Essays / overseas nursing programme: how to write a perfect academic essay? [2]

hi,
i have been trying for ielts academic module since 2008.I need band 7 in each module for my overseas nursing programme.Most of the times I could score 7 in all other modules. I haven't scored 7 in writing yet now.If anybody can help me ,by giving tips,to write a perfect essay please help me.

Writing Feedback / governments should spent more money for health education than research-feedback [4]

Nowadays the governments are more aware about the need for health education in their countries.most of the citizens might have think about the importance of health educations in their society.Is it worth if the government spent more amounts for health educations than any other projects?Recent surveys conducted by the government agencies reveal that the health education policies in the communities have helped to improve the general health in the country into some extend.However it isnot applicable to divert a large amount of money from the budjet on health education and preventive measures.

General health education in the society helps to give a awareness about healthy living situations in the society.For instance:health educations help mothers to choose nutritious food and arrange healthy environment for her children.It helps to reduse child mortality and malnutrtion.Teaching of prevention techniques and the administration of the preventive medicines have helped to reduce the death rates in a great margin especially some tribal areas in Africa.

However new methods of treatments are essential for the disease condition.Most of hte micro organisms are aquiring resistive power against the medications and preventive vaccinations.Therefore new researches are inevitable to prevent the spread of micro organisms.For example:developed countris like USA and UK divide a large amount of money for researches to develop new methods of effective treatments on disease conditions in their annual budget.

In short dividing a large amount of money for health education and preventive measures are not good and applicabe.Reaserch for new methods of treatment and medications is essential for the modern world.So the health budjet of the country should keep an equilibrium in between the spending of these two.The research innovate techniques of prevention so that, both research and health education and preventive measures are related.Because of these reasons I disagree with the statement.

Writing Feedback / IELTS:recycling is an essential measure to save the environment [3]

IELTS academic topic:Recycling is an essential measure to save the environment-it is time for eveyone in the society to become more responsible towards the environment.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Is recycling an essential measure to save the environment?Nowadays,the officials are trying to provide more awareness to the public about the importance of recycling to save our environment.

In the modern world most of the governments are struggling to dispose the dumped products in the landfills.Because these waste materials produce toxic gases and causing communicable diseases in the society.Moreover the non-degradable plastic materials and other chemical wastes spoil the fertility of the soil.Being aware about the future environmental disaster,people should tend to encourage the recycling.For instance,recent innovation of recycled paper have helped to save millions of rain forest trees.

However,it costs a huge amount to commision a recycling plant.Other than this,some of the products are not recyclable.For example,some of the plastic materials and electric appliances arenot recyclable.Moreover,some of the people keep a different attitude towards the recyled products.they are reluctant to use the recycled products.

Consequently,alternate bio-degradable products are essential to solve this puzzle.People in the socitey should be more responsible towards the environment.Governments should arrange more educational programmes related to the importance of recycling and the recycled products.Researches are imporatant to know more about this problem.In a nut shell,recycling is essential measure to save the environment.I agree with this statement.

Writing Feedback / IELTS: Why qualified people are moving from poor to rich countries? Your opinion? [2]

any criticism or corrections are welcome.
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Q-1:More and more people are moving from poor to rich countries to fill vacancies in specialist areas like engineering,computing and medicine.Some people belive that by encouraging the movement of such people rich countries are stealing from poor countries.Other feel that this only part of the naturalmovement of workers around the world.

*what is your opinion?
*Do you think rich countries should pay poorer countries for the people they encourage to come?
*What other measure could rich countries take to encourage qualified people to stay and help develop their own countries?
should write at least 250 words.
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Braindrain is one of the major problems in the third world countries.Most of their educated professionals migrate to the rich countries for better job oppotunities and salary.Most of the rich countries are ready to hire educated professionals from other countries by paying more money than their country.Is it a kind of stealing?

Most of the poor nations are paying less salary for their professionals.The educated job seekers have not enough vacancies to build their career in their country.Furthermore,the oppoprtunities and benefits from developed nations tempt them to fly and find a job.In general,ambition for a sound future is the main factor for this braindrain.

However,majority of their income flow to their motherland.This trend helps the undeveloped countries to build their economy.For instance,majority of the developing countries receive a huge amount of foreign currences from abroad from the proffessionals who work there.Isn't it a good solution to increase the foreign currency in the national treasury?Most of the third world countries encourge their professionals to find a job in the international sector.The richest nations spent huge amounts of money to pay the foreign professionals.Therefore,payement for the poor nations for encouraging their qualified people to stay and help the developed countries arenot practical.

Anyhow,the developed nations should tighten the immigration rules and criteria for the entry of professional to prevent more braindrain from the poor nations.More flow specialist professionals than any other professionals will create a big shortage of specialist professionals in that country.

In conclusion,moving workers from one country to another country is a natural process.This is not a kind of stealing.Creating more job opportunities and paynig better salary should tempt the professionals to stay in the country.

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Q-2:The bar chart shows a survey of a group of young professionals aged20-30years who were asked to state which factors motivated them to succeed.write areport for a university lecturer describing the information.

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The bar chart describes the result of a survey conducted among a group of young professionals aged 20 to 30 years about the factors motivated them to succeed.The verticle axis of the bar chart gives information about the contributing factors for success and the horizontal axis of the bar chart shows the information about the percentage of professions influenced by those factors.

In detail,we can divide these eleven contributing factors into three main factors.such as,personal factors;which include fear of failure,ambition,envy or jealousy,rivalry and personal satisfaction;pressure related factors;peer pressure,family pressure and pressure from the family come under this topic;for material things ,which include money,desire for material things and felling inadequate.The chart cited both personal satisfaction and ambiton as the major contributing factors for success among those groups.80percent of those proffessionals gained success because of these two reasons.25 percent of them were influenced by the fear of failure.However pressure related reasons had motivated some of them into success.Pressure family lead 70 percent to success.At the same time,pressure from society guided 60 percent to the victory.Further more,desire for material things and rivalry had influenced 50 percent to win.

In coclussion,personal factors and pressure related factors motivated most of those profession to success.

Writing Feedback / IELTS-the search for alternative energy cause environmental damage.Agree or disagree? [6]

Q:One day worlds oil & gas reserves will ran out.The search for alternative energy sources like wind power,solar power,bursnig waste are causing as much environmental damage as the oil& nuclear sources they intended to replace

-How far do you agree with this latter argument?
-What possible benefits do the alternative sources bring?or what damage do they cause?
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The developmant of the world depend upon the usage of natural resourses.Mankind used this enegy to conquer the world.Eventually, they feared about the availability of this natural resources.They did think about an alternative resourse to create the same power to maintain their technological development.But in this era some of the people think the alternate energy sources cause as much environmental damage as the oil and nuclear sources do.when some one hear about this argument won't think about the reason behind this statement?They do!

The main drawbacks of this sources are the excess usage of land scapes.It destros the beauty and equilibrium of the nature.Because of this projects animals loose its shelters.That adversly effect on its existance.other than that the pollution created by such alternate energy resources create a harmfull environment to live.For instance,burnig of waste materials to create energy release toxic gases into the environment.The use of rare earth metals come next.most of these energy sources need large batteries to store its the power.the companies use rare earth metals to increase its storage capcity of the batteries.China has already brought regulations over the mining of rare earth metals.Moreover the cost to complete such a project is enormous.

However, the alternate energy sources help to produce large amount of energy without using valuable resources.This is the only way produce enegy in industrial scale for the in dustries and house holds.The scientists hope to bring the natural damage down by using the new technologies in the alternetive enenrgy projects.

in conclusion a susbstitute nature friendly energy resource is essential for the modern world.The development of alternte enegy sources will eventually bring the use of nuclear and oil power sources down in countries.Because of the reasons mentoned above i agree with the latter statement.

Writing Feedback / IELTS: Formal exams are the only way to assess a students true knowledge. Agree? [2]

hi
First of all thanks for your time n patience to correct my essay.unfortunately i couldn't upload the image with this task-1 essay..
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Task-1
Q:The graph shows the value in thousands of dollors of three companies selling farming equipment every five years from 1960 and their projected value from 2007 to 2012.Farm implements did not start trading untill 1980.

write a report for a university lecturer describing the informtion
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A:The bar chart gives information about the values of three companies which are mainly concentrated on farming equipment selling;Greenacres Ltd,Farm Implements and Carson Ltd by names.The horizontal axis of the chart shows information about the values of each companies in last fourty sevevn years and projected score of next five years.The verticle axis brings the information about the amount in thousands of dollars which reached by these companies as its value.

In general,three of these companies had been effected by the consumersin each year differently.Its clear that the number of companies had influenced the market and consumers into an extend;because,till the introduction of Farm Implements Ltd in 1980 the Greenacres Ltd had been showing a continuous progress in its value for thirty five years.At the same time ,farm implements was showing a continuous growth in its value that continuous to its projected value as well.At the same time carsons Ltd showed more fluctuated growth rather than a steady increase.

In detail,company value of Greenacre ltd was just two million dollars in 1960,at the same time carsons ltd owed just five hundred thousand as its value.Moreover,in 1990 Greenacres ltd could manage to reach it value in the peak level of fourty million dollars.Farm implements was showing a steady growth in its value from one million dollars in the beginning to twentyfive million dollars .Eventually,Farm Implements Ltd could manged to overcome both Greenacres and Carson ltd in 2000 with the value of twenty nine million dollars.

In short,all those company values show the result of hard work and planning.Their projected vales also show their intention to work harder to increase their company values in future than the present.

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Task-2
Q:Only formal examinations,written or practical,can give a clear picture of students' true knowldge and ability in university level.Continuous assessment like course work and projects are poor measures of student ability.

How far do u agree with this later statement?
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A:Nowadays the universities and collages choose different types of methods to assess the true knowledge and ability of a student.All these methods have its own advanteges and dis advantages.It is not possible to assess the ability and knowledge of a student in its full level.

Examinaetions always check the ability of understanding of a student.But,this method willnot meet all the criterias of those assessments.Some of the students strive hard to pass the exam but,the understanding of the knowledge may not happen in such situations.More over,Examinations always bring stress over students. A stressfull situation is a big obstacle for a student to overcome.At the same time it helps a student to motivate himself to achive the goal.

However, the course works and projects help a student to learn more about specific topic.This method helps him to organise and understand various aspects of knowledge.Excess number course work and projects bring stress over student as examinatios do.Stress worstly affect concentration and enthusiasum of a student.

In short,examinations,course work and project are not poor methods to draw a students ability.All these methods assess a student ability and knowledge in its own way.In conclusion,these methods give valuable information about a student.These methods also measures the ability of a student to overcome a stressfull situation in future.

Writing Feedback / IELTS:how tourism influence both country and person?(argument) [3]

hi,
thanks for your patience and time..i'm very happy to recieve any comments and correction about my essay.Unfortunately i couldn't upload the chart for task-1 essay..once again thanks for your valuable time..

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Task-1
The table shows the percentage of pupils who entered higher education from five secondary schools between 1995 and 2000 inclusive.Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

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The table gives information about the pecentage of pupil who joined for higher education from selected school namely Royston Academy,Greystone High school,Harble Secondary School,fairfield Girls school,Crackened boys school from 1995 to 2000

In detail, Greystone High school was one of the best schools in 1995.In that year 90percent of pupils from Grestone school entered for higher education.Meanwhile,Harble Secondary school was one of the schools which showed the least percentage;that was 30 percent;in the number of students who joined for higher education.Students from rest of the schools were better than Harble Secondary school.Despite a slight decrease in 1996 Crackend Boys school maintained its percentage around 60 to 62 in between 1995 and 2000.At the same time, both Royston Academy and Harble secondary scool were showing a gradual increase in the number students who joined for higher education.Eventually,Harble Secondary school showed the highest percentage in 2000;that was around 80 percent.While the Greystine High school was showing a gradual decrease in its percentage.

Moreover,the table shows a singnificant increase in the number of students who enrolled for further education after their higher secondary studies.

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Task-2
present a written argument or case to an educated reader with no specialist knowledge of the following topic:
Although tourists in many countries are a significant source of revenue,they are frowned upon for various reasons.For the tourist,however,travelling is supposed to broaden the mind and be an educational experience.

-in what ways do you think travelling does this?
-And in what ways do you think travelling does the opposite,i.e. narrows people minds?
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In these modern days travelling to new places has become a part of life.Mnay people arrange travel to tourist hot spots for relaxation of mind.Apart from that,countries get a huge amount of revenue from tourism.Therefore,they promote advertisements about their cultural heritage through the medias.

However,tourism industries help people to touch the soul of country's heritage.This helps to gain more knowledge and ideas about the world and life.For instance,most parts of Great Brittain are the rich sources of knowledge about the industrial revolution.The person who visits this country gains knowledge about its culture and industrial revolution.Moreover,culture varies from country to countries.The person who visit one place may try to adapt some parts of its culture.Visiting one country is the best way to know its people and their believes.This provides new philosophies about life and way of living.

Other than this,some of the past incidents against tourists compelled to hange views about some countries.for example,kidnapping of two foreign tourists by somalian pirates might have affected the tourism industry of that country.Political wars and terrorism influence the tourism industryvery badly.Growing threat aginst western tourists have already created a big issue in international level.

However,travelling always helps us to know new things.It creates a relation among people and countries.In a nutshell,travelloing new places give new knowledge and experience.Moreover,that provides great benefits to the country.

Writing Feedback / DIFFERENT SOURCES OF NOISE; IELTS [2]

Hi friends,i've been trying ielts since 2008 to achieve band7 in each modules.Please evaluate my essay. give feedback and corrections..thanks for your patience and time..

p.s:I'm sorry that i couldn't upload the diagram for task 1
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Task-1:
The diagram shows the result of a survey of a sample of 1,000 people on the different sources of noise which cause nuisance.The severity of the nuisance measured on a scale running from 'not annoying to extremely annoying'.Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

A:-The diagram indicates the results of a survey about different sources of noises which cause nuisance.The results are the sum up of answers given by around 1000 people.The graph uses pictures of different sources of noises to indicate the severity of different sources create.They use pictures of piano,music player,musical notes,wireless telephone,tools,a barking dog,aeroplane,train and a television to indicate the source of noise.Apart from this,they measure the nuisance on a scale running from not annoying to extremely annoying.

In general, the graph depicts that the noise from a barking dog is worse than anything else.Most of the people are annoyed because of the barking dog.Meanwhile, they are not annoyed with the noises created by train,piano and television.Moreover,nuisance made by the noise of train is lesser than the nuisance created by other two.Noises coming from both tools and wireless telephone are fairly annoying.However,severity of noise created by both wireless telephone and tools are higher than the fairly annoying noises from musical player,aeroplane and music.

In a nutshell,the diagram reveals the clear information about the sound pollution that we suffer in the modern world.It gives the warning about the severity of nuisance created by noises in the societies in the future.

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Task-2:
Present a written argument or case to an educated reader with no specialist knowledge of the following topic:
As populations grow and cities become more crowded,there is pressure throughout the world to construct ever tall buildings to provide accommodation and offices.Many people object to such developments,citing the social as well as physical dangers.

-what benefits do sky scrapers bring?
-Do you agree with the objections to sky scrapers?
A:-Modern world always consider the number of and height of the sky scrapers as one of the criteria to assess the development of one city or country.A developing city needs skyscrapers to accommodate its people.Nonetheless,it needs to provide space for offices of various companies.In other hand,living in sky scrapers are not easy as we think.

In general,skyscraper provide space for offices and accommodation for large number of people.Apart from this,it helps the authority too organize limited land for various purposes.Moreover,skyscrapers are the symbol of development in the world.Tall buildings always create tourist attractions.For instance,one of the famous sky scraper in Dubai city,Burj Dubai by name,is one of the tourist hot spots.

However,tall buildings always bring objections in various ways.It needs technology and mechanisms to maintain.It should be strong enough to resist natural forces like wind and earthquake.Moreover,it should resist any danger that human kind bring.The fire exits in the tall buildings are not reliable.For example,when the planes hit with the world trade centre in America thousands of people trapped in the top floors because of the fire in the middle floors.Therefore,if anything happen in the ground floor that will be more disastrous than any thing else.Other than this,it needs special technology and equipments to pump water to the top floors.Apart from the,technological problems sky scrapers also bring social dangers.Residents in the tall buildings are compelled to share their neighbourhood with strange people.

In a nut shell,sky scrapers are inevitable factor for the modern world.I helps to accommodate more people in less space.However,the dangers hide in a skyscraper are unavoidable.The innovating security systems and modern technologies may eventually bring the above dangers down.Therefore,I am not agreeing with the objection to skyscrapers

Writing Feedback / IELTS-Do university graduates deserve higher salary than those who have not? [2]

hi friends,
first of all,I'm sorry unfortunately i couldn't upload the picture of graph with the essay.Please give me ur feedback n correction about my essay..

n thanks a lot for your patience n time..
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task-1:-
The graph shows the four leading types of farming produce in Mitchford city between 1970-2000
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant..
Ans:
The graph gives information about the four leading types of products,which mainly contributed to Mitchford city's economy between 1970 and 2000.The main farming products of Mitchford city in these three decades were cotton,corn,wheat and sugar.

In detail,in the beginning of 1970's Mitchford city was producing around half a million of dollar worth wheat.during this period wheat was the main source of income in the Mitchford city.However,at the end of 1980's the income boosted with the increased demand for cotton in the market.Indeed,the demand rocketed the selling of cotton from twenty thousand dollars to ninety thousand dollars in between 1985 and 1995.Apart from this,the production of sugar showed a gradual increase ,from twenty five thousand dollars in 1970, all around these three decades.At the same time time the market for cotton plummeted from ninety thousand dollars to twenty thousand dollars by the middle of 2000.Meanwhile, corn farming was slipping from its peak level of forty thousand dollars to its beginning level,thirty thousand dollars, by the middle of second decade.

In a nut shell, the whole farming produce has added a large sum of money to the Mitchford's economy.The most part of all this is that,the contribution from each product were depending up on the market,but all this played a major role in the economy.

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Task-2:-
When the time comes to commence full-time employment,individuals who have graduated from university deserve a higher salary than those who have not.
To what extend do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience..
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Nowadays,many of the people,all around the world ,have been arguing about the job opportunities for the young graduates in our job market.Most of the are arguing for a higher salary and position for the young graduates.On the other hand,some argue to offer a job with better salary not by considering the graduation but by considering their caliber and experience.In fact,both arguments have its own advantages and disadvantages.

In detail,the graduates are great benefit to the organization.They try to energize the organization with their dynamic thoughts and energy..Apart from this,a job seeker,who graduated from a university ,will be brilliant enough to solve the puzzles which arise in front of him.Many of the high street bankers,for example,hire only graduates as their employee.This always help them to boost their output.

However,an experience person,who has not got any graduation from any university,is enough to compete the job market.Moreover,they know to act according to the situation spontaneously.Apart from this,they always plan the future by comparing the situation with their previous experience.For instance,an experienced mechanic get more salary than a job seeker who graduated in the same field.

In a nutshell,university graduation plays a major role in the field of employment.However,some job require more experience than a graduation.Therefore,I am not agreeing with the above statement.

Writing Feedback / ielts: life cycle of the silkworm / visitors vs local customs & behaviours [NEW]

Hi,
First of all thanks a lot for your time and patience.I would like to receive any kind of corrections about my essay.
Unfortunately i couldn't upload the picture for task-1 with this essay.
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Task-1:-
The diagram show the life cycle of the silk worm and the stages in the production of silk cloth.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.
Ans:
The picture give information about the life cycle of silkworm and about the stages of the silk cloth production.
In detail,the life cycle of the silkworm starts from the moth.Eggs,produced by the matured moth,take days to turn as a silkworm.They are fed with mulberry leaves.After, four to six weeks silkworm larva starts to produce silk thread around its body.This cycle takes about three to eight days.Later,larva turns into cocoon and remain for sixteen days.Furthermore,after sixteen days the moth comes out from the cocoon.

The cocoons are selected by the experts for the silk cloth production.The carefully selected cocoons boil with water to unwind silk thread.Usually,the unwind silk thread will be three hundred to nine hundred meters long.The workers twist the unwind thread and soak into the dye.These threads are used for the weaving of silk cloths.

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Task-2:-
Some people believe that visitors to other countries should follow local customs and behaviours.Others disagree and think that the host country should welcome cultural differences.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Ans:-
Nowadays most of the countries are trying to attract visitors to their country for its economic development.Therefore,some of these countries follow liberal policies for their tourist promotions.However,some people believe that the visitors should follow local customs and behaviours.On the other hand,some people stand against to this opinion.In fact,both views have its own values.

In detail,the visitors always try to understand and enjoy the cultural and historical heritage of the particular country.Moreover,following local customs and behaviours are one of the ways to show respect to their culture.It helps to keep those customs pure.However,some countries follow orthodox believes and they enforce visitors to follow their customs.Some of the middle east countries,for instance,use strict rules and regulations against female freedom.Apart from this, they insist everybody to follow 'sharia law' in their community.

On the contrary,some people strongly believe that the cultural differences should be welcomed by the host countries.Cultural differences always help to understand about different customs.Meanwhile,it brings cultural development onto the society.Moreover,multicultural societies may be one of the symbols of modernisation.For example,most of the developed countries like united kingdom,America etc are multi cultural.They always welcome cultural differences into their country.

In a nutshell, in a host country,which follow liberal policies in its cultural differences ,the visitor feels free and enjoyment moreover,they will try to learn from the host countries culture.However ,a visitor should remember to respect the customs and behaviours of the host country.

Writing Feedback / IELTS:some people think change is always a good thing but,some others don't [NEW]

Task-1:-
he charts give information about USA marriage and divorce rates between 1970 and 2000,and the marital status of adult Americans in two of the years.Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.

ANS:-
The graphs provide detailed information about the number of marriages and divorces in USA,and the percentage of marital status of Americans in between 1970 and 2000.

In general,the numbers of marriages and divorces show rather decrease than increase in 1990 and 2000.Specifically,the total numbers of marriages dropped to 2millions in 2000.However,the numbers of divorce remained in one million in both 1970 and 2000.Apart from this,the number of marriages were in its peak level of 2.5millions in 1970 and 1980.Moreover,1980 recorded the highest rate in divorce which was nearly 1.5 millions.Later,in 1990 the numbers of marriages and divorces declined to 2.4 millions and 1.1millions each.

According to the second chart,70 percent of adult Americans were married in 1970.Meanwhile,in 2000 the percentage plummeted to 60.The total number of unmarried adults rose to 20 percent in 2000 from 15percent in 1970.Moreover, the divorce rate increased from one percent to 9 percent in 2000.However, the number of widowed adults decreased to 5 percent in 2000 from 8 in 1970.

In a nutshell,the chart reveals a gradual decrease in the married life among adult Americans.
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Task-2
Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same thing and avoiding change.Others,however,think that change is always a good thing.Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

ANS:-
Nowadays,some people are trying to learn new things in their life for a prosperous future.They always welcome changes into their life.Moreover,these people consider changes are a good thing.However,some others like to remain in their same living condition.They like to spend their lives by doing the same thing with their own perspectives.In fact,both people have their own ideologies and visions about their lives

Specifically,the people,who like to welcome changes into their life,will be more self confident and hard working than others.In addition,they trust in their abilities to conquer their realm.Moreover,they are the people with positive thoughts and energy.Apart from this they believe that the change is essential for a good future.A grown up adult must be ready to accept the changes,roles and responsibilities ,which occurs in his or her life.For instance,a student ,who spends his spare time to learn extra curricular activities,is refreshing his mind for a fresh beginning.

However,some others like like to do the same things in their life.They avoid changes.Most of them are trying to satisfy themselves with their present life.On the other hand,many of them do not like to burn their midnight oil for a good change.Furthermore,the fear to accept heavy responsibilities,which comes from these changes.For example,many of the under paid workers are satisfied with their current job and situation.Indeed,they may not be happy with their economical situation.Even Though,many of them refuse to accept change.

In a nutshell,changes are inevitable in our life.I admit,many of the changes bring good fortunes into our life.However,people must be careful before choosing a change.

Writing Feedback / ielts : How does position of women influence society? [2]

hi friends,
thanks a lot for your patience.please give me feedback about this essay n about the band score,which i may achieve in my ielts exam.once again thanks a lot for your patience n time.

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Task-1:-
the table shows the figures for imprisonment in five countries between 1930 and 1980.Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

A:-The graph reveals a clear picture of total numbers for jailed prisoners in five countries between 1930 and 1980.The chart compares the figures of imprisonment among Great Britain,Australia,New Zealand,United states and Canada.

In general,United states and Canada showed highest figures of imprisonment among all these countries.Specifically,United States recorded highest number of 140,000 in 1980,rather than the imprisonment rates of other countries.Meanwhile,imprisonment figures in Great Britain were increasing gradually to its peak level of eighty thousand in 1980 from its thirty thousand in 1930.

Despite,the sixty thousand in 1940,the number were showing a gradual increase in Australia.In contrast,New Zealand recorded the least number of imprisonment in 1980,which were only 50,000.Obviously,in New Zealand imprisonment rates were higher in previous decades than 1980s.

In a nutshell,the chart provides information about the growing numbers of crime in most of the developed countries.On the other hand,the graph gives the results of the government initiatives to tackle crime in their countries.

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task-2:-
The position of women in society has changed markedly in the last twenty years.Many of the problems young people now experience,such as juvenile delinquency,arise from the fact that many married women now work and are not at home to care for their children.

To what extent do you agree or dis agree with this opinion?

A:-Nowadays,most of the countries have tried to provide equal opportunities right to both women and men.Indeed,the human rights have changed the roles and responsibilities of women in the society.However,some people think the new problems ,which are faced by young generations are related to the changes of roles and responsibilities of women in the society.On the other hand, some other argue about the need for a change.In fact,both of these views have its own advantages and dis advantages.

In general,women have great roles and responsibilities in the motivation of moral and social behaviour of her children.Moreover,mothers are considered as good teachers for their children by the society.Obviously,a mother,who is busy with her job,will lack time to develop her children's behaviours.Eventually,these young people may experience various problems in their social and personal life.Recent riots and looting in Great Britain,for instance,showed the lack of moral values among youngsters.Furthermore,these values are taught by others.

On the other hand,all human beings have their own right to expose themselves.Apart from this,recent rules and regulations help women to enjoy their freedom.Nonetheless,these laws give respect to women in the society.For example,these rights have brought many successful female leader in the world.Specifically,Ms.Margret Thatcher from Great Britain was one of the greatest prime ministers of that country.

In a nutshell, women need equal opportunity and respect in the society.Recent changes have brought remarkable position for women in the society.However,they should manage to take care of their children and other responsibilities equally with their job.Therefore, I dis agree with this statement.