Writing Feedback / Summary - Al-Gore New thinking on the climate crisis [2]

Still about the Climate crisis, Al Gore said that the Environtmental challenges fall into three categories: air pollution, water pollution, hazardous waste dumps and also the acid rain. He said that we need a world wide global mobilization for renewable energy, conservation efficiency and a global transition to allow carbon economy. He show us that the last 28 years, the Global warming made the snow on North Polar Ice Melting, puts a lot of preassure on Greendland, The Lake Linier has dry and in fact, the green land of Bolivia on 1975 has changes to be a fullness city on 2003. We have a planet emergency and we have to find a way in our generation a sense of generation mission on the great challenges to set aside the cause of distraction and rise to the challenge that the history is presenting to us. He said that we ought to approach this challenge with a sense of profound joy. we have to safe the human future. He said that we have the capacity to do that. Let's do it!

Writing Feedback / Parents have been through a lot of things, that's why I believe that they are outstanding teachers [4]

Introduction

In the world people believe that parents are most outstanding teacher. In my standpoint i agree with that opinion, because the parents have been through a lot of things. They could tell his experience valuable to people in order for people does not to repeat mistake and that people could to follow a good track of them.

Conclusion
To sum up, although the teacher in school is a good teacher for the student. I assume that parents are best in the world. I would suggest that people should honor, and respect for their parents who gave birth.

Writing Feedback / Highly-invented-sophisticated technology have most important impact on living standards of mankind [4]

There has been major advances in technology over recent decades and this has led to significant improvement in people's live agree/disagree

Introduction
In this era, some believe that highly-invented-sophisticated technology have most important impact on living standards of mankind. In my standpoint I agree with that statement, because advances technology make people have a lifestyle of hedonism and change people's mindset to leave traditional lifestyle.

Conclusion
To conclude, it is immensely clear that cutting-edge of technology have an important influence on people's over recent decades. I would suggest that people do not affect the lavish lifestyle and remains yourself.

Writing Feedback / Some years ago citizens, who lived in the rural area, knew well another people's in the neighborhood [2]

In the past most people lived in small villages where everyone knew everyone else. Nowadays, most people live in large cities where they only know a few people in their area. What do you think were advantages and disadvantages of living in small community?

Intoduction
Some years ago many people who lived in the rural area. Where they know each person in their area, but today many people in big cities where they only know a few people. I think that living in the rural have a positive effect such as sense of family will be strong, harmony, and secure. Although it also negative effect such do not know about what is happening outside.

Conclusion
To conclude, living in village that have an advantage such as relation of family would be sturdy, harmonious and peaceful. Besaide that there are also disadvantage such people do not know about what phenomenon that occur beyond their area. I would suggest that people who live in the village enhance harmony among mankind.

Writing Feedback / What are the negative impacts of playing computer games and how to minimize the bad effects? [3]

Nowadays, many people have access to computers on a wide basis and a large number of children play computer games.
What are the negative impacts of playing computer games and what can be done to minimize to bad effects?

Some people in the world have a lot of access to computers on a massive and children playing computer games in bulk. In my perspective playing computer games give a negative effect, such as make children lazy to learn and become addictive. As for some ways to minimize the negative impacts such as the limit for children to playing games, and not make children to accustom with playing games from childhood.

Playing games too often make the children become lazy to learn, because the dependence of children playing games will make an intensity of the study go down, and time that is supposed to learn to be used to playing the games so that children will tend to be lazy. It will also a result achievement children become ugly and make eyes the children pain because too often in front of the computer then eventually have to wear glasses.

In terms of the solution to minimize the negative effect by this means to limit the children in playing computer games, and not make children familiarize themselves playing games from childhood. Because if it is a habit difficult to remove, but also parents should give a special ban to children. For examples do not give pocket money when the school grades are bad, or should playing computer games if the school grades are good.

To sum up, in some countries children are playing games too often will make to dependence and the children become lazy also do not want to learn. In addition to minimizing demerit impact by the means of imposing the limit on children playing games and also make the children not to habituate to playing games. I would suggest parents to give more attention to their children since the influence of the parents is very important to the growth of children.

Writing Feedback / Letter to a friend, asking for help - IELTS WRITING TASK 1 GENERAL TRAINING [4]

You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help. Write a letter to this friend.

In your letter:
Give details of your study plans explain
why you want to get a part-time job
suggest how your friend could help you find a job

Dear Arti,

Hallo how are you? Are you okay? Now, I live in Solo and I want to study plan in your country. Next year I program to continue further studies master's degree, the major is management business at Queensland University. I schedule in there for two years and I need a place to stay there.

I schedule there is not only learn but I want to take a part-time job, because in there I do not get a scholarship so I have to pay the study fees myself. In addition I still have to disburse a boarding house, the cost to eat everyday, and I want to find the experience to work abroad.

I would be grateful if you could help me to get a job in your country. Maybe you can find a job vacancy in accordance with my criteria or maybe you have acquaintances company that is in need of employees and may be important documents what should I take it.

I would really like to hear from you. Write back soon.

Best wishes,

Dipa.

Writing Feedback / Write a letter to the manager of the football club - IELTS WRITING TASK 1 GENERAL TRAINING [2]

You are looking for a part-time job at a football club.
Write a letter to the manager of the football club. In your letter:
-introduce yourself
-explain what experience and special skills you have
-tell him/her when you think you could start

Dear Sir or Madam,
My name is Edgar Yunio Dipayana Arane, I am from Solo. I am writing this letter to apply for a part-time job in your club football because I wish to obtain work experience in your club football and I need more money for the necessities of life here.

It has been my experience in the world of football is winning the game of the province, regency, subdistrict got champion one. I have the potential for the forward, and specialists as captain also when there is a match I often to be top scores in the game. On the other hand, I am now a football coach in one of club football, Pelita Solo.

When the best day that I can start to the part-time job. Do I have to come to the club football after the period position of coach it has been done or you have other planning that can suit for me.

I look forward to hearing from you.

Your sincerely

Writing Feedback / You have just arrived in a new city where you are studying English - write letter to a friend [3]

You have just arrived in a new city where you are studying English
Write a letter to an old friend. In your letter
- explain where you are and why
- describe where you are staying
- describe how you have been enjoying yourself.

Dear Ellyta,

Hello Ellyta, how are you? Are you okay? I really miss you. Now I live in Pare and study English here. I live with many people from various types area of Indonesia. I settle in camp English Studio.

I live with the landlady. Where the owner of the house is very kind and friendly. In there the owner opened food stall.
I stay in Davinci camp, the place is very comfortable, I sleep in a large room with a single mattress. In the bedroom, there are many paintings that adorn the house, because the landlady is an artist.

Last week I went to Malang city, I rode by motorcycle. The way is awesome because views of the hill are outstanding. After that, I stopped to rest and enjoy the beautiful city. I was so happy to visit the Malang city use the motorcycle for the first time, and I am very enjoyed here because I feel like my home.

I would really like to hear from you. Write back soon.

With love

Edgar