thoughtful person! Good luck in school and have fun!

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Undergraduate / 'searching the New Mexico landscape' - University of Arizona Honors [2]

... I was able to make out more detail and see the Y-formation visible in the pictures.

After we parked near the visitor's center, my family and I walked over to where the tours began.

When the tour began, I was delighted to discover that an astronomer was to serve as our tour guide.

After the tour ended, my familywe had a chance to walk around and take pictures.

I think your essay is awesome, and very well written. It shows your passion, how cool your family was to encourage you, and also that you're an intelligent person who they'll be lucky to have as a student. Good luck and have fun!

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Undergraduate / 'Growing up with an eccentric cast of characters' - UMichigan Supplement [4]

It didn't take me long to fit in.

Those apartments were only the beginnings of our journeys, because one-by-one, we moved onto bigger adventures our lives had in store for us.

You are an excellent writer! I can't remember who wrote The Beans of Egypt Maine, but your writing reminds me of hers. It's quirky and interesting, different and relaxed. Good luck in school and keep writing!

The word count is fine because of the word 'approximately'. Otherwise, you have to adhere to a certain number.

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Undergraduate / SOP-M.S/PhD Research , Computer Science - Review [3]

I have the full confidence that I will be successful both as a...

My strong inclination towards m athematics and science goes back to my school days.

More importantly I have agreat interest in subjects like Computer ...

My undergraduate courses have been gripping and interesting.---Nice sentence!

For this course, I did a project on IXP2400 to solve the NACK (Negative Acknowledgement) implosion problem in a reliable multicast environment.

However, my desire to realize my full potential and to make an original contribution to the field of Computer Science drives me to pursue a...

At the same time, I am confident in my ability to contribute originally to the ongoing work at your department.

While this is the longest I've read, it is very well written and interesting. They'll be lucky to have you as a student!

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Writing Feedback / Essay that identifies central argument from a a Homeless Man's Perspective [2]

Her statement holds true on several occasions ---'Occasions' doesn't seem like the right word to use here.

Homeless people, when receiving money, food or clothing , do not always feel compassion, but instead, sometimes feel self-pity or hatred towards those who have bestowed these items upon them.

They can feel a connection between themselves and the others.

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Graduate / The perspective of a biochemist (Personal Statement) [2]

I know I will be able to effectively apply my knowledge and skills to pursue the strong mission of UCLA graduate education.---There is something about this sentence that bothers me, though I have not had coffee yet today, and can't quite put my finger on the problem. But this is actually one of the best essays I've read, clear, well written, and it shows how serious you are about your studies, and you passion for learning. They'll be lucky to have you as a student. Your last paragraph is especially great, where you mention professors by name!

If this were my essay though, and I wanted to make it perfect, I would consider leaving out the first paragraph. I know, it sounds like I'm suggesting murder, but try looking at it from paragraph 2...it gets right to the point and is a stronger opening.

I'd say good luck in school, but I don't think you'll need luck. Have fun though!

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Undergraduate / biology has become an integral part of my life; Stydy plan: plant genetics [3]

For as long as I can remember, biology has been an integral part of my life.

I was born into a Vietnamese family where my grandfather, who was a doctor, gave me the inspiration for self-study spirit, curiosity and a love for biology from my early years.

I also like to learn about the complicated mechanism of living processes, which is full of mysteries.

Following my family tradition, I attended Hanoi University of Pharmacy and I had many chances to acquire more and more knowledge about my favorite subject there.

The more I study biology, the more interesting I find its application in daily life.

My country, Vietnam, has planned to crop genetically modified (GM) maize widely, but strong protest has been aroused concerning environmental hazards, health risks and economic problems.---Is this because of high fructose corn syrup?

Biology problems always attract me and further knowledge is always my ambition, which drives me to study relentlessly.

In the future, in order to develop the great potential of Asia in general and Vietnam in particular, for traditional medicine, I plan to apply genetic technology...

Good luck with school and have fun!

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Writing Feedback / (very healthy and enjoyable) Advantages and disadvantages of cycling [2]

On the one hand, cycling has many advantages.

At First, when I ride a bike, I needn't use petrol or other fossil fuels, so I'm not emitting carbon dioxide into the atmosphere and contributing to climate change.

At Second, on a bicycle I don't get stuck in traffic jams.

It's a much quicker way to cross a city by bike than by other forms of transportation .

And at last, the poisonous fumes and the aggressive speed of cars are endangering our lives.

I think my city would be a better place if people replaced the cars with bicycles.

But on the other hand, cycling has many disadvantages.

More than that, many people don't cycle because the road systems in many cities aren't designed with cyclists in mind.

Have fun in school and good luck!

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Undergraduate / Around Every Corner - Common App Diversity Essay [2]

Having always loved the sciences, I've often found myself thinking about how interesting it was that even though all human DNA is so similar, the smallest, quirkiest attribute of each personality was the one that set us apart from everyone else.

Learning this lesson cost me approximately $6,000 and a 15 day trip all across America during my last official summer, but I am completely positive that it was worth every penny and every ounce of stress it caused me about traveling alone.

This is very well written-I could hardly find anything to edit. Good luck in school and have fun!

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Writing Feedback / Do violence and immorality in the media make our society more dangerous and immoral? [3]

Violence and immorality have raised many questions recently.

The tough fact is that we should not apply force or any other method including military ---especially since the military would be a crazy way to try to cure violence!---to make the problem settled down since mental illness needs mental cures.

However, many today sociologists and psychologists blame the media for imposing bad habits and violent ...

Everyone was born with good and evil innate traits, but what makes it grow into a complete manner of itself is the environment.

When surroundedby robbers, thieves , and killers, one cannot help a new comer to become good citizen but, inversely, a dwelling with ...

...we are easily excited after seeing or watching a violent scene but the reason to kill or murder does not come from film , but is resulted from an ill-mental brain.

So, the de mandatory actions do not exclude any one on earth, we should work as a whole to diminish the evil since two hands are impossible to deal with but thousands of them can be a powerful force.

Have fun in school and good luck!
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Undergraduate / 'most of my life in Colombia' - a significant experience, achievement, risk [3]

It was not until I came to the United States, that I was able to contrast the different living condition...

This notable difference, of two countries considered part of "America" but yet so different, inspired me to try to make a change and provide support for those struggling in Colombia.

I was able to start what I considered one of my attempts to give back to my country.

Although the program opened my eyes to several problems the children of Colombia were facing, education was one factor,...

... we must offer better living conditions that would allow the full development of a child to an adult, that is mentally, emotionally, physically, and spiritually healthy.

By participating in "Misión Child" and organizing "Give Back" I've developed a growing sense of community awareness and outreach.

If you just write at the end, something about why this school is the best place for you to continue your studies and mission, your essay will be perfect.

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Undergraduate / Essay describing experiences that led to my decision to enter a health field [3]

He stood out to me because he was an old man lost in a sea of children.

He had skilled surgeons and doctors who have carefully worked the game of tricking his body into accepting his new kidney, which has worked until now.

As a freshman, I embarked on a trip to Boston for a medical conference for teenagers.

... a stark contrast to the medical care available in the United States where childbirth is relatively controlled in hospitals or by midwifes.

While in Bolivia, I had the opportunity to witness volunteer medical professionals...

My experience with the people of Bolivia and my involvement with Operation Smile has shaped my goals dramatically.

This is a very well written essay, interesting and clear. Good luck in school!

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Writing Feedback / Essay on ANZAC and National Identity [3]

If you're wondering how to start your essay, just google what you wrote here for ideas. ---the relevance of technology in the creation of biometrics national identity card---

I just tried it, and quite a bit of information popped up.

Graduate / SoP for polymeric materials ('my idea of choosing HEMA and PEGMA') [2]

As an undergraduate specializing in polymeric biomaterials, I find that the importance of anticoagulant and anti-fouling biomaterials lies in its broad applicability as artificial organs, medical devices and disposable clinical instruments.

... Nathan Newman are the most influential ones and they engagedtaught? me various theoretical concepts and methods which are widely used in the polymer materials industry.

I did not even hear about this idea before and this really kindled my interest in (the fact that synthesizing?) polymeric material retarded the blood clotting.

Owing to my outstanding performance in ** University, I was given the opportunity to be an undergraduate research assistant in Prof. Karl Sieradzki's lab.

My exchange experience also enlightened me on the various medical issues, which made me aware me of the role of the polymer material engineer towards...

I don't think you need so much of the technical details, as whoever reads this might lose interest on the points you're trying to make. At the end of the essay, you should write something about why this is the perfect school for you. Good luck and have fun!

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Undergraduate / 'I believe in meritocracy' - SCAD Statement of Purpose [2]

Art is essentially the affirmation, the blessing and the deification of existence.---Nice opening sentence!

... but also flourishes the innermost ideas of the artist, has the uniquely power to evoke limitless sentiments in the spectator.

A rich universe of ideas and perspectives converge in this game of senses,...

... you cannot avoid the sight of cultural heritage preservation and wonder his history---I don't think you meant to have the word 'his' here.

But this is the Old Continent with his (?) story to tell; what I aim is to learn to create , to look at the future, to see a career executing concepts into tangible objects in the modern world.

Studying abroad is a cultural experience toward build a strong independence and autonomy for success. I call it my American Dream.

These semesters weren't wasted at all: my artworks weredisplayed more then once in public places; tried acting in a Macbeth scholastic play; organized parties and designed birthday cakes.

Being accepted by SCAD at Savannah would be definitely bring my ideal to life.

Good luck with school and have fun!

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Research Papers / 6 sigma hospitals - where to start research? [5]

Hello! I just tried googling ; 6 sigma in hospitals, thesis statements ---The first thing that pops up is a link back to essay forum with previous questions and answers, including a thesis statement you can see as an example. When you write your thesis, send it back for help if you need it!

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Undergraduate / Discussions on Youth-Common App A person who has had an influence on you [2]

Whenever my parents and I get into a heated discussion, the debate always ends with a sigh on both ends and with my parents telling me that I was never this stubborn as a child.

With every hint of pedantry in my tone I reply, "Research suggests that the reason why teenagers become so intractable suddenly is because their brains are maturing and their pre-frontal cortexes have not yet developed".

This suffices to put a smile on their faces and they buy my credible excuse.

To this day I have never interacted with Dr. Ikeda or Sensei as I call him, either physically or by phone.

While there was no physical meeting , we shared an intellectual relationship through this book.

He explained that as one goes downstream on a river, there are many rocks and waterfalls that will impede you.

I realized that everyone makes mistakes, but my nature caused me to cower from some situations in the fear of committing mistakes.

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Undergraduate / 'Kalamazoo Area Math and Science Center' - community do you belong to [2]

One of the things I love most about KAMSC is that it's where I fit in is as an equal.

In my niche, I am the student who proudly displays her goggle lines after a chemistry lab, can be overheard arguing over whether Spock or Darth Vader would win in a fight (duh...Spock), and who has obsessive compulsively color coordinated all her notebooks and binders to each class.

This is well written and a good essay!
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Book Reports / Questions about Roman Fever (Edith Wharton) [2]

Always do the introduction after you have the body paragraphs written! Write a paragraph about each of these; Roman Fever, Grace's knitting, the ancient ruins, afternoon light, and evening darkness. Google the word 'symbolism', with the title of the book. After you are armed with all this information, your intro will practically write itself!

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Writing Feedback / Write about an occasion when a furious argument took place [3]

The end of year examinations were now finally over.

I first went towards the department store, as I was very eager to purchase some clothes.

I glanced and stared at a set of clothes, taking some time to admire it.

My friends were fanatics for her designs.

"Why do you still have the cheek to come back here after what you have done?" she questioned me.

...accuse me of something that I did not do and that she had taken me for the wrong person.

... I was glad that I had found a companion to accompany me to catch a movie and do some shopping together later.---This would be much better if you ended your essay with "...and I was glad that someone came along to save me from this terrible situation.

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Letters / Street hawking / Transcript - how to start a letter to editor? [4]

Try googling these words; How to write a good letter to the editor. I also think you should google these words; street hawking, arguments. Look at some examples of good letters to the editor, and then you have to replicate that as you write what you read about hawking.

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Undergraduate / 'I can manage time efficiently' - My personal statement [2]

I don't need to be told to do something or to be pressured.

In Asian countries, parents put a lot of pressures on their children to study for 24 hours a day .

My parents didn't have to worry about that.

I am consistent in doing things and I do them at the right time.

I want to become a doctor and I know it is time consuming.

I want to study the field which I enjoy, and I believe that success will follow me no matter of how much time it takes.

I may be a business woman but I must be the best at it to be happy.

I'd rather choose the passion I have, ignorant of the circumstances I may have to face.

He usually tells me the achievements his brother has made , the standard of living about him, the way he talks and almost everything about him.

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Undergraduate / FSU Essay: leadership, learning, service, and global awareness; baseball player [4]

FSU has always been regarded as a top university, consisting of outstanding teachers, students and a surrounding community.

But as I've grown, I have come to realize that learning is involved in every aspect of my life.

Knowing FSU embraces learning it would be a perfect place to allow me to continue learning new things each day to become a better person and student.---It seems like you're using the words 'learn' and 'learning' too often!

My advancements in life will allow me to help not only allow FSU become a better school but also the surrounding community.

In the past couple years I have learned two of the most important things in my life, how important being a responsible young man is, and how to try my hardest in everything I attempt to do.

These decisions might not always be the most exciting things, but they are the responsible and right thing to do.

Throughout middle school, and my freshman and sophomore year of high school, I was always told I was not good enough to play varsity baseball.

Wanting to prove everyone wrong and become the best player I could be, I worked as hard as I could during the summer and made the varsity the following year.

Have fun in school and good luck!

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Writing Feedback / About Nelson Mandela - One material of SAT I prepared [2]

Nelson Mandela, the first black people president of Africa, had struggled for black people since 1944 and was arrested and thrown into prison for about 27 years.

He joined the Africa National Congress in 1944, and after 1948 he was concentrated on fighting against the ruling National Party's apartheid, before becoming the national nolunteer-in-chief of the 1952 Defiance Campaign.

But nevertheless his life became so harsh that he always saidhis words "the struggle is my life."

Finally as we all know, this hero won hunderds of awards over four decades. So in this sense, we could find that he always follows his heart and definitely insisted his mind and that brought the black people rights and equality.

Good luck in school and have fun!!

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Writing Feedback / Toefl IBT Writing, Topic: Grades based on exams or on class participation. [4]

Grades are very important because they mark the abilities of the student and tells how much a student is competitive and well working.

Courses grades differs from one class to another, and it could be based solely on exams or more on class participation.

As far as I am concerned, I think that the perfect grade is the one taking into consideration of both exams and class participation in an equal way.---I agree!

They identify the student's outcome when he is working alone and without the help or presence of someone else.

Moreover, I think that exams oblige the student to study and be knowledgeable on a certain topic, and they pushes him to work to get a high grade.

And also, I think that exams are very accurate in terms of knowing if the student is good in some fields of his studies.

As an example of that, lately in the math course, I---Don't forget to capitalize your 'I's!--- didn't do well in the final exam, but my participation...

I think graded exams are important because they test the student's ability to work alone in a certain case, and grading class participation pushes the student to work hard in class.

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Undergraduate / 'As a student athlete' - PT application Essay [3]

I often see my fellow classmates scared to death about the thought of graduating college.

The fear is that the path they have chosen won't hold up in the real world.

As you may have guessed, very few people go through their lives playing sports without sustaining injuries on the way.

They came back from rehabilitation stronger and more athletic than they were before their injuries .

It was my second year into college and I had gotten back from a summer baseball team in which during the last week of the season, I had created a partial tear in my rotator cuff muscles.

I look back at all my experiences and see how they have built me into a person who is persistent, self motivated, and hard working.

My hours shadowing at three different Physical Therapy offices have prepared me to pursue my higher education to become a Physical Therapist.

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Undergraduate / "I'm not good enough..." - What matters to you and why? Stanford supplement [5]

Fast forward in time, and today is my third month in middle school.

I failed my first midterm of my math test.

To my surprise, I failed the next test again.

If you give up now, how are you going to deal with things like cancer in the future?

Keep going, don't stop now, learn from your mistakes, and don't let anybody bring you down and yes, you're good enough!'"

Willpower is a key quality to success in life.

Great essay! Good luck in school and have fun!!

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Undergraduate / "My 1986 Camaro" - My common app essay [3]

Yet, even at the age of fourteen, I knew that my then blissful, worry-free stage of life had to end eventually.

Wasting all my money on a gas-guzzling potential death hazard would surely offset any accidental "growing up" that I'd done in earning it. ---This is great writing!!

Every day, from five a.m. to around two, I slogged through my seemingly endless rows, systematically neutering corn plant after corn plant. However, I won't digress with assertions of martyrdom.---Again, I have to stop reading to say what an excellent and interesting writer you are! I hope you're taking some creative writing classes, as you are a natural at it, and deserve to be praised.

My fourteen-year-old self would never have believed it, but being an adult is not so bad after all.

Great essay! Good luck with school and have fun! I think your title is just fine, unless you want to mention like, 'what I learned from a 1986 Camaro'...

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