vangiespen
Oct 5, 2014
Undergraduate / Personal Narrative, Background story; Undergraduate Admissions [4]
Tempestx, you have provided a very nice personal statement about your personal and academic motivations for your college studies. But that is not the topic of the prompt. What you need to provide in answer to it is a story or situation that you found yourself in that helped you become the person you are today. This is not about the story of your parents and how they saved to send you to school. Neither is this a statement of purpose for Biomedical Engineering school. This is an essay that wants to get to know you as the unique individual that you are. All the information that you stated about yourself here can be learned by the admissions officer by reading the other app essays that are part and parcel of your student application documents.
So talk abut yourself in a unique manner. If you have a talent or skill that you feel will help you become a better college student, tell them about it and talk about how it has helped you become a better person. Pick a central identity story that will help describe who you are as a person. Not as a student or a son/daughter. Do you have an interesting point of view on a certain matter that you feel helped develop your personality? Talk about it in this essay.
The best suggestion I can give you is this, look at the topics provided for the essays in the application. Write about whatever is not covered in the essay prompts that relates to your development as a person. This will be the important background story that you have to tell. It can even be about your struggle to fit into the American educational system when you first arrived and how you finally found your niche in the system even with the obstacles in your path.This is the only way you can properly address the essay prompt.
Tempestx, you have provided a very nice personal statement about your personal and academic motivations for your college studies. But that is not the topic of the prompt. What you need to provide in answer to it is a story or situation that you found yourself in that helped you become the person you are today. This is not about the story of your parents and how they saved to send you to school. Neither is this a statement of purpose for Biomedical Engineering school. This is an essay that wants to get to know you as the unique individual that you are. All the information that you stated about yourself here can be learned by the admissions officer by reading the other app essays that are part and parcel of your student application documents.
So talk abut yourself in a unique manner. If you have a talent or skill that you feel will help you become a better college student, tell them about it and talk about how it has helped you become a better person. Pick a central identity story that will help describe who you are as a person. Not as a student or a son/daughter. Do you have an interesting point of view on a certain matter that you feel helped develop your personality? Talk about it in this essay.
The best suggestion I can give you is this, look at the topics provided for the essays in the application. Write about whatever is not covered in the essay prompts that relates to your development as a person. This will be the important background story that you have to tell. It can even be about your struggle to fit into the American educational system when you first arrived and how you finally found your niche in the system even with the obstacles in your path.This is the only way you can properly address the essay prompt.